[stylist] Reflections on Bill's poem and poetry in general

[Jacqueline Williams]

Regarding my e-mail with the attachment, I made an astonishing discovery
when I checked that it went and that the attachment opened. This is
apparently a version taken to my poetry group and at the end, I noted all of
their comments. This will be instructive to those interested in what a
poetry critique group  does.
But if I just coped this poem with a new contest heading, and the comments
at the end, that would mean instant death. Since I keep separate folders for
each competition I enter, I will have to sift through all and make sure I
get rid of any comments. They are useless after a revision anyway.
Thanks for your patience.
Jackie 

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From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
Behalf Of Jacqueline Williams
Sent: Monday, February 20, 2012 9:40 AM
To: 'Writer's Division Mailing List'
Subject: Re: [stylist] Reflections on Bill's poem and poetry in general

Robert and all interested in trying to understand poetry. First, Bill's poem
is accessible to anyone and is good to have out there because it is not
intimidating. Although he has a straightforward rhyme pattern for the most
part, it is a bit unusual to have a pattern of four rhyming words in
sequence.
I have made an attachment of the only one I have written with four rhyming
words at the end of each stanza.
I have submitted et at least six times and it has never been awarded
anything. It could be because of the rhyme pattern which is often judged to
be "forced rhyme," or because it is researched overly perhaps  with the
facts forced into the poem.
Please open the attachment because I think I will not chance the format
being destroyed by copying and pasting.
I would appreciate any critiquing that might make it more palatable, for it
is dear to my heart. I had pictures of the wonderful frogs in all of their
varieties about my house some years ago.
Thank you,
Jackie


-----Original Message-----
From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
Behalf Of Robert Leslie Newman
Sent: Monday, February 20, 2012 8:27 AM
To: 'Writer's Division Mailing List'
Subject: [stylist] Reflections on Bill's poem and poetry in general

Bill and others 

Bill- Your poem is one of the types of poetry that I can actually follow
from start to finish. And you know --- as I thought that last sentence out,
and am putting the rest of this paragraph together, I am --- wondering what
is in my makeup that can make it so that some poetry I can stick with and
feel that I can actually understand and perhaps even like? Mostly, I just
don't get what poets are getting at! Bill's type of writing constructs short
phrases consisting of wording that is for me, clear and it doesn't like hurt
my brain to fathom. In saying that, I mean, I usually cannot
follow-see-understand or like most poetry. Is it --- like taste, as in what
pleasures me? Is it a mind thing, as in that hard-wired ability to make
mental connections which end up in the understanding of the world? Or is it
a reflection of my world experience; the nature - nurture thing and this is
the experience/nurture part of it which makes it so I get or cannot get and
like poetry? Like I know there really is a very serious human thing in the
assents of the various forms of language be it spoken or sung or written ---
and yes, even in those other representative forms, like art as in painting,
sculpture, etc.  Yes, I'm wanting to like poetry. 

Another thought- to me, most song lyrics are like poetry; more
representative than actual story-line or conversational. Usually it is the
notes that move me, not the words. 

..The house is quiet, I sit at the kitchen table, the rain patters on the
roof, and I indulge in examination of me and life.



Robert Leslie Newman
Personal Website-
Adjustment To Blindness And Visual impairment
http//www.thoughtprovoker.info
NFB Writers' Division, president
http://www.nfb-writers-division.net 
Chair of the NFB Newsletter Publication Committee 



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