[stylist] [word choice & Robert's gratitude submission

[Eve Sanchez]

hahaha     I had the same issue once with a story about a blind child
running with her sister. All I had mentioned (and I do not remember the
exact wording) was that she looked down at her sister when she kneeled. The
person reading it had never met a blind person and was insisting that a
blind person would never be able to tell that someone is kneeling even
though they are usually much taller and all of sudden their voice is below
them and they could be heard tying their shoes. I guess I also could have
gone into a long explanation like Chris, but it was not relevant to story
and would have really messed with flow. Dang sighted people think they know
us so well. hahaha     Kidding, I'm not really prejudice. Eve

On Wed, Nov 28, 2012 at 10:18 AM, Chris Kuell <ckuell at comcast.net> wrote:

> This is an interesting post, Robert. I've run into similar situations in
> my own writing. For example, I belong to a critique group. I submitted a
> chapter of my novel about a blind massage therapist, in which I wrote 'Dan
> looked down at his plate, buying time while he thought of an appropriate
> response.'
> Several of the sighted folks in the group wrote--how can he look down at
> his plate? I understand their point, but I don't really feel like slowing
> the action to say that while Dan can't see the plate physically with his
> eyes, when he pointed his face toward the plate, what a sighted person
> would call looking at it, he saw it in his mind. The chicken to the left
> side, the rice and vegetables to the right... and so on. I left it as is,
> although an editor down the line might raise the same exact question.
>
> chris
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