[stylist] Trials of an honorary Dragon: How can the end be improved?

[helene ryles]

Thanks for your feedback Barbara,
Although I've already planned Madrella's capture for the following
book, anything else that might help the ending would be very much
apreciated.

helene


On 30/10/2009, helene ryles <dreamavdb at googlemail.com> wrote:
> Thanks for your advice Lori.
> I can't think of anything as yet, but I'm hoping something will spring
> to mind later on.
>
> Helene
>
> On 30/10/2009, Barbara Hammel <poetlori8 at msn.com> wrote:
>> You've already got us wondering what will happen to Nadia.  Why not have
>> Madrella get caught?
>> You could leave the details for a later book but right now I would agree
>> that it's way too unfinished.
>> Barbara
>>
>> Snow is God's way of reminding us that beauty can be found even in the
>> coldest hearts.
>>
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>>> I'm wondering, would it be better if Wendy and Mrs bird were simply
>>> killed, then it would make it less ambigious and leave readers
>>> wondering about their recovery.
>>> Or maybe I could scrap that bit altogether?
>>> Leave it with just the first article where the hearing impaired unit
>>> is closed down.
>>>
>>> Nadia is suffering from PTSD. To have gone through all what she has it
>>> would be rather unatural if she didn't.
>>>
>>> Is there anything else that would help the ending?
>>>
>>> Helene
>>>
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