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Kelsey,
Two quick things I noticed about the letter.  
1) IN the address heading, you have "Mrs." and in the greeting you have  
"Ms.".  You will want to stick to one or the other.  
2) I would change the closing to something other than "Sincerely  yours".  
I feel that is one you would use with someone you know  better.  I would 
make it more formal.  Even something like "Thank you"  or "Appreciatively" or 
"Professionally".  
 
Just some thoughts!
Nicole
 
 
In a message dated 1/29/2015 10:30:47 P.M. Eastern Standard Time,  
nobe-l at nfbnet.org writes:

Hello,
I drafted a letter to send to the President of the online  tutoring
company I posted about in my last post. I will copy and paste it  below
this email. Please take a look at it and let me know what I could  do
to make it clearer.
Thank you,
Kelsey Nicolay
Kelsey  Nicolay
989 Oakbrooke Drive, Medina, Ohio,  44256
330-441-2442
Kelseynicolay1989 at gmail.com

Jauuary 29,  2015

Mrs. Amanda Ginsberg
President and C
EO
Tutor.com
555  West 18th Street, New York, New York, 10011

Dear Ms.  Ginsberg,

I am very interested in joining your team as an  online tutor. I have
experience tutoring elementary reading. As a result, I  feel I would be
a good fit in your organization.

Due  to my vision impairment, I use a screen reader which reads the
information  on the screen aloud. This allows me to access the computer
independently.  Due to the nature of the software, I am only able to
access certain  features of the site. However, I am having difficulty
accessing the visual  aspects of the classroom software. Therefore, I
would like to discuss  alternative ways in which I could still be a
part of the tutoring team.  Please call or email me to discuss this. I
look forward to hearing from  you.

Sincerely Yours,


Kelsey  Nicolay

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