[stylist] Haiku song lyrics

Thu Jun 16 18:30:21 UTC 2011

Hi Brad,
Thanks. Yes, I think of it as being about being trapped by our mistakes and
decisions. I hadn't thought of the wind itself symbolizing opportunity, but
re reading it, it does seem to be in there, though being stung by the salt
spray gives the wind another power or dimension.
Donna

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I really like this. Very creative. To me it is about being trapped by 
ones own decisions  and mistakes in life, the writer feeling 
unpardonable or at least must pay the price for those 
decisions/mistakes. Promising herself to one day get out of the 
situation but it doesn't come. The November wind is opportunity but 
the bird can't see herself to fly  in the state she is in, and soon 
the wind stops and so goes opportunity. The day closes, the wind 
stops and the caged bird is left reaching through the cage while the 
free and wild birds fly about as she looks on through her self inflicted
bars.

Brad

On 6/14/2011  09:50 AM Donna Hill said...
>Hmm, not sure what doesn't make sense. I could tell you what it means to
me,
>but I'd rather wait to see if others are having a similar response.
>Donna
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>I like it but I'm confused.  What does it mean?
>Barbara
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>Hi Friends,
>
>I probably should have waited till November to pull this one out, but since
>we've been discussing Haiku and who knows where any of us will be in
>November, I thought I'd share it now. There are three verses of 2 Haiku
>each. Each verse is followed by a bridge which is one Haiku and a 5
syllable
>refrain. You'll notice that I have employed a rhyme structure that ties the
>verse Haiku to each other and the bridges to each other, though the
>individual Haiku don't rhyme internally.
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>I don't consider it perfect or done, so if you have any thoughts, please
>share.
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>Donna
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>Under These Gray Skies
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>By Donna W. Hill
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>1
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>Under these gray skies
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>I bow down to November
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>Holding out my wings
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>Even though I try
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>I can't seem to remember
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>Why the caged bird sings
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>O, Lord, forgive me
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>I was once your beloved
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>Don't you still know me?
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>Under these gray skies.
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>2
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>Under these gray skies
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>I've been waiting forever
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>For the seas to part
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>Promises and lies
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>Thwarting every endeavor
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>Of this weary heart
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>Stung by the salt spray,
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>I pour over my failures
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>Who could pardon me?
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>Under these gray skies.
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>3
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>Under these gray skies
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>Nighttime closes around me
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>As the winds subside
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>Feeble alibis
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>Serving just to confound me
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>and my starless guide
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>Morning will find me
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>Reaching to the horizon
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>Where the wild birds fly
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>Under these gray skies
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