[stylist] Writing exercise: Life Story

[Bernadetta Pracon]

Bridget,
Wow! I absolutely love this piece. It's so beautifully written; I love 
how you began with "fell from grace" and tied it up so neatly with 
"found grace once again".
The bit about the angels watching over the baby is like a beautiful 
painting, I get a vivid picture in my mind when I read it, although you 
meant it metophorically. Finally, the last paragraph of the piece is 
written with such intense emotion. Congratulations, in my oppinion, you 
managed to write a love story in just a few sentences.
In short, the piece was brief, yet it said so much. You've proven that 
you don't need to write a two hundred page novel to tell a story. It's 
so moving; It takes you through all the emotions necessary to make a 
story feel complete. It's apparent that you have a unique way with 
words. I'm sorry--I'm wracking my brains to come up with a single piece 
of constructive criticism to give you, something that could help you 
improve this should you ever want to revise it. But I simply can't 
think of anything. Once again, I love it. It's fantastic. Thanks so 
much for sharing it with us.
PS:
I've read people's comments lately about how there isn't much sharing 
of our writing happening on this list. I intend to take a stab at both 
of the writing prompts suggested by Bridget, the satire and the life 
story, and I plan on posting them shortly, as soon as I find some 
spared time to do so. :) Both seem like a fun challenge. I also love 
the word of the day idea that's found a home on tis list as of late.

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