[stylist] Second Revision Attempt of Apple I am poem
Bridgit Kuenning-Pollpeter
bkpollpeter at gmail.com
Fri Nov 13 19:58:59 UTC 2015
This works too, except towards the end, you mention tan abs, but throughout
the poem, we get the description of creamy hands and other body parts. So is
one tan and the other paler? Or is creamy not intended as a physical
description?
Bridgit
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Subject: [stylist] Second Revision Attempt of Apple I am poem
Hello all,
Below is my second revision attempt.
Apple I am
Dark eyed glance
Carved abs, flirty black curls, large creamy hands
Darting to mask my tan abs with green plants
Large curvy chest
Carved abs, flirty red curls, long creamy legs
Dark red lips kiss, yirning for his dreamy caress
Darting to mask my bare breasts
My Eve had eaten her treat, tasting sweeter than the rest
I stand bleak, waiting for mother hens to birth Summer eggs
My hands beaten, plowing dirt for earth's harvest, bursts of sweat
I scam weak, speaking, He cursed me to squirm in dirt, suffer death
Darting to mask my tan abs with green plants
Carved abs, flirty black curls, large creamy hands
Dark eyed glance
Apple I am
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