[stylist] DBG 7 (completely new chapter)

[helene ryles]

Hi Judith,
The problem is the cronalogical aproach has been tried but I couln't
manage to give much suspense that way so I changed it to having things
following a differant pattern.

Helene

On 17/09/2009, Judith Bron <jbron at optonline.net> wrote:
> I think it would be more useful if events happened chronologically.  You're
> the author.  You can do this with your manuscript.  Give it a try.  All of
> us are authors and we've had to do this with our own manuscripts at one time
> or another.  I know I've done it with my novel.  You can still put the date
> at the beginning.  This way the reader knows what time frame they are
> reading in.  I did that.  I didn't want the reader to think that people were
> working on lap tops.  The date at the beginning of my book is 1977.  There
> were no lap tops around then.  Judith
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "helene ryles" <dreamavdb at googlemail.com>
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> Subject: Re: [stylist] DBG 7 (completely new chapter)
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>>I also put the date at the start of each chapter
>> Would it clarify if I also wrote how soon or later the event took
>> place as well?
>> Say for example in chapter 2 I could write
>> 1991 (six years earlier)
>> Would that help to make it clearer?
>> Helene
>>
>> Helene
>>
>> On 17/09/2009, Judith Bron <jbron at optonline.net> wrote:
>>> Keep in mind that most readers of your book will not read time lines
>>> before
>>> starting their read.  The plot has to be clear without explanation to the
>>> average reader.  People read novels to be entertained.  Consequently they
>>> are not going to put in the time necessary to figure out what the
>>> entertainment is all about.  Judith
>>> ----- Original Message -----
>>> From: "helene ryles" <dreamavdb at googlemail.com>
>>> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>>> Sent: Wednesday, September 16, 2009 6:11 PM
>>> Subject: Re: [stylist] DBG 7 (completely new chapter)
>>>
>>>
>>>> Shelley: I'm glad you like this story so far. Thanks very much for
>>>> your feedback.
>>>> I've sent a timeline of the date each chapter takes place.
>>>> Let me know if it helps any?
>>>> I'm also planning to make a list of all the characters.
>>>>
>>>> Also I mean to have a glossary of terms at the end of the book. I read
>>>> a book that had one which was set in Afganistan called 'the
>>>> breadwinner'. I found it a really good book. The names of things that
>>>> didnt have english translation was at the end of the book.
>>>>
>>>> I'm wondering if people think Nadir and Nadia are differant? The only
>>>> really new character is Mr Murat as Nadia and her mom have been writen
>>>> about before.
>>>>
>>>> The story is about Nadia's life and also that of her aunt Liza. who
>>>> are the main characters.
>>>>
>>>> Sorry about the grammar. Grammar and spelling isn't my strong point. I
>>>> do run it through the spell check when I've findished chapters or you
>>>> would find even more badly spelt words. Unfortunately the spell check
>>>> just gives you a list of words to use and I sometimes accidently use
>>>> the wrong one.
>>>>
>>>> Arielle is Liza's aunt and has been mentioned breifly in chapter 3.
>>>> Mr Murrat's aunt Nora doesn't come into it. Would it be less confusing
>>>> if he just called her his aunt?
>>>> The painful curse is the same as Crusendi curse that J K rowling used
>>>> only I call it 'the painful curse.
>>>>
>>>> Helene
>>>>
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