[stylist] Is it heaven revised

[Brad Dunsé]

Reads much much better :). With acception of the 
town, it doesn't rhyme with 62 'smile'. Possible 
solutions, if you're looking for one that is.

A. New town to rhyme with 62
B. Temperature  might read sixty-two point O
C. Change the temperature to match a different town
D. Change the syntax of the sentence. e.g. 62 
degrees  to me is just a little bit odd, am I 
strolling the Yellow Brick Road on my way to Oz" 
...lame example but you get the idea.

I hope that the weather  allows you to write one 
of these each week until April haha.

Brad







On 1/7/2012  10:23 PM Barbara Hammel said...
>IS IT HEAVEN?
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>
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>It'S January the fifth  today
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>And the thermometer says 62,
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>Are you sure that I'm in Iowa
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>And not in Thibodaux?
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>
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>Or is it Heaven, after all,
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>Not Iowa any more?
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>Winter can't stay like this.
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>It'll return with a roar.
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>
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>It's January the fifth today
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>And shirt sleeves are the wear,
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>For there's no hint of winter
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>Out in the sunny air.
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>
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>Or is it Heaven, after all,
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>And did I actually die?
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>For this isn't winter in Iowa,
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>The snow should be piled high.
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>It's January the fifth today,
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>And my child thinks it's neat
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>That he can go outside and swing
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>In his jacket and bare feet.
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>
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>Or is it Heaven, after all?
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>Please pinch me so I'll know
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>There are whispering  gale-force winds
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>And four feet of invisible snow.
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>I feel better about this.  What do you think now?
>
>Barbara
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>
>
>A man who wants to lead the orchestra must turn 
>his back on the crowd. -- Max Lucado
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