[stylist] Tell me What You think of my Character

[Shelley J. Alongi]

About Glen telling Judy the story in the chapter he tells her he wants 
counselling that she shouldn't have to hear the whole story right now he's 
not ready to tell it. Take a look at the chapter and you might see this then 
you might find more questions to ask as well and that's a good thing. 
Remember this is chapter 1 and so we don't learn everything here but the 
points made are good ones it shows you're picking up on things I want you to 
notice.
Shelley J. Alongi
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updated July 2, 2009
----- Original Message ----- 
From: <LoriStay at aol.com>
To: <stylist at nfbnet.org>
Sent: Monday, September 07, 2009 8:43 PM
Subject: Re: [stylist] Tell me What You think of my Character


> How about shaking hands rather than clammy?
>
> Also, he needs to be the one to decide not to tell her.   I doubt she'd 
> cut
> him off after she had encouraged him to talk.
> Lori
> In a message dated 9/7/09 11:38:53 PM, qobells at roadrunner.com writes:
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>
>> Barbara, thanks for responding to this. I didn't think about the cold
>> clammy
>> hands being a turnoff. I meant to show Glen was nervous. As we go through
>> the story we'll learn more about his life through scars on his hands;
>> hands
>> are very important. I'll think of something and if anyone has any
>> suggestions let me know. Tormented and physical, good observations. Why
>> does
>> Judy put him off before he tells what's bothering him? She explains it in
>> the next lines. But I should indicate that she understands he can't tell
>> her
>> everything right then it's so painful. Don't worry; he tells her. I'll
>> work
>> on these details.
>> Shelley J. Alongi
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