[stylist] [Tanka] stretch

Mon Aug 10 00:49:18 UTC 2015

The examples I saw online fit yours. Your syllable count is right. Actually you have a double tanka.
Barbara

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> On Aug 9, 2015, at 19:36, Jackie Williams via stylist <stylist at nfbnet.org> wrote:
> 
> Lynda,
> Hope I did not mess up this thread name.
> I have made an effort at a Tanka. Please tell me if it is correct in terms
> of your form guide.
> 
> A Tanka Sequence    
> 
> Hold Me Fast
> 
> You are my spillway
> holding back the turbulence
> of my fears and  tears ,
> the dark essence of my flood.
> Still, the spray will sparkle high.
> 
> You, alone, control 
> my stormy overflow-so
> captured, just for you,    
> the sun's so fleeting spectrum-
> the arc of my rare rainbow.
> 
> 
> 
> Jackie Lee
> 
> Time is the school in which we learn.
> Time is the fire in which we burn.
> Delmore Schwartz     
> 
> -----Original Message-----
> From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Lynda Lambert
> via stylist
> Sent: Sunday, August 09, 2015 2:21 PM
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> Cc: Lynda Lambert
> Subject: Re: [stylist] sestina stretch
> 
> Jackie,
> Well, Jackie, as always you have a way of nailing down all the comments so 
> well.  Writing a sestina is my favorite kind of poem to write - but I am 
> also in love with the "small" poems - and the Tanka is so exquisite as well 
> as the haiku - - but  so darn hard to write! It is so far beyond the little 
> syllable counting directions that we all know about - so much more than 
> that, and so much unwritten aspects of the forms that I am just beginning to
> 
> grasp.  I am only in pre-school  at writing  these  Japanese forms. But, I 
> want to learn so much more.  They are like trying to paint a very tiny, 
> exquisite painting - so difficult to not get tangled  in details.
> You would not consider me very good at anything today - I have just 
> meandered around, walking dogs, doing a little bit of paperwork, and that is
> 
> about it for my day.  We all have such days, I imagine. Every day cannot be 
> a "high voltage" day, but I do  thrive on high voltage days  the best. On 
> the in-between days, I feel adrift and a bit unraveling. I need to write a 
> poem about that - maybe.  Lynda
> 
> -----Original Message----- 
> From: Jackie Williams via stylist
> Sent: Sunday, August 09, 2015 3:51 PM
> To: 'Writers' Division Mailing List'
> Cc: Jackie Williams
> Subject: Re: [stylist] sestina stretch
> 
> EvaMarie,
> I have read to the end of this thread. To me, the sestina is one of the most
> difficult form poems to write, and the fact that you got into it and doubled
> the length is something of a miracle.
> Of course, I consider Lynda the master of this form, so how can you go wrong
> with her suggestions. Also, Barbara has an interesting strategy.
> But the comment that I like the most is Lynda's when she just picks words
> and puts them down with the faith that they will come to have their own
> story and meaning when finished.
> In my poetry group, whenever the teacher wants a new and creative response
> from the group, she assigns a random word poem. Sometimes it has ten words,
> sometimes, twenty. This has brought some remarkable poetry from me as well
> as the others who take this challenge.
> Like Barbara, you can write a sequence that is double in length, if this is
> what turns out.
> Good luck, and my admiration.
> 
> Jackie Lee
> 
> Time is the school in which we learn.
> Time is the fire in which we burn.
> Delmore Schwartz
> 
> 
> -----Original Message-----
> From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of EvaMarie
> Sanchez via stylist
> Sent: Saturday, August 08, 2015 9:46 PM
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> Cc: EvaMarie Sanchez
> Subject: [stylist] sestina stretch
> 
> I was just working on a sestina when I noticed that I had been carried away
> with the words. I came to a stop and went to the top to start counting
> stanzas. Somehow I had completely lost count and had nearly doubled my
> required length. Oops!
> I felt the safest thing for me to do at that point was to close it out and
> return to it later when it will be less a thing of passion. In this way, I
> hope to be able to look at it critically and do what must be done. Perhaps
> I will find two sestinas there. I did not even do a read through at that
> point.
> Has this ever happened to any of you?
> Eve
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