[stylist] It just came to me

Tue Jun 26 02:33:41 UTC 2012

Yes, I also loved your plot and could really see it becoming an intriguing
mystery. I have never thought of trying to write one, but I do enjoy
reading them at times. Instead of Arsenic and Old Lace it could be Coffee
Filters and Old Lace. hahaha    Well, it is fun when people respond and
intercourse ensues. Still want to try that 5 word challenge, but have not
gotten a chance to sit down yet.  Oh, and I am officially moving the end of
next week. I have an address and everything. I talked to Bob who connected
me with Sharonda. She said I would be in the same chapter as Allison. Is
that yours as well? Can't wait. Have a good night. Eve

On Mon, Jun 25, 2012 at 10:10 AM, Jacqueline Williams <jackieleepoet at cox.net
> wrote:

> Eve,
> Thanks so much for giving us more background on the writing of your poem,
> "Coffee Cans."
> It is miraculous to me that you could remember a dream in such detail, and
> to then write it later with so much meaning in the details.
> I always like to know what the writer had in mind. I must admit, however,
> that your resistance to making it easy for us, gave rise to me of making a
> truly intriguing interpretation that made me laugh out loud. I'm glad I got
> close to the meaning of at least a few of  your elements.
> It made me want to write a murder mystery novel.
> Thanks for your feedback to all of us.
> Jackie
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
> Behalf Of Eve Sanchez
>  Sent: Sunday, June 24, 2012 11:09 PM
> To: Writer's Division Mailing List
> Subject: Re: [stylist] It just came to me
>
> Wow you guys amaze me. whether you got the meaning I was trying to convery
> or not does not actually matter as long as you came away with something
> meaningful to yourself. The combination of critiques were wonderful to read
> after being so long away from the computer. Missed you all.  Just to quench
> Jaquelines curiosity I will reveal my own intent. Some of which you came
> away with some not. First I like the fact that we all come from different
> subcultures that have some otherwise unimportant differences. To me the
> mantel is a place of honor. A place where photographs, precious momentoes,
> and yes, even ashes of loved ones could ve kept. Traditionally in urns I
> have known many who detest the preserving of the body after death and are
> often heard saying "Just put my ashes in an old coffee can." Common phrase
> actually. No murder or foul play intended, but I did appreciate that take
> on your reading, Jaqueline. The image I had in my own mind was of many
> family members lost through the years; parents, siblings, etc. Yes the one
> with the rose was a loved spouse and the smaller can was a lost child- not
> necessarily lost due to an allergy, but not big enough to need the size of
> a standard coffee can. As for the flowers, I felt that the lilacs showed
> that there was a daily effort to adorn the mantel with fresh flowers that
> were picked. The baby's breath, sweet pea, and rose were different and
> special. An extra effort was made to show love and the resident had to go
> buy these flowers rather than pick them from the garden. This brings us to
> the rose with the black edges. I have often seen roses turn black when kept
> in stagnant water such as you may find in a grocery store container.
> Everything is old in the home and change is not welcome. The resident tries
> to hold onto the past I believe. I think the next coffee can, the plastic
> one, is meant for the resident him/herself. I do not personally know who
> any of these people are or even if the resident is male or female. When I
> say this just came to me I am being literal. I was laying in bed and did
> not write it down as I received it, but it was still there in the morning.
> Whatever you took from this, it is yours to feel. I hope your perception
> broght you some type of joy even if it made you sad for sadness is needed
> to recognize gladness. I appreciate all the time you all put into reading
> and critiquing this work. Live in sunshine always, Eve
>
> On Sun, Jun 17, 2012 at 4:28 PM, Jacqueline Williams
> <jackieleepoet at cox.net>wrote:
>
> > Lynda,
> > You really got into this. Your thoughts on the flowers on the mantle so
> > enrich one's understanding of possible meanings. It reflects your
> > experience
> > with gardens, seasons and flowers.
> > Quite amazing, as usual.
> > Jackie
> >
> > -----Original Message-----
> > From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
> >  Behalf Of Lynda Lambert
> > Sent: Friday, June 15, 2012 9:41 AM
> > To: Writer's Division Mailing List
> > Subject: Re: [stylist] It just came to me
> >
> > OK, I am just taking a short break - busy framing photographs to deliver
> to
> > the gallery tomorrow for a photography show -Choices, Choices, Choices.
>  I
> > wish someone else would come here, make the hard choices, and I could
> just
> > show up at the gallery and be surprised at what someone else chose to put
> > in
> >
> > the show for me. I am down to one final choice:  Will it be _ La Virgen
> > Maria le Mira_  or _El Lion de Ponce_?  My selection of _Las Damas de
> > Ponce_
> >
> > has forced me now to make this other choice.
> >
> > Back to writing:  Eve's Poem
> >
> > I just reread Eve's Poem again  and what really jumped out to me was the
> > different seasons represented by the choice of flowers.
> > Lilacs are very early spring, while it is still very cold, even snowing
> > outside I have them here and it is quite cold when they are in full
> bloom,
> > one of the earliest flowrs. But the SCENT of them - OH, MY. Just to say
> the
> > word _Lilacs_ brings the sense of SMELL into the picture she has created.
> > It permeates everything, the entire house would be full of this scent.
> >
> > On the other hand:
> > Lilacs do not stay fresh more than a day - they wilt very quickly. They
> are
> > not a good choice of flower to bring into the house for more than a day
> or
> > two. They become quite limp and wither and very soon the beautiful scent
> > becomes rancid. They are much like Hyacinths, sweetness turns to rancid
> > very
> >
> > quickly.
> >
> >
> > Baby's Breath, Sweep Pea and Roses - Summer time. They bloom well after
> the
> > lilacs so there is no way that the lilacs would be fresh and the others
> > fresh at the same time if they are picked by someone from a garden.  No,
> if
> > the lilacs are fresh and just brought in, that means the other flowers
> are
> > all old ones, and most likely not from the poets own gardens.
> >
> > Also when a rose dries, it does not turn brown, but it ages and still
> > retains it color, but more grayed. It will dry perfectly and stay in tact
> > for years. I have one such yellow rose on my shelf in the kitchen, a
> > momento
> >
> > from my brother's funeral bouquet.
> >
> > I would place that rose and the baby's breath in a funeral bouquet - this
> > is
> >
> > a typical mix that you would find at any funeral display, and they dry
> very
> > well and you can keep them for years.  The rose that is blackening, makes
> > me
> >
> > think of something toxic - it is not natural for a rose to be blackened
> > unlsess something very strange has happened to it - chemically.
> >
> > But, not the Sweet Pea, I think it would not dry well, but I am not
> > certain.
> >
> > I feel like the Baby's breath and Rose are froma bouquet that came from a
> > florist, not a fresh picked garden bouquet.  I am definitely thinking
> > FUNERAL Bouquet - not a prom or a festive occasion like an anniversary or
> > birthday.
> >
> > This poem makes me proufoundly sad when I read it. That has been my
> > impression from the first reading. Actually, utterly sad, would be more
> > accurate. Not humorous, not pleasant, and the house thought it has the
> > touches of humanity, it is rather STERILE, overall.
> >
> > For cans on a shelf, I immediately think of a place where people throw
> > loose
> >
> > change. A mantle is capable of holding a very heavy load usually. The
> cans
> > were a place where people who lived there threw their change - saving up
> > for
> >
> > something in the future.  The poem definietly has a PAST, PRESENT, and
> > FUTURE it in.
> >
> > The future is not particularly a happy one - it is winsome yet possibly
> > sad,
> >
> > too. Reflecting on the past, and looking closely at the empiness of the
> > present, the poetic "I" ends by giving the signal that all of these
> things
> > are passing away and a shift is beginning in an entirely new direction,
> yet
> > the feeling of hesitation there at the end.
> >
> > And, I turn to go and frame _La Virgen Maria le Mira. My choice has been
> > made - happy Friday everyone.
> >
> > Lynda River Woman
> >
> >
> >
> >
> > ----- Original Message -----
> > From: "Jacqueline Williams" <jackieleepoet at cox.net>
> > To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> > Sent: Wednesday, June 13, 2012 2:07 PM
> > Subject: Re: [stylist] It just came to me
> >
> >
> > > Eve,
> > > Charming, unusual as to content, I am looking for a possible different
> > > title
> > > to give a deeper meaning to the empty cans surrounded by flowers.
> > > I can smell the coffee in this immaculate house, but I want more!
> > > If it wrote itself, it has to be full of significance. Can't wait for
> > > Lynda
> > > to explicate it.
> > > Jackie
> > >
> > > -----Original Message-----
> > > From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org]
> On
> > > Behalf Of Eve Sanchez
> > > Sent: Wednesday, June 13, 2012 10:13 AM
> > > To: Writer's Division Mailing List
> > > Subject: Re: [stylist] It just came to me
> > >
> > > Oops. I meant to paste it for those who have difficulty opening
> > > attachments.
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > > Coffee Cans
> > >
> > >
> > > The mantel was lined with old coffee cans.
> > >
> > > No consistency.
> > >
> > > Folgers, Maxwell House, and Hills Bros.
> > >
> > > It depended on what had been on special at the time.
> > >
> > > Their lids, all on tight.
> > >
> > > Hands full of fresh lilac surrounded them.
> > >
> > > Laying in front and stuffed between.
> > >
> > > At the end of the line was a smaller can.
> > >
> > > It held the image of a peanut in a top hat.
> > >
> > > This was surrounded by sweet pea and baby's breath.
> > >
> > > Another of the cans, a red Folgers,
> > >
> > > had a single rose atop it's lid.
> > >
> > > Slightly wilted.
> > >
> > > The edges of the petals starting to blacken.
> > >
> > > The house was immaculate.
> > >
> > > Hardwood floors free of rugs or clutter.
> > >
> > > Lace on the arms of the over stuffed chairs.
> > >
> > > An afghan across the back of the couch.
> > >
> > > From the kitchen came the smell of a fresh brewed pot.
> > >
> > > A half full canister sitting on the counter.
> > >
> > > Now plastic.
> > >
> > > Plastic.
> > >
> > > Would hardly fit in when the time comes.
> > >
> > > Enjoy.
> > >
> > > On Wed, Jun 13, 2012 at 11:10 AM, Eve Sanchez <3rdeyeonly at gmail.com>
> > > wrote:
> > >
> > >> He y'all. Last night, I do not know why, this poem came to me. It
> flowed
> > >> like hot coffee at a diner. (pun intended) What do y'all think? I hope
> > >> you
> > >> enjoy. :) Eve
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