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She knew what was being asked of her, 
and she had resolved to do her duty by her country. She 
thought about when she informed Barbra of her 
decision to Join the United States army, Barbra was 
behind her 100 percent.
"Barbra, I've decided to join the Army." Jacqueline said with resolve in her 
voice.
"Jacqueline, I've told you, that if you were to attend college, or Join 
the Military, that I'd stand behind you 100 percent." Barbra Stockton her 
opted mother said looking at Jacqueline with love.
However, Kay and David fox, despised Jacqueline Sutton 
because she always went against the grain. She was what people 
referred to as a maverick. She also exposed the Foxes hypocrisy, and 
so they detested her even more. However, the straw that broke the 
camel's back, was when the Foxes learned of Jacqueline and Luis's 
relationship and ever since then, the Foxes were trying to split them 
up, because they felt Luis needed a Christian woman and not some 
one such as Jacqueline. However, even people in church, were 
beginning to notice that Jacqueline and Luis were together, and they 
supported it, because they knew of Jacqueline's salvation and that 
Jacqueline just didn't talk the talk, she walked the walk, and the foxes 
were envious of this quality of Jacqueline's. Just the vary thought of 
the Foxes Meddling in their relationship made Jacqueline's blood 
boil.
"Jacqueline, I'm sorry about last night and it'll never 
happen again!" Luis said upset, as he sat in his living room.
"You need to tell Kay to stop asking me about 
Lisa. Barbra, made her wishes known, before she died. I 
Jacqueline Mari Sutton and not Kay Elaine Foxx have 
sole custody of Lisa. Barbra knew she was dieing, when 
she adopted Lisa, and she asked the judge if I could 
have custody of Lisa upon Barbra's death, and the 
judge said yes, and that I was a better alternative, than 
for Lisa to go back into foster care. Luis, tell your 
grandmother to stay out of our affairs!" Jacqueline said 
firmly, as she finished wiping Lisa's face with a wash 
cloth.
Jacqueline thought of 
the day at the river where she and Luis had their 
last conversation before he went to Boston, to see 
his friend Virgil, who was dying of Cancer.