[stylist] sample of work rewritten. 3rd attempt.

Mon Oct 27 04:55:33 UTC 2008

thanks for the clarification Fred, thought was what you meant.

"remand back" or  "refer back" are clearly useless redundancies.  in 
the case of  "exact same" I think there is *occassionally* redeeming 
value in the repetition as highlighting emphasis [sorry, couldn't resist!].
jc
Jim Canaday M.A.
Lawrence, KS

At 08:58 PM 10/26/2008, you wrote:
>Hi Jim,
>
>I agree it is common and, in my opinion, redundant.  Many people also say
>"refer back" or "remand back" which are clearly bad usage by virtue of their
>redundancy.  I feel "exact same" falls into the same category.
>
>Warm Regards,
>
>Fred
>
>-----Original Message-----
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>Behalf Of James Canaday M.A. N6YR
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>Subject: Re: [stylist] sample of work rewritten. 3rd attempt.
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>fred,
>please elaborate on your peeve, p e e v e, didn't
>quite understand what you were referring to.  do
>you object to the use of the phrase "exact
>same?"  if so, it is certainly a common
>expression; perhaps the repetition is used simply
>for emphasis in our language.
>jc
>
>Jim Canaday M.A.
>Lawrence, KS
>
>At 07:22 PM 10/26/2008, you wrote:
> >Hi,
> >
> >I have a little pet peve.  It seems incorrect to "exact same" or relate
> >similar phrases.  It is very common these days.  I recommend either exact
>or
> >same but not both.  It seems redundant.  Others may disagree and I would
> >welcome another view.
> >
> >Warm Writing Regards,
> >
> >Fred
> >
> >-----Original Message-----
> >From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
> >Behalf Of LoriStay at aol.com
> >Sent: Saturday, October 25, 2008 10:56 PM
> >To: stylist at nfbnet.org
> >Subject: Re: [stylist] sample of work rewritten. 3rd attempt.
> >
> >
> >In a message dated 10/25/08 9:37:24 PM, dreamavdb at googlemail.com writes:
> >
> >
> > >
> > >   "Paril? I've come to show you how to use a long cane." Hari Murdag
> > > called as he stood listening in front of Paril's tent.  He heard
> > > exactly the same snores that he had heard earlier on.  Their was
> > > something unnatural  about the noise he was hearing.
> > >
> >
> >Their was... Nope.   Wrong "there."   check your spelling.
> >
> >Then their was a click
> >Same comment.   This should be spelled t h e r e
> >
> >  Then their(that is, t h e r e) was a click a whirring noise and the
>snores
> >started up again.
> >Put a comma after click.   Or use the word "and"
> >
> >(A click and a whirring noise)
> >
> >
> >   How could he have been taken in so easily.
> >Need question mark here rather than a period.
> >
> >
> >  After all he'd once played the same trick himself.
> >comma after the word "all"
> >
> >
> >"Paril!" he called into the desert air around him.   Not really
> >expecting a response.
> >There's that sentence fragment again.   Try a comma after the word "him,"
> >and
> >make the second sentence into a dependent clause.
> >
> >Sometimes people dislike my editing their work without mentioning that I do
> >this all the time (for those who do ask for it).   Let me know your
> >thoughts.
> >Lori
> >
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