[stylist] Short Story: "Smart Decisions?"

[Vejas Vasiliauskas]

Hi Chris,
Thank you so much for your feedback.
Could you give me an example of an area where I could show not tell a little better in this? I know I still have to work on it.
Vejas 

> On Oct 28, 2016, at 06:47, Chris Kuell via stylist <stylist at nfbnet.org> wrote:
> 
> Vejas,
> 
> I like this story. It needs some work, but the basic storyline is
> interesting and believable. One thing you should read up on is showing
> versus telling. This will help bring your characters to life.
> 
> Chris
> 
> 
> 
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