[stylist] DBG (chapter 4)

[helene ryles]

Hi Lora,
I tried to do it a little more cronalogically but it lacked any sort
of suspense that way. I was advised to put some drama at the beggining
to help hook the reader.

Fiona's chapter at the beggining starts somewhere at the middle of the book.
Nadia's chapters move cronologically.
Liza's chapters are less cronological. She tends to deal with specific
subject matters.

I do hope I haven't lost you over this matter but differant people
seem to have differant tastes and I can't please everyone. I thought
it was ok to move about in time.

Helene.

On 09/09/2009, LoriStay at aol.com <LoriStay at aol.com> wrote:
> Is there some purpose in juggling the dates and not doing this
> chronologically?   Flashbacks are one thing.   This is something else.
> Have you read
> The Time Traveler's Wife?   Great book, and it's now a movie.   In this
> book,
> the time is so jumbled for the time traveler, that you never know how old
> he is in the scene.   It's chronological for his wife.   Very confusing.
> Lori
> In a message dated 9/8/09 12:06:15 AM, dreamavdb at googlemail.com writes:
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>>
>> Yes it's the same girl: Nadia Murat: in first chapter she is 12 and a
>> half.
>> Second chapter she is only four and a half.
>> In the fourth chapter she is 8.
>> I put the dates of each of these chapters in brackets right after the
>> chapter headlines.
>>
>> I disagree with parents not being able to abuse teenagers since I know
>> several cases of this happening in real life. I know a woman about
>> 30(at least cronalogically) who is still abused by her mom. She has
>> taken on a role of assumed helplessness.
>> Have you read a book called 'The little prisoner?" Her father abuses
>> her from the age of 4 up until she is an adult. As an adult she still
>> lives in fear of him, up ontil the time she take him to court.
>>
>> In Nadia's case she is cronologically 12 but physically  speaking she
>> is very small and malnurished which makes her an easy target. Remember
>> in chapter 1 fiona says that she is probably older then she looks so
>> she thinks she's 'one of us'. I can't say any more then that without
>> giving the plot away.
>>
>> Helene
>>
>>
>>
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