[stylist] Is It Heaven poem

[Brenda]

Hi Barbara
I liked your poem.  It was short and had some snapshots separated by the 
theme running through it.

Your question at the end was the very next line after your ending - at 
least in my email.  You might consider putting an extra line in between 
when the poem stops and your question - or maybe it was just my email 
for some reason.

Really enjoyed it.
Brenda



On 1/5/2012 6:39 PM, Barbara Hammel wrote:
> IS IT HEAVEN?
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> It's January the fifth  today
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> And the thermometer says sixty-two,
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> Are you sure that I'm in Iowa
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> And not in Thibodaux?
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> Or is it Heaven, after all,
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> Not Iowa any more?
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> Winter cannot stay like this.
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> It will return with a roar.
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> It's January the fifth today
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> And shirt sleeves are the wear
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> There's not hint of winter time
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> Out in the sunny air.
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> Or is it Heaven, after all,
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> And did I not know, but did I die?
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> For this isn't winter in Iowa,
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> Not a flake of snow do I spy.
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> It's January the fifth today,
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> And my child thinks it pretty neat
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> That he can go outside and swing
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> In his coat and his bare feet.
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> Or is it Heaven, after all,
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> Please pinch me so I'll know
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> There are nonexisting gale-force winds
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> And four feet of invisible snow.
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> What can I change about this poem because it’s really not very good.  It seems too clunky or something.
>
> Barbara
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> A man who wants to lead the orchestra must turn his back on the crowd. -- Max Lucado
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