[stylist] Article I wrote

[James H. "Jim" Canaday M.A. N6YR]

dear Angela,
yes,
please define DSPS, and I know what Sac State is,  but most people 
don't.  where is this going to be printed/distributed?
and, here's the tough criticism:
there were several brief references that left me wanting the particulars.
The instructors who went out of their way to work with me, [such as?] 
the students who sought too understand me,[such as?] the DSPS staff 
who made my life so much easier.[who?  and btw you were lucky, many 
DSPS are paternalistic, overbearing, and don't know what the heck 
they're doing!] I've met many who I count my personal friends, and 
who will be for the rest of my life.[tell a specific friend story?] 
They've seen me driven almost too tears by the unjust, to anger at 
the senseless, and to hysterical laughter at the silly and 
humorous.[a funny story would be nice] Through the trials and the 
smiles they have been with me, and it is to them that I owe a good 
measure of my success.
What a variety of things I have learned and rediscovered! I've 
learned to better predict the behavior of humans and the patterns of 
the weather, both of which are far more complex than solving the 
quadratic equation, once you get the hang of it.[one story for 
example?] I've rediscovered my love for writing and my fascination 
with history. I've learned to analyze work that I disagree with and 
state my own views with persuasion rather than rhetoric.


---now, this is a positive piece and Angela I can really feel your 
joy in graduating!  also, I say congratulations, and its okay if you 
take a verbal victory lap too, 'cuz you did the hard work.
jc

30/2010, you wrote:
>Hey guys, let me know what you think about this.
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