[stylist] Comments on this short synopsis?

[Judith Bron]

Excellent synopsis.  You really peak the reader's curiosity.  Judith
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From: "Donna Hill" <penatwork at epix.net>
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Subject: [stylist] Comments on this short synopsis?


> Hi Friends,
> I'm coming down to the wire with my fantasy novel "The Heart of 
> Applebutter Hill." I'm putting my articles on hold for another week or so 
> to finish up the final edit prior to handing it around for comments. 
> Anyway, here is a brief synopsis (132 words). Let me know how it strikes 
> you and if it catches your interest.
>
>
> Block quote
> 14-year-old refugees Abigail and Baggy live with guardians, while
> attending an unusual private school in Applebutter Hill. During summer 
> break, Abigail (a songwriter who dreams of stardom) and Baggy (a 
> photographer who likes working with cars and wood) travel in a flying ship 
> disguised as a cloud. As uninvited guests in theCastle
>  ofBargundoom, they learn of plans to steal a powerful sapphire from their 
> new school. They escape  to Satori Green where giant Crysanthemums take 
> them to Anbata's Well for guidance.Rutherford,
> a grumpy acorn, offers to help. Efforts to unravel the mystery bring them 
> face to face with the stone itself and an armed stranger. Abigail is 
> dealing with failing eyesight. Her guide dog provides clues that uncover 
> the spy. A secret surveillance
> plan reveals the truth behind bullying.
> Block quote end
>
> Thanks,
> Donna Hill
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