[stylist] New story, on memory lanes

[Ashley Bramlett]

Shawn,
I finally read the story or at least most of it. Its long.
I enjoyed it. You do fairly well with descriptions. But I think you could 
have described the bowling alley more and what your dad was like. Were his 
hands big? Was the alley crowded? What color and size were the ball?

I bbet this is based off something real. Good story and if your dad really 
bowled like that, he is good.
Ashley

-----Original Message----- 
From: Jacobson, Shawn D
Sent: Wednesday, September 12, 2012 1:48 PM
To: 'Writer's Division Mailing List'
Subject: [stylist] New story, on memory lanes

Writer's division

Attached (in WORD format) is my latest story, "On Memory Lanes".  It started 
out being a Zenna Henderson People stories tribute and also became a tribute 
to my grandpa who bowled a lot of small bowling tournaments in the Midwest. 
If I've said anything wrong about native American culture (I do bring it in 
some here), I apologize in advance.

If anyone can't read this, please let me know and I will attach in the body 
of my Email; it's 7,100 words, so a bit long for the body of an Email 
message (but will try if necessary).

I hope you enjoy this, any comments (good or bad) please let me know.

The best.

Shawn Jacobson
Mathematical Statistician
Phone# (202)-475-8759
Fax# (202)-485-0275







_______________________________________________
Writers Division web site
http://www.writers-division.net/
stylist mailing list
stylist at nfbnet.org
http://nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for 
stylist:
http://nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/bookwormahb%40earthlink.net