[stylist] Another Cinquain

[Homme, James]

Hi Jacky,
I wanted to purposely progress inward toward the soul. Does that make sense?

Thanks.

Jim

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From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Jacqueline Williams
Sent: Saturday, October 29, 2011 6:40 PM
To: 'Writer's Division Mailing List'
Subject: Re: [stylist] Another Cinquain

Jim,
You are really on a roll  with these cinquains. You have the form down pat.
I do like this one. The "to" at the end of the fourth line bothers me a
little. If you put fingertips at the front of the line would not need the
"to." You could still use your semi-colon, or an em-dash. 
Any comment I might make is simply a personal preference, not especially
indicative of a better way. It is yours, and you can be proud of your
Cinquains so far.
I love the idea that you are keep your daily journey in poetic forms.
Jackie 

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From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
Behalf Of Homme, James
Sent: Thursday, October 27, 2011 11:52 AM
To: Writer's Division Mailing List
Subject: [stylist] Another Cinquain

Hi,
In keeping with my self-imposed goal of making a short poem a day for a
while, here goes.

The Piano

Inert,
Innocent, mute,
it yearns to channel heart,
fingers, body, spirit, soul; to
make hole.



Jim Homme,
Usability Services,
Phone: 412-544-1810.


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