[stylist] the best way to fix this sentence

[Vejas]

Hi Donna,
Downhill.  I want to try water-skiing, though.
Thanks for your input; it's based on the character entirely.
Vejas


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From: "Donna Hill" <penatwork at epix.net
To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org
Date sent: Fri, 17 May 2013 21:28:57 -0400
Subject: Re: [stylist] the best way to fix this sentence

Vejas,
Down hill or cross country?

About your sentence.  My first thought is that the use of the 
word "such"
depends on the personality and speech habits of the narrator.  Is 
this person
so direct and  suscinct that he would just say, "..., he is a 
child," or
would that be too blunt? "He is such a child," is a bit more 
theatrical and
also, IMO, a bit more casual.  Listen to your narrator talking 
about other
things, and he'll give you the answer.
Cheers,
Donna

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Vejas
Sent: Friday, May 17, 2013 6:58 PM
To: stylist at nfbnet.org
Subject: [stylist] the best way to fix this sentence

Hi all,
I have a new e-mail account for my list-servs, as you can 
probably tell
(yes, I ski too.) I have a question about the best way to phrase 
the
following
sentence:
"In my opinion, he is such a child."
The adult in my story is someone who, despite being mature, still
appreciates things from when he was younger, and the narrator is 
a
self-centered teen.  Is it better to use such a child, like a 
child, or just
stick to a child?
Thanks so much.
Vejas

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