[stylist] Change of Narrator for chapter 30?

[Barbara Hammel]

Well, if you think it could end where you want it with more closure if Fiona 
is the narrator, then go for it.  Maybe the problem was there was such 
intense emotions and her perspective could dampen it.
Barbara

Snow is God's way of reminding us that beauty can be found even in the 
coldest hearts.

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From: "helene ryles" <dreamavdb at googlemail.com>
Sent: Saturday, October 31, 2009 7:59 PM
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Subject: Re: [stylist] Change of Narrator for chapter 30?

> Ok, I'll do my best. The final chapter will probably need rewriting,
> but the problem is the two main naraters are a little wrapped up in
> their own problems at the moment. For them they are falling over the
> cliff. Liza's afraid of losing the rest of her sight and She's got
> Nadia's health to worry about and Nadia has started suffering from
> PTSD.   This is why This is why I thought Fiona would be best. Plus
> she has suffered from PTSD too and survived it. She will also be glad
> that she is being taken seriously at last.
> I'm going through the book at the moment.  Maybe when that's done I'll
> think of an improvement.
> I'll see if I can think of a way of it still being in a cliff hanger
> without it being too much.
>
> Helene
>
> On 31/10/2009, Barbara Hammel <poetlori8 at msn.com> wrote:
>> I'm not so sure that you need to go to all that trouble.  Just put a 
>> little
>> closure to it.  I think it was Lori who suggested you just have Liza hold
>> Nadia's hand for comfort.  Don't leave the people all on their own.  When
>> they're all left standing apart in their physical beings and their 
>> thoughts,
>> you leave us frustrated because instead of leaving us at the edge of that
>> cliff, we have begun to fall off it.  You've propelled us over because 
>> you
>> didn't put out that restraining hand to stop us.  You want us to wait at 
>> the
>> edge for what comes next not jump into the abyss where there isn't even a
>> next book yet.
>> Barbara
>>
>> Snow is God's way of reminding us that beauty can be found even in the
>> coldest hearts.
>>
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>> From: "helene ryles" <dreamavdb at googlemail.com>
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>>> I'm thinking of rewriting chapter 30 from Fiona's perspective as she
>>> would know more then Liza or Nadia. What do other readers think about
>>> this idea?
>>>
>>> Helene
>>>
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