[Stylist] new poem, feedback appreciated

Mon May 27 15:37:11 UTC 2019

Hello Barbara, Chris, Lynda and all,
Thanks for the feedback, I agree and will be most likely  making two poems,
possibly a trio. It is exciting to find these nuggets of inspiration. Help
from other writers to point it out is the best kind of feedback one can get.
Keep writing,
Annie

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Annie,
Yes, I had the same thought as Chris,   about the outhouse.
A poem with the focus on the outhouse  could be the answer.
I have the chapbook , _When  Night Comes_ (Finishing Line Press),  by Wes
Sims, in which he writes about a smokehouse , and it is memorable. His poem
is titled, "Maybe."  I think you could do something like this with your
image of the outhouse, Annie.

I think the outhouse is something so memorable and valuable - with so much
content of it's own (NO PUN HERE) That you could do something memorable - in
a great way - with that image.
Maybe even something amusing or profound.

I have a memorable outhouse in my recollections of , growing up and going to
school in the 1950s.  It was a very large outhouse - one for girls and one
for boys - at our school where I went from grades 1-8.   I have vivid
memories of this building - definitely worthy of a poem.
Lynda

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Hey Annie,

I tend to agree with Barbara's assessment. There are aspects of the cabin in
this piece, but my mind is drawn to the outhouse. Perhaps the cabin deserves
an outhouseless poem, and the dreaded outhouse deserves a poem of its own.

Happy Memorial Day.

Chris

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Hello all,

This is from a families of veterans writing workshop. I know it isn't about
soldiers, but it is about going to the family cabin, where my Dad and his
brothers all hunted, and, all of whom were veterans.

The Cabin

By Ann Chiappetta

Pine scents, the echo of bird calls, hollow

  sound of boots on the plywood floor. The squeak 

of the cabin door and crunch of footsteps moving toward the outhouse. Worry

competes with the urge -- will

there be spiders? Will someone hear a scream?

Keeping an eye on the spider in the corner, mouth-breathing 

to avoid the stink, it's finally done. Boots

make a hasty retreat from outhouse, clomp 

back into rustic safety. Dusk

edges into night followed by 

The soft swoosh of gas lanterns. Savory 

Camp food aromas waft from the kitchen, the pop

Of grease and spices compete for attention. iron stove 

and pump handle sink match the 

warped and slanted floor. The shotgun 

leans against the frame, a young 

shoulder bruised from its recoil.

Bears prowl at night. So much 

for the outhouse in the dark.

Ann Chiappetta, M.S.

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