[stylist] Breath and Shadow essay

[Bridgit Pollpeter]

Brad,

Thanks for reading my essay. It's actually a compilation of various
pieces I've written. The initial essay was a simple writing exercise in
a class, and later I came back to it and thought something was there.
Over time, I've incorporated sections from other material of mine, and
it seems to work together. This essay has been revised for three years
now.

Yes, the scene with the crazy lady includes some internal thoughts which
are italicized. It may be a bit confusing if not reading visually or
with Braille, though dialogue does have quotes and the thoughts don't.

I prefer to use contrast to make a point in my writing instead of just
point-blank saying it. I think it helps illustrate a point better and
can be more powerful to contrast concepts.

The sections with the kids is an add-in from an entirely different
piece. It really helps display my point though.

Thanks for reading it and your comments.

Sincerely,
Bridgit Kuenning-Pollpeter
Read my blog at:
http://blogs.livewellnebraska.com/author/bpollpeter/
 
"History is not what happened; history is what was written down."
The Expected One- Kathleen McGowan

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Date: Fri, 13 Jan 2012 10:46:48 -0600
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Excellent article. Very nice indeed. I did have a 
little trouble with the dialog with the crazy 
lady street crossing, as I read, was it all 
actual dialog or was some inner thought injected 
in there? Other than that very very nice. I think 
the essence was your nephew's response to 
grandmas comment, ?You'll go blind if you play 
too much," when he said blindness was no big 
deal, look at Aunt Bridgie. Two thoughts came to 
mind. One was the threat of "you'll go blind" a 
leveraged agenda by way of an apparent  threat of 
bad news to befall him. You probably didn't want 
to hear that, but it gave insight to how even 
those closest to us have inner misgivings about 
blindness. The other thought was your nephew's 
automatic response as he played his visual game. 
Telling her It's no big deal, Aunt Bridgie does 
fine, and I?m not worried even if it happens. 
What more of a compliment to your affect on 
other's perception who are willing to just see you for who you are.

Brad