[stylist] DBG 4/5 (was chapters 2 and 4A)

[LoriStay at aol.com]

You need to pick a tense and stick with it.   present tense would have you 
say, she should be here by now but she isn't.   And:   It is Bella...
Lori
In a message dated 9/19/09 1:29:25 PM, dreamavdb at googlemail.com writes:


> 
> Where has Aunt Liza got to? She should be here by now, but she wasn't.
> I lay huddled on my bedroom floor, feeling more anxious by the minute.
> A wet and slightly abrasive tongue licks my face.  It was Bella the
> Growlin Shepherd, a failed police dog who slept on the bottom bunk.
>