[stylist] question about word usage

[Angela Fowler]

Hmmm, it does seem out of place with the rest of your writing, but is
appropriate to the situation.  
If we could think of something which means the same but is not so
slangish...
"Gripped with apprehension at this strange and eerie visit?"
That's not right either, but something along those lines.

-----Original Message-----
From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
Behalf Of Judith Bron
Sent: Thursday, October 14, 2010 6:55 PM
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Subject: Re: [stylist] question about word usage

Justin, there is only one character named Jennifer.  What do you feel about
the word spooked?  Judith
----- Original Message -----
From: "Justin Williams" <justin.williams2 at gmail.com>
To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
Sent: Thursday, October 14, 2010 9:29 PM
Subject: Re: [stylist] question about word usage


> There are two people naned jenifer in the passage.  I was just a 
> little confused, but otherwise, it was good and suspensevull.  I would 
> love to read more.
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] 
> On Behalf Of Judith Bron
> Sent: Thursday, October 14, 2010 8:37 PM
> To: Stylist
> Subject: [stylist] question about word usage
>
> Here is a section from my novel "The Letter."  I use the phrase 
> "Totally spooked" and wonder if there is something more appropriate 
> that I should be using.  Any help would be most appreciated.  Thanks, 
> Judith
>
> On her way to the car Sheila thought about the little book with an 
> inserted paper delivered a few months earlier by a strange man.  He 
> had said, "Mrs.
> Hamilton, I'm a lawyer representing a family that perished in the 
> holocaust.
> This little packet containing a small book and paper were given to me 
> to deliver to you for Jennifer Rabinowitz.  They are left by her 
> parents.  It should be presented to her on her seventeenth birthday.  
> Please don't tell Jennifer or your husband about this meeting.  A good 
> day to you."  The man left the house and she ran to the front window to
watch him drive away.
> But
> no car appeared on the driveway or street.  There was no man walking 
> away from the house.  Totally spooked, she ran to her bedroom without 
> looking at the little packet and placed it with other papers in her 
> dresser.
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