[stylist] Can you help me with this sentence

[Angela fowler]

I could do that, if I worded it a bit differently, you're right.  

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Subject: Re: [stylist] Can you help me with this sentence

dear Angela,
unfortunately some sentences have to be mouthfuls.  the "which is available
to the general student population" probably can become its own sentence, and
that alone will help this one.  only thing I can see to do unless you move
some definitions to short declarative sentences before.
jc

Jim Canaday M.A.
Lawrence, KS

At 06:11 PM 11/1/2008, you wrote:
>It compels educational institutions to make accessible to people with 
>disabilities all information, textbooks, handouts, etc. which is 
>available to the general student population.
>
>I'm talking about title 3 of the ADA, the "access to information" section.
>Should I have said "which are available?" This sentence sounds like a 
>mouthful.
>
>Thank you
>
>Angela Fowler
>
>fowlers at syix.com
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