[stylist] newest poem

[Jacqueline Williams]

Kyle,
Your poem really held my interest. It introduced some thoughts I had never
had about blindness.
I agree that it is better as a performance poem. 
As  written, I think the title is appropriate, for it does sound like it is
a "chip."
I feel that you have not left me with closure. You have spent the entire
poem telling what your poem is not about. But you have not risked putting
into words what it is really about.
To knock that chip off the shoulder, perhaps you have to dive into the
depths and take the risk of telling us what your message really is.
Your poem, as is, certainly should raise the consciousness of the sighted
community, so is an excellent contribution.
I love reading your work.
Jackie

-----Original Message-----
From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Kyle woodard
Sent: Saturday, April 06, 2013 1:58 PM
To: Writer's Division Mailing List
Subject: [stylist] newest poem

Hey all, Recently I have been going to more open mic and spoken word events
here locally. Which has not only inspired me but has also influenced my
writing style to evolve some. So attached is my latest poem. It is about
blindness and parts of it refer to local places an d busses here in
Spokane, WA When reading please keep in mind that this poem is originally
penned for the stage rather than the page. I would also like to make it
clear that I don't have a chip on my shoulder but as of right now this poem
is called that chip on my shoulder I am open to title suggestions

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Wallace Kyle Woodard IV
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