[stylist] Clarity, movement through time and rearanging chapters.

[Judith Bron]

It's only normal that characters who are older start their story first.  Try 
arranging it chronologicly.  I think it will read smoother.  JB
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From: "helene ryles" <dreamavdb at googlemail.com>
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chapters.


> Hi Barbara,
> Thanks for getting back about this. I did want them to alternate
> between Liza and Nadia but it's impossible to do this without the time
> jumping about since Liza's chapters come earlier at first.
>
> Helene
>
> On 17/09/2009, Barbara Hammel <poetlori8 at msn.com> wrote:
>> I think it would most definitely be less confusing.  It doesn't matter if
>> they alternate.  Not even Tolkien alternated his chapters.  He changed in
>> the middle of chapters or wrote a couple about one group of characters.
>> Barbara
>>
>> If wisdom's ways you wisely seek, five things observe with care:  of whom
>> you speak, to whom you speak, and how and when and where.
>>
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>> chapters.
>>
>>> It seems that my movement through time is confusing some readers. I've
>>> tried a purely cronological aproach but it lacked suspense.
>>>
>>> But I see how the chapters can be a little confusing
>>> Would a change of order like this help cut out on that?
>>>
>>> 1:   6/1997  A testomony by Fiona the fader
>>> 3:   1983 (14 years earlier) An honorary dragon by Liza Bronze
>>> 7:   1986 (3 years later) Why I kidnapped Nadia by Liza Bronze
>>> 2:   1991 (5 years later) Early memories by Nadia Murat
>>> 4:   1993 (2 years later) Replaced by a career by Nadia Murat
>>> (I would divide chapter 2 into 2 short chapters)
>>> 5:   1993  The sad fate of Liza Bronze by Shania Krum
>>>
>>> second half of chapter from where Liza travels to Nazdonia (1993)
>>> 6:  1993/1994   Druzil school for the deaf and the blind.     Nadia 
>>> Murat
>>> Someone suggested that chapter also needed dividing. What do others 
>>> think?
>>> 8: 1994  The son my mother wanted by Nadia Murat
>>>
>>> Would rearanging the chapters this way help cause less confusion? I
>>> would still start the book in 1997 then go back in time. After that I
>>> would just go forward except for the occasional flash back.
>>>
>>> The only problem is it would spoil the pattern of liza having a
>>> chapter then Nadia, then back to Liza again.
>>>
>>> Helene
>>>
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