[musictlk] First Step, My Comments

[Linda Mentink]

Hi Jen,

I just have a couple comments on the song.  Firstly, the 
introduction should be cut at least in half.  That's an awful 
long time to wait for the vocal to begin.

Secondly, the same is true for the interlude; that should be cut 
in half.

Thirdly, the accompaniment covers up the vocal at the beginning 
where you sing with a soft, breathy tone.  It's fine when your 
voice is clear, strong and louder.

Fourthly, many of your words are pronounced clearly, and are hard 
to understand.

Regards,

Linda