[stylist] Writing sample

[Judith Bron]

Sean, Here's just a few things I picked up:

It's a valid question.

What question?  I didn't see any.

plots down- should be plops down



Two" I replied "a boy and a girl" I replied

Answer should be, "Two.  A boy and a girl."

Since you are obviously giving the answer, you don't need to hit the reader 
over the head emphasizing that you were the one replying.  Judith





----- Original Message ----- 
From: "Jacobson, Shawn D" <Shawn.D.Jacobson at hud.gov>
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Sent: Tuesday, May 04, 2010 12:50 PM
Subject: [stylist] Writing sample


> Attached is the writing sample that I will read at the May meeting.  This 
> is a short 1,000 or so word story which I look foreward to expanding.
>
> Please feel free to send me any comments.
>
> Shawn Jacobson
> Mathematical Statistician
> Phone# (202)-475-8759
> Fax# (202)-485-0275
>
>


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