[stylist] a poem I just wrote

[James Canaday M.A. N6YR]

Jen,
I liked your poem.  when I think of trees, though, I think of how 
they sound when the wind moves through them.  how they bend when the 
wind is high, how the bark feels, and the shade on a hot day.  in the 
backyard of my previous home, there was a black walnut tree that had 
been hit by lightning once so it was a bit distorted.  yet the shade 
always seemed cooler under it, and the squirrels loved that tree best 
in the neighborhood.
I guess I'm saying a little more just experiencing your tree might be 
nice.  of course, I am not much of a poet either.
jc

Jim Canaday M.A.
Lawrence,  KS

At 01:31 PM 2/27/2009, you wrote:
>I am uncomfortable with the word "frolic."  It is not a modern term, 
>in my opinion.  People do not say "Let's frolic under the tree."
>
>I love poems about trees.  I think I simply love trees.  New Mexico 
>and New Jersey have such different trees!
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>>I like it. Just smooth out the transition between the first and second
>>stanza. You should submit it to Lori for Slate and Style.
>>
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>>Subject: [stylist] a poem I just wrote
>>
>>Hello everyone,
>>I would really appreciate it f someone could give me some tips on how to
>>improve this poem. Thanks.
>>Jen
>>
>>
>>
>>The Chestnut Tree
>>
>>The tree still stands where it always has,
>>enduring despite the ways of the world.
>>Its branches provide a shade like no other;
>>The shade is there throughout the summer days.
>>Comfort and strength course through its veins.
>>
>>Storms battle and rage around The Chestnut Tree,
>>but it is not affected;
>>It stands strong and steadfast throughout the gale,
>>never trembling,
>>refusing to be diminished.
>>I take comfort in the shelter of The Chestnut Tree.
>>
>>In my younger years, I frolicked and played in the grasses beneath the
>>tree.
>>My lilting voice sang of the flowers and the streams and all that is
>>good.
>>I no longer frolic and play in the grasses;
>>I am not as young as I once was.
>>My body is young and my soul is vibrant,
>>And I feel a calling I cannot ignore.
>>I still shelter under the tree,
>>but I often venture into the barren lands of unknown dangers.
>>
>>My beloved Chestnut Tree,
>>do not mourn me, for I still have a place for you in my heart;
>>The summer days of frolicking will never depart from my soul.
>>I will always remember the warm sun, the cool grass, and the feel of
>>your embrace.
>>And although I shall return to the shelter of the tree,
>>I must go forth and see what flowers grow;
>>I must see the other trees and hear the calling of the birds.
>>
>>Oh, it pains me, dear one of my heart,
>>to leave you idle, barren, alone;
>>But do not allow the storms to shame your beauty,
>>for in my heart, oh Chestnut Tree,
>>there will always be a place for you to flourish.
>>If you should need comfort, King of the Forest,
>>you will find it within my soul.
>>I shall not abandon you;
>>I will always be with you, oh Chestnut Tree.
>>
>>
>>
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