[stylist] question about word usage

[Judith Bron]

Thanks, Angela.  "Gripped with apprehension is worth consideration.  Thanks, 
Judith
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From: "Angela Fowler" <fowlers at syix.com>
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> Hmmm, it does seem out of place with the rest of your writing, but is
> appropriate to the situation.
> If we could think of something which means the same but is not so
> slangish...
> "Gripped with apprehension at this strange and eerie visit?"
> That's not right either, but something along those lines.
>
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> Justin, there is only one character named Jennifer.  What do you feel 
> about
> the word spooked?  Judith
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>> There are two people naned jenifer in the passage.  I was just a
>> little confused, but otherwise, it was good and suspensevull.  I would
>> love to read more.
>>
>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org]
>> On Behalf Of Judith Bron
>> Sent: Thursday, October 14, 2010 8:37 PM
>> To: Stylist
>> Subject: [stylist] question about word usage
>>
>> Here is a section from my novel "The Letter."  I use the phrase
>> "Totally spooked" and wonder if there is something more appropriate
>> that I should be using.  Any help would be most appreciated.  Thanks,
>> Judith
>>
>> On her way to the car Sheila thought about the little book with an
>> inserted paper delivered a few months earlier by a strange man.  He
>> had said, "Mrs.
>> Hamilton, I'm a lawyer representing a family that perished in the
>> holocaust.
>> This little packet containing a small book and paper were given to me
>> to deliver to you for Jennifer Rabinowitz.  They are left by her
>> parents.  It should be presented to her on her seventeenth birthday.
>> Please don't tell Jennifer or your husband about this meeting.  A good
>> day to you."  The man left the house and she ran to the front window to
> watch him drive away.
>> But
>> no car appeared on the driveway or street.  There was no man walking
>> away from the house.  Totally spooked, she ran to her bedroom without
>> looking at the little packet and placed it with other papers in her
>> dresser.
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