[stylist] A poem written a few weeks ago

[Jackie Williams]

Myrna,
This is a thought-filled pantoum that I think is a contest winner in the
category of "Ars Poetica.
The line, "Into a waiting pen their ink did spill" bothers me in some way.
It reverts to an older language, "did". I love the way you use time in your
poem. The content within the difficulty of making the pattern of a pantoum,
is just superb.  
My comments would be more coherent if I could actually see your poem. I
think I count ten or eleven syllables in your lines, and I cannot remember
what the meter of a pantoum is. 

Jackie Lee

Time is the school in which we learn.
Time is the fire in which we burn.
Delmore Schwartz	 

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Subject: [stylist] A poem written a few weeks ago

Hello everyone... I've not written much since my illness but every now and
then words do come.. This is written in the pantoum form.  It is not one I
do often but fun to play with now and again.  I hope it is enjoyed. Myrna  
 
Perhaps It Was Destiny

It simply began with a planted seed
Though I knew not from whence it came
Perhaps it was destiny, or maybe need
I accepted the presence, casting not blame

Though I knew not from whence it came
Soon my thoughts were filled with words
I accepted the presence, casting not blame
Just embracing the miracle that occurred

Soon my thoughts were filled with words
Into a waiting pen their ink did spill
Just embracing the miracle that occurred
I sought time's parchment for my thoughts to fill

Into a waiting pen their ink did spill
Perhaps it was destiny, or maybe need
I sought time's parchment for my thoughts to fill
It simply began with a planted seed.


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