[stylist] a double triolet?

[Jackie Williams]

Barbara,
This is one terrific poem. Doubling the form doubled its effectiveness and added so much to the theme.
I also notice that your form poetry comes throughtrue to its form and line length.
Wonderful.
Jackie 

-----Original Message-----
From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Barbara Hammel
Sent: Wednesday, October 16, 2013 7:48 PM
To: stylist at nfbnet.org
Subject: [stylist] a double triolet?

I’ve not seen much here lately so thought I’d contribute my attempt at a triolet.
Actually, it’s a double triolet?

  BUT I CAN'T
  by Barbara Hammel

If I could have just one more chance
To be the child I was of yore,
I would choose a different dance
If I could have just one more chance.
I'd face life with a different stance,
I'd grasp the knob of another door,
If I could have just one more chance,
To be the child I was of yore.

To be the child I was of yore,
If I could have just one more chance,
I'd love to walk back through that door
To be the child I was of yore.
I'd love to live that time once more,
But approach it with a different stance.
To be the child I was of yore.
If I could have just one more chance.


Writing free verse is like playing tennis with the net down.--Robert Frost
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