[stylist] The heart of it: chapter 1.

[Alan]

Thank you to both you and Shelley.  I took a good hard look at my wording, 
as the revised draft should show you.  Let me know what you think.

----- Original Message ----- 
From: <LoriStay at aol.com>
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Sent: Monday, October 05, 2009 1:01 PM
Subject: Re: [stylist] The heart of it: chapter 1.


> Same comment here for "in a manner of speaking."   It isn't necessary. 
> If
> you do this a lot, it would be a good idea to go through your chapter and
> ask yourself, what does this actually add?   If nothing, ditch it.   Might 
> as
> well go for impact.
> Lori
> In a message dated 10/5/09 10:22:01 AM, awheeler at neb.rr.com writes:
>
>
>>
>>
>> Ask her to talk about some way, big or small in which Michael may have
>> hurt her, even just with a unintended sleight, and her emotional throat 
>> closed
>> up and her voice was, in a manner of speaking, gone.
>>
>>
>
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