[stylist] DBG 7 (completely new chapter)

Thu Sep 17 03:58:01 UTC 2009

Hi Judith:
I think I will have to rearange some of the chapters though. There is
only one Madrella Murat. Does moving about in time make it seem like
there are more?

helene

On 17/09/2009, Judith Bron <jbron at optonline.net> wrote:
> That's where your work as an author comes in.  It's your story.  You are
> presenting it.  You are talking about rotten women who dominate their
> husband and children.  You are talking about the handicapped.  You are
> writing a fantasy.  Take some time to do what is best for you, your story
> and readers.  JB
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "helene ryles" <dreamavdb at googlemail.com>
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> Sent: Wednesday, September 16, 2009 10:05 PM
> Subject: Re: [stylist] DBG 7 (completely new chapter)
>
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>> Hi Judith,
>> The problem is the cronalogical aproach has been tried but I couln't
>> manage to give much suspense that way so I changed it to having things
>> following a differant pattern.
>>
>> Helene
>>
>> On 17/09/2009, Judith Bron <jbron at optonline.net> wrote:
>>> I think it would be more useful if events happened chronologically.
>>> You're
>>> the author.  You can do this with your manuscript.  Give it a try.  All
>>> of
>>> us are authors and we've had to do this with our own manuscripts at one
>>> time
>>> or another.  I know I've done it with my novel.  You can still put the
>>> date
>>> at the beginning.  This way the reader knows what time frame they are
>>> reading in.  I did that.  I didn't want the reader to think that people
>>> were
>>> working on lap tops.  The date at the beginning of my book is 1977.
>>> There
>>> were no lap tops around then.  Judith
>>> ----- Original Message -----
>>> From: "helene ryles" <dreamavdb at googlemail.com>
>>> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>>> Sent: Wednesday, September 16, 2009 7:42 PM
>>> Subject: Re: [stylist] DBG 7 (completely new chapter)
>>>
>>>
>>>>I also put the date at the start of each chapter
>>>> Would it clarify if I also wrote how soon or later the event took
>>>> place as well?
>>>> Say for example in chapter 2 I could write
>>>> 1991 (six years earlier)
>>>> Would that help to make it clearer?
>>>> Helene
>>>>
>>>> Helene
>>>>
>>>> On 17/09/2009, Judith Bron <jbron at optonline.net> wrote:
>>>>> Keep in mind that most readers of your book will not read time lines
>>>>> before
>>>>> starting their read.  The plot has to be clear without explanation to
>>>>> the
>>>>> average reader.  People read novels to be entertained.  Consequently
>>>>> they
>>>>> are not going to put in the time necessary to figure out what the
>>>>> entertainment is all about.  Judith
>>>>> ----- Original Message -----
>>>>> From: "helene ryles" <dreamavdb at googlemail.com>
>>>>> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>>>>> Sent: Wednesday, September 16, 2009 6:11 PM
>>>>> Subject: Re: [stylist] DBG 7 (completely new chapter)
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>> Shelley: I'm glad you like this story so far. Thanks very much for
>>>>>> your feedback.
>>>>>> I've sent a timeline of the date each chapter takes place.
>>>>>> Let me know if it helps any?
>>>>>> I'm also planning to make a list of all the characters.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Also I mean to have a glossary of terms at the end of the book. I read
>>>>>> a book that had one which was set in Afganistan called 'the
>>>>>> breadwinner'. I found it a really good book. The names of things that
>>>>>> didnt have english translation was at the end of the book.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> I'm wondering if people think Nadir and Nadia are differant? The only
>>>>>> really new character is Mr Murat as Nadia and her mom have been writen
>>>>>> about before.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> The story is about Nadia's life and also that of her aunt Liza. who
>>>>>> are the main characters.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Sorry about the grammar. Grammar and spelling isn't my strong point. I
>>>>>> do run it through the spell check when I've findished chapters or you
>>>>>> would find even more badly spelt words. Unfortunately the spell check
>>>>>> just gives you a list of words to use and I sometimes accidently use
>>>>>> the wrong one.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Arielle is Liza's aunt and has been mentioned breifly in chapter 3.
>>>>>> Mr Murrat's aunt Nora doesn't come into it. Would it be less confusing
>>>>>> if he just called her his aunt?
>>>>>> The painful curse is the same as Crusendi curse that J K rowling used
>>>>>> only I call it 'the painful curse.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Helene
>>>>>>
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