[stylist] A triolet--Space Lyrical

[Bridgit Kuenning-Pollpeter]

Barbara,

I can see what you're saying. Didn't think of it before, but something worth
commenting on and considering, now that you point it out.

Does this particular format only allow for so many stanzas?

Bridgit

-----Original Message-----
From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Barbara
Hammel via stylist
Sent: Sunday, February 15, 2015 2:49 PM
To: Jacobson, Shawn D; Writers' Division Mailing List
Subject: Re: [stylist] A triolet--Space Lyrical

The only thing I don't like about this little poem is that, to me, it
doesn't seem complete.  It feels like there should be a second stanza, if
you will.
Barbara




Writing free verse is like playing tennis with the net down.--Robert Frost
-----Original Message-----
From: Jacobson, Shawn D via stylist
Sent: Friday, February 13, 2015 1:07 PM
To: 'Writer's Division Mailing List (stylist at nfbnet.org)'
Subject: [stylist] A triolet--Space Lyrical

Dear list.

Below is a little triolet I wrote; it's about how science fiction has gotten
darker over the years as it takes itself more seriously.

Shawn

Space Lyrical
by Shawn Jacobson

I miss the way the future used to be
before tomorrow grew too hot to stand.
We'd travel all across the galaxy.
I miss the way the future used to be.
The universe would all be ours to see;
the very stars would leap at our command.
I miss the way the future used to be
before tomorrow grew too hot to stand.
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