[stylist] Tell me What You think of my Character

[LoriStay at aol.com]

How about shaking hands rather than clammy?   

Also, he needs to be the one to decide not to tell her.   I doubt she'd cut 
him off after she had encouraged him to talk.
Lori
In a message dated 9/7/09 11:38:53 PM, qobells at roadrunner.com writes:


> Barbara, thanks for responding to this. I didn't think about the cold 
> clammy
> hands being a turnoff. I meant to show Glen was nervous. As we go through
> the story we'll learn more about his life through scars on his hands; 
> hands
> are very important. I'll think of something and if anyone has any
> suggestions let me know. Tormented and physical, good observations. Why 
> does
> Judy put him off before he tells what's bothering him? She explains it in
> the next lines. But I should indicate that she understands he can't tell 
> her
> everything right then it's so painful. Don't worry; he tells her. I'll 
> work
> on these details.
> Shelley J. Alongi
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