[stylist] newsletters

[Bridgit Pollpeter]

Jewel,
 
When I took over the editorship for Nebraska, I had a statewide contest to change the name of the newsletter.  I made a deadline for entries, and members submitted their ideas.  I chose the top five favorites of mine and selected a few people (including our affiliate president) to decide.  I was the only one who knew what person submitted what title.  This way no one could be bias.  The winner received a Louie Braille coin.
 
I printed the name of the winner in the first issue which was last year.  I had about 20 submissions and we changed the name from the Blind Nebraskan to the Nebraska Independent.  It was a pretty popular idea, and it got affiliate members involved as well as bringing awareness about the newsletter.
 
Bridgit
 
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> 1. Re: chapter newsletters (Jewel S.)
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> Message: 1
> Date: Tue, 7 Sep 2010 22:26:22 -0400
> From: "Jewel S." <herekittykat2 at gmail.com>
> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> Subject: Re: [stylist] chapter newsletters
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> I apologize, I did mean affiliate. I get confused between "chapter"
> and "affiliate." It is for the Wake Federation of the Blind
> newsletter, which is for Wake County and Durham County in North
> Carolina. I would love to some day run the state newsletter, the News
> and Views, when the current Editor steps down in a few years, but I
> have to start small, and this local newsletter is a great way to do
> that.
> 
> Thank you for the suggestions! Asking others as a whole to write
> articles sounds like a good idea, and I think writing a person to
> write about themselves and then editing if needed is a good idea. It
> saves me the time of interviewing and writing the article from
> scratch.
> 
> Themes are also a good idea...I think that will really spice up the
> newsletter. I'm also still trying to come up with a name, though I'm
> truly considering the Red and White, which are the affiliate's
> official colours. What do you guys think of that?
> 
> On 9/7/10, Bridgit Pollpeter <bpollpeter at hotmail.com> wrote:
> >
> > Jewel,
> >
> > Is this for your chapter or affiliate? I am the editor for the Nebraska
> > newsletter and I have done a complete face lift with it. First, I try to
> > encourage submissions that do not simply report. I like to know what a
> > writer's experience is and how a situation may affect them.
> >
> > I also began selecting themes for each newsletter to revolve around. Our
> > current issue deals with training and alternative skills. I asked each
> > chapter to submit a piece detailing an event or activity where they employed
> > the alternative skills to accomplish set-up, work and interaction. I also
> > asked members to write about their training experiences. one submission is
> > about how Braille can be used in daily life, and I wrote an articles on how
> > the skills can be used to manage diabetes. Things like that. Setting a
> > theme, or focus, helps promote Federation philosophy, and it helps members
> > have an idea as to what they should write.
> >
> > I try to spotlight a different affiliate member each time too. If
> > interviewing a person does not always work, I will ask a candidate to write
> > about themselves.
> >
> > Be creative, but informative. We want to grab readers attention especially
> > outside the Federation. Congrats and goodluck!
> >
> > Bridgit
> >
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> >> Today's Topics:
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> >> 1. Re: creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no adult
> >> content (Priscilla McKinley)
> >> 2. Re-Introducing Myself (Marion Gwizdala, M.S.)
> >> 3. creative non-fiction "snapshot" no language, no adult content
> >> (Bridgit Pollpeter)
> >> 4. Re: creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no adult
> >> content (Chris Kuell)
> >> 5. Re: creative non-fiction "snapshot" no language, no adult
> >> content (James H. "Jim" Canaday M.A. N6YR)
> >> 6. Re: creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no adult
> >> content (loristay)
> >> 7. Recent Addition (Joe Orozco)
> >> 8. Re: creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no adult
> >> content (Robert Leslie Newman)
> >> 9. Re: Recent Addition (Priscilla McKinley)
> >> 10. Chapter Newsletters (Jewel S.)
> >> 11. Re: Re-Introducing Myself (Robert Leslie Newman)
> >> 12. Re: creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no adult
> >> content (James H. "Jim" Canaday M.A. N6YR)
> >> 13. Re: Chapter Newsletters (helene ryles)
> >> 14. Re: Chapter Newsletters (James H. "Jim" Canaday M.A. N6YR)
> >> 15. Re: Re-Introducing Myself (Priscilla McKinley)
> >> 16. Re: Chapter Newsletters (Jewel S.)
> >> 17. Songwriting (Joe Orozco)
> >> 18. Re: Songwriting (BDM)
> >> 19. Re: Chapter Newsletters (loristay)
> >> 20. Re: Songwriting (loristay)
> >> 21. Re: Chapter Newsletters (James H. "Jim" Canaday M.A. N6YR)
> >> 22. Re: Chapter Newsletters (Robert Leslie Newman)
> >> 23. Re: Songwriting (Marion Gwizdala, M.S.)
> >>
> >>
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> >> Message: 1
> >> Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 14:33:51 -0500
> >> From: Priscilla McKinley <priscilla.mckinley at gmail.com>
> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no
> >> adult content
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> >> I have embedded a few comments in your essay, just things to consider.
> >> Also, I think you might want to consider the organization. You start
> >> with the wedding photos and focus on one. Then you move back to
> >> looking around the room. It seems as though it might be more natural
> >> for your reading audience to come down to the basement and then to the
> >> room, see everything in the room (closet, dresser, photos on walls,
> >> etc.), and finally end with the girl in the middle of the room,
> >> looking at the wedding photos. Then she could look in the mirror at
> >> the end, moving directly from one snapshot that captures her feelings,
> >> true feelings, to seeing herself in the mirror.
> >>
> >> Of course, this is just one opinion. I like when stories/scenes move
> >> from general to specific, from the room and the surroundings to one
> >> specific photo, to one specific moment in time. It seems as though
> >> the specific photo reveals sadness that also comes out when looking at
> >> yourself in the mirror. Again, that?s just one opinion.
> >>
> >> Thanks for sharing,
> >>
> >> Priscilla
> >>
> >>
> >> Snapshot
> >>
> >> Reaching the bottom steps of the basement, an observer would notice
> >> the following scene: A naked lightbulb emanates a harsh yellow
> >> brilliance stifled by the dark windowless, cinder-block walls and
> >> open-rafter ceiling. [I would take out the first part of the previous
> >> sentence and start with ?A light??.] The grey painted floor
> >> resembles hard, cold stone. Separating the basement from the large
> >> family-room-sized space, should be a plaster wall, but now just the
> >> wall studs remain leaving a clear view into the large room converted
> >> into a bedroom. A skinny, blonde, young woman, Bridgit, sits in the
> >> middle of the room surrounded by scattered piles of photographs.
> >> Leaning against the wrought iron footboard of her bed, she studies a
> >> picture. With knees drawn up against her slender body, she stares at
> >> the image of a young woman. The small window above the bed shoots
> >> sunlight like a spotlight onto the section of floor the young woman
> >> sits upon. [Where the woman sits to avoid ending in a preposition?]
> >> Bits of light reflect off the pictures littering the beige carpet
> >> around the young woman.Try using other words besides ?young woman? so
> >> much. Plus, sometimes it is confusing if the scene is you or the
> >> picture of you. You might want to build up to the picture at the end
> >> of the description of you sitting.]
> >> The pictures relay a moment modern technology has frozen in time. A
> >> small-town family wedding snapped for the centuries. Bridgit is
> >> twenty-one in the pictures. A single year ago. She remembers the
> >> day, she remembers the feelings. Happiness that weddings evoke, but
> >> sadness that the occasion is not her own to celebrate. Joy to see
> >> relatives gone for too long, but restlessness to explore the world
> >> too. It was a third cousin's wedding, but the whole clan showed up to
> >> celebrate the nuptials. A panoramic shot included a large portion of
> >> family members gathered at a long table enjoying the home-cooked meal
> >> of chicken-fried chicken and gravy with mashed potatoes and green bean
> >> casserole topped with real onion-rings. Bridgit smiled demurely,
> >> picking at the food before her, while Uncle Lance, to her right,
> >> intently shoveled mashed potatoes in his mouth, and Tami, her mother,
> >> held a bit of chicken mid-air with her fork, talking, most likely
> >> saying how, "Fried-chicken is not a very elegant choice for a wedding,
> >> but I guess that is what you are use to in small towns." Another
> >> picture displays Bridgit in her black dress with a deep V in front
> >> exposing a boney, but well tanned chest. Bronzed arms connected with
> >> another's, she stood next to her fourteen-year-old cousin, Colin,
> >> already taller than her. Her blue eyes gazed into the camera as she
> >> flashed her one-dimpled smile. The focus of the next photo captured
> >> the wedding party and guest doing the Bunnyhop. Clustered of to the
> >> right, Uncle Doug and Aunt Becky grill her about college. She smiled
> >> quietly as, "What are you studying?" "Still music?" and what are your
> >> plans after graduation?" were fired at her. Years of dance training
> >> and etiquette school have taught her to stand erect with head held
> >> high. With her confident demeanor and three-inch heels, she appeared
> >> taller than her average five-foot height. Later in the evening, the
> >> camera snapped Bridgit laughing wildly as Uncle Brent whipped her
> >> across the dance floor like Ginger Rogers. Another moment captured
> >> Bridgit and Uncle Brent posing for the camera as he dipped her low.
> >> Another shot has Bridgit kicking her black strappy heels off as she
> >> prepared for a new round of dancing. Each photograph is handled with
> >> care and placed in a tree creating a timeline beginning with a picture
> >> of Bridgit's immediate family dressed in their wedding attire posing
> >> for the first time in years, to a snapshot of straggling dancers
> >> waltzing to the final song of the night, "I Will Always Love You."
> >> Each picture displays a happy, smiling young woman, but one single
> >> shot captured the truth. One solitary picture alone shows her with
> >> the mask off. It is the photo she now sits and studies intently.
> >> [Consider checking ofor present and past-tense verbs. Sometimes it
> >> seems as though you could use more present.]
> >> Staring at the picture of herself, her expression is quizzical and
> >> worn. Her gaze is intent as though she will discover some truth about
> >> herself. A rare moment exposed displaying a part never meant for
> >> public consumption, yet here it is for all to see. She cradles the
> >> picture in her thin hands as if breaking it will destroy some part of
> >> her. The camera revealed Bridgit resting her head on a propped arm.
> >> Escaped tendrils of hair framed her tanned face, and her blue,
> >> almond-shaped eyes looked off into the distance. Her expression
> >> contained longing, dreams and hopes unrealized, mingled with
> >> restlessness and deep sadness. [Since this is captured in time,
> >> consider present tense.] Sitting alone, tucked away in a corner of
> >> the reception hall, she believed herself unnoticed, but the camera
> >> caught her. An X-ray imprinting her soul lay bare. Always so careful
> >> to wear her mask. Never letting her guard down, only to be trapped by
> >> a modern marvel.
> >> Placing this final picture in its proper spot in the visual timeline,
> >> Bridgit looks around the room. A blue "Happy-birthday" balloon hangs
> >> deflated on the wall surrounded by pictures from high school and
> >> college. Bridgit, Tera and Jessica smiled in their red-and-white
> >> cheerleading uniforms. Bridgit standing at the grand piano in the
> >> choir room, mouth opened as she belted "On My Own" from Les
> >> Miserables. Bridgit engulfed by Ryan, her boyfriend, the boy she
> >> thought she would marry. Bridgit and Tera, arms clasped around each
> >> other's shoulders, grinning on graduation day. Bridgit sitting on
> >> Joe's knee during a cast party for Cinderella. [Consider being
> >> consistent with verb tenses in the previous sentences, either present
> >> with complete sentences or fragments with ?ing? verbs.] A letter
> >> pokes out from behind the balloon, a love letter sent by a friend who
> >> never forgot her, but that Bridgit could not muster the necessary
> >> feelings for. The letter is a reminder that some one in the world
> >> thinks she is special. A poster hangs on the opposite wall displaying
> >> Kate and Leo at the bow of a ship, and next to this stands a tall
> >> bookshelf lined with books from Little Women to I Know Why the Caged
> >> Bird Sings. Across the room a butter-colored dresser-drawer reflects
> >> her image in its large mirror framed by carved flowers. Quickly
> >> adverting her eyes, she takes in the glass bottle of Miracle perfume
> >> and the organized assortment of make-up compacts and brushes. A
> >> Shabby-chic-style jewelry box is arranged on a corner of the dresser
> >> top, and necklaces hang on a pink heart-shape with tiny hooks
> >> protruding from the lace-overlay front. The open closet reveals
> >> clothes hanging from shortest sleeve length to longest as well as
> >> being color coordinated. Directly to the left of the entrance into
> >> her room, sits the thirty-two-inch TV purchased by Ryan, the ex,
> >> disguised as a Christmas present, but intended for the use of video
> >> games. Taking in years of memories and keepsakes, Bridgit finally
> >> turns back to the reflection in the mirror. Her blonde hair is pulled
> >> back in a long, wispy ponytail, an attempt to hide the sections of
> >> hair that have fallen out with portions of scalp still attached. Head
> >> settled on boney knees, she wonders at her compactness. Chest,
> >> stomach and waist are hidden behind skinny legs, and rail-thin arms
> >> wrap around just beneath the pale, gaunt face. Her eyes haunt her as
> >> they hold the longing and sadness grown deeper by another year.
> >>
> >>
> >> On 9/6/10, James H. "Jim" Canaday M.A. N6YR <n6yr at sunflower.com> wrote:
> >> > Hi Bridgit,
> >> > descriptions are very good in this.
> >> >
> >> > I could be wrong but I think "adverting" you meant "averting."
> >> > jc
> >> >
> >> >
> >> > At 04:21 AM 9/6/2010, you wrote:
> >> >
> >> >>Dear List,
> >> >>
> >> >>Happy Labor Day to all. I am posting a piece I just worked on for a
> >> >>class. Before it is workshopped, I thought I would let you lot
> >> >>deconstruct it, and let me know what you think.
> >> >>
> >> >>Bridgit
> >> >>
> >> >>Snapshot
> >> >>
> >> >>Reaching the bottom steps of the basement, an observer would notice
> >> >>the following scene: A naked lightbulb emanates a harsh yellow
> >> >>brilliance stifled by the dark windowless, cinder-block walls and
> >> >>open-rafter ceiling. The grey painted floor resembles hard, cold
> >> >>stone. Separating the basement from the large family-room-sized
> >> >>space, should be a plaster wall, but now just the wall studs remain
> >> >>leaving a clear view into the large room converted into a
> >> >>bedroom. A skinny, blonde, young woman, Bridgit, sits in the middle
> >> >>of the room surrounded by scattered piles of photographs. Leaning
> >> >>against the wrought iron footboard of her bed, she studies a
> >> >>picture. With knees drawn up against her slender body, she stares
> >> >>at the image of a young woman. The small window above the bed
> >> >>shoots sunlight like a spotlight onto the section of floor the young
> >> >>woman sits upon. Bits of light reflect off the pictures littering
> >> >>the beige carpet around the young woman.
> >> >>The pictures relay a moment modern technology has frozen in time. A
> >> >>small-town family wedding snapped for the centuries. Bridgit is
> >> >>twenty-one in the pictures. A single year ago. She remembers the
> >> >>day, she remembers the feelings. Happiness that weddings evoke, but
> >> >>sadness that the occasion is not her own to celebrate. Joy to see
> >> >>relatives gone for too long, but restlessness to explore the world
> >> >>too. It was a third cousin's wedding, but the whole clan showed up
> >> >>to celebrate the nuptials. A panoramic shot included a large
> >> >>portion of family members gathered at a long table enjoying the
> >> >>home-cooked meal of chicken-fried chicken and gravy with mashed
> >> >>potatoes and green bean casserole topped with real
> >> >>onion-rings. Bridgit smiled demurely, picking at the food before
> >> >>her, while Uncle Lance, to her right, intently shoveled mashed
> >> >>potatoes in his mouth, and Tami, her mother, held a bit of chicken
> >> >>mid-air with her fork, talking, most likely saying how,
> >> >>"Fried-chicken is not a very elegant choice for a wedding, but I
> >> >>guess that is what you are use to in small towns." Another picture
> >> >>displays Bridgit in her black dress with a deep V in front exposing
> >> >>a boney, but well tanned chest. Bronzed arms connected with
> >> >>another's, she stood next to her fourteen-year-old cousin, Colin,
> >> >>already taller than her. Her blue eyes gazed into the camera as she
> >> >>flashed her one-dimpled smile. The focus of the next photo captured
> >> >>the wedding party and guest doing the Bunnyhop. Clustered of to the
> >> >>right, Uncle Doug and Aunt Becky grill her about college. She
> >> >>smiled quietly as, "What are you studying?" "Still music?" and what
> >> >>are your plans after graduation?" were fired at her. Years of dance
> >> >>training and etiquette school have taught her to stand erect with
> >> >>head held high. With her confident demeanor and three-inch heels,
> >> >>she appeared taller than her average five-foot height. Later in the
> >> >>evening, the camera snapped Bridgit laughing wildly as Uncle Brent
> >> >>whipped her across the dance floor like Ginger Rogers. Another
> >> >>moment captured Bridgit and Uncle Brent posing for the camera as he
> >> >>dipped her low. Another shot has Bridgit kicking her black strappy
> >> >>heels off as she prepared for a new round of dancing. Each
> >> >>photograph is handled with care and placed in a tree creating a
> >> >>timeline beginning with a picture of Bridgit's immediate family
> >> >>dressed in their wedding attire posing for the first time in years,
> >> >>to a snapshot of straggling dancers waltzing to the final song of
> >> >>the night, "I Will Always Love You." Each picture displays a happy,
> >> >>smiling young woman, but one single shot captured the truth. One
> >> >>solitary picture alone shows her with the mask off. It is the photo
> >> >>she now sits and studies intently.
> >> >>Staring at the picture of herself, her expression is quizzical and
> >> >>worn. Her gaze is intent as though she will discover some truth
> >> >>about herself. A rare moment exposed displaying a part never meant
> >> >>for public consumption, yet here it is for all to see. She cradles
> >> >>the picture in her thin hands as if breaking it will destroy some
> >> >>part of her. The camera revealed Bridgit resting her head on a
> >> >>propped arm. Escaped tendrils of hair framed her tanned face, and
> >> >>her blue, almond-shaped eyes looked off into the distance. Her
> >> >>expression contained longing, dreams and hopes unrealized, mingled
> >> >>with restlessness and deep sadness. Sitting alone, tucked away in a
> >> >>corner of the reception hall, she believed herself unnoticed, but
> >> >>the camera caught her. An X-ray imprinting her soul lay
> >> >>bare. Always so careful to wear her mask. Never letting her guard
> >> >>down, only to be trapped by a modern marvel.
> >> >>Placing this final picture in its proper spot in the visual
> >> >>timeline, Bridgit looks around the room. A blue "Happy-birthday"
> >> >>balloon hangs deflated on the wall surrounded by pictures from high
> >> >>school and college. Bridgit, Tera and Jessica smiled in their
> >> >>red-and-white cheerleading uniforms. Bridgit standing at the grand
> >> >>piano in the choir room, mouth opened as she belted "On My Own" from
> >> >>Les Miserables. Bridgit engulfed by Ryan, her boyfriend, the boy
> >> >>she thought she would marry. Bridgit and Tera, arms clasped around
> >> >>each other's shoulders, grinning on graduation day. Bridgit sitting
> >> >>on Joe's knee during a cast party for Cinderella. A letter pokes
> >> >>out from behind the balloon, a love letter sent by a friend who
> >> >>never forgot her, but that Bridgit could not muster the necessary
> >> >>feelings for. The letter is a reminder that some one in the world
> >> >>thinks she is special. A poster hangs on the opposite wall
> >> >>displaying Kate and Leo at the bow of a ship, and next to this
> >> >>stands a tall bookshelf lined with books from Little Women to I Know
> >> >>Why the Caged Bird Sings. Across the room a butter-colored
> >> >>dresser-drawer reflects her image in its large mirror framed by
> >> >>carved flowers. Quickly adverting her eyes, she takes in the glass
> >> >>bottle of Miracle perfume and the organized assortment of make-up
> >> >>compacts and brushes. A Shabby-chic-style jewelry box is arranged
> >> >>on a corner of the dresser top, and necklaces hang on a pink
> >> >>heart-shape with tiny hooks protruding from the lace-overlay
> >> >>front. The open closet reveals clothes hanging from shortest sleeve
> >> >>length to longest as well as being color coordinated. Directly to
> >> >>the left of the entrance into her room, sits the thirty-two-inch TV
> >> >>purchased by Ryan, the ex, disguised as a Christmas present, but
> >> >>intended for the use of video games. Taking in years of memories
> >> >>and keepsakes, Bridgit finally turns back to the reflection in the
> >> >>mirror. Her blonde hair is pulled back in a long, wispy ponytail,
> >> >>an attempt to hide the sections of hair that have fallen out with
> >> >>portions of scalp still attached. Head settled on boney knees, she
> >> >>wonders at her compactness. Chest, stomach and waist are hidden
> >> >>behind skinny legs, and rail-thin arms wrap around just beneath the
> >> >>pale, gaunt face. Her eyes haunt her as they hold the longing and
> >> >>sadness grown deeper by another year.
> >> >>
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> >> ------------------------------
> >>
> >> Message: 2
> >> Date: Mon, 06 Sep 2010 10:21:56 -0400
> >> From: "Marion Gwizdala, M.S." <marion.gwizdala at verizon.net>
> >> To: <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: [stylist] Re-Introducing Myself
> >> Message-ID: <01b901cb4dce$dd073570$0201a8c0 at marion475ae1fe>
> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="iso-8859-1"
> >>
> >> Dear All,
> >> A couple of months ago I made some changes to my NFBNET subscriptions. As
> >> the result, it seems as if my subscription to this list was dropped. Since
> >> I have not posted here in quite some time, I thought I would send a brief
> >> message to introduce myself to those who may have recently subscribed and
> >> let others know some exciting news relevant to this list.
> >> I am the President of the National Association of Guide Dog Users (NAGDU),
> >> a strong and proud division of the National Federation of the Blind. I am
> >> also a professional musician who performs a genre of music known as
> >> "Positive (Posi) Music" and am the Music Director at New Life Unity Church
> >> in Tampa, Fla. I am also in private practice as a Certified
> >> Hypnotherapist. In addition, I combine my work with NAGDU, my talent as an
> >> entertainer, and my experience as a counselor to offer seminars and
> >> workshops that combine my music with spoken word.
> >> I have published several articles on a variety of health and wellness
> >> topics, such as hypnosis for health & personal enhancement, the
> >> metaphysics of the body-mind-spirit connection, reincarnation, and issues
> >> related to blindness and the use of guide dogs. I am currently working on
> >> a multimedia quit smoking manual and have been commissioned by a major
> >> peer-reviewed medical journal to write an article about service dogs in
> >> the health care setting.
> >> I look forward to getting acquainted with some old friends on this list
> >> and getting to know some of the new subscribers. The lists of NFBNET are
> >> an awesome resource for networking and exchanging ideas and experiences.
> >> the written word is a powerful tool to help us further the goals of the
> >> National Federation of the Blind and its philosophy. I look forward to
> >> meeting many of you in person when you come to the Sunshine State next
> >> July! If anyone wishes to get in touch with me in person, my contact
> >> information is below my signature.
> >>
> >> Fraternally yours,
> >> Marion Gwizdala, M.S., C.Ht.
> >> 813-626-2789
> >> Marion.Gwizdala at Verizon.net
> >>
> >> ------------------------------
> >>
> >> Message: 3
> >> Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 13:23:53 -0500
> >> From: Bridgit Pollpeter <bpollpeter at hotmail.com>
> >> To: writers division <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: [stylist] creative non-fiction "snapshot" no language, no
> >> adult content
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> >>
> >>
> >> JC,
> >>
> >> You are right, I meant averting. I have gone through the piece about 20
> >> times, and I can't believe I missed that! *smile* Glad I posted it here
> >> first. Thanks.
> >>
> >> Bridgit
> >>
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> >> > 1. creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no adult content
> >> > (Bridgit Pollpeter)
> >> > 2. Re: creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no adult
> >> > content (James H. "Jim" Canaday M.A. N6YR)
> >> >
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> >> > Message: 1
> >> > Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 04:21:23 -0500
> >> > From: Bridgit Pollpeter <bpollpeter at hotmail.com>
> >> > To: writers division <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> > Subject: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no
> >> > adult content
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> >> >
> >> >
> >> > Dear List,
> >> >
> >> > Happy Labor Day to all. I am posting a piece I just worked on for a
> >> > class. Before it is workshopped, I thought I would let you lot
> >> > deconstruct it, and let me know what you think.
> >> >
> >> > Bridgit
> >> >
> >> > Snapshot
> >> >
> >> > Reaching the bottom steps of the basement, an observer would notice the
> >> > following scene: A naked lightbulb emanates a harsh yellow brilliance
> >> > stifled by the dark windowless, cinder-block walls and open-rafter
> >> > ceiling. The grey painted floor resembles hard, cold stone. Separating
> >> > the basement from the large family-room-sized space, should be a plaster
> >> > wall, but now just the wall studs remain leaving a clear view into the
> >> > large room converted into a bedroom. A skinny, blonde, young woman,
> >> > Bridgit, sits in the middle of the room surrounded by scattered piles of
> >> > photographs. Leaning against the wrought iron footboard of her bed, she
> >> > studies a picture. With knees drawn up against her slender body, she
> >> > stares at the image of a young woman. The small window above the bed
> >> > shoots sunlight like a spotlight onto the section of floor the young
> >> > woman sits upon. Bits of light reflect off the pictures littering the
> >> > beige carpet around the young woman.
> >> > The pictures relay a moment modern technology has frozen in time. A
> >> > small-town family wedding snapped for the centuries. Bridgit is
> >> > twenty-one in the pictures. A single year ago. She remembers the day,
> >> > she remembers the feelings. Happiness that weddings evoke, but sadness
> >> > that the occasion is not her own to celebrate. Joy to see relatives gone
> >> > for too long, but restlessness to explore the world too. It was a third
> >> > cousin?s wedding, but the whole clan showed up to celebrate the
> >> > nuptials. A panoramic shot included a large portion of family members
> >> > gathered at a long table enjoying the home-cooked meal of chicken-fried
> >> > chicken and gravy with mashed potatoes and green bean casserole topped
> >> > with real onion-rings. Bridgit smiled demurely, picking at the food
> >> > before her, while Uncle Lance, to her right, intently shoveled mashed
> >> > potatoes in his mouth, and Tami, her mother, held a bit of chicken
> >> > mid-air with her fork, talking, most likely saying how, ?Fried-chicken
> >> > is not a very elegant choice for a wedding, but I guess that is what you
> >> > are use to in small towns.? Another picture displays Bridgit in her
> >> > black dress with a deep V in front exposing a boney, but well tanned
> >> > chest. Bronzed arms connected with another?s, she stood next to her
> >> > fourteen-year-old cousin, Colin, already taller than her. Her blue eyes
> >> > gazed into the camera as she flashed her one-dimpled smile. The focus of
> >> > the next photo captured the wedding party and guest doing the Bunnyhop.
> >> > Clustered of to the right, Uncle Doug and Aunt Becky grill her about
> >> > college. She smiled quietly as, ?What are you studying?? ?Still music??
> >> > and what are your plans after graduation?? were fired at her. Years of
> >> > dance training and etiquette school have taught her to stand erect with
> >> > head held high. With her confident demeanor and three-inch heels, she
> >> > appeared taller than her average five-foot height. Later in the evening,
> >> > the camera snapped Bridgit laughing wildly as Uncle Brent whipped her
> >> > across the dance floor like Ginger Rogers. Another moment captured
> >> > Bridgit and Uncle Brent posing for the camera as he dipped her low.
> >> > Another shot has Bridgit kicking her black strappy heels off as she
> >> > prepared for a new round of dancing. Each photograph is handled with
> >> > care and placed in a tree creating a timeline beginning with a picture
> >> > of Bridgit?s immediate family dressed in their wedding attire posing for
> >> > the first time in years, to a snapshot of straggling dancers waltzing to
> >> > the final song of the night, ?I Will Always Love You.? Each picture
> >> > displays a happy, smiling young woman, but one single shot captured the
> >> > truth. One solitary picture alone shows her with the mask off. It is the
> >> > photo she now sits and studies intently.
> >> > Staring at the picture of herself, her expression is quizzical and worn.
> >> > Her gaze is intent as though she will discover some truth about herself.
> >> > A rare moment exposed displaying a part never meant for public
> >> > consumption, yet here it is for all to see. She cradles the picture in
> >> > her thin hands as if breaking it will destroy some part of her. The
> >> > camera revealed Bridgit resting her head on a propped arm. Escaped
> >> > tendrils of hair framed her tanned face, and her blue, almond-shaped
> >> > eyes looked off into the distance. Her expression contained longing,
> >> > dreams and hopes unrealized, mingled with restlessness and deep sadness.
> >> > Sitting alone, tucked away in a corner of the reception hall, she
> >> > believed herself unnoticed, but the camera caught her. An X-ray
> >> > imprinting her soul lay bare. Always so careful to wear her mask. Never
> >> > letting her guard down, only to be trapped by a modern marvel.
> >> > Placing this final picture in its proper spot in the visual timeline,
> >> > Bridgit looks around the room. A blue ?Happy-birthday? balloon hangs
> >> > deflated on the wall surrounded by pictures from high school and
> >> > college. Bridgit, Tera and Jessica smiled in their red-and-white
> >> > cheerleading uniforms. Bridgit standing at the grand piano in the choir
> >> > room, mouth opened as she belted ?On My Own? from Les Miserables.
> >> > Bridgit engulfed by Ryan, her boyfriend, the boy she thought she would
> >> > marry. Bridgit and Tera, arms clasped around each other?s shoulders,
> >> > grinning on graduation day. Bridgit sitting on Joe?s knee during a cast
> >> > party for Cinderella. A letter pokes out from behind the balloon, a love
> >> > letter sent by a friend who never forgot her, but that Bridgit could not
> >> > muster the necessary feelings for. The letter is a reminder that some
> >> > one in the world thinks she is special. A poster hangs on the opposite
> >> > wall displaying Kate and Leo at the bow of a ship, and next to this
> >> > stands a tall bookshelf lined with books from Little Women to I Know Why
> >> > the Caged Bird Sings. Across the room a butter-colored dresser-drawer
> >> > reflects her image in its large mirror framed by carved flowers. Quickly
> >> > adverting her eyes, she takes in the glass bottle of Miracle perfume and
> >> > the organized assortment of make-up compacts and brushes. A
> >> > Shabby-chic-style jewelry box is arranged on a corner of the dresser
> >> > top, and necklaces hang on a pink heart-shape with tiny hooks protruding
> >> > from the lace-overlay front. The open closet reveals clothes hanging
> >> > from shortest sleeve length to longest as well as being color
> >> > coordinated. Directly to the left of the entrance into her room, sits
> >> > the thirty-two-inch TV purchased by Ryan, the ex, disguised as a
> >> > Christmas present, but intended for the use of video games. Taking in
> >> > years of memories and keepsakes, Bridgit finally turns back to the
> >> > reflection in the mirror. Her blonde hair is pulled back in a long,
> >> > wispy ponytail, an attempt to hide the sections of hair that have fallen
> >> > out with portions of scalp still attached. Head settled on boney knees,
> >> > she wonders at her compactness. Chest, stomach and waist are hidden
> >> > behind skinny legs, and rail-thin arms wrap around just beneath the
> >> > pale, gaunt face. Her eyes haunt her as they hold the longing and
> >> > sadness grown deeper by another year.
> >> >
> >> >
> >> > ------------------------------
> >> >
> >> > Message: 2
> >> > Date: Mon, 06 Sep 2010 09:10:39 -0500
> >> > From: "James H. \"Jim\" Canaday M.A. N6YR" <n6yr at sunflower.com>
> >> > To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> > Subject: Re: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no
> >> > adult content
> >> > Message-ID: <201009061410.o86EAjd3005661 at smtp.sunflower.com>
> >> > Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii"; format=flowed
> >> >
> >> > Hi Bridgit,
> >> > descriptions are very good in this.
> >> >
> >> > I could be wrong but I think "adverting" you meant "averting."
> >> > jc
> >> >
> >> >
> >> > At 04:21 AM 9/6/2010, you wrote:
> >> >
> >> > >Dear List,
> >> > >
> >> > >Happy Labor Day to all. I am posting a piece I just worked on for a
> >> > >class. Before it is workshopped, I thought I would let you lot
> >> > >deconstruct it, and let me know what you think.
> >> > >
> >> > >Bridgit
> >> > >
> >> > >Snapshot
> >> > >
> >> > >Reaching the bottom steps of the basement, an observer would notice
> >> > >the following scene: A naked lightbulb emanates a harsh yellow
> >> > >brilliance stifled by the dark windowless, cinder-block walls and
> >> > >open-rafter ceiling. The grey painted floor resembles hard, cold
> >> > >stone. Separating the basement from the large family-room-sized
> >> > >space, should be a plaster wall, but now just the wall studs remain
> >> > >leaving a clear view into the large room converted into a
> >> > >bedroom. A skinny, blonde, young woman, Bridgit, sits in the middle
> >> > >of the room surrounded by scattered piles of photographs. Leaning
> >> > >against the wrought iron footboard of her bed, she studies a
> >> > >picture. With knees drawn up against her slender body, she stares
> >> > >at the image of a young woman. The small window above the bed
> >> > >shoots sunlight like a spotlight onto the section of floor the young
> >> > >woman sits upon. Bits of light reflect off the pictures littering
> >> > >the beige carpet around the young woman.
> >> > >The pictures relay a moment modern technology has frozen in time. A
> >> > >small-town family wedding snapped for the centuries. Bridgit is
> >> > >twenty-one in the pictures. A single year ago. She remembers the
> >> > >day, she remembers the feelings. Happiness that weddings evoke, but
> >> > >sadness that the occasion is not her own to celebrate. Joy to see
> >> > >relatives gone for too long, but restlessness to explore the world
> >> > >too. It was a third cousin's wedding, but the whole clan showed up
> >> > >to celebrate the nuptials. A panoramic shot included a large
> >> > >portion of family members gathered at a long table enjoying the
> >> > >home-cooked meal of chicken-fried chicken and gravy with mashed
> >> > >potatoes and green bean casserole topped with real
> >> > >onion-rings. Bridgit smiled demurely, picking at the food before
> >> > >her, while Uncle Lance, to her right, intently shoveled mashed
> >> > >potatoes in his mouth, and Tami, her mother, held a bit of chicken
> >> > >mid-air with her fork, talking, most likely saying how,
> >> > >"Fried-chicken is not a very elegant choice for a wedding, but I
> >> > >guess that is what you are use to in small towns." Another picture
> >> > >displays Bridgit in her black dress with a deep V in front exposing
> >> > >a boney, but well tanned chest. Bronzed arms connected with
> >> > >another's, she stood next to her fourteen-year-old cousin, Colin,
> >> > >already taller than her. Her blue eyes gazed into the camera as she
> >> > >flashed her one-dimpled smile. The focus of the next photo captured
> >> > >the wedding party and guest doing the Bunnyhop. Clustered of to the
> >> > >right, Uncle Doug and Aunt Becky grill her about college. She
> >> > >smiled quietly as, "What are you studying?" "Still music?" and what
> >> > >are your plans after graduation?" were fired at her. Years of dance
> >> > >training and etiquette school have taught her to stand erect with
> >> > >head held high. With her confident demeanor and three-inch heels,
> >> > >she appeared taller than her average five-foot height. Later in the
> >> > >evening, the camera snapped Bridgit laughing wildly as Uncle Brent
> >> > >whipped her across the dance floor like Ginger Rogers. Another
> >> > >moment captured Bridgit and Uncle Brent posing for the camera as he
> >> > >dipped her low. Another shot has Bridgit kicking her black strappy
> >> > >heels off as she prepared for a new round of dancing. Each
> >> > >photograph is handled with care and placed in a tree creating a
> >> > >timeline beginning with a picture of Bridgit's immediate family
> >> > >dressed in their wedding attire posing for the first time in years,
> >> > >to a snapshot of straggling dancers waltzing to the final song of
> >> > >the night, "I Will Always Love You." Each picture displays a happy,
> >> > >smiling young woman, but one single shot captured the truth. One
> >> > >solitary picture alone shows her with the mask off. It is the photo
> >> > >she now sits and studies intently.
> >> > >Staring at the picture of herself, her expression is quizzical and
> >> > >worn. Her gaze is intent as though she will discover some truth
> >> > >about herself. A rare moment exposed displaying a part never meant
> >> > >for public consumption, yet here it is for all to see. She cradles
> >> > >the picture in her thin hands as if breaking it will destroy some
> >> > >part of her. The camera revealed Bridgit resting her head on a
> >> > >propped arm. Escaped tendrils of hair framed her tanned face, and
> >> > >her blue, almond-shaped eyes looked off into the distance. Her
> >> > >expression contained longing, dreams and hopes unrealized, mingled
> >> > >with restlessness and deep sadness. Sitting alone, tucked away in a
> >> > >corner of the reception hall, she believed herself unnoticed, but
> >> > >the camera caught her. An X-ray imprinting her soul lay
> >> > >bare. Always so careful to wear her mask. Never letting her guard
> >> > >down, only to be trapped by a modern marvel.
> >> > >Placing this final picture in its proper spot in the visual
> >> > >timeline, Bridgit looks around the room. A blue "Happy-birthday"
> >> > >balloon hangs deflated on the wall surrounded by pictures from high
> >> > >school and college. Bridgit, Tera and Jessica smiled in their
> >> > >red-and-white cheerleading uniforms. Bridgit standing at the grand
> >> > >piano in the choir room, mouth opened as she belted "On My Own" from
> >> > >Les Miserables. Bridgit engulfed by Ryan, her boyfriend, the boy
> >> > >she thought she would marry. Bridgit and Tera, arms clasped around
> >> > >each other's shoulders, grinning on graduation day. Bridgit sitting
> >> > >on Joe's knee during a cast party for Cinderella. A letter pokes
> >> > >out from behind the balloon, a love letter sent by a friend who
> >> > >never forgot her, but that Bridgit could not muster the necessary
> >> > >feelings for. The letter is a reminder that some one in the world
> >> > >thinks she is special. A poster hangs on the opposite wall
> >> > >displaying Kate and Leo at the bow of a ship, and next to this
> >> > >stands a tall bookshelf lined with books from Little Women to I Know
> >> > >Why the Caged Bird Sings. Across the room a butter-colored
> >> > >dresser-drawer reflects her image in its large mirror framed by
> >> > >carved flowers. Quickly adverting her eyes, she takes in the glass
> >> > >bottle of Miracle perfume and the organized assortment of make-up
> >> > >compacts and brushes. A Shabby-chic-style jewelry box is arranged
> >> > >on a corner of the dresser top, and necklaces hang on a pink
> >> > >heart-shape with tiny hooks protruding from the lace-overlay
> >> > >front. The open closet reveals clothes hanging from shortest sleeve
> >> > >length to longest as well as being color coordinated. Directly to
> >> > >the left of the entrance into her room, sits the thirty-two-inch TV
> >> > >purchased by Ryan, the ex, disguised as a Christmas present, but
> >> > >intended for the use of video games. Taking in years of memories
> >> > >and keepsakes, Bridgit finally turns back to the reflection in the
> >> > >mirror. Her blonde hair is pulled back in a long, wispy ponytail,
> >> > >an attempt to hide the sections of hair that have fallen out with
> >> > >portions of scalp still attached. Head settled on boney knees, she
> >> > >wonders at her compactness. Chest, stomach and waist are hidden
> >> > >behind skinny legs, and rail-thin arms wrap around just beneath the
> >> > >pale, gaunt face. Her eyes haunt her as they hold the longing and
> >> > >sadness grown deeper by another year.
> >> > >
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> >> Message: 4
> >> Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 10:23:21 -0400
> >> From: "Chris Kuell" <ckuell at comcast.net>
> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no
> >> adult content
> >> Message-ID: <3CBC991B5976433C88DD7DB5D71D1A95 at ChrisPC>
> >> Content-Type: text/plain; format=flowed; charset="Windows-1252";
> >> reply-type=original
> >>
> >> Hi Bridgit,
> >>
> >> I enjoyed your piece very much. You do a nice job of conveying emotion
> >> along
> >> with your memories invoked by looking over the photographs. You write very
> >>
> >> visually here, and you may want to put in a few more other-sensory
> >> details.
> >> Does the basement smell musty? Like an old tin can? How about sound--is
> >> there a clock ticking on a bureau? Water in the pipes from someone
> >> upstairs
> >> taking a shower? Is she cold, or hot? Next, I would caution about using
> >> too
> >> many details, especially at the beginning of the piece. Don't worry--I
> >> understand exactly what you are doing, painting a picture, so to speak, to
> >>
> >> put us, the reader, there. But too many details make the reader pay
> >> attention to your words, to your writing, rather than getting absorbed
> >> right
> >> into your piece and then losing track of time as they read.
> >>
> >> Now I'm going to put on my editor's hat and insert a few comments into
> >> your
> >> text. Use them or dismiss them, as you see fit. Good luck with your
> >> workshop.
> >>
> >> chris
> >>
> >>
> >> Snapshot
> >>
> >> Reaching the bottom steps of the basement, (some editors would be put off
> >> by
> >> starting with Reaching (a present participle?) so perhaps you might start
> >> simply with--At the end of the stairs in the basement...) an observer
> >> would
> >> notice the following scene: A naked lightbulb emanates a harsh yellow
> >> brilliance stifled by the dark(,) windowless, cinder-block walls and
> >> open-rafter ceiling. The grey painted floor resembles hard, cold stone.
> >> Separating the basement from the large family-room-sized space, should be
> >> a
> >> plaster wall, but now just the wall studs remain(,) leaving a clear view
> >> into the large room converted into a bedroom. A skinny, blonde, young
> >> woman, Bridgit, sits in the middle of the room surrounded by scattered
> >> piles
> >> of photographs. Leaning against the wrought iron footboard of her bed, she
> >>
> >> studies a picture. With knees drawn up against her slender body, she
> >> stares
> >> at the image of a young woman. The small window above the bed shoots
> >> sunlight like a spotlight onto the section of floor the young woman sits
> >> upon. Bits of light reflect off the pictures littering the beige carpet
> >> around the young woman.(you use 'young' 4 times relatively quickly here,
> >> which needs to be revised. In addition, in your first sentence you told us
> >>
> >> the basement was windowless, which is inconsistant)
> >> The pictures relay a moment modern technology has frozen in time.(I'd
> >> delete
> >> modern technology. Firstly, photography has been around for 150 years, and
> >>
> >> although it's changed, everyone knows what it is. Plus, this is one of
> >> those
> >> instances where the extra words pull the reader back from the story and
> >> make
> >> us pay attention to your words, to your writing, which isn't what you
> >> want)
> >> A small-town family wedding snapped for the centuries. Bridgit is
> >> twenty-one in the pictures. A single year ago. She remembers the day, she
> >> remembers the feelings. Happiness that weddings evoke, but sadness that
> >> the
> >> occasion is not her own to celebrate. Joy to see relatives gone for too
> >> long, but restlessness to explore the world too.(you use forms of 'to' 3
> >> times in this sentence, I'd say the last one is the most out of place.
> >> Consider something like - Joy to catch-up with little seen
> >> relatives,accompanied by a restlessness to explore more of the world...)
> >> It was a third cousin?s wedding, but the whole clan showed up to celebrate
> >>
> >> the nuptials. A panoramic shot included a large portion of family members
> >> gathered at a long table enjoying the home-cooked meal of chicken-fried
> >> chicken (While I live in New England, and I've had chicken-fried-steak,
> >> isn't chicken-fried-chicken just fried chicken?) and gravy with mashed
> >> potatoes and green bean casserole topped with real onion-rings. Bridgit
> >> smiled demurely, picking at the food before her, while Uncle Lance, to her
> >>
> >> right, intently shoveled mashed potatoes in his mouth, and Tami, her
> >> mother,
> >> held a bit of chicken mid-air with her fork, talking, most likely saying
> >> how, ?Fried-chicken is not a very elegant choice for a wedding, but I
> >> guess
> >> that is what you are use to in small towns.? Another picture displays
> >> Bridgit in her black dress with a deep V in front(,) exposing a boney, but
> >>
> >> well tanned chest. Bronzed arms connected with another?s, she stood next
> >> to
> >> her fourteen-year-old cousin, Colin, already taller than her. Her blue
> >> eyes
> >> gazed into the camera as she flashed her one-dimpled smile. The focus of
> >> the next photo captured the wedding party and guest doing the Bunnyhop.
> >> Clustered of to the right, Uncle Doug and Aunt Becky grill her about
> >> college. She smiled quietly as, ?What are you studying?? ?Still music??
> >> and what are your plans after graduation?? were fired at her. Years of
> >> dance training and etiquette school have (had?) taught her to stand erect
> >> with head held high. With her confident demeanor and three-inch heels, she
> >>
> >> appeared taller than her average five-foot height.(average seems wrong
> >> here.
> >> I believe the average American woman is 5 foot 4, so perhaps you mean
> >> normal?) Later in the evening, the camera snapped Bridgit laughing wildly
> >> as Uncle Brent whipped her across the dance floor like Ginger Rogers.
> >> Another moment captured Bridgit and Uncle Brent posing for the camera as
> >> he
> >> dipped her low. Another shot has Bridgit kicking her black strappy heels
> >> off as she prepared for a new round of dancing. Each photograph is handled
> >>
> >> with care and placed in a tree(,) creating a timeline beginning with a
> >> picture of Bridgit?s immediate family dressed in their wedding attire
> >> posing
> >> for the first time in years, to a snapshot of straggling dancers waltzing
> >> to
> >> the final song of the night, ?I Will Always Love You.? Each picture
> >> displays a happy, smiling young woman, but one single shot captured the
> >> truth. One solitary picture alone shows her with the mask off. It is the
> >> photo she now sits and studies intently.
> >> Staring at the picture of herself, her expression is quizzical and worn.
> >> Her gaze is intent as though she will discover some truth about herself.
> >> (I
> >> really like this) A rare moment exposed displaying a part never meant for
> >> public consumption, yet here it is for all to see. She cradles the picture
> >>
> >> in her thin hands as if breaking it will destroy some part of her. The
> >> camera revealed Bridgit resting her head on a propped arm. Escaped
> >> tendrils
> >> of hair framed her tanned face, and her blue, almond-shaped eyes looked
> >> off
> >> into the distance. Her expression contained longing, dreams and hopes
> >> unrealized, mingled with restlessness and deep sadness. Sitting alone,
> >> tucked away in a corner of the reception hall, she believed herself
> >> unnoticed, but the camera caught her. An X-ray imprinting her soul lay
> >> (laid?) bare.(another great line) Always so careful to wear her mask.(You
> >> have already used the mask simile, and it's kind of cliche, so perhaps you
> >>
> >> can find something different) Never letting her guard down, only to be
> >> trapped by a modern marvel(not so modern--perhaps simply camera, or
> >> digital
> >> timestopper?) .
> >> Placing this final picture in its proper spot in the visual timeline,
> >> Bridgit looks around the room. A blue ?Happy-birthday? balloon hangs
> >> deflated on the wall surrounded by pictures from high school and college.
> >> Bridgit, Tera and Jessica smiled in their red-and-white cheerleading
> >> uniforms. Bridgit standing at the grand piano in the choir room, mouth
> >> opened as she belted ?On My Own? from Les Miserables (I love that song,
> >> although Empty Chairs and Empty Tables was probably my favorite) . Bridgit
> >>
> >> engulfed by Ryan, her boyfriend, the boy she thought she would marry.
> >> Bridgit and Tera, arms clasped around each other?s shoulders, grinning on
> >> graduation day. Bridgit sitting on Joe?s knee during a cast party for
> >> Cinderella. A letter pokes out from behind the balloon, a love letter sent
> >>
> >> by a friend who never forgot her, but that Bridgit could not muster the
> >> necessary feelings for. (The letter is- consider deleting this, as the new
> >>
> >> sentence will have more impact) a reminder that some one in the world
> >> thinks she is special. A poster hangs on the opposite wall displaying Kate
> >>
> >> and Leo at the bow of a ship, and next to this stands a tall bookshelf
> >> lined
> >> with books from Little Women to I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings. Across
> >> the
> >> room a butter-colored dresser-drawer reflects her image in its large
> >> mirror
> >> framed by carved flowers. Quickly adverting her eyes, she takes in the
> >> glass bottle of Miracle perfume and the organized assortment of make-up
> >> compacts and brushes. A Shabby-chic-style jewelry box is arranged on a
> >> corner of the dresser top, and necklaces hang on a pink heart-shape with
> >> tiny hooks protruding from the lace-overlay front. The open closet reveals
> >>
> >> clothes hanging from shortest sleeve length to longest (as well as being-
> >> consider replaceing with 'all') color coordinated. Directly to the left of
> >>
> >> the entrance into her room, sits the thirty-two-inch TV purchased by Ryan,
> >>
> >> the ex, disguised as a Christmas present, (but- consider replacing with
> >> 'selfishly) intended for the use of video games. Taking in years of
> >> memories and keepsakes, Bridgit finally turns back to the reflection in
> >> the
> >> mirror. Her blonde hair is pulled back in a long, wispy ponytail, an
> >> attempt to hide the sections of hair that have fallen out with portions of
> >>
> >> scalp still attached. Head settled on boney knees, she wonders at her
> >> compactness. Chest, stomach and waist are hidden behind skinny legs, and
> >> rail-thin arms wrap around just beneath the pale, gaunt face. Her eyes
> >> (haunt her as they- consider deleting) hold (the- if you delete the first
> >> section, you should also delete this) longing and sadness grown deeper by
> >> another year.
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> ------------------------------
> >>
> >> Message: 5
> >> Date: Mon, 06 Sep 2010 15:32:28 -0500
> >> From: "James H. \"Jim\" Canaday M.A. N6YR" <n6yr at sunflower.com>
> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] creative non-fiction "snapshot" no language, no
> >> adult content
> >> Message-ID: <201009062032.o86KWZch013037 at smtp.sunflower.com>
> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii"; format=flowed
> >>
> >> well you are welcome.
> >> one of the reasons I hesitated in posting is that "advert" is a verb
> >> and not just a noun for something put up to advertise something.
> >> I did wish for a little more plot but I also do not know what your
> >> assignment was.
> >> jc
> >>
> >> At 01:23 PM 9/6/2010, you wrote:
> >>
> >> >JC,
> >> >
> >> >You are right, I meant averting. I have gone through the piece
> >> >about 20 times, and I can't believe I missed that! *smile* Glad I
> >> >posted it here first. Thanks.
> >> >
> >> >Bridgit
> >> >
> >> > > From: stylist-request at nfbnet.org
> >> > > Subject: stylist Digest, Vol 77, Issue 5
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> >> > > Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 12:00:08 -0500
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> >> > > 1. creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no adult content
> >> > > (Bridgit Pollpeter)
> >> > > 2. Re: creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no adult
> >> > > content (James H. "Jim" Canaday M.A. N6YR)
> >> > >
> >> > >
> >> > > ----------------------------------------------------------------------
> >> > >
> >> > > Message: 1
> >> > > Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 04:21:23 -0500
> >> > > From: Bridgit Pollpeter <bpollpeter at hotmail.com>
> >> > > To: writers division <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> > > Subject: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no
> >> > > adult content
> >> > > Message-ID: <SNT136-w646C2D35961CF77A0F5FAC4700 at phx.gbl>
> >> > > Content-Type: text/plain; charset="Windows-1252"
> >> > >
> >> > >
> >> > > Dear List,
> >> > >
> >> > > Happy Labor Day to all. I am posting a piece I just worked on for
> >> > a class. Before it is workshopped, I thought I would let you lot
> >> > deconstruct it, and let me know what you think.
> >> > >
> >> > > Bridgit
> >> > >
> >> > > Snapshot
> >> > >
> >> > > Reaching the bottom steps of the basement, an observer would
> >> > notice the following scene: A naked lightbulb emanates a harsh
> >> > yellow brilliance stifled by the dark windowless, cinder-block
> >> > walls and open-rafter ceiling. The grey painted floor resembles
> >> > hard, cold stone. Separating the basement from the large
> >> > family-room-sized space, should be a plaster wall, but now just the
> >> > wall studs remain leaving a clear view into the large room
> >> > converted into a bedroom. A skinny, blonde, young woman, Bridgit,
> >> > sits in the middle of the room surrounded by scattered piles of
> >> > photographs. Leaning against the wrought iron footboard of her bed,
> >> > she studies a picture. With knees drawn up against her slender
> >> > body, she stares at the image of a young woman. The small window
> >> > above the bed shoots sunlight like a spotlight onto the section of
> >> > floor the young woman sits upon. Bits of light reflect off the
> >> > pictures littering the beige carpet around the young woman.
> >> > > The pictures relay a moment modern technology has frozen in time.
> >> > A small-town family wedding snapped for the centuries. Bridgit is
> >> > twenty-one in the pictures. A single year ago. She remembers the
> >> > day, she remembers the feelings. Happiness that weddings evoke, but
> >> > sadness that the occasion is not her own to celebrate. Joy to see
> >> > relatives gone for too long, but restlessness to explore the world
> >> > too. It was a third cousin?s wedding, but the whole clan showed up
> >> > to celebrate the nuptials. A panoramic shot included a large
> >> > portion of family members gathered at a long table enjoying the
> >> > home-cooked meal of chicken-fried chicken and gravy with mashed
> >> > potatoes and green bean casserole topped with real onion-rings.
> >> > Bridgit smiled demurely, picking at the food before her, while
> >> > Uncle Lance, to her right, intently shoveled mashed potatoes in his
> >> > mouth, and Tami, her mother, held a bit of chicken mid-air with her
> >> > fork, talking, most likely saying how, ?Fried-chicken is not a very
> >> > elegant choice for a wedding, but I guess that is what you are use
> >> > to in small towns.? Another picture displays Bridgit in her black
> >> > dress with a deep V in front exposing a boney, but well tanned
> >> > chest. Bronzed arms connected with another?s, she stood next to her
> >> > fourteen-year-old cousin, Colin, already taller than her. Her blue
> >> > eyes gazed into the camera as she flashed her one-dimpled smile.
> >> > The focus of the next photo captured the wedding party and guest
> >> > doing the Bunnyhop. Clustered of to the right, Uncle Doug and Aunt
> >> > Becky grill her about college. She smiled quietly as, ?What are you
> >> > studying?? ?Still music?? and what are your plans after
> >> > graduation?? were fired at her. Years of dance training and
> >> > etiquette school have taught her to stand erect with head held
> >> > high. With her confident demeanor and three-inch heels, she
> >> > appeared taller than her average five-foot height. Later in the
> >> > evening, the camera snapped Bridgit laughing wildly as Uncle Brent
> >> > whipped her across the dance floor like Ginger Rogers. Another
> >> > moment captured Bridgit and Unc
> >> >le Brent posing for the camera as he dipped her low. Another shot
> >> >has Bridgit kicking her black strappy heels off as she prepared for
> >> >a new round of dancing. Each photograph is handled with care and
> >> >placed in a tree creating a timeline beginning with a picture of
> >> >Bridgit?s immediate family dressed in their wedding attire posing
> >> >for the first time in years, to a snapshot of straggling dancers
> >> >waltzing to the final song of the night, ?I Will Always Love You.?
> >> >Each picture displays a happy, smiling young woman, but one single
> >> >shot captured the truth. One solitary picture alone shows her with
> >> >the mask off. It is the photo she now sits and studies intently.
> >> > > Staring at the picture of herself, her expression is quizzical
> >> > and worn. Her gaze is intent as though she will discover some truth
> >> > about herself. A rare moment exposed displaying a part never meant
> >> > for public consumption, yet here it is for all to see. She cradles
> >> > the picture in her thin hands as if breaking it will destroy some
> >> > part of her. The camera revealed Bridgit resting her head on a
> >> > propped arm. Escaped tendrils of hair framed her tanned face, and
> >> > her blue, almond-shaped eyes looked off into the distance. Her
> >> > expression contained longing, dreams and hopes unrealized, mingled
> >> > with restlessness and deep sadness. Sitting alone, tucked away in a
> >> > corner of the reception hall, she believed herself unnoticed, but
> >> > the camera caught her. An X-ray imprinting her soul lay bare.
> >> > Always so careful to wear her mask. Never letting her guard down,
> >> > only to be trapped by a modern marvel.
> >> > > Placing this final picture in its proper spot in the visual
> >> > timeline, Bridgit looks around the room. A blue ?Happy-birthday?
> >> > balloon hangs deflated on the wall surrounded by pictures from high
> >> > school and college. Bridgit, Tera and Jessica smiled in their
> >> > red-and-white cheerleading uniforms. Bridgit standing at the grand
> >> > piano in the choir room, mouth opened as she belted ?On My Own?
> >> > from Les Miserables. Bridgit engulfed by Ryan, her boyfriend, the
> >> > boy she thought she would marry. Bridgit and Tera, arms clasped
> >> > around each other?s shoulders, grinning on graduation day. Bridgit
> >> > sitting on Joe?s knee during a cast party for Cinderella. A letter
> >> > pokes out from behind the balloon, a love letter sent by a friend
> >> > who never forgot her, but that Bridgit could not muster the
> >> > necessary feelings for. The letter is a reminder that some one in
> >> > the world thinks she is special. A poster hangs on the opposite
> >> > wall displaying Kate and Leo at the bow of a ship, and next to this
> >> > stands a tall bookshelf lined with books from Little Women to I
> >> > Know Why the Caged Bird Sings. Across the room a butter-colored
> >> > dresser-drawer reflects her image in its large mirror framed by
> >> > carved flowers. Quickly adverting her eyes, she takes in the glass
> >> > bottle of Miracle perfume and the organized assortment of make-up
> >> > compacts and brushes. A Shabby-chic-style jewelry box is arranged
> >> > on a corner of the dresser top, and necklaces hang on a pink
> >> > heart-shape with tiny hooks protruding from the lace-overlay front.
> >> > The open closet reveals clothes hanging from shortest sleeve length
> >> > to longest as well as being color coordinated. Directly to the left
> >> > of the entrance into her room, sits the thirty-two-inch TV
> >> > purchased by Ryan, the ex, disguised as a Christmas present, but
> >> > intended for the use of video games. Taking in years of memories
> >> > and keepsakes, Bridgit finally turns back to the reflection in the
> >> > mirror. Her blonde hair is pulled back in a long, wispy ponytail,
> >> > an attempt to hide the sections of hair that have fallen out with
> >> > portions of scalp still att
> >> >ached. Head settled on boney knees, she wonders at her compactness.
> >> >Chest, stomach and waist are hidden behind skinny legs, and
> >> >rail-thin arms wrap around just beneath the pale, gaunt face. Her
> >> >eyes haunt her as they hold the longing and sadness grown deeper by
> >> >another year.
> >> > >
> >> > >
> >> > > ------------------------------
> >> > >
> >> > > Message: 2
> >> > > Date: Mon, 06 Sep 2010 09:10:39 -0500
> >> > > From: "James H. \"Jim\" Canaday M.A. N6YR" <n6yr at sunflower.com>
> >> > > To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> > > Subject: Re: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no
> >> > > adult content
> >> > > Message-ID: <201009061410.o86EAjd3005661 at smtp.sunflower.com>
> >> > > Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii"; format=flowed
> >> > >
> >> > > Hi Bridgit,
> >> > > descriptions are very good in this.
> >> > >
> >> > > I could be wrong but I think "adverting" you meant "averting."
> >> > > jc
> >> > >
> >> > >
> >> > > At 04:21 AM 9/6/2010, you wrote:
> >> > >
> >> > > >Dear List,
> >> > > >
> >> > > >Happy Labor Day to all. I am posting a piece I just worked on for a
> >> > > >class. Before it is workshopped, I thought I would let you lot
> >> > > >deconstruct it, and let me know what you think.
> >> > > >
> >> > > >Bridgit
> >> > > >
> >> > > >Snapshot
> >> > > >
> >> > > >Reaching the bottom steps of the basement, an observer would notice
> >> > > >the following scene: A naked lightbulb emanates a harsh yellow
> >> > > >brilliance stifled by the dark windowless, cinder-block walls and
> >> > > >open-rafter ceiling. The grey painted floor resembles hard, cold
> >> > > >stone. Separating the basement from the large family-room-sized
> >> > > >space, should be a plaster wall, but now just the wall studs remain
> >> > > >leaving a clear view into the large room converted into a
> >> > > >bedroom. A skinny, blonde, young woman, Bridgit, sits in the middle
> >> > > >of the room surrounded by scattered piles of photographs. Leaning
> >> > > >against the wrought iron footboard of her bed, she studies a
> >> > > >picture. With knees drawn up against her slender body, she stares
> >> > > >at the image of a young woman. The small window above the bed
> >> > > >shoots sunlight like a spotlight onto the section of floor the young
> >> > > >woman sits upon. Bits of light reflect off the pictures littering
> >> > > >the beige carpet around the young woman.
> >> > > >The pictures relay a moment modern technology has frozen in time. A
> >> > > >small-town family wedding snapped for the centuries. Bridgit is
> >> > > >twenty-one in the pictures. A single year ago. She remembers the
> >> > > >day, she remembers the feelings. Happiness that weddings evoke, but
> >> > > >sadness that the occasion is not her own to celebrate. Joy to see
> >> > > >relatives gone for too long, but restlessness to explore the world
> >> > > >too. It was a third cousin's wedding, but the whole clan showed up
> >> > > >to celebrate the nuptials. A panoramic shot included a large
> >> > > >portion of family members gathered at a long table enjoying the
> >> > > >home-cooked meal of chicken-fried chicken and gravy with mashed
> >> > > >potatoes and green bean casserole topped with real
> >> > > >onion-rings. Bridgit smiled demurely, picking at the food before
> >> > > >her, while Uncle Lance, to her right, intently shoveled mashed
> >> > > >potatoes in his mouth, and Tami, her mother, held a bit of chicken
> >> > > >mid-air with her fork, talking, most likely saying how,
> >> > > >"Fried-chicken is not a very elegant choice for a wedding, but I
> >> > > >guess that is what you are use to in small towns." Another picture
> >> > > >displays Bridgit in her black dress with a deep V in front exposing
> >> > > >a boney, but well tanned chest. Bronzed arms connected with
> >> > > >another's, she stood next to her fourteen-year-old cousin, Colin,
> >> > > >already taller than her. Her blue eyes gazed into the camera as she
> >> > > >flashed her one-dimpled smile. The focus of the next photo captured
> >> > > >the wedding party and guest doing the Bunnyhop. Clustered of to the
> >> > > >right, Uncle Doug and Aunt Becky grill her about college. She
> >> > > >smiled quietly as, "What are you studying?" "Still music?" and what
> >> > > >are your plans after graduation?" were fired at her. Years of dance
> >> > > >training and etiquette school have taught her to stand erect with
> >> > > >head held high. With her confident demeanor and three-inch heels,
> >> > > >she appeared taller than her average five-foot height. Later in the
> >> > > >evening, the camera snapped Bridgit laughing wildly as Uncle Brent
> >> > > >whipped her across the dance floor like Ginger Rogers. Another
> >> > > >moment captured Bridgit and Uncle Brent posing for the camera as he
> >> > > >dipped her low. Another shot has Bridgit kicking her black strappy
> >> > > >heels off as she prepared for a new round of dancing. Each
> >> > > >photograph is handled with care and placed in a tree creating a
> >> > > >timeline beginning with a picture of Bridgit's immediate family
> >> > > >dressed in their wedding attire posing for the first time in years,
> >> > > >to a snapshot of straggling dancers waltzing to the final song of
> >> > > >the night, "I Will Always Love You." Each picture displays a happy,
> >> > > >smiling young woman, but one single shot captured the truth. One
> >> > > >solitary picture alone shows her with the mask off. It is the photo
> >> > > >she now sits and studies intently.
> >> > > >Staring at the picture of herself, her expression is quizzical and
> >> > > >worn. Her gaze is intent as though she will discover some truth
> >> > > >about herself. A rare moment exposed displaying a part never meant
> >> > > >for public consumption, yet here it is for all to see. She cradles
> >> > > >the picture in her thin hands as if breaking it will destroy some
> >> > > >part of her. The camera revealed Bridgit resting her head on a
> >> > > >propped arm. Escaped tendrils of hair framed her tanned face, and
> >> > > >her blue, almond-shaped eyes looked off into the distance. Her
> >> > > >expression contained longing, dreams and hopes unrealized, mingled
> >> > > >with restlessness and deep sadness. Sitting alone, tucked away in a
> >> > > >corner of the reception hall, she believed herself unnoticed, but
> >> > > >the camera caught her. An X-ray imprinting her soul lay
> >> > > >bare. Always so careful to wear her mask. Never letting her guard
> >> > > >down, only to be trapped by a modern marvel.
> >> > > >Placing this final picture in its proper spot in the visual
> >> > > >timeline, Bridgit looks around the room. A blue "Happy-birthday"
> >> > > >balloon hangs deflated on the wall surrounded by pictures from high
> >> > > >school and college. Bridgit, Tera and Jessica smiled in their
> >> > > >red-and-white cheerleading uniforms. Bridgit standing at the grand
> >> > > >piano in the choir room, mouth opened as she belted "On My Own" from
> >> > > >Les Miserables. Bridgit engulfed by Ryan, her boyfriend, the boy
> >> > > >she thought she would marry. Bridgit and Tera, arms clasped around
> >> > > >each other's shoulders, grinning on graduation day. Bridgit sitting
> >> > > >on Joe's knee during a cast party for Cinderella. A letter pokes
> >> > > >out from behind the balloon, a love letter sent by a friend who
> >> > > >never forgot her, but that Bridgit could not muster the necessary
> >> > > >feelings for. The letter is a reminder that some one in the world
> >> > > >thinks she is special. A poster hangs on the opposite wall
> >> > > >displaying Kate and Leo at the bow of a ship, and next to this
> >> > > >stands a tall bookshelf lined with books from Little Women to I Know
> >> > > >Why the Caged Bird Sings. Across the room a butter-colored
> >> > > >dresser-drawer reflects her image in its large mirror framed by
> >> > > >carved flowers. Quickly adverting her eyes, she takes in the glass
> >> > > >bottle of Miracle perfume and the organized assortment of make-up
> >> > > >compacts and brushes. A Shabby-chic-style jewelry box is arranged
> >> > > >on a corner of the dresser top, and necklaces hang on a pink
> >> > > >heart-shape with tiny hooks protruding from the lace-overlay
> >> > > >front. The open closet reveals clothes hanging from shortest sleeve
> >> > > >length to longest as well as being color coordinated. Directly to
> >> > > >the left of the entrance into her room, sits the thirty-two-inch TV
> >> > > >purchased by Ryan, the ex, disguised as a Christmas present, but
> >> > > >intended for the use of video games. Taking in years of memories
> >> > > >and keepsakes, Bridgit finally turns back to the reflection in the
> >> > > >mirror. Her blonde hair is pulled back in a long, wispy ponytail,
> >> > > >an attempt to hide the sections of hair that have fallen out with
> >> > > >portions of scalp still attached. Head settled on boney knees, she
> >> > > >wonders at her compactness. Chest, stomach and waist are hidden
> >> > > >behind skinny legs, and rail-thin arms wrap around just beneath the
> >> > > >pale, gaunt face. Her eyes haunt her as they hold the longing and
> >> > > >sadness grown deeper by another year.
> >> > > >
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> >> Message: 6
> >> Date: Mon, 06 Sep 2010 17:24:46 -0400
> >> From: loristay <loristay at aol.com>
> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no
> >> adult content
> >> Message-ID: <85262B0E.AA6C.49EE.9DB6.2EE0AE8295E1 at aol.com>
> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="iso-8859-13"
> >>
> >> i gather from the last line that the person you speak about has cancer? ?A
> >> strange form, one that scalps her?
> >> I did some proofreading, interspersed with your text, regarding
> >> punctuation and spelling, etc. ?Nothing really deep. ?The purpose of the
> >> piece is plain. ?One can deduce from it that the speaker is examining her
> >> life, noting fallen dreams, and perhaps looking at the end of it. ?You
> >> used your own name, so I do wonder if it's based on a real situation.
> >> Lori
> >> On Sep 6, 2010, at 5:21:23 AM, "Bridgit Pollpeter"
> >> <bpollpeter at hotmail.com> wrote:
> >>
> >> From: "Bridgit Pollpeter" <bpollpeter at hotmail.com>
> >> Subject: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no adult
> >> content
> >> Date: September 6, 2010 5:21:23 AM EDT
> >> To: "writers division" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >>
> >> Dear List,
> >>
> >> Happy Labor Day to all. I am posting a piece I just worked on for a class.
> >> Before it is workshopped, I thought I would let you lot deconstruct it,
> >> and let me know what you think.
> >>
> >> Bridgit
> >>
> >> Snapshot
> >>
> >> Reaching the bottom steps of the basement, an observer would notice the
> >> following scene: A naked lightbulb emanates a harsh yellow brilliance
> >> stifled by the dark windowless, cinder-block walls and open-rafter
> >> ceiling. The grey painted floor resembles hard, cold stone. Separating the
> >> basement from the large family-room-sized space,
> >> (Don't need this comma)
> >> should be a plaster wall, but now just the wall studs remain leaving a
> >> clear view into the large room converted into a bedroom. A skinny, blonde,
> >> ?I'd probably have written; ?Bridgit, A young woman, skinny, blonde,
> >> sits...
> >> young woman, Bridgit, sits in the middle of the room surrounded by
> >> scattered piles of photographs. Leaning against the wrought iron footboard
> >> of her bed,?she studies a picture. With knees drawn up against her slender
> >> body, she stares at the image of a young woman. The small window above the
> >> bed shoots sunlight like a spotlight onto the section of floor the young
> >> woman sits upon. Bits of light reflect off the pictures littering the
> >> beige carpet around the young woman.
> >> The pictures relay a moment modern technology has frozen in time. A
> >> small-town family wedding snapped for the centuries. Bridgit is twenty-one
> >> in the pictures. A single year ago.
> >>
> >> She remembers the day, she remembers the feelings.
> >> probably grammatically this period should be a colon.
> >> Happiness that weddings evoke, but sadness that the occasion is not her
> >> own to celebrate. Joy to see relatives gone for too long, but restlessness
> >> to explore the world too. It was a third cousin?s wedding, but the whole
> >> clan showed up to celebrate the nuptials. A panoramic shot included a
> >> large portion of family members gathered at a long table enjoying the
> >> home-cooked meal of chicken-fried chicken
> >> why not just say home cooked meal of fried chicken and gravy...etc?
> >> and gravy with mashed potatoes and green bean casserole topped with real
> >> onion-rings. Bridgit smiled demurely, picking at the food before her,
> >> while Uncle Lance, to her right, intently shoveled mashed potatoes in his
> >> mouth, and Tami, her mother, held a bit of chicken mid-air with her fork,
> >> talking, most likely saying how, ?Fried-chicken is not a very elegant
> >> choice for a wedding, but I guess that is what you are use
> >> used--needs a 'd'
> >> to in small towns.? Another picture displays Bridgit in her black dress
> >> with a deep V in front exposing a boney,
> >> bony is spelled b o n y.
> >> but well tanned chest. Bronzed arms connected with another?s, she stood
> >> next to her fourteen-year-old cousin, Colin, already taller than her.
> >> taller than she--would be a better choice
> >> Her blue eyes gazed into the camera as she flashed her one-dimpled smile.
> >> The focus of the next photo captured the wedding party and guest
> >> do you mean guests?
> >> doing the Bunnyhop. Clustered of
> >> clustered off (o f f, not o f)
> >> to the right, Uncle Doug and Aunt Becky grill her about college. She
> >> smiled quietly as, ?What are you studying?? ?Still music?? and what are
> >> your plans after graduation?? were fired at her. Years of dance training
> >> and etiquette school have taught her to stand erect with head held high.
> >> With her confident demeanor and three-inch heels, she appeared taller than
> >> her average five-foot height. Later in the evening, the camera snapped
> >> Bridgit laughing wildly as Uncle Brent whipped her across the dance floor
> >> like Ginger Rogers. Another moment captured Bridgit and Uncle Brent posing
> >> for the camera as he dipped her low. Another shot has Bridgit kicking her
> >> black strappy heels off as she prepared for a new round of dancing. Each
> >> photograph is handled with care and placed in a tree creating a timeline
> >> beginning with a picture of Bridgit?s immediate family dressed in their
> >> wedding attire posing for the first time in years, to a snapshot of
> >> straggling dancers waltzing to the final song of the night, ?I Will Always
> >> Love You.? Each picture displays a happy, smiling young woman, but one
> >> single shot captured the truth. One solitary picture alone shows her with
> >> the mask off. It is the photo she now sits and studies intently.
> >>
> >>
> >> Staring at the picture of herself, her expression is quizzical and worn.
> >> Her gaze is intent as though she will discover some truth about herself. A
> >> rare moment exposed displaying a part never meant for public consumption,
> >> yet here it is for all to see. She cradles the picture in her thin hands
> >> as if breaking it will destroy some part of her. The camera revealed
> >> Bridgit resting her head on a propped arm. Escaped tendrils of hair framed
> >> her tanned face, and her blue, almond-shaped eyes looked off into the
> >> distance. Her expression contained longing, dreams and hopes unrealized,
> >> mingled with restlessness and deep sadness. Sitting alone, tucked away in
> >> a corner of the reception hall, she believed herself unnoticed, but the
> >> camera caught her. An X-ray imprinting her soul lay
> >> I think you mean laid bare (l a i d)
> >> bare. Always so careful to wear her mask. Never letting her guard down,
> >> only to be trapped by a modern marvel.
> >>
> >>
> >> Placing this final picture in its proper spot in the visual timeline,
> >> Bridgit looks around the room. A blue ?Happy-birthday? balloon hangs
> >> deflated on the wall surrounded by pictures from high school and college.
> >> Bridgit, Tera and Jessica smiled in their red-and-white cheerleading
> >> uniforms. Bridgit standing at the grand piano in the choir room, mouth
> >> opened as she belted ?On My Own? from Les Miserables. Bridgit engulfed by
> >> Ryan, her boyfriend, the boy she thought she would marry. Bridgit and
> >> Tera, arms clasped around each other?s shoulders, grinning on graduation
> >> day. Bridgit sitting on Joe?s knee during a cast party for Cinderella. A
> >> letter pokes out from behind the balloon, a love letter sent by a friend
> >> who never forgot her, but that Bridgit could not muster the necessary
> >> feelings for. The letter is a reminder that some one in the world thinks
> >> she is special. A poster hangs on the opposite wall displaying Kate and
> >> Leo at the bow of a ship, and next to this stands a tall bookshelf lined
> >> with books from Little Women to I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings. Across
> >> the room a butter-colored dresser-drawer reflects her image in its large
> >> mirror framed by carved flowers.
> >>
> >> Quickly adverting
> >> This should be averting (a v e r t i n g)--no d.
> >> her eyes, she takes in the glass bottle of Miracle perfume and the
> >> organized assortment of make-up compacts and brushes. A Shabby-chic-style
> >> jewelry box is arranged on a corner of the dresser top, and necklaces hang
> >> on a pink heart-shape with tiny hooks protruding from the lace-overlay
> >> front. The open closet reveals clothes hanging from shortest sleeve length
> >> to longest as well as being color coordinated. Directly to the left of the
> >> entrance into her room, sits the thirty-two-inch TV purchased by Ryan, the
> >> ex, disguised as a Christmas present, but intended for the use of video
> >> games. Taking in years of memories and keepsakes, Bridgit finally turns
> >> back to the reflection in the mirror. Her blonde hair is pulled back in a
> >> long, wispy ponytail, an attempt to hide the sections of hair that have
> >> fallen out with portions of scalp still attached. Head settled on boney
> >> There's that extra e again!
> >> knees, she wonders at her compactness. Chest, stomach and waist are hidden
> >> behind skinny legs, and rail-thin arms wrap around just beneath the pale,
> >> gaunt face. Her eyes haunt her as they hold the longing and sadness grown
> >> deeper by another year.
> >>
> >> _______________________________________________
> >> Writers Division web site:
> >> http://www.nfb-writers-division.org <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
> >>
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> >> stylist at nfbnet.org
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> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> ------------------------------
> >>
> >> Message: 7
> >> Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 18:23:41 -0400
> >> From: "Joe Orozco" <jsorozco at gmail.com>
> >> To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: [stylist] Recent Addition
> >> Message-ID: <D09A56E53D6940629EBF4B364B4F716F at Rufus>
> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="US-ASCII"
> >>
> >> I think people may have been discussing the prequel mentioned in the
> >> annotation below. If so, you might be interested in this recently added
> >> title to the BARD collection. It's not my cup of juice, but I know how
> >> nice
> >> it is to find other titles by the same author.
> >>
> >> ***
> >>
> >> Author of Eat, Pray, Love (RC 61789) recounts her relationship with
> >> Felipe,
> >> whom she met in Bali. He shares her fear of matrimony--but marry they must
> >> if he is to remain with her in the United States. Chronicles her second
> >> journey, contemplating love and researching marriage through Southeast
> >> Asia.
> >> Bestseller. 2010.
> >>
> >> ***
> >>
> >> Joe
> >>
> >> "Hard work spotlights the character of people: some turn up their sleeves,
> >> some turn up their noses, and some don't turn up at all."--Sam Ewing
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> ------------------------------
> >>
> >> Message: 8
> >> Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 17:47:43 -0500
> >> From: "Robert Leslie Newman" <newmanrl at cox.net>
> >> To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no
> >> adult content
> >> Message-ID: <A157533B0C55422C9C8A6CF12FC68834 at Newmans>
> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="iso-8859-1"
> >>
> >> I liked the jail simplism --- the wall studs that surrounded the area she
> >> sat in. (I think Chris, lori, Jim and Pricilla all had good
> >> suggestions/corrections.) that was a bleak picture!
> >>
> >>
> >> -----Original Message-----
> >> From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
> >> Behalf Of loristay
> >> Sent: Monday, September 06, 2010 4:25 PM
> >> To: Writer's Division Mailing List
> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no
> >> adult
> >> content
> >>
> >> i gather from the last line that the person you speak about has cancer? ?A
> >> strange form, one that scalps her?
> >> I did some proofreading, interspersed with your text, regarding
> >> punctuation
> >> and spelling, etc. ?Nothing really deep. ?The purpose of the piece is
> >> plain.
> >> ?One can deduce from it that the speaker is examining her life, noting
> >> fallen dreams, and perhaps looking at the end of it. ?You used your own
> >> name, so I do wonder if it's based on a real situation.
> >> Lori
> >> On Sep 6, 2010, at 5:21:23 AM, "Bridgit Pollpeter"
> >> <bpollpeter at hotmail.com>
> >> wrote:
> >>
> >> From: "Bridgit Pollpeter" <bpollpeter at hotmail.com>
> >> Subject: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no adult
> >> content
> >> Date: September 6, 2010 5:21:23 AM EDT
> >> To: "writers division" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >>
> >> Dear List,
> >>
> >> Happy Labor Day to all. I am posting a piece I just worked on for a class.
> >> Before it is workshopped, I thought I would let you lot deconstruct it,
> >> and
> >> let me know what you think.
> >>
> >> Bridgit
> >>
> >> Snapshot
> >>
> >> Reaching the bottom steps of the basement, an observer would notice the
> >> following scene: A naked lightbulb emanates a harsh yellow brilliance
> >> stifled by the dark windowless, cinder-block walls and open-rafter
> >> ceiling.
> >> The grey painted floor resembles hard, cold stone. Separating the basement
> >> from the large family-room-sized space,
> >> (Don't need this comma)
> >> should be a plaster wall, but now just the wall studs remain leaving a
> >> clear
> >> view into the large room converted into a bedroom. A skinny, blonde,
> >> ?I'd probably have written; ?Bridgit, A young woman, skinny, blonde,
> >> sits...
> >> young woman, Bridgit, sits in the middle of the room surrounded by
> >> scattered
> >> piles of photographs. Leaning against the wrought iron footboard of her
> >> bed,?she studies a picture. With knees drawn up against her slender body,
> >> she stares at the image of a young woman. The small window above the bed
> >> shoots sunlight like a spotlight onto the section of floor the young woman
> >> sits upon. Bits of light reflect off the pictures littering the beige
> >> carpet
> >> around the young woman.
> >> The pictures relay a moment modern technology has frozen in time. A
> >> small-town family wedding snapped for the centuries. Bridgit is twenty-one
> >> in the pictures. A single year ago.
> >>
> >> She remembers the day, she remembers the feelings.
> >> probably grammatically this period should be a colon.
> >> Happiness that weddings evoke, but sadness that the occasion is not her
> >> own
> >> to celebrate. Joy to see relatives gone for too long, but restlessness to
> >> explore the world too. It was a third cousin?s wedding, but the whole clan
> >> showed up to celebrate the nuptials. A panoramic shot included a large
> >> portion of family members gathered at a long table enjoying the
> >> home-cooked
> >> meal of chicken-fried chicken
> >> why not just say home cooked meal of fried chicken and gravy...etc?
> >> and gravy with mashed potatoes and green bean casserole topped with real
> >> onion-rings. Bridgit smiled demurely, picking at the food before her,
> >> while
> >> Uncle Lance, to her right, intently shoveled mashed potatoes in his mouth,
> >> and Tami, her mother, held a bit of chicken mid-air with her fork,
> >> talking,
> >> most likely saying how, ?Fried-chicken is not a very elegant choice for a
> >> wedding, but I guess that is what you are use
> >> used--needs a 'd'
> >> to in small towns.? Another picture displays Bridgit in her black dress
> >> with
> >> a deep V in front exposing a boney,
> >> bony is spelled b o n y.
> >> but well tanned chest. Bronzed arms connected with another?s, she stood
> >> next
> >> to her fourteen-year-old cousin, Colin, already taller than her.
> >> taller than she--would be a better choice
> >> Her blue eyes gazed into the camera as she flashed her one-dimpled smile.
> >> The focus of the next photo captured the wedding party and guest
> >> do you mean guests?
> >> doing the Bunnyhop. Clustered of
> >> clustered off (o f f, not o f)
> >> to the right, Uncle Doug and Aunt Becky grill her about college. She
> >> smiled
> >> quietly as, ?What are you studying?? ?Still music?? and what are your
> >> plans
> >> after graduation?? were fired at her. Years of dance training and
> >> etiquette
> >> school have taught her to stand erect with head held high. With her
> >> confident demeanor and three-inch heels, she appeared taller than her
> >> average five-foot height. Later in the evening, the camera snapped Bridgit
> >> laughing wildly as Uncle Brent whipped her across the dance floor like
> >> Ginger Rogers. Another moment captured Bridgit and Uncle Brent posing for
> >> the camera as he dipped her low. Another shot has Bridgit kicking her
> >> black
> >> strappy heels off as she prepared for a new round of dancing. Each
> >> photograph is handled with care and placed in a tree creating a timeline
> >> beginning with a picture of Bridgit?s immediate family dressed in their
> >> wedding attire posing for the first time in years, to a snapshot of
> >> straggling dancers waltzing to the final song of the night, ?I Will Always
> >> Love You.? Each picture displays a happy, smiling young woman, but one
> >> single shot captured the truth. One solitary picture alone shows her with
> >> the mask off. It is the photo she now sits and studies intently.
> >>
> >>
> >> Staring at the picture of herself, her expression is quizzical and worn.
> >> Her
> >> gaze is intent as though she will discover some truth about herself. A
> >> rare
> >> moment exposed displaying a part never meant for public consumption, yet
> >> here it is for all to see. She cradles the picture in her thin hands as if
> >> breaking it will destroy some part of her. The camera revealed Bridgit
> >> resting her head on a propped arm. Escaped tendrils of hair framed her
> >> tanned face, and her blue, almond-shaped eyes looked off into the
> >> distance.
> >> Her expression contained longing, dreams and hopes unrealized, mingled
> >> with
> >> restlessness and deep sadness. Sitting alone, tucked away in a corner of
> >> the
> >> reception hall, she believed herself unnoticed, but the camera caught her.
> >> An X-ray imprinting her soul lay
> >> I think you mean laid bare (l a i d)
> >> bare. Always so careful to wear her mask. Never letting her guard down,
> >> only
> >> to be trapped by a modern marvel.
> >>
> >>
> >> Placing this final picture in its proper spot in the visual timeline,
> >> Bridgit looks around the room. A blue ?Happy-birthday? balloon hangs
> >> deflated on the wall surrounded by pictures from high school and college.
> >> Bridgit, Tera and Jessica smiled in their red-and-white cheerleading
> >> uniforms. Bridgit standing at the grand piano in the choir room, mouth
> >> opened as she belted ?On My Own? from Les Miserables. Bridgit engulfed by
> >> Ryan, her boyfriend, the boy she thought she would marry. Bridgit and
> >> Tera,
> >> arms clasped around each other?s shoulders, grinning on graduation day.
> >> Bridgit sitting on Joe?s knee during a cast party for Cinderella. A letter
> >> pokes out from behind the balloon, a love letter sent by a friend who
> >> never
> >> forgot her, but that Bridgit could not muster the necessary feelings for.
> >> The letter is a reminder that some one in the world thinks she is special.
> >> A
> >> poster hangs on the opposite wall displaying Kate and Leo at the bow of a
> >> ship, and next to this stands a tall bookshelf lined with books from
> >> Little
> >> Women to I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings. Across the room a butter-colored
> >> dresser-drawer reflects her image in its large mirror framed by carved
> >> flowers.
> >>
> >> Quickly adverting
> >> This should be averting (a v e r t i n g)--no d.
> >> her eyes, she takes in the glass bottle of Miracle perfume and the
> >> organized
> >> assortment of make-up compacts and brushes. A Shabby-chic-style jewelry
> >> box
> >> is arranged on a corner of the dresser top, and necklaces hang on a pink
> >> heart-shape with tiny hooks protruding from the lace-overlay front. The
> >> open
> >> closet reveals clothes hanging from shortest sleeve length to longest as
> >> well as being color coordinated. Directly to the left of the entrance into
> >> her room, sits the thirty-two-inch TV purchased by Ryan, the ex, disguised
> >> as a Christmas present, but intended for the use of video games. Taking in
> >> years of memories and keepsakes, Bridgit finally turns back to the
> >> reflection in the mirror. Her blonde hair is pulled back in a long, wispy
> >> ponytail, an attempt to hide the sections of hair that have fallen out
> >> with
> >> portions of scalp still attached. Head settled on boney
> >> There's that extra e again!
> >> knees, she wonders at her compactness. Chest, stomach and waist are hidden
> >> behind skinny legs, and rail-thin arms wrap around just beneath the pale,
> >> gaunt face. Her eyes haunt her as they hold the longing and sadness grown
> >> deeper by another year.
> >>
> >> _______________________________________________
> >> Writers Division web site:
> >> http://www.nfb-writers-division.org <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
> >>
> >> stylist mailing list
> >> stylist at nfbnet.org
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> >> To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
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> >>
> >> _______________________________________________
> >> Writers Division web site:
> >> http://www.nfb-writers-division.org <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
> >>
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> >>
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> ------------------------------
> >>
> >> Message: 9
> >> Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 17:49:45 -0500
> >> From: Priscilla McKinley <priscilla.mckinley at gmail.com>
> >> To: jsorozco at gmail.com, "Writer's Division Mailing List"
> >> <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Recent Addition
> >> Message-ID:
> >> <AANLkTikikX8rkL=scqV4JF22fCxuSGFhyr9g5qrur4Yz at mail.gmail.com>
> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset=ISO-8859-1
> >>
> >> Joe,
> >>
> >> While I knew she had published a second book, I decided that II wasn't
> >> going to waste my time, as I didn't care for the style of the first.
> >> And speaking of books, when are we going to receive another section
> >> from yours? You intrigued your readers with the last passage, so some
> >> of us are ready for more. *smile* (How's that for pressure?)
> >>
> >> Priscilla
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> On 9/6/10, Joe Orozco <jsorozco at gmail.com> wrote:
> >> > I think people may have been discussing the prequel mentioned in the
> >> > annotation below. If so, you might be interested in this recently added
> >> > title to the BARD collection. It's not my cup of juice, but I know how
> >> > nice
> >> > it is to find other titles by the same author.
> >> >
> >> > ***
> >> >
> >> > Author of Eat, Pray, Love (RC 61789) recounts her relationship with
> >> > Felipe,
> >> > whom she met in Bali. He shares her fear of matrimony--but marry they
> >> > must
> >> > if he is to remain with her in the United States. Chronicles her second
> >> > journey, contemplating love and researching marriage through Southeast
> >> > Asia.
> >> > Bestseller. 2010.
> >> >
> >> > ***
> >> >
> >> > Joe
> >> >
> >> > "Hard work spotlights the character of people: some turn up their
> >> > sleeves,
> >> > some turn up their noses, and some don't turn up at all."--Sam Ewing
> >> >
> >> >
> >> > _______________________________________________
> >> > Writers Division web site:
> >> > http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
> >> > <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
> >> >
> >> > stylist mailing list
> >> > stylist at nfbnet.org
> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
> >> > To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
> >> > stylist:
> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/priscilla.mckinley%40gmail.com
> >> >
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> ------------------------------
> >>
> >> Message: 10
> >> Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 18:48:37 -0400
> >> From: "Jewel S." <herekittykat2 at gmail.com>
> >> To: stylist at nfbnet.org
> >> Subject: [stylist] Chapter Newsletters
> >> Message-ID:
> >> <AANLkTi=-+iR2UmZMufBRkOC9JTwobT-rfeKqRMiGy9am at mail.gmail.com>
> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset=ISO-8859-1
> >>
> >> Hi all,
> >>
> >> My local chapter's president has given the newsletter over into my
> >> hands. She will still be Editor-in-Chief, but it is my job to either
> >> outsource reports to toher members or write the reports myself. For
> >> example, I'll be writing an article for the newsletter giving a brief
> >> history of White Cane Safety Month, but will be asking our Vice
> >> President to write the report on last month's Member Drive, since I
> >> was not present. After I write and/or collect the written articles, I
> >> send it to the presient/editor-in-chief for review and she passes it
> >> on for e-mail distribution and printing in large print or Braille for
> >> those who don't have computers.
> >>
> >> So the first point of this e-mail was to share with you all the
> >> priveledge I have been given in being assigned as editor and
> >> coordinator of the newsletter. I'm really excited about it. She had me
> >> do one newsletter as a Guest Editor, because she was super busy with
> >> legislative work and homeschooling her daughter, and obviously she was
> >> impressed with my work, since she has permanently assigned me to it!
> >>
> >> The second reason I have written on this topic is to ask advice on
> >> writing a newsletter. Are there any guidelines out there for me to
> >> consider? What sorts of things should I put in the newsletter to spice
> >> it up? This month I can put the brief history fo White Cane Safety
> >> Month in there, and that'll be a nice addition to the otherwise
> >> report-only newsletter, but I'd like to be able to add this bit of
> >> spice each month. The Editor-in-Chief has asked that I not put
> >> detailed reports on legislative issues, as there is a seperate mailing
> >> list for that information, so writing articles about local legal
> >> issues is out. The newsletter is for all members from all sorts of
> >> backgrounds, so I feel it would be inappropriate to write about
> >> something specific to a sub-grup, such as students or the newly
> >> blinded. I have done a Member Profile in the past on a member who,
> >> though a well-educated doctor with a lot to say, was very quiet in
> >> meetings. I did an interview with him and wrote the report off of my
> >> notes. The member rprofile was a great success, and I hope to do
> >> another on another member, but it requires that I interview the
> >> person, and people aren't always available for interview in time for
> >> it to be put in the newsletter.
> >>
> >> Does anyone have some suggestions about simple but effective additions
> >> to the newsletter to make it more interesting to the members of our
> >> chapter?
> >> --
> >> Thank you guys for being here to ask! I love this list!
> >>
> >> ~Jewel
> >> Check out my blog about accessibility for the blind!
> >> Treasure Chest for the Blind: http://blindtreasurechest.blogspot.com
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> ------------------------------
> >>
> >> Message: 11
> >> Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 18:20:19 -0500
> >> From: "Robert Leslie Newman" <newmanrl at cox.net>
> >> To: "'Marion Gwizdala, M.S.'" <marion.gwizdala at verizon.net>,
> >> "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Re-Introducing Myself
> >> Message-ID: <509C37D8CEFD41578F5DD7015E5DDE24 at Newmans>
> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii"
> >>
> >> Marion
> >>
> >> Good to have you with us! NAGDU --- what a great word --- set of letters
> >> that sound --- well interesting. And it sounds like you have a diverse set
> >> of talents; with the writing, the music, (POSI - not sure I've heard of
> >> it,
> >> and would like to). Also, an article on service dogs in the health care
> >> area, that could be a multifaceted piece!
> >>
> >> I'll write you off list- put the pitch to you to join the Division!
> >>
> >> Welcome and we all will learn from one another. (This is a pretty open and
> >> helpful group.)
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> -----Original Message-----
> >> From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
> >> Behalf Of Marion Gwizdala, M.S.
> >> Sent: Monday, September 06, 2010 9:22 AM
> >> To: stylist at nfbnet.org
> >> Subject: [stylist] Re-Introducing Myself
> >>
> >> Dear All,
> >> A couple of months ago I made some changes to my NFBNET subscriptions.
> >> As the result, it seems as if my subscription to this list was dropped.
> >> Since I have not posted here in quite some time, I thought I would send a
> >> brief message to introduce myself to those who may have recently
> >> subscribed
> >> and let others know some exciting news relevant to this list.
> >> I am the President of the National Association of Guide Dog Users
> >> (NAGDU), a strong and proud division of the National Federation of the
> >> Blind. I am also a professional musician who performs a genre of music
> >> known
> >> as "Positive (Posi) Music" and am the Music Director at New Life Unity
> >> Church in Tampa, Fla. I am also in private practice as a Certified
> >> Hypnotherapist. In addition, I combine my work with NAGDU, my talent as an
> >> entertainer, and my experience as a counselor to offer seminars and
> >> workshops that combine my music with spoken word.
> >> I have published several articles on a variety of health and wellness
> >> topics, such as hypnosis for health & personal enhancement, the
> >> metaphysics
> >> of the body-mind-spirit connection, reincarnation, and issues related to
> >> blindness and the use of guide dogs. I am currently working on a
> >> multimedia
> >> quit smoking manual and have been commissioned by a major peer-reviewed
> >> medical journal to write an article about service dogs in the health care
> >> setting.
> >> I look forward to getting acquainted with some old friends on this list
> >> and getting to know some of the new subscribers. The lists of NFBNET are
> >> an
> >> awesome resource for networking and exchanging ideas and experiences. the
> >> written word is a powerful tool to help us further the goals of the
> >> National
> >> Federation of the Blind and its philosophy. I look forward to meeting many
> >> of you in person when you come to the Sunshine State next July! If anyone
> >> wishes to get in touch with me in person, my contact information is below
> >> my
> >> signature.
> >>
> >> Fraternally yours,
> >> Marion Gwizdala, M.S., C.Ht.
> >> 813-626-2789
> >> Marion.Gwizdala at Verizon.net
> >> _______________________________________________
> >> Writers Division web site:
> >> http://www.nfb-writers-division.org <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
> >>
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> >>
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> ------------------------------
> >>
> >> Message: 12
> >> Date: Mon, 06 Sep 2010 18:51:50 -0500
> >> From: "James H. \"Jim\" Canaday M.A. N6YR" <n6yr at sunflower.com>
> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no
> >> adult content
> >> Message-ID: <201009062351.o86Npn1f003973 at smtp.sunflower.com>
> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="iso-8859-1"; format=flowed
> >>
> >> yes Lori,
> >> I too was puzzled by the hair out in patches. I
> >> guess because of my training and history and the
> >> bleak setting I thought it was one of those
> >> self-destructive personal habbits that she pulled out clumps of her own
> >> hair.
> >> jc
> >>
> >> At 04:24 PM 9/6/2010, you wrote:
> >> >i gather from the last line that the person you
> >> >speak about has cancer? A strange form, one that scalps her?
> >> >I did some proofreading, interspersed with your
> >> >text, regarding punctuation and spelling,
> >> >etc. Nothing really deep. The purpose of the
> >> >piece is plain. One can deduce from it that the
> >> >speaker is examining her life, noting fallen
> >> >dreams, and perhaps looking at the end of
> >> >it. You used your own name, so I do wonder if it's based on a real
> >> > situation.
> >> >Lori
> >> >On Sep 6, 2010, at 5:21:23 AM, "Bridgit
> >> >Pollpeter" <bpollpeter at hotmail.com> wrote:
> >> >
> >> >From: "Bridgit Pollpeter" <bpollpeter at hotmail.com>
> >> >Subject: [stylist] creative non-fiction
> >> >"Snapshot" no language, no adult content
> >> >Date: September 6, 2010 5:21:23 AM EDT
> >> >To: "writers division" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> >
> >> >Dear List,
> >> >
> >> >Happy Labor Day to all. I am posting a piece I
> >> >just worked on for a class. Before it is
> >> >workshopped, I thought I would let you lot
> >> >deconstruct it, and let me know what you think.
> >> >
> >> >Bridgit
> >> >
> >> >Snapshot
> >> >
> >> >Reaching the bottom steps of the basement, an
> >> >observer would notice the following scene: A
> >> >naked lightbulb emanates a harsh yellow
> >> >brilliance stifled by the dark windowless,
> >> >cinder-block walls and open-rafter ceiling. The
> >> >grey painted floor resembles hard, cold stone.
> >> >Separating the basement from the large family-room-sized space,
> >> >(Don't need this comma)
> >> >should be a plaster wall, but now just the wall
> >> >studs remain leaving a clear view into the large
> >> >room converted into a bedroom. A skinny, blonde,
> >> > I'd probably have written; Bridgit, A young woman, skinny, blonde,
> >> > sits...
> >> >young woman, Bridgit, sits in the middle of the
> >> >room surrounded by scattered piles of
> >> >photographs. Leaning against the wrought iron
> >> >footboard of her bed, she studies a picture.
> >> >With knees drawn up against her slender body,
> >> >she stares at the image of a young woman. The
> >> >small window above the bed shoots sunlight like
> >> >a spotlight onto the section of floor the young
> >> >woman sits upon. Bits of light reflect off the
> >> >pictures littering the beige carpet around the young woman.
> >> >The pictures relay a moment modern technology
> >> >has frozen in time. A small-town family wedding
> >> >snapped for the centuries. Bridgit is twenty-one
> >> >in the pictures. A single year ago.
> >> >
> >> >She remembers the day, she remembers the feelings.
> >> >probably grammatically this period should be a colon.
> >> >Happiness that weddings evoke, but sadness that
> >> >the occasion is not her own to celebrate. Joy to
> >> >see relatives gone for too long, but
> >> >restlessness to explore the world too. It was a
> >> >third cousin?s wedding, but the whole clan
> >> >showed up to celebrate the nuptials. A panoramic
> >> >shot included a large portion of family members
> >> >gathered at a long table enjoying the home-cooked meal of chicken-fried
> >> > chicken
> >> >why not just say home cooked meal of fried chicken and gravy...etc?
> >> >and gravy with mashed potatoes and green bean
> >> >casserole topped with real onion-rings. Bridgit
> >> >smiled demurely, picking at the food before her,
> >> >while Uncle Lance, to her right, intently
> >> >shoveled mashed potatoes in his mouth, and Tami,
> >> >her mother, held a bit of chicken mid-air with
> >> >her fork, talking, most likely saying how,
> >> >?Fried-chicken is not a very elegant choice for
> >> >a wedding, but I guess that is what you are use
> >> >used--needs a 'd'
> >> >to in small towns.? Another picture displays
> >> >Bridgit in her black dress with a deep V in front exposing a boney,
> >> >bony is spelled b o n y.
> >> >but well tanned chest. Bronzed arms connected
> >> >with another?s, she stood next to her
> >> >fourteen-year-old cousin, Colin, already taller than her.
> >> >taller than she--would be a better choice
> >> >Her blue eyes gazed into the camera as she
> >> >flashed her one-dimpled smile. The focus of the
> >> >next photo captured the wedding party and guest
> >> >do you mean guests?
> >> >doing the Bunnyhop. Clustered of
> >> >clustered off (o f f, not o f)
> >> >to the right, Uncle Doug and Aunt Becky grill
> >> >her about college. She smiled quietly as, ?What
> >> >are you studying?? ?Still music?? and what are
> >> >your plans after graduation?? were fired at her.
> >> >Years of dance training and etiquette school
> >> >have taught her to stand erect with head held
> >> >high. With her confident demeanor and three-inch
> >> >heels, she appeared taller than her average
> >> >five-foot height. Later in the evening, the
> >> >camera snapped Bridgit laughing wildly as Uncle
> >> >Brent whipped her across the dance floor like
> >> >Ginger Rogers. Another moment captured Bridgit
> >> >and Uncle Brent posing for the camera as he
> >> >dipped her low. Another shot has Bridgit kicking
> >> >her black strappy heels off as she prepared for
> >> >a new round of dancing. Each photograph is
> >> >handled with care and placed in a tree creating
> >> >a timeline beginning with a picture of Bridgit?s
> >> >immediate family dressed in their wedding attire
> >> >posing for the first time in years, to a
> >> >snapshot of straggling dancers waltzing to the
> >> >final song of the night, ?I Will Always Love
> >> >You.? Each picture displays a happy, smiling
> >> >young woman, but one single shot captured the
> >> >truth. One solitary picture alone shows her with
> >> >the mask off. It is the photo she now sits and studies intently.
> >> >
> >> >
> >> >Staring at the picture of herself, her
> >> >expression is quizzical and worn. Her gaze is
> >> >intent as though she will discover some truth
> >> >about herself. A rare moment exposed displaying
> >> >a part never meant for public consumption, yet
> >> >here it is for all to see. She cradles the
> >> >picture in her thin hands as if breaking it will
> >> >destroy some part of her. The camera revealed
> >> >Bridgit resting her head on a propped arm.
> >> >Escaped tendrils of hair framed her tanned face,
> >> >and her blue, almond-shaped eyes looked off into
> >> >the distance. Her expression contained longing,
> >> >dreams and hopes unrealized, mingled with
> >> >restlessness and deep sadness. Sitting alone,
> >> >tucked away in a corner of the reception hall,
> >> >she believed herself unnoticed, but the camera
> >> >caught her. An X-ray imprinting her soul lay
> >> >I think you mean laid bare (l a i d)
> >> >bare. Always so careful to wear her mask. Never
> >> >letting her guard down, only to be trapped by a modern marvel.
> >> >
> >> >
> >> >Placing this final picture in its proper spot in
> >> >the visual timeline, Bridgit looks around the
> >> >room. A blue ?Happy-birthday? balloon hangs
> >> >deflated on the wall surrounded by pictures from
> >> >high school and college. Bridgit, Tera and
> >> >Jessica smiled in their red-and-white
> >> >cheerleading uniforms. Bridgit standing at the
> >> >grand piano in the choir room, mouth opened as
> >> >she belted ?On My Own? from Les Miserables.
> >> >Bridgit engulfed by Ryan, her boyfriend, the boy
> >> >she thought she would marry. Bridgit and Tera,
> >> >arms clasped around each other?s shoulders,
> >> >grinning on graduation day. Bridgit sitting on
> >> >Joe?s knee during a cast party for Cinderella. A
> >> >letter pokes out from behind the balloon, a love
> >> >letter sent by a friend who never forgot her,
> >> >but that Bridgit could not muster the necessary
> >> >feelings for. The letter is a reminder that some
> >> >one in the world thinks she is special. A poster
> >> >hangs on the opposite wall displaying Kate and
> >> >Leo at the bow of a ship, and next to this
> >> >stands a tall bookshelf lined with books from
> >> >Little Women to I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings.
> >> >Across the room a butter-colored dresser-drawer
> >> >reflects her image in its large mirror framed by carved flowers.
> >> >
> >> >Quickly adverting
> >> >This should be averting (a v e r t i n g)--no d.
> >> >her eyes, she takes in the glass bottle of
> >> >Miracle perfume and the organized assortment of
> >> >make-up compacts and brushes. A
> >> >Shabby-chic-style jewelry box is arranged on a
> >> >corner of the dresser top, and necklaces hang on
> >> >a pink heart-shape with tiny hooks protruding
> >> >from the lace-overlay front. The open closet
> >> >reveals clothes hanging from shortest sleeve
> >> >length to longest as well as being color
> >> >coordinated. Directly to the left of the
> >> >entrance into her room, sits the thirty-two-inch
> >> >TV purchased by Ryan, the ex, disguised as a
> >> >Christmas present, but intended for the use of
> >> >video games. Taking in years of memories and
> >> >keepsakes, Bridgit finally turns back to the
> >> >reflection in the mirror. Her blonde hair is
> >> >pulled back in a long, wispy ponytail, an
> >> >attempt to hide the sections of hair that have
> >> >fallen out with portions of scalp still attached. Head settled on boney
> >> >There's that extra e again!
> >> >knees, she wonders at her compactness. Chest,
> >> >stomach and waist are hidden behind skinny legs,
> >> >and rail-thin arms wrap around just beneath the
> >> >pale, gaunt face. Her eyes haunt her as they
> >> >hold the longing and sadness grown deeper by another year.
> >> >
> >> >_______________________________________________
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> >>
> >>
> >> ------------------------------
> >>
> >> Message: 13
> >> Date: Tue, 7 Sep 2010 01:16:50 +0100
> >> From: helene ryles <dreamavdb at googlemail.com>
> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Chapter Newsletters
> >> Message-ID:
> >> <AANLkTikZgJ0D3jb=whc_FoOvXU5QPd89udPQ_tdVCTTU at mail.gmail.com>
> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset=ISO-8859-1
> >>
> >> congratulations on getting this job. i wish you the best of luck.
> >>
> >> i would advice you to keep your articles varied. it is a good idea to
> >> interview people especially other blind people for this newspread of
> >> yours.
> >> sorry don't have more advice but i wish you luck anyway from helene
> >>
> >> On 06/09/2010, Jewel S. <herekittykat2 at gmail.com> wrote:
> >> > Hi all,
> >> >
> >> > My local chapter's president has given the newsletter over into my
> >> > hands. She will still be Editor-in-Chief, but it is my job to either
> >> > outsource reports to toher members or write the reports myself. For
> >> > example, I'll be writing an article for the newsletter giving a brief
> >> > history of White Cane Safety Month, but will be asking our Vice
> >> > President to write the report on last month's Member Drive, since I
> >> > was not present. After I write and/or collect the written articles, I
> >> > send it to the presient/editor-in-chief for review and she passes it
> >> > on for e-mail distribution and printing in large print or Braille for
> >> > those who don't have computers.
> >> >
> >> > So the first point of this e-mail was to share with you all the
> >> > priveledge I have been given in being assigned as editor and
> >> > coordinator of the newsletter. I'm really excited about it. She had me
> >> > do one newsletter as a Guest Editor, because she was super busy with
> >> > legislative work and homeschooling her daughter, and obviously she was
> >> > impressed with my work, since she has permanently assigned me to it!
> >> >
> >> > The second reason I have written on this topic is to ask advice on
> >> > writing a newsletter. Are there any guidelines out there for me to
> >> > consider? What sorts of things should I put in the newsletter to spice
> >> > it up? This month I can put the brief history fo White Cane Safety
> >> > Month in there, and that'll be a nice addition to the otherwise
> >> > report-only newsletter, but I'd like to be able to add this bit of
> >> > spice each month. The Editor-in-Chief has asked that I not put
> >> > detailed reports on legislative issues, as there is a seperate mailing
> >> > list for that information, so writing articles about local legal
> >> > issues is out. The newsletter is for all members from all sorts of
> >> > backgrounds, so I feel it would be inappropriate to write about
> >> > something specific to a sub-grup, such as students or the newly
> >> > blinded. I have done a Member Profile in the past on a member who,
> >> > though a well-educated doctor with a lot to say, was very quiet in
> >> > meetings. I did an interview with him and wrote the report off of my
> >> > notes. The member rprofile was a great success, and I hope to do
> >> > another on another member, but it requires that I interview the
> >> > person, and people aren't always available for interview in time for
> >> > it to be put in the newsletter.
> >> >
> >> > Does anyone have some suggestions about simple but effective additions
> >> > to the newsletter to make it more interesting to the members of our
> >> > chapter?
> >> > --
> >> > Thank you guys for being here to ask! I love this list!
> >> >
> >> > ~Jewel
> >> > Check out my blog about accessibility for the blind!
> >> > Treasure Chest for the Blind: http://blindtreasurechest.blogspot.com
> >> >
> >> > _______________________________________________
> >> > Writers Division web site:
> >> > http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
> >> > <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
> >> >
> >> > stylist mailing list
> >> > stylist at nfbnet.org
> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
> >> > To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
> >> > stylist:
> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/dreamavdb%40googlemail.com
> >> >
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> ------------------------------
> >>
> >> Message: 14
> >> Date: Mon, 06 Sep 2010 18:49:28 -0500
> >> From: "James H. \"Jim\" Canaday M.A. N6YR" <n6yr at sunflower.com>
> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Chapter Newsletters
> >> Message-ID: <201009062349.o86NnS8m003675 at smtp.sunflower.com>
> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii"; format=flowed
> >>
> >> Hi Jewel,
> >> my first advice is to make sure your newsletter isn't just like
> >> everybody else's!
> >> our chapter doesn't have a newsletter. we have an e-mail listserv.
> >> but to make your newsletter different here are some ideas:
> >> try to make your newsletter local by getting some local history of
> >> blind people in your community, history of people with disabilities,
> >> or history of perhaps how the government dealt with blind/disabled
> >> people there.
> >> member profile is a great idea.
> >> sometimes in a newsletter you can do a different twist on member
> >> profile: you can do "name that member" where you might give some
> >> little-known information, interests or history of a member and see
> >> who names your member first.
> >> again to make your newsletter local, get a story in each issue about
> >> a blind person's experience walking somewhere, working somewhere,
> >> eating somewhere, recreating somewhere, etc. it would be a kind of a
> >> review from blindness perspective.
> >> you also can include in your newsletter recipes, or jokes,
> >> especially of local flavor.
> >> if a blind person visits your community, have a talk with him or her
> >> and put that in your newsletter.
> >>
> >> hope these ideas help.
> >> jc
> >>
> >> At 05:48 PM 9/6/2010, you wrote:
> >> >Hi all,
> >> >
> >> >My local chapter's president has given the newsletter over into my
> >> >hands. She will still be Editor-in-Chief, but it is my job to either
> >> >outsource reports to toher members or write the reports myself. For
> >> >example, I'll be writing an article for the newsletter giving a brief
> >> >history of White Cane Safety Month, but will be asking our Vice
> >> >President to write the report on last month's Member Drive, since I
> >> >was not present. After I write and/or collect the written articles, I
> >> >send it to the presient/editor-in-chief for review and she passes it
> >> >on for e-mail distribution and printing in large print or Braille for
> >> >those who don't have computers.
> >> >
> >> >So the first point of this e-mail was to share with you all the
> >> >priveledge I have been given in being assigned as editor and
> >> >coordinator of the newsletter. I'm really excited about it. She had me
> >> >do one newsletter as a Guest Editor, because she was super busy with
> >> >legislative work and homeschooling her daughter, and obviously she was
> >> >impressed with my work, since she has permanently assigned me to it!
> >> >
> >> >The second reason I have written on this topic is to ask advice on
> >> >writing a newsletter. Are there any guidelines out there for me to
> >> >consider? What sorts of things should I put in the newsletter to spice
> >> >it up? This month I can put the brief history fo White Cane Safety
> >> >Month in there, and that'll be a nice addition to the otherwise
> >> >report-only newsletter, but I'd like to be able to add this bit of
> >> >spice each month. The Editor-in-Chief has asked that I not put
> >> >detailed reports on legislative issues, as there is a seperate mailing
> >> >list for that information, so writing articles about local legal
> >> >issues is out. The newsletter is for all members from all sorts of
> >> >backgrounds, so I feel it would be inappropriate to write about
> >> >something specific to a sub-grup, such as students or the newly
> >> >blinded. I have done a Member Profile in the past on a member who,
> >> >though a well-educated doctor with a lot to say, was very quiet in
> >> >meetings. I did an interview with him and wrote the report off of my
> >> >notes. The member rprofile was a great success, and I hope to do
> >> >another on another member, but it requires that I interview the
> >> >person, and people aren't always available for interview in time for
> >> >it to be put in the newsletter.
> >> >
> >> >Does anyone have some suggestions about simple but effective additions
> >> >to the newsletter to make it more interesting to the members of our
> >> >chapter?
> >> >--
> >> >Thank you guys for being here to ask! I love this list!
> >> >
> >> >~Jewel
> >> >Check out my blog about accessibility for the blind!
> >> >Treasure Chest for the Blind: http://blindtreasurechest.blogspot.com
> >> >
> >> >_______________________________________________
> >> >Writers Division web site:
> >> >http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
> >> > <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
> >> >
> >> >stylist mailing list
> >> >stylist at nfbnet.org
> >> >http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
> >> >To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
> >> > stylist:
> >> >http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/n6yr%40sunflower.com
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> ------------------------------
> >>
> >> Message: 15
> >> Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 21:26:14 -0500
> >> From: Priscilla McKinley <priscilla.mckinley at gmail.com>
> >> To: newmanrl at cox.net, "Writer's Division Mailing List"
> >> <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Re-Introducing Myself
> >> Message-ID:
> >> <AANLkTi=4OY=+xaL4j4_X6DZ0LOoT4otd7oOJYT0D3QoA at mail.gmail.com>
> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset=ISO-8859-1
> >>
> >> Marion,
> >>
> >> I would love to read your articles on hypnosis, the
> >> physical/emotional/spiritual connections, and reincarnation. All of
> >> these topics fascinate me. I've just started reading a little about
> >> past lives after meeting a man who described a couple of his to me.
> >> Also, with a mother who was psychic and experienced dream travel that
> >> no one could ever explain to her, I am open to other things that can't
> >> be explained. Do you have any links for your articles?
> >>
> >> Thanks, and welcome back.
> >>
> >> Priscilla
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> On 9/6/10, Robert Leslie Newman <newmanrl at cox.net> wrote:
> >> > Marion
> >> >
> >> > Good to have you with us! NAGDU --- what a great word --- set of letters
> >> > that sound --- well interesting. And it sounds like you have a diverse
> >> > set
> >> > of talents; with the writing, the music, (POSI - not sure I've heard of
> >> > it,
> >> > and would like to). Also, an article on service dogs in the health care
> >> > area, that could be a multifaceted piece!
> >> >
> >> > I'll write you off list- put the pitch to you to join the Division!
> >> >
> >> > Welcome and we all will learn from one another. (This is a pretty open
> >> > and
> >> > helpful group.)
> >> >
> >> >
> >> >
> >> > -----Original Message-----
> >> > From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
> >> > Behalf Of Marion Gwizdala, M.S.
> >> > Sent: Monday, September 06, 2010 9:22 AM
> >> > To: stylist at nfbnet.org
> >> > Subject: [stylist] Re-Introducing Myself
> >> >
> >> > Dear All,
> >> > A couple of months ago I made some changes to my NFBNET subscriptions.
> >> > As the result, it seems as if my subscription to this list was dropped.
> >> > Since I have not posted here in quite some time, I thought I would send
> >> > a
> >> > brief message to introduce myself to those who may have recently
> >> > subscribed
> >> > and let others know some exciting news relevant to this list.
> >> > I am the President of the National Association of Guide Dog Users
> >> > (NAGDU), a strong and proud division of the National Federation of the
> >> > Blind. I am also a professional musician who performs a genre of music
> >> > known
> >> > as "Positive (Posi) Music" and am the Music Director at New Life Unity
> >> > Church in Tampa, Fla. I am also in private practice as a Certified
> >> > Hypnotherapist. In addition, I combine my work with NAGDU, my talent as
> >> > an
> >> > entertainer, and my experience as a counselor to offer seminars and
> >> > workshops that combine my music with spoken word.
> >> > I have published several articles on a variety of health and wellness
> >> > topics, such as hypnosis for health & personal enhancement, the
> >> > metaphysics
> >> > of the body-mind-spirit connection, reincarnation, and issues related to
> >> > blindness and the use of guide dogs. I am currently working on a
> >> > multimedia
> >> > quit smoking manual and have been commissioned by a major peer-reviewed
> >> > medical journal to write an article about service dogs in the health
> >> > care
> >> > setting.
> >> > I look forward to getting acquainted with some old friends on this list
> >> > and getting to know some of the new subscribers. The lists of NFBNET are
> >> > an
> >> > awesome resource for networking and exchanging ideas and experiences.
> >> > the
> >> > written word is a powerful tool to help us further the goals of the
> >> > National
> >> > Federation of the Blind and its philosophy. I look forward to meeting
> >> > many
> >> > of you in person when you come to the Sunshine State next July! If
> >> > anyone
> >> > wishes to get in touch with me in person, my contact information is
> >> > below my
> >> > signature.
> >> >
> >> > Fraternally yours,
> >> > Marion Gwizdala, M.S., C.Ht.
> >> > 813-626-2789
> >> > Marion.Gwizdala at Verizon.net
> >> > _______________________________________________
> >> > Writers Division web site:
> >> > http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
> >> > <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
> >> >
> >> > stylist mailing list
> >> > stylist at nfbnet.org
> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
> >> > To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
> >> > stylist:
> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/newmanrl%40cox.net
> >> >
> >> >
> >> >
> >> > _______________________________________________
> >> > Writers Division web site:
> >> > http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
> >> > <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
> >> >
> >> > stylist mailing list
> >> > stylist at nfbnet.org
> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
> >> > To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
> >> > stylist:
> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/priscilla.mckinley%40gmail.com
> >> >
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> ------------------------------
> >>
> >> Message: 16
> >> Date: Tue, 7 Sep 2010 00:20:33 -0400
> >> From: "Jewel S." <herekittykat2 at gmail.com>
> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Chapter Newsletters
> >> Message-ID:
> >> <AANLkTinEq=9TeVjQb+M2qmSLJ2pjf4pGtJK_yzMJfDO2 at mail.gmail.com>
> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset=ISO-8859-1
> >>
> >> Thank you for the wonderful ideas! I am hoping to give the newsletter
> >> a new spin. Because our chapter president is so busy with legislative
> >> issues and chapter issues, she never had the time to do extras for the
> >> newsletter. Then she made a call for assistance with it, and I and the
> >> Vice President both volunteered. He often writes community concern
> >> articles, as he is a minister, and his additions to the newsletter are
> >> wonderful. I was asked to do member profiles and interviews of people
> >> in our city, then I was Guest Editor, and now I have been given this
> >> position, which I am so very proud of.
> >>
> >> I love the idea of "Name That member." That will be fun. And recipe of
> >> the month sounds good...not just food recipes, perhaps, but also
> >> recipes for making crafts, Braille drawings, and homemade products
> >> like soap and lotion...I have some wonderful recipes for these things,
> >> as do some other members and people around the city.
> >>
> >> Again, thank you for the ideas. I'm sure this newsletter will grow
> >> into a great read!
> >>
> >> On 9/6/10, James H. "Jim" Canaday M.A. N6YR <n6yr at sunflower.com> wrote:
> >> > Hi Jewel,
> >> > my first advice is to make sure your newsletter isn't just like
> >> > everybody else's!
> >> > our chapter doesn't have a newsletter. we have an e-mail listserv.
> >> > but to make your newsletter different here are some ideas:
> >> > try to make your newsletter local by getting some local history of
> >> > blind people in your community, history of people with disabilities,
> >> > or history of perhaps how the government dealt with blind/disabled
> >> > people there.
> >> > member profile is a great idea.
> >> > sometimes in a newsletter you can do a different twist on member
> >> > profile: you can do "name that member" where you might give some
> >> > little-known information, interests or history of a member and see
> >> > who names your member first.
> >> > again to make your newsletter local, get a story in each issue about
> >> > a blind person's experience walking somewhere, working somewhere,
> >> > eating somewhere, recreating somewhere, etc. it would be a kind of a
> >> > review from blindness perspective.
> >> > you also can include in your newsletter recipes, or jokes,
> >> > especially of local flavor.
> >> > if a blind person visits your community, have a talk with him or her
> >> > and put that in your newsletter.
> >> >
> >> > hope these ideas help.
> >> > jc
> >> >
> >> > At 05:48 PM 9/6/2010, you wrote:
> >> >>Hi all,
> >> >>
> >> >>My local chapter's president has given the newsletter over into my
> >> >>hands. She will still be Editor-in-Chief, but it is my job to either
> >> >>outsource reports to toher members or write the reports myself. For
> >> >>example, I'll be writing an article for the newsletter giving a brief
> >> >>history of White Cane Safety Month, but will be asking our Vice
> >> >>President to write the report on last month's Member Drive, since I
> >> >>was not present. After I write and/or collect the written articles, I
> >> >>send it to the presient/editor-in-chief for review and she passes it
> >> >>on for e-mail distribution and printing in large print or Braille for
> >> >>those who don't have computers.
> >> >>
> >> >>So the first point of this e-mail was to share with you all the
> >> >>priveledge I have been given in being assigned as editor and
> >> >>coordinator of the newsletter. I'm really excited about it. She had me
> >> >>do one newsletter as a Guest Editor, because she was super busy with
> >> >>legislative work and homeschooling her daughter, and obviously she was
> >> >>impressed with my work, since she has permanently assigned me to it!
> >> >>
> >> >>The second reason I have written on this topic is to ask advice on
> >> >>writing a newsletter. Are there any guidelines out there for me to
> >> >>consider? What sorts of things should I put in the newsletter to spice
> >> >>it up? This month I can put the brief history fo White Cane Safety
> >> >>Month in there, and that'll be a nice addition to the otherwise
> >> >>report-only newsletter, but I'd like to be able to add this bit of
> >> >>spice each month. The Editor-in-Chief has asked that I not put
> >> >>detailed reports on legislative issues, as there is a seperate mailing
> >> >>list for that information, so writing articles about local legal
> >> >>issues is out. The newsletter is for all members from all sorts of
> >> >>backgrounds, so I feel it would be inappropriate to write about
> >> >>something specific to a sub-grup, such as students or the newly
> >> >>blinded. I have done a Member Profile in the past on a member who,
> >> >>though a well-educated doctor with a lot to say, was very quiet in
> >> >>meetings. I did an interview with him and wrote the report off of my
> >> >>notes. The member rprofile was a great success, and I hope to do
> >> >>another on another member, but it requires that I interview the
> >> >>person, and people aren't always available for interview in time for
> >> >>it to be put in the newsletter.
> >> >>
> >> >>Does anyone have some suggestions about simple but effective additions
> >> >>to the newsletter to make it more interesting to the members of our
> >> >>chapter?
> >> >>--
> >> >>Thank you guys for being here to ask! I love this list!
> >> >>
> >> >>~Jewel
> >> >>Check out my blog about accessibility for the blind!
> >> >>Treasure Chest for the Blind: http://blindtreasurechest.blogspot.com
> >> >>
> >> >>_______________________________________________
> >> >>Writers Division web site:
> >> >>http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
> >> >> <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
> >> >>
> >> >>stylist mailing list
> >> >>stylist at nfbnet.org
> >> >>http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
> >> >>To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
> >> >> stylist:
> >> >>http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/n6yr%40sunflower.com
> >> >
> >> > _______________________________________________
> >> > Writers Division web site:
> >> > http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
> >> > <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
> >> >
> >> > stylist mailing list
> >> > stylist at nfbnet.org
> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
> >> > To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
> >> > stylist:
> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/herekittykat2%40gmail.com
> >> >
> >>
> >>
> >> --
> >> ~Jewel
> >> Check out my blog about accessibility for the blind!
> >> Treasure Chest for the Blind: http://blindtreasurechest.blogspot.com
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> ------------------------------
> >>
> >> Message: 17
> >> Date: Tue, 7 Sep 2010 09:32:04 -0400
> >> From: "Joe Orozco" <jsorozco at gmail.com>
> >> To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: [stylist] Songwriting
> >> Message-ID: <C10402EA1A7F493BB07AD2E7772CD397 at Rufus>
> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="US-ASCII"
> >>
> >> Dear all,
> >>
> >> I'm glad Marion came out of the woodwork when he did. I have a question
> >> he,
> >> and hopefully others, will be able to answer. How does one get started
> >> with
> >> songwriting? I play piano by ear as a hobby but have no idea how I could
> >> translate my own invented melodies to paper, nor how to make others hear
> >> my
> >> poetry in the melodies I've arranged in my head. Does one need to know
> >> music notation to succeed at this? Thanks for any help, and Priscilla, oh
> >> dear peer pressure that you are, I am working out some kinks in my novel
> >> before it is worthy of your reading.
> >>
> >> Best,
> >>
> >> Joe
> >>
> >> "Hard work spotlights the character of people: some turn up their sleeves,
> >> some turn up their noses, and some don't turn up at all."--Sam Ewing
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> ------------------------------
> >>
> >> Message: 18
> >> Date: Tue, 07 Sep 2010 08:56:41 -0500
> >> From: BDM <lists at braddunsemusic.com>
> >> To: jsorozco at gmail.com,Writer's Division Mailing List
> >> <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Songwriting
> >> Message-ID: <6.2.3.4.2.20100907083938.02e65c18 at www.braddunsemusic.com>
> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii"; format=flowed
> >>
> >> Joe,
> >>
> >> I am a performing songwriter, as are at least one other person on
> >> list there. As far as lyrics go for songwriting, poetry while
> >> similar, isn't a lyric for a number of reasons. Often times they can
> >> be altered to be a lyric. So yes you can take your poems and put them
> >> to music but very likely not as they are now. As for melody and
> >> muisic. You don't have to put it on paper as it were. I have none of
> >> my music on paper as it were. I will put a chord chart together which
> >> is basically chords over the tops of the lyrics which is pretty
> >> standard in the indie world and even professionals in Nashville. Not
> >> however if you are scoring out a piano piece for a recital or
> >> orchestral type thing to be played note for note. I couldn't tell
> >> you how to do that as I don't know Braile Music Notation. One can, if
> >> knowledgeable in theory, can score out chords to match a melody like
> >> Beethoven did, or one can, like most do, apply chords by "feel" to
> >> the melody. I write 90% of the time with an instrument starting with
> >> chords and melody and then go for words based off the feel of the
> >> music. I'll say on the other side of the coin, that nearly all my
> >> co-writing has been done by applying music and melody to words
> >> already written which sometimes requier slight altering to flush out
> >> consistency and etc. Words as well, if you listen carefully when
> >> spoken in natural voice, have a certain melody to them which can be
> >> used as well. It is both fun and exploritory to just match a melody
> >> to certain chords and you'll find it can generate different types of
> >> feeling or harmonies within it. Just experiment some with it if you
> >> have a melody in your head. If you can't sing and play at the same
> >> time, record your melody and try to put chords to it when you play it
> >> back. There is no right or wrong way, it is what works for you.
> >>
> >> There are many books and resources out there on songwriting. If you
> >> go to my website at
> >>
> >> http://www.braddunsemusic.com
> >>
> >> Then click on the songwriting link, there's an html file with various
> >> resources about songwriting.
> >>
> >> If you have any other questions just let me know. Glad to help anyway I
> >> can.
> >>
> >> Brad
> >>
> >>
> >> At 08:32 AM 9/7/2010, you wrote:
> >> >Dear all,
> >> >
> >> >I'm glad Marion came out of the woodwork when he did. I have a question
> >> > he,
> >> >and hopefully others, will be able to answer. How does one get started
> >> > with
> >> >songwriting? I play piano by ear as a hobby but have no idea how I could
> >> >translate my own invented melodies to paper, nor how to make others hear
> >> > my
> >> >poetry in the melodies I've arranged in my head. Does one need to know
> >> >music notation to succeed at this? Thanks for any help, and Priscilla, oh
> >> >dear peer pressure that you are, I am working out some kinks in my novel
> >> >before it is worthy of your reading.
> >> >
> >> >Best,
> >> >
> >> >Joe
> >> >
> >> >"Hard work spotlights the character of people: some turn up their
> >> > sleeves,
> >> >some turn up their noses, and some don't turn up at all."--Sam Ewing
> >> >
> >> >
> >> >_______________________________________________
> >> >Writers Division web site:
> >> >http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
> >> > <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
> >> >
> >> >stylist mailing list
> >> >stylist at nfbnet.org
> >> >http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
> >> >To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
> >> > stylist:
> >> >http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/lists%40braddunsemusic.com
> >> >
> >> >
> >> >__________ Information from ESET Smart Security, version of virus
> >> >signature database 5431 (20100907) __________
> >> >
> >> >The message was checked by ESET Smart Security.
> >> >
> >> >http://www.eset.com
> >>
> >>
> >> Brad Dunse
> >>
> >> Instead of waiting out the storm, learn to dance in the rain
> >>
> >> E Mail: brad at braddunsemusic.com
> >>
> >> Website: http://www.braddunsemusic.com
> >>
> >> Facebook: http://www.facebook.com/#!/profile.php?id=1464323555
> >>
> >> Twitter: http://www.twitter.com/braddunse
> >>
> >> MySpace: http://www.myspace.com/braddunse
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> ------------------------------
> >>
> >> Message: 19
> >> Date: Tue, 07 Sep 2010 10:01:39 -0400
> >> From: loristay <loristay at aol.com>
> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Chapter Newsletters
> >> Message-ID: <BEB18EB2.D527.4B18.84CD.D5E6EA172825 at aol.com>
> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="iso-8859-1"
> >>
> >> Some simple suggestions:
> >> Take a look at other state or chapter newsletters.
> >> Personal tidbits interest people (marriages, births, deaths)
> >> Reporting on current and future projects.
> >> Resource columns. ?These don't have to be long. ?Just, what you and others
> >> found useful; one or two items would do.
> >> Reminders of upcoming events.
> >> interviews are fine, but it would be a good idea to prepare ahead to have
> >> some in the pipeline, as sometimes getting together for an intervew, even
> >> by phone, can prove frustrating.
> >> Hope any of this helps.
> >>
> >> Lori Stayer
> >>
> >> On Sep 6, 2010, at 6:48:37 PM, "Jewel S." <herekittykat2 at gmail.com> wrote:
> >>
> >> From: "Jewel S." <herekittykat2 at gmail.com>
> >> Subject: [stylist] Chapter Newsletters
> >> Date: September 6, 2010 6:48:37 PM EDT
> >> To: stylist at nfbnet.org
> >> Hi all,
> >>
> >> My local chapter's president has given the newsletter over into my
> >> hands. She will still be Editor-in-Chief, but it is my job to either
> >> outsource reports to toher members or write the reports myself. For
> >> example, I'll be writing an article for the newsletter giving a brief
> >> history of White Cane Safety Month, but will be asking our Vice
> >> President to write the report on last month's Member Drive, since I
> >> was not present. After I write and/or collect the written articles, I
> >> send it to the presient/editor-in-chief for review and she passes it
> >> on for e-mail distribution and printing in large print or Braille for
> >> those who don't have computers.
> >>
> >> So the first point of this e-mail was to share with you all the
> >> priveledge I have been given in being assigned as editor and
> >> coordinator of the newsletter. I'm really excited about it. She had me
> >> do one newsletter as a Guest Editor, because she was super busy with
> >> legislative work and homeschooling her daughter, and obviously she was
> >> impressed with my work, since she has permanently assigned me to it!
> >>
> >> The second reason I have written on this topic is to ask advice on
> >> writing a newsletter. Are there any guidelines out there for me to
> >> consider? What sorts of things should I put in the newsletter to spice
> >> it up? This month I can put the brief history fo White Cane Safety
> >> Month in there, and that'll be a nice addition to the otherwise
> >> report-only newsletter, but I'd like to be able to add this bit of
> >> spice each month. The Editor-in-Chief has asked that I not put
> >> detailed reports on legislative issues, as there is a seperate mailing
> >> list for that information, so writing articles about local legal
> >> issues is out. The newsletter is for all members from all sorts of
> >> backgrounds, so I feel it would be inappropriate to write about
> >> something specific to a sub-grup, such as students or the newly
> >> blinded. I have done a Member Profile in the past on a member who,
> >> though a well-educated doctor with a lot to say, was very quiet in
> >> meetings. I did an interview with him and wrote the report off of my
> >> notes. The member rprofile was a great success, and I hope to do
> >> another on another member, but it requires that I interview the
> >> person, and people aren't always available for interview in time for
> >> it to be put in the newsletter.
> >>
> >> Does anyone have some suggestions about simple but effective additions
> >> to the newsletter to make it more interesting to the members of our
> >> chapter?
> >> --?
> >> Thank you guys for being here to ask! I love this list!
> >>
> >> ~Jewel
> >> Check out my blog about accessibility for the blind!
> >> Treasure Chest for the Blind: http://blindtreasurechest.blogspot.com
> >>
> >> _______________________________________________
> >> Writers Division web site:
> >> http://www.nfb-writers-division.org <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
> >>
> >> stylist mailing list
> >> stylist at nfbnet.org
> >> http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
> >> To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
> >> stylist:
> >> http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/loristay%40aol.com
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> ------------------------------
> >>
> >> Message: 20
> >> Date: Tue, 07 Sep 2010 10:10:25 -0400
> >> From: loristay <loristay at aol.com>
> >> To: "jsorozco at gmail.com, Writer's Division Mailing List"
> >> <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Songwriting
> >> Message-ID: <DB9CD38F.7374.4558.80B7.E6E8FEFEB627 at aol.com>
> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii"; format="flowed"
> >>
> >> Irving Berlin worked melodies out on the black keys of his piano, and
> >> had a secretary transcribe them into musical notation, and shift the
> >> key so both white and black keys were used.
> >> If you don't have a secretary, I'd advise learning Braille musical
> >> notation or print, if you have enough sight to read it back.
> >> Otherwise, I suppose you could sing the melodies into a recorder.
> >> Lori
> >>
> >> On Sep 7, 2010, at 9:32:04 AM, "Joe Orozco" <jsorozco at gmail.com> wrote:
> >>
> >> From: "Joe Orozco" <jsorozco at gmail.com>
> >> Subject: [stylist] Songwriting
> >> Date: September 7, 2010 9:32:04 AM EDT
> >> To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Dear all,
> >>
> >> I'm glad Marion came out of the woodwork when he did. I have a
> >> question he,
> >> and hopefully others, will be able to answer. How does one get started
> >> with
> >> songwriting? I play piano by ear as a hobby but have no idea how I
> >> could
> >> translate my own invented melodies to paper, nor how to make others
> >> hear my
> >> poetry in the melodies I've arranged in my head. Does one need to know
> >> music notation to succeed at this? Thanks for any help, and Priscilla,
> >> oh
> >> dear peer pressure that you are, I am working out some kinks in my
> >> novel
> >> before it is worthy of your reading.
> >>
> >> Best,
> >>
> >> Joe
> >>
> >> "Hard work spotlights the character of people: some turn up their
> >> sleeves,
> >> some turn up their noses, and some don't turn up at all."--Sam Ewing
> >>
> >>
> >> _______________________________________________
> >> Writers Division web site:
> >> http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
> >> <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
> >>
> >> stylist mailing list
> >> stylist at nfbnet.org
> >> http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
> >> To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
> >> stylist:
> >> http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/loristay%40aol.com
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> ------------------------------
> >>
> >> Message: 21
> >> Date: Tue, 07 Sep 2010 09:58:37 -0500
> >> From: "James H. \"Jim\" Canaday M.A. N6YR" <n6yr at sunflower.com>
> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Chapter Newsletters
> >> Message-ID: <201009071458.o87EwbNH026179 at smtp.sunflower.com>
> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii"; format=flowed
> >>
> >> you're welcome Jewel.
> >> jc
> >>
> >> At 11:20 PM 9/6/2010, you wrote:
> >> >Thank you for the wonderful ideas! I am hoping to give the newsletter
> >> >a new spin. Because our chapter president is so busy with legislative
> >> >issues and chapter issues, she never had the time to do extras for the
> >> >newsletter. Then she made a call for assistance with it, and I and the
> >> >Vice President both volunteered. He often writes community concern
> >> >articles, as he is a minister, and his additions to the newsletter are
> >> >wonderful. I was asked to do member profiles and interviews of people
> >> >in our city, then I was Guest Editor, and now I have been given this
> >> >position, which I am so very proud of.
> >> >
> >> >I love the idea of "Name That member." That will be fun. And recipe of
> >> >the month sounds good...not just food recipes, perhaps, but also
> >> >recipes for making crafts, Braille drawings, and homemade products
> >> >like soap and lotion...I have some wonderful recipes for these things,
> >> >as do some other members and people around the city.
> >> >
> >> >Again, thank you for the ideas. I'm sure this newsletter will grow
> >> >into a great read!
> >> >
> >> >On 9/6/10, James H. "Jim" Canaday M.A. N6YR <n6yr at sunflower.com> wrote:
> >> > > Hi Jewel,
> >> > > my first advice is to make sure your newsletter isn't just like
> >> > > everybody else's!
> >> > > our chapter doesn't have a newsletter. we have an e-mail listserv.
> >> > > but to make your newsletter different here are some ideas:
> >> > > try to make your newsletter local by getting some local history of
> >> > > blind people in your community, history of people with disabilities,
> >> > > or history of perhaps how the government dealt with blind/disabled
> >> > > people there.
> >> > > member profile is a great idea.
> >> > > sometimes in a newsletter you can do a different twist on member
> >> > > profile: you can do "name that member" where you might give some
> >> > > little-known information, interests or history of a member and see
> >> > > who names your member first.
> >> > > again to make your newsletter local, get a story in each issue about
> >> > > a blind person's experience walking somewhere, working somewhere,
> >> > > eating somewhere, recreating somewhere, etc. it would be a kind of a
> >> > > review from blindness perspective.
> >> > > you also can include in your newsletter recipes, or jokes,
> >> > > especially of local flavor.
> >> > > if a blind person visits your community, have a talk with him or her
> >> > > and put that in your newsletter.
> >> > >
> >> > > hope these ideas help.
> >> > > jc
> >> > >
> >> > > At 05:48 PM 9/6/2010, you wrote:
> >> > >>Hi all,
> >> > >>
> >> > >>My local chapter's president has given the newsletter over into my
> >> > >>hands. She will still be Editor-in-Chief, but it is my job to either
> >> > >>outsource reports to toher members or write the reports myself. For
> >> > >>example, I'll be writing an article for the newsletter giving a brief
> >> > >>history of White Cane Safety Month, but will be asking our Vice
> >> > >>President to write the report on last month's Member Drive, since I
> >> > >>was not present. After I write and/or collect the written articles, I
> >> > >>send it to the presient/editor-in-chief for review and she passes it
> >> > >>on for e-mail distribution and printing in large print or Braille for
> >> > >>those who don't have computers.
> >> > >>
> >> > >>So the first point of this e-mail was to share with you all the
> >> > >>priveledge I have been given in being assigned as editor and
> >> > >>coordinator of the newsletter. I'm really excited about it. She had me
> >> > >>do one newsletter as a Guest Editor, because she was super busy with
> >> > >>legislative work and homeschooling her daughter, and obviously she was
> >> > >>impressed with my work, since she has permanently assigned me to it!
> >> > >>
> >> > >>The second reason I have written on this topic is to ask advice on
> >> > >>writing a newsletter. Are there any guidelines out there for me to
> >> > >>consider? What sorts of things should I put in the newsletter to spice
> >> > >>it up? This month I can put the brief history fo White Cane Safety
> >> > >>Month in there, and that'll be a nice addition to the otherwise
> >> > >>report-only newsletter, but I'd like to be able to add this bit of
> >> > >>spice each month. The Editor-in-Chief has asked that I not put
> >> > >>detailed reports on legislative issues, as there is a seperate mailing
> >> > >>list for that information, so writing articles about local legal
> >> > >>issues is out. The newsletter is for all members from all sorts of
> >> > >>backgrounds, so I feel it would be inappropriate to write about
> >> > >>something specific to a sub-grup, such as students or the newly
> >> > >>blinded. I have done a Member Profile in the past on a member who,
> >> > >>though a well-educated doctor with a lot to say, was very quiet in
> >> > >>meetings. I did an interview with him and wrote the report off of my
> >> > >>notes. The member rprofile was a great success, and I hope to do
> >> > >>another on another member, but it requires that I interview the
> >> > >>person, and people aren't always available for interview in time for
> >> > >>it to be put in the newsletter.
> >> > >>
> >> > >>Does anyone have some suggestions about simple but effective additions
> >> > >>to the newsletter to make it more interesting to the members of our
> >> > >>chapter?
> >> > >>--
> >> > >>Thank you guys for being here to ask! I love this list!
> >> > >>
> >> > >>~Jewel
> >> > >>Check out my blog about accessibility for the blind!
> >> > >>Treasure Chest for the Blind: http://blindtreasurechest.blogspot.com
> >> > >>
> >> > >>_______________________________________________
> >> > >>Writers Division web site:
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> >> > >>http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/n6yr%40su
> >> > nflower.com
> >> > >
> >> > > _______________________________________________
> >> > > Writers Division web site:
> >> > > http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
> >> > > <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
> >> > >
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> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/herekittykat2%40gmail.com
> >> > >
> >> >
> >> >
> >> >--
> >> >~Jewel
> >> >Check out my blog about accessibility for the blind!
> >> >Treasure Chest for the Blind: http://blindtreasurechest.blogspot.com
> >> >
> >> >_______________________________________________
> >> >Writers Division web site:
> >> >http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
> >> > <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
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> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> ------------------------------
> >>
> >> Message: 22
> >> Date: Tue, 7 Sep 2010 09:49:03 -0500
> >> From: "Robert Leslie Newman" <newmanrl at cox.net>
> >> To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Chapter Newsletters
> >> Message-ID: <4A3C9854299B4DB38D959DE42BAEAD39 at Newmans>
> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii"
> >>
> >> Jewel
> >>
> >> There also is a mailing list just for editors of newsletters (chapter or
> >> affiliate or whatever). You can join it on nfbnet.org and the list is
> >> called
> >> nfb-editors
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> ------------------------------
> >>
> >> Message: 23
> >> Date: Tue, 07 Sep 2010 12:22:10 -0400
> >> From: "Marion Gwizdala, M.S." <marion.gwizdala at verizon.net>
> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Songwriting
> >> Message-ID: <009c01cb4ea8$d2d3a8b0$0201a8c0 at marion475ae1fe>
> >> Content-Type: text/plain; format=flowed; charset=iso-8859-1;
> >> reply-type=response
> >>
> >> Brad,
> >> Thanks a bunch for saving me all of this thought and writing! (smile)
> >> This is pretty much the same advice I would have offered. the only
> >> exception
> >> is that I don't write my chords above the lyrics; rather, I write them
> >> within them using braces "{}" where the chord changes appear. I believe
> >> there are MIDI instruments and software that will actually make printed
> >> music from the instrument. Perhaps that's a question to be asked on the
> >> Performing Arts list. I am sure Kevin Reeves or Cameron Strife can answer
> >> that for us!
> >>
> >> Fraternally yours,
> >> Marion
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> ----- Original Message -----
> >> From: "BDM" <lists at braddunsemusic.com>
> >> To: <jsorozco at gmail.com>; "Writer's Division Mailing List"
> >> <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> >> Sent: Tuesday, September 07, 2010 9:56 AM
> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Songwriting
> >>
> >>
> >> > Joe,
> >> >
> >> > I am a performing songwriter, as are at least one other person on list
> >> > there. As far as lyrics go for songwriting, poetry while similar, isn't
> >> > a
> >> > lyric for a number of reasons. Often times they can be altered to be a
> >> > lyric. So yes you can take your poems and put them to music but very
> >> > likely not as they are now. As for melody and muisic. You don't have to
> >> > put it on paper as it were. I have none of my music on paper as it were.
> >> > I
> >> > will put a chord chart together which is basically chords over the tops
> >> > of
> >> > the lyrics which is pretty standard in the indie world and even
> >> > professionals in Nashville. Not however if you are scoring out a piano
> >> > piece for a recital or orchestral type thing to be played note for note.
> >> >
> >> > I couldn't tell you how to do that as I don't know Braile Music
> >> > Notation.
> >> > One can, if knowledgeable in theory, can score out chords to match a
> >> > melody like Beethoven did, or one can, like most do, apply chords by
> >> > "feel" to the melody. I write 90% of the time with an instrument
> >> > starting
> >> > with chords and melody and then go for words based off the feel of the
> >> > music. I'll say on the other side of the coin, that nearly all my
> >> > co-writing has been done by applying music and melody to words already
> >> > written which sometimes requier slight altering to flush out consistency
> >> >
> >> > and etc. Words as well, if you listen carefully when spoken in natural
> >> > voice, have a certain melody to them which can be used as well. It is
> >> > both
> >> > fun and exploritory to just match a melody to certain chords and you'll
> >> > find it can generate different types of feeling or harmonies within it.
> >> > Just experiment some with it if you have a melody in your head. If you
> >> > can't sing and play at the same time, record your melody and try to put
> >> > chords to it when you play it back. There is no right or wrong way, it
> >> > is
> >> > what works for you.
> >> >
> >> > There are many books and resources out there on songwriting. If you go
> >> > to
> >> > my website at
> >> >
> >> > http://www.braddunsemusic.com
> >> >
> >> > Then click on the songwriting link, there's an html file with various
> >> > resources about songwriting.
> >> >
> >> > If you have any other questions just let me know. Glad to help anyway I
> >> > can.
> >> >
> >> > Brad
> >> >
> >> >
> >> > At 08:32 AM 9/7/2010, you wrote:
> >> >>Dear all,
> >> >>
> >> >>I'm glad Marion came out of the woodwork when he did. I have a question
> >> >>he,
> >> >>and hopefully others, will be able to answer. How does one get started
> >> >>with
> >> >>songwriting? I play piano by ear as a hobby but have no idea how I could
> >> >>translate my own invented melodies to paper, nor how to make others hear
> >> >>
> >> >>my
> >> >>poetry in the melodies I've arranged in my head. Does one need to know
> >> >>music notation to succeed at this? Thanks for any help, and Priscilla,
> >> >> oh
> >> >>dear peer pressure that you are, I am working out some kinks in my novel
> >> >>before it is worthy of your reading.
> >> >>
> >> >>Best,
> >> >>
> >> >>Joe
> >> >>
> >> >>"Hard work spotlights the character of people: some turn up their
> >> >> sleeves,
> >> >>some turn up their noses, and some don't turn up at all."--Sam Ewing
> >> >>
> >> >>
> >> >>_______________________________________________
> >> >>Writers Division web site:
> >> >>http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
> >> >> <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
> >> >>
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> >> >
> >> > Brad Dunse
> >> >
> >> > Instead of waiting out the storm, learn to dance in the rain
> >> >
> >> > E Mail: brad at braddunsemusic.com
> >> >
> >> > Website: http://www.braddunsemusic.com
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> >> >
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> >> >
> >> >
> >> > _______________________________________________
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> >>
> >>
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> -- 
> ~Jewel
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