[stylist] Changes: a plot synopsis
Judith Bron
jbron at optonline.net
Wed Oct 20 13:02:03 UTC 2010
I agree that it sounds like a list of events. What drove me nuts was the
constant reference to days (Monday, Tuesday etc.). It is a list of events.
Try to make it more creative.
----- Original Message -----
From: "Danielle Montour" <hypoplexer at gmail.com>
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Subject: Re: [stylist] Changes: a plot synopsis
> Hi,
> Well, this synopsis seems more like a list of events than a flowing
> transitional piece between each character's life. I would like to read
> the book, and understand what you are saying, however, I'd deliver it
> different, for example, even "Eighteen-year-old Casey Newman is okay
> with herself as a blind person, but she has trouble accepting herself as a
> werewolf." might be a good starting sentence to your main synopsis.
>
> HTH
>
> Danni
>
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Watson, Katherine M" <WatsonKM05 at uww.edu
> To: "stylist at nfbnet.org" <stylist at nfbnet.org
> Date sent: Tue, 19 Oct 2010 23:13:27 -0500
> Subject: [stylist] Changes: a plot synopsis
>
> Hello everyone,
> Since we are on the subject of synopses, I thought I'd throw mine out
> there for critique. It is for my young adult, fantasy novel, titled
> "Changes." Enjoy, and let me know what you think. Does this make you want
> to read the book?
> --Katie
>
>
> Changes Plot Synopsis
>
> Main Conflict:
> Eighteen-year-old Casey Newman is okay with herself as a blind person,
> but she has trouble accepting herself as a werewolf. She avoids phasing
> unless it is the time of the full moon-or unless absolutely necessary.
> While attending college in present-day Denver, Colorado, circumstances
> force Casey to accept her duel nature.
>
> Synopsis:
> On a warm Thursday in September, Casey's human best friend, Justine,
> invites Casey to go to a club with her and her boyfriend, Tony, that
> night. Casey agrees to go. She meets Tony at a restaurant beforehand.
> She is horrified when she discovers that Tony isn't human. He doesn't eat
> anything at dinner, and his scent is too sweet. Casey struggles to keep
> her inner wolf in check, so she doesn't change into a wolf in the middle
> of the crowded restaurant.
> Later, at the club, Casey is attacked by werewolf Rob. She is rescued
> by werewolf Nate and his Alpha, Seb. Casey is attracted to Nate; this is
> the first time she meets others of her own kind.
> The next day, (Friday) Justine discovers Casey is a werewolf when
> Casey phases in front of her accidentally.
> Justine breaks down emotionally, but when Tony calls her, her mood
> shifts to one of a giddy romantic. Casey warns Justine, but it doesn't
> change Justine's feelings for Tony.
> The following day, (Saturday) Casey and Justine go downtown, and come
> across Nate and Seb. Nate tells Casey he is a werewolf, and he knows that
> she is, too. She is glad to have found another like her. Nate also tells
> Casey that his twin, Marissa, was with him when he phased once. He fears
> that he may have bitten her, and that Marissa may be a werewolf. They go
> to Marissa's dorm and discover she is still human. Nate accidently phases
> in front of Marissa. Marissa faints, and Casey hopes Marissa will just
> wake up and think it was a bad dream.
> The day after that, (Sunday) Casey goes to get ice cream. She finds
> Marissa working at the ice cream shop. Marissa has figured out that Nate
> is a werewolf, and tries to talk to Casey about it; Casey is reluctant to
> share, although she likes Marissa.
>
> The next night, (Monday) Casey saves her roommate, Georgina, from a
> vampire.
> Later that night, Casey discovers that Tony's scent is similar to that
> of the vampire, and he reveals to her and Justine that he is a hybrid-half
> human, half vampire. Justine's love for him is unchanged.
> The next day, (Tuesday) Nate and Casey go on a "date". Georgina tells
> Casey that she is moving out immediately because she knows about Casey's
> duel nature. Casey accidentally phases in front of Georgina, almost
> killing her.
> Nate takes Casey to Ouzel Falls-where she was changed into a werewolf.
> Casey remembers that it was Seb who bit her.
> The day afterward, (Wednesday) Casey finds Marissa. In need of a new
> roommate, Casey asks Marissa if she will move in with her. Marissa
> agrees, because she knows Nate will be hanging around Casey. She gets in
> a car accident while moving her things to Casey's apartment. Nate gives
> Marissa his blood, saving her life, but the blood changes Marissa into a
> werewolf.
> A few days later, Casey kills Seb in a fight and becomes Alpha. She
> discovers that she can feel Nate and Marissa's emotions, and she has an
> influence over whether the twins change forms.
> Two weeks pass, and Casey is consumed by her duties as Alpha.
> Justine confronts Casey, saying that she has seen reports of a
> guy-Seb--who looked to have died from wild dogs. His body was found in a
> dumpster, and Justine suspects Casey. Casey is made aware of how
> different she is from humans because of her instincts, and wonders if
> werewolves have an immortal soul. Marissa and Nate come up with no
> concrete evidence proving that they have souls. Casey is concerned about
> where she will spend eternity, and whether she can still be friends with
> Justine, even though they are members of different species.
> A few nights later, (Thursday) Casey gets a call from Justine's cell
> phone, but it isn't Justine-it is Georgina. Georgina informs Casey that
> she has captured Justine, and Casey figures out that Georgina is now a
> vampire. Casey and the twins are able to save Justine before Georgina
> drinks her blood, but Georgina has bitten her. Georgina also bites Casey,
> but Tony arrives and is able to suck both of their blood clean.
> The next day, (Friday) the same vampire tries to attack Marissa and
> she is able to transmit her memories to Casey, since Casey is her Alpha.
> When Casey arrives, she finds another werewolf, Jenae, waiting with
> Marissa. Tony and Justine arrive. Tony thanks Casey for saving Justine
> and invites her and Nate to go out with them that night. Casey accepts,
> although she is suspicious of Tony's true motives. Later that night, he
> gets Casey alone with him, and tries to kill her. Casey sends her
> memories of the attack to Nate and Marissa, and Nate arrives just in time.
> He kills Tony. Later that night, Nate reveals to Casey that he plans to
> go home and work at a hospital to earn money for medical school.
> The following morning, (Saturday) Justine thanks Casey for saving her
> from Tony and admits that Casey was right about him. Later that morning,
> Nate takes Casey Geo-Caching in the woods and admits his love to her.
> This makes Marissa angry because she feels like Nate is leading Casey on.
> Casey goes out for coffee with Jenae to find out more information about
> her, since Jenae wants to join Casey's pack. Meanwhile, Marissa attacks
> Nate, forcing him to leave before originally planned.
> Justine suggests that the girls go out for burgers, and while they are
> at the restaurant, Rob shows up. He points a gun at Casey, but Jenae
> jumps in the way, taking the silver bullet instead. Casey accepts Jenae
> into her pack as she dies.
> Casey spends the next month in a daze. She meets Savannah, a human
> who likes to party. Depressed and inebriated most of the time, Casey
> tries to cope with Jenae's death and Nate's absence.
> Casey has an epiphany; she realizes that she only half-knows herself,
> and decides to spend some time in her wolf form.
> While in the woods running as a wolf, Casey meets an actual wolf who
> almost instantly guesses what she is. He explains the differences-in his
> mind-that exist between humans and wolves. Casey decides she likes being
> human better, because she feels the human world gives her goals to achieve
> and a more purposeful life. That night, the vampire attacks Nate while he
> is at work. Nate survives, escapes and sends his memories to Casey.
> The next day, Nate returns. Later that day, Savannah calls, informing
> Casey that a vampire is looking for her. The vampire captures Savannah,
> and Casey and her pack run to Savannah's rescue.
> When they arrive, they find Savannah staring into space. Everyone
> except for Casey falls into a similar state. Casey is unaffected because
> she is blind and cannot see the illusions created by the vampire. When
> Casey attacks the vampire, his movement frees the others from his visions.
> Casey's pack destroys the vampire.
> The twins tell Casey they saw the souls of the people the vampire
> killed, including those of werewolves. Convinced she isn't damned for
> eternity, Casey realizes she has accepted herself as a werewolf.
>
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