[stylist] Change of Narrator for chapter 30?

[helene ryles]

I can always try. If it does dampen it then nothing will happen to the
original end and I can go back to work on that.

Helene

On 01/11/2009, Barbara Hammel <poetlori8 at msn.com> wrote:
> Well, if you think it could end where you want it with more closure if Fiona
> is the narrator, then go for it.  Maybe the problem was there was such
> intense emotions and her perspective could dampen it.
> Barbara
>
> Snow is God's way of reminding us that beauty can be found even in the
> coldest hearts.
>
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> From: "helene ryles" <dreamavdb at googlemail.com>
> Sent: Saturday, October 31, 2009 7:59 PM
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>> Ok, I'll do my best. The final chapter will probably need rewriting,
>> but the problem is the two main naraters are a little wrapped up in
>> their own problems at the moment. For them they are falling over the
>> cliff. Liza's afraid of losing the rest of her sight and She's got
>> Nadia's health to worry about and Nadia has started suffering from
>> PTSD.   This is why This is why I thought Fiona would be best. Plus
>> she has suffered from PTSD too and survived it. She will also be glad
>> that she is being taken seriously at last.
>> I'm going through the book at the moment.  Maybe when that's done I'll
>> think of an improvement.
>> I'll see if I can think of a way of it still being in a cliff hanger
>> without it being too much.
>>
>> Helene
>>
>> On 31/10/2009, Barbara Hammel <poetlori8 at msn.com> wrote:
>>> I'm not so sure that you need to go to all that trouble.  Just put a
>>> little
>>> closure to it.  I think it was Lori who suggested you just have Liza hold
>>> Nadia's hand for comfort.  Don't leave the people all on their own.  When
>>> they're all left standing apart in their physical beings and their
>>> thoughts,
>>> you leave us frustrated because instead of leaving us at the edge of that
>>> cliff, we have begun to fall off it.  You've propelled us over because
>>> you
>>> didn't put out that restraining hand to stop us.  You want us to wait at
>>> the
>>> edge for what comes next not jump into the abyss where there isn't even a
>>> next book yet.
>>> Barbara
>>>
>>> Snow is God's way of reminding us that beauty can be found even in the
>>> coldest hearts.
>>>
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>>> From: "helene ryles" <dreamavdb at googlemail.com>
>>> Sent: Saturday, October 31, 2009 2:06 PM
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>>>> I'm thinking of rewriting chapter 30 from Fiona's perspective as she
>>>> would know more then Liza or Nadia. What do other readers think about
>>>> this idea?
>>>>
>>>> Helene
>>>>
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