[stylist] introduction+bonus grammar request

Wed Jan 5 18:52:15 UTC 2011

Hi,

Donna has given you many wonderful ideas. In addition, you may find it 
convenient to check out "The Purdue OWL: Grammar" at:
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/section/1/5/

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Subject: Re: [stylist] introduction+bonus grammar request

Hi Julie,
Bookshare has the Chicago Manual of Style and the Elements of Style,
which are both highly respected. NLS carries "The Elephants of Style"
which is a great read and covers many of the controversies in modern
writing rules. I'm sure RFB&D must have many books on grammar as well.
Donna

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On 1/5/2011 1:27 PM, Julie J wrote:
> Heya all!
>
> I joined a bit ago and have been reading when I can.  I see lots of 
> familiar people on this list.*waves*
>
> anyhow, I'm Julie. I live in eastern NE with my farmer husband, teenage 
> son and two dogs.  I joined because I'm currently working on a book.   In 
> the beginning it was fun and I loved to work on it.  Now I'm in the 
> editing/rewriting/fixing phase.  It's not so fun.  I was hoping that 
> someone would have a recommendation of a book or website that would help 
> me with grammar.  Some of my sentences just don't flow well and others 
> come up in the spell/grammar check with no recommendations of a fix.  If 
> it makes a difference my writing style is very informal and the book is 
> nonfiction.
>
> TIA
> Julie
>
>
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> Subject: Re: [stylist] Hoody bit
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> Brad, Good job. You are a very creative man.
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> On 1/5/2011 9:14 AM, Brad Dunse wrote:
>> for a little self-amusement this morning :)
>>
>> The store manager was new so I suppose you really couldn't blame him. I 
>> don't think he had much experience in this sort of thing before, but 
>> after an incident such as this, I'm sure he's learned a thing or two. A 
>> few of us tried to tell him early on but it was as if he didn't even hear 
>> us, or as if he couldn't understand us at all. It was almost like he 
>> didn't speak our language. Well, anyway… we didn't push too hard because 
>> we had heard he was a bit hot under the collar, though you really would 
>> not have thought that by just looking at him. I mean his white pressed 
>> short sleeved shirt and bright tan slacks were… hmmm alright. I mean the 
>> slacks weren't that dark so they were OK. I mean he couldn't wear white 
>> slacks too or he'd look like a doctor or something, you know, too clean 
>> and proper. No, the light tan slacks were OK, too dark and well, you 
>> know, *spoken in a whisper* the darky slacks… no matter how you try to 
>> contrast them… because of their color they just send the wrong message 
>> you know.
>>
>> I on the other hand, with my official medium sky blue long sleeves, 
>> neatly pressed chest pockets, stiff unwrinkled collar standing proud atop 
>> the wide shoulders, sharply contrasted dark blue slacks creased 
>> commanding municipal respect being tied off at the waist by a shiny black 
>> leather belt, knew this sort of thing happens from time to time. I might 
>> have expected it too from the murmuring I thought I heard earlier on in 
>> the evening.
>>
>> I'd say it happened somewhere around 11:00PM, shortly after closing time 
>> and all the store personnel had gone home for the night. The place was 
>> dark and only the security lights lit certain areas of the store. The 
>> dress shirt section was well lit and out in the open, as was the tank 
>> tops and plane sweat shirts. Even the wild carefree T-shirts with their 
>> brazen multi-colored logos slapped on them like cheap chest tattoos were 
>> out in the open. There were others though that were hidden in the shadows 
>> of the security lights. If anyone should have been hidden from the light 
>> it should really have been the negligees and unmentionables but no, it 
>> wasn't that way, not like other stores with… well you see, this is where 
>> the store manager… well I'm sure he knows now, but it always has to come 
>> to something like this before anything is done about it.
>>
>> As I said I think it had to be a little after 11:00PM, shortly after 
>> closing time, maybe 11:30PM I'm not really sure. I was standing there 
>> quiet-like, the store was all still. And out of the buzzing noise of the 
>> scantly illuminating fluorescents, I thought I heard this whispering. At 
>> first I wasn't sure but then it seemed to get louder. Sure enough I began 
>> to hear these voices and right away I knew what was happening. Their 
>> accent and dialect gave them away even in the darkness. As the murmuring 
>> grew louder I began to pick out what was being said.
>>
>> "Look at you mon weeth your foncy stripes and pressed coalars... get a 
>> load ofe deece guy mon... oh... tsk tsk tsk. Aw. Jew popped a coople 
>> boatens. Aw Chus like deece one here, dos a shame mon".
>>
>> I knew right then we had trouble and it wasn't going to be pretty. But 
>> what was I to do. The manager had me clipped up on the display wall with 
>> arms stretched out like I was being crucified. I'm telling you, I mean 
>> I'm not saying? I'm just saying. You know, I think the manager had a lot 
>> of missed responsibility here. New or not, well anyway, I could hear 
>> things were heating up from another section ...
>>
>> "Hey man look at this feller. he's a thinkin' he's purdy smart wit dat 
>> Rayon tag he's a sportin' there. Well I'll just..."
>>
>> And then I heard this horrible tearing sound. I mean he made off like he 
>> was going to rip off just the tag but it sounded like he tore the whole 
>> arm off the guy. All this was happening just around the corner where I 
>> couldn't quite get a good look at who the trouble makers were, but I 
>> knew.. Oh, I knew alright. It was easy for the cops to tell too when they 
>> finally came in the next morning.
>>
>> But anyway pinned helpless there I heard another scream, I looked and 
>> finally I could see something of what was going on just outside of the 
>> shadows. It was coming from the negligee section.
>>
>> "Get your hands off me you, you... you... piece of white... help! Help!"
>>
>> I looked over and it confirmed my suspicion. The upper part of his 
>> garment was the tell tale thing but with Lederhosen? I mean that's an odd 
>> combination but these trouble makers, they'll wear anything for an 
>> identity that draws attention to them.
>>
>> All of a sudden the voices got louder. The trouble makers with there 
>> accents and dialects were pushing shoving and ripping everyone off their 
>> hangers. You could hear shirts drop to the floor, some in just a 
>> protective fetal position, and others because they were yanked off the 
>> rack, thrown down and stomped. Screams and torrents of obscenities rang 
>> out along with fabric names. Cotton, Rayon, Wool, Polyester Blend, you 
>> name it and it was yelled out just before they were beaten or tore to 
>> shreds. If attacking them for their textile ethnicity wasn't good enough, 
>> the troublemakers began spewing out styles. V-necks, tank tops, button 
>> down, short sleeve, long sleeve, no sleeve, it didn't matter they were 
>> out to make their mark in the clothing section of the store. cries for 
>> help rang out one after another and like I say, there I was pinned 
>> against the wall in "nail me to the cross" mode, unable to do anything.
>>
>> Well, by the time the store manager got there in the morning every stitch 
>> of clothing was tossed on the floor. Buttons lay randomly in the isles 
>> along with ripped off collars, pockets and sleeves. Hangers littered the 
>> main isle next to crumpled broken plastic displays and metal tubular 
>> hanging racks tipped over. I was lucky enough to have landed face down 
>> with the top of my display wall propped up against the feet of the denim 
>> shirt's round rack that was in front of me before all this started, so I 
>> wasn't crushed. Yes, every stitch of clothing was either tore, had its 
>> buttons popped, its buckles wrenched off, or otherwise destroyed. When 
>> the humans walked in only one set of garments was left sitting untouched 
>> and only slightly misarranged according to size as if they scampered to 
>> return to the rack before someone saw.
>>
>> That's when they knew who caused all this trouble. Those troublemakers 
>> the hoodys. Its always the hoodys, you can't trust a one of them I tel 
>> ya. And it doesn't matter if they have draw straps, are pull overs or 
>> zip, have tattoos on their chest like the T-shirts or not. No matter what 
>> color, solid or multi-colored, they all were there hanging presuming 
>> innocence while the rest of us lay in a shambles on the store manager's 
>> pretty little floor.
>>
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