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[Jewel S.]

 actually started this contest for a name change two months ago, and
did not receive a single entry to this date. Our president is planning
on bringing my name idea, "In Red and White" to the member meeting in
October for voting. She says it is a good one and it will be up to the
member base whether we close the contest and accept my name idea. As
editor I of course am not eligible for the contest, so it would be
amatter of closing the contest and accepting the chosen name. I was a
bit disappointed that no one submitted a name suggestion, but I like
my name, so it's all good.



On 9/8/10, Bridgit Pollpeter <bpollpeter at hotmail.com> wrote:
>
> Jewel,
>
> When I took over the editorship for Nebraska, I had a statewide contest to
> change the name of the newsletter.  I made a deadline for entries, and
> members submitted their ideas.  I chose the top five favorites of mine and
> selected a few people (including our affiliate president) to decide.  I was
> the only one who knew what person submitted what title.  This way no one
> could be bias.  The winner received a Louie Braille coin.
>
> I printed the name of the winner in the first issue which was last year.  I
> had about 20 submissions and we changed the name from the Blind Nebraskan to
> the Nebraska Independent.  It was a pretty popular idea, and it got
> affiliate members involved as well as bringing awareness about the
> newsletter.
>
> Bridgit
>
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>> Date: Wed, 8 Sep 2010 12:00:11 -0500
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>> 1. Re: chapter newsletters (Jewel S.)
>>
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>> Message: 1
>> Date: Tue, 7 Sep 2010 22:26:22 -0400
>> From: "Jewel S." <herekittykat2 at gmail.com>
>> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> Subject: Re: [stylist] chapter newsletters
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>>
>> I apologize, I did mean affiliate. I get confused between "chapter"
>> and "affiliate." It is for the Wake Federation of the Blind
>> newsletter, which is for Wake County and Durham County in North
>> Carolina. I would love to some day run the state newsletter, the News
>> and Views, when the current Editor steps down in a few years, but I
>> have to start small, and this local newsletter is a great way to do
>> that.
>>
>> Thank you for the suggestions! Asking others as a whole to write
>> articles sounds like a good idea, and I think writing a person to
>> write about themselves and then editing if needed is a good idea. It
>> saves me the time of interviewing and writing the article from
>> scratch.
>>
>> Themes are also a good idea...I think that will really spice up the
>> newsletter. I'm also still trying to come up with a name, though I'm
>> truly considering the Red and White, which are the affiliate's
>> official colours. What do you guys think of that?
>>
>> On 9/7/10, Bridgit Pollpeter <bpollpeter at hotmail.com> wrote:
>> >
>> > Jewel,
>> >
>> > Is this for your chapter or affiliate? I am the editor for the Nebraska
>> > newsletter and I have done a complete face lift with it. First, I try to
>> > encourage submissions that do not simply report. I like to know what a
>> > writer's experience is and how a situation may affect them.
>> >
>> > I also began selecting themes for each newsletter to revolve around. Our
>> > current issue deals with training and alternative skills. I asked each
>> > chapter to submit a piece detailing an event or activity where they
>> > employed
>> > the alternative skills to accomplish set-up, work and interaction. I
>> > also
>> > asked members to write about their training experiences. one submission
>> > is
>> > about how Braille can be used in daily life, and I wrote an articles on
>> > how
>> > the skills can be used to manage diabetes. Things like that. Setting a
>> > theme, or focus, helps promote Federation philosophy, and it helps
>> > members
>> > have an idea as to what they should write.
>> >
>> > I try to spotlight a different affiliate member each time too. If
>> > interviewing a person does not always work, I will ask a candidate to
>> > write
>> > about themselves.
>> >
>> > Be creative, but informative. We want to grab readers attention
>> > especially
>> > outside the Federation. Congrats and goodluck!
>> >
>> > Bridgit
>> >
>> >> From: stylist-request at nfbnet.org
>> >> Subject: stylist Digest, Vol 77, Issue 6
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>> >> Date: Tue, 7 Sep 2010 12:00:07 -0500
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>> >> Today's Topics:
>> >>
>> >> 1. Re: creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no adult
>> >> content (Priscilla McKinley)
>> >> 2. Re-Introducing Myself (Marion Gwizdala, M.S.)
>> >> 3. creative non-fiction "snapshot" no language, no adult content
>> >> (Bridgit Pollpeter)
>> >> 4. Re: creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no adult
>> >> content (Chris Kuell)
>> >> 5. Re: creative non-fiction "snapshot" no language, no adult
>> >> content (James H. "Jim" Canaday M.A. N6YR)
>> >> 6. Re: creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no adult
>> >> content (loristay)
>> >> 7. Recent Addition (Joe Orozco)
>> >> 8. Re: creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no adult
>> >> content (Robert Leslie Newman)
>> >> 9. Re: Recent Addition (Priscilla McKinley)
>> >> 10. Chapter Newsletters (Jewel S.)
>> >> 11. Re: Re-Introducing Myself (Robert Leslie Newman)
>> >> 12. Re: creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no adult
>> >> content (James H. "Jim" Canaday M.A. N6YR)
>> >> 13. Re: Chapter Newsletters (helene ryles)
>> >> 14. Re: Chapter Newsletters (James H. "Jim" Canaday M.A. N6YR)
>> >> 15. Re: Re-Introducing Myself (Priscilla McKinley)
>> >> 16. Re: Chapter Newsletters (Jewel S.)
>> >> 17. Songwriting (Joe Orozco)
>> >> 18. Re: Songwriting (BDM)
>> >> 19. Re: Chapter Newsletters (loristay)
>> >> 20. Re: Songwriting (loristay)
>> >> 21. Re: Chapter Newsletters (James H. "Jim" Canaday M.A. N6YR)
>> >> 22. Re: Chapter Newsletters (Robert Leslie Newman)
>> >> 23. Re: Songwriting (Marion Gwizdala, M.S.)
>> >>
>> >>
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>> >>
>> >> Message: 1
>> >> Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 14:33:51 -0500
>> >> From: Priscilla McKinley <priscilla.mckinley at gmail.com>
>> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no
>> >> adult content
>> >> Message-ID:
>> >> <AANLkTin4ThMR6bX_7wEdkuXJLmneCP--0-gADg0ESDaM at mail.gmail.com>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset=windows-1252
>> >>
>> >> I have embedded a few comments in your essay, just things to consider.
>> >> Also, I think you might want to consider the organization. You start
>> >> with the wedding photos and focus on one. Then you move back to
>> >> looking around the room. It seems as though it might be more natural
>> >> for your reading audience to come down to the basement and then to the
>> >> room, see everything in the room (closet, dresser, photos on walls,
>> >> etc.), and finally end with the girl in the middle of the room,
>> >> looking at the wedding photos. Then she could look in the mirror at
>> >> the end, moving directly from one snapshot that captures her feelings,
>> >> true feelings, to seeing herself in the mirror.
>> >>
>> >> Of course, this is just one opinion. I like when stories/scenes move
>> >> from general to specific, from the room and the surroundings to one
>> >> specific photo, to one specific moment in time. It seems as though
>> >> the specific photo reveals sadness that also comes out when looking at
>> >> yourself in the mirror. Again, that?s just one opinion.
>> >>
>> >> Thanks for sharing,
>> >>
>> >> Priscilla
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> Snapshot
>> >>
>> >> Reaching the bottom steps of the basement, an observer would notice
>> >> the following scene: A naked lightbulb emanates a harsh yellow
>> >> brilliance stifled by the dark windowless, cinder-block walls and
>> >> open-rafter ceiling. [I would take out the first part of the previous
>> >> sentence and start with ?A light??.] The grey painted floor
>> >> resembles hard, cold stone. Separating the basement from the large
>> >> family-room-sized space, should be a plaster wall, but now just the
>> >> wall studs remain leaving a clear view into the large room converted
>> >> into a bedroom. A skinny, blonde, young woman, Bridgit, sits in the
>> >> middle of the room surrounded by scattered piles of photographs.
>> >> Leaning against the wrought iron footboard of her bed, she studies a
>> >> picture. With knees drawn up against her slender body, she stares at
>> >> the image of a young woman. The small window above the bed shoots
>> >> sunlight like a spotlight onto the section of floor the young woman
>> >> sits upon. [Where the woman sits to avoid ending in a preposition?]
>> >> Bits of light reflect off the pictures littering the beige carpet
>> >> around the young woman.Try using other words besides ?young woman? so
>> >> much. Plus, sometimes it is confusing if the scene is you or the
>> >> picture of you. You might want to build up to the picture at the end
>> >> of the description of you sitting.]
>> >> The pictures relay a moment modern technology has frozen in time. A
>> >> small-town family wedding snapped for the centuries. Bridgit is
>> >> twenty-one in the pictures. A single year ago. She remembers the
>> >> day, she remembers the feelings. Happiness that weddings evoke, but
>> >> sadness that the occasion is not her own to celebrate. Joy to see
>> >> relatives gone for too long, but restlessness to explore the world
>> >> too. It was a third cousin's wedding, but the whole clan showed up to
>> >> celebrate the nuptials. A panoramic shot included a large portion of
>> >> family members gathered at a long table enjoying the home-cooked meal
>> >> of chicken-fried chicken and gravy with mashed potatoes and green bean
>> >> casserole topped with real onion-rings. Bridgit smiled demurely,
>> >> picking at the food before her, while Uncle Lance, to her right,
>> >> intently shoveled mashed potatoes in his mouth, and Tami, her mother,
>> >> held a bit of chicken mid-air with her fork, talking, most likely
>> >> saying how, "Fried-chicken is not a very elegant choice for a wedding,
>> >> but I guess that is what you are use to in small towns." Another
>> >> picture displays Bridgit in her black dress with a deep V in front
>> >> exposing a boney, but well tanned chest. Bronzed arms connected with
>> >> another's, she stood next to her fourteen-year-old cousin, Colin,
>> >> already taller than her. Her blue eyes gazed into the camera as she
>> >> flashed her one-dimpled smile. The focus of the next photo captured
>> >> the wedding party and guest doing the Bunnyhop. Clustered of to the
>> >> right, Uncle Doug and Aunt Becky grill her about college. She smiled
>> >> quietly as, "What are you studying?" "Still music?" and what are your
>> >> plans after graduation?" were fired at her. Years of dance training
>> >> and etiquette school have taught her to stand erect with head held
>> >> high. With her confident demeanor and three-inch heels, she appeared
>> >> taller than her average five-foot height. Later in the evening, the
>> >> camera snapped Bridgit laughing wildly as Uncle Brent whipped her
>> >> across the dance floor like Ginger Rogers. Another moment captured
>> >> Bridgit and Uncle Brent posing for the camera as he dipped her low.
>> >> Another shot has Bridgit kicking her black strappy heels off as she
>> >> prepared for a new round of dancing. Each photograph is handled with
>> >> care and placed in a tree creating a timeline beginning with a picture
>> >> of Bridgit's immediate family dressed in their wedding attire posing
>> >> for the first time in years, to a snapshot of straggling dancers
>> >> waltzing to the final song of the night, "I Will Always Love You."
>> >> Each picture displays a happy, smiling young woman, but one single
>> >> shot captured the truth. One solitary picture alone shows her with
>> >> the mask off. It is the photo she now sits and studies intently.
>> >> [Consider checking ofor present and past-tense verbs. Sometimes it
>> >> seems as though you could use more present.]
>> >> Staring at the picture of herself, her expression is quizzical and
>> >> worn. Her gaze is intent as though she will discover some truth about
>> >> herself. A rare moment exposed displaying a part never meant for
>> >> public consumption, yet here it is for all to see. She cradles the
>> >> picture in her thin hands as if breaking it will destroy some part of
>> >> her. The camera revealed Bridgit resting her head on a propped arm.
>> >> Escaped tendrils of hair framed her tanned face, and her blue,
>> >> almond-shaped eyes looked off into the distance. Her expression
>> >> contained longing, dreams and hopes unrealized, mingled with
>> >> restlessness and deep sadness. [Since this is captured in time,
>> >> consider present tense.] Sitting alone, tucked away in a corner of
>> >> the reception hall, she believed herself unnoticed, but the camera
>> >> caught her. An X-ray imprinting her soul lay bare. Always so careful
>> >> to wear her mask. Never letting her guard down, only to be trapped by
>> >> a modern marvel.
>> >> Placing this final picture in its proper spot in the visual timeline,
>> >> Bridgit looks around the room. A blue "Happy-birthday" balloon hangs
>> >> deflated on the wall surrounded by pictures from high school and
>> >> college. Bridgit, Tera and Jessica smiled in their red-and-white
>> >> cheerleading uniforms. Bridgit standing at the grand piano in the
>> >> choir room, mouth opened as she belted "On My Own" from Les
>> >> Miserables. Bridgit engulfed by Ryan, her boyfriend, the boy she
>> >> thought she would marry. Bridgit and Tera, arms clasped around each
>> >> other's shoulders, grinning on graduation day. Bridgit sitting on
>> >> Joe's knee during a cast party for Cinderella. [Consider being
>> >> consistent with verb tenses in the previous sentences, either present
>> >> with complete sentences or fragments with ?ing? verbs.] A letter
>> >> pokes out from behind the balloon, a love letter sent by a friend who
>> >> never forgot her, but that Bridgit could not muster the necessary
>> >> feelings for. The letter is a reminder that some one in the world
>> >> thinks she is special. A poster hangs on the opposite wall displaying
>> >> Kate and Leo at the bow of a ship, and next to this stands a tall
>> >> bookshelf lined with books from Little Women to I Know Why the Caged
>> >> Bird Sings. Across the room a butter-colored dresser-drawer reflects
>> >> her image in its large mirror framed by carved flowers. Quickly
>> >> adverting her eyes, she takes in the glass bottle of Miracle perfume
>> >> and the organized assortment of make-up compacts and brushes. A
>> >> Shabby-chic-style jewelry box is arranged on a corner of the dresser
>> >> top, and necklaces hang on a pink heart-shape with tiny hooks
>> >> protruding from the lace-overlay front. The open closet reveals
>> >> clothes hanging from shortest sleeve length to longest as well as
>> >> being color coordinated. Directly to the left of the entrance into
>> >> her room, sits the thirty-two-inch TV purchased by Ryan, the ex,
>> >> disguised as a Christmas present, but intended for the use of video
>> >> games. Taking in years of memories and keepsakes, Bridgit finally
>> >> turns back to the reflection in the mirror. Her blonde hair is pulled
>> >> back in a long, wispy ponytail, an attempt to hide the sections of
>> >> hair that have fallen out with portions of scalp still attached. Head
>> >> settled on boney knees, she wonders at her compactness. Chest,
>> >> stomach and waist are hidden behind skinny legs, and rail-thin arms
>> >> wrap around just beneath the pale, gaunt face. Her eyes haunt her as
>> >> they hold the longing and sadness grown deeper by another year.
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> On 9/6/10, James H. "Jim" Canaday M.A. N6YR <n6yr at sunflower.com> wrote:
>> >> > Hi Bridgit,
>> >> > descriptions are very good in this.
>> >> >
>> >> > I could be wrong but I think "adverting" you meant "averting."
>> >> > jc
>> >> >
>> >> >
>> >> > At 04:21 AM 9/6/2010, you wrote:
>> >> >
>> >> >>Dear List,
>> >> >>
>> >> >>Happy Labor Day to all. I am posting a piece I just worked on for a
>> >> >>class. Before it is workshopped, I thought I would let you lot
>> >> >>deconstruct it, and let me know what you think.
>> >> >>
>> >> >>Bridgit
>> >> >>
>> >> >>Snapshot
>> >> >>
>> >> >>Reaching the bottom steps of the basement, an observer would notice
>> >> >>the following scene: A naked lightbulb emanates a harsh yellow
>> >> >>brilliance stifled by the dark windowless, cinder-block walls and
>> >> >>open-rafter ceiling. The grey painted floor resembles hard, cold
>> >> >>stone. Separating the basement from the large family-room-sized
>> >> >>space, should be a plaster wall, but now just the wall studs remain
>> >> >>leaving a clear view into the large room converted into a
>> >> >>bedroom. A skinny, blonde, young woman, Bridgit, sits in the middle
>> >> >>of the room surrounded by scattered piles of photographs. Leaning
>> >> >>against the wrought iron footboard of her bed, she studies a
>> >> >>picture. With knees drawn up against her slender body, she stares
>> >> >>at the image of a young woman. The small window above the bed
>> >> >>shoots sunlight like a spotlight onto the section of floor the young
>> >> >>woman sits upon. Bits of light reflect off the pictures littering
>> >> >>the beige carpet around the young woman.
>> >> >>The pictures relay a moment modern technology has frozen in time. A
>> >> >>small-town family wedding snapped for the centuries. Bridgit is
>> >> >>twenty-one in the pictures. A single year ago. She remembers the
>> >> >>day, she remembers the feelings. Happiness that weddings evoke, but
>> >> >>sadness that the occasion is not her own to celebrate. Joy to see
>> >> >>relatives gone for too long, but restlessness to explore the world
>> >> >>too. It was a third cousin's wedding, but the whole clan showed up
>> >> >>to celebrate the nuptials. A panoramic shot included a large
>> >> >>portion of family members gathered at a long table enjoying the
>> >> >>home-cooked meal of chicken-fried chicken and gravy with mashed
>> >> >>potatoes and green bean casserole topped with real
>> >> >>onion-rings. Bridgit smiled demurely, picking at the food before
>> >> >>her, while Uncle Lance, to her right, intently shoveled mashed
>> >> >>potatoes in his mouth, and Tami, her mother, held a bit of chicken
>> >> >>mid-air with her fork, talking, most likely saying how,
>> >> >>"Fried-chicken is not a very elegant choice for a wedding, but I
>> >> >>guess that is what you are use to in small towns." Another picture
>> >> >>displays Bridgit in her black dress with a deep V in front exposing
>> >> >>a boney, but well tanned chest. Bronzed arms connected with
>> >> >>another's, she stood next to her fourteen-year-old cousin, Colin,
>> >> >>already taller than her. Her blue eyes gazed into the camera as she
>> >> >>flashed her one-dimpled smile. The focus of the next photo captured
>> >> >>the wedding party and guest doing the Bunnyhop. Clustered of to the
>> >> >>right, Uncle Doug and Aunt Becky grill her about college. She
>> >> >>smiled quietly as, "What are you studying?" "Still music?" and what
>> >> >>are your plans after graduation?" were fired at her. Years of dance
>> >> >>training and etiquette school have taught her to stand erect with
>> >> >>head held high. With her confident demeanor and three-inch heels,
>> >> >>she appeared taller than her average five-foot height. Later in the
>> >> >>evening, the camera snapped Bridgit laughing wildly as Uncle Brent
>> >> >>whipped her across the dance floor like Ginger Rogers. Another
>> >> >>moment captured Bridgit and Uncle Brent posing for the camera as he
>> >> >>dipped her low. Another shot has Bridgit kicking her black strappy
>> >> >>heels off as she prepared for a new round of dancing. Each
>> >> >>photograph is handled with care and placed in a tree creating a
>> >> >>timeline beginning with a picture of Bridgit's immediate family
>> >> >>dressed in their wedding attire posing for the first time in years,
>> >> >>to a snapshot of straggling dancers waltzing to the final song of
>> >> >>the night, "I Will Always Love You." Each picture displays a happy,
>> >> >>smiling young woman, but one single shot captured the truth. One
>> >> >>solitary picture alone shows her with the mask off. It is the photo
>> >> >>she now sits and studies intently.
>> >> >>Staring at the picture of herself, her expression is quizzical and
>> >> >>worn. Her gaze is intent as though she will discover some truth
>> >> >>about herself. A rare moment exposed displaying a part never meant
>> >> >>for public consumption, yet here it is for all to see. She cradles
>> >> >>the picture in her thin hands as if breaking it will destroy some
>> >> >>part of her. The camera revealed Bridgit resting her head on a
>> >> >>propped arm. Escaped tendrils of hair framed her tanned face, and
>> >> >>her blue, almond-shaped eyes looked off into the distance. Her
>> >> >>expression contained longing, dreams and hopes unrealized, mingled
>> >> >>with restlessness and deep sadness. Sitting alone, tucked away in a
>> >> >>corner of the reception hall, she believed herself unnoticed, but
>> >> >>the camera caught her. An X-ray imprinting her soul lay
>> >> >>bare. Always so careful to wear her mask. Never letting her guard
>> >> >>down, only to be trapped by a modern marvel.
>> >> >>Placing this final picture in its proper spot in the visual
>> >> >>timeline, Bridgit looks around the room. A blue "Happy-birthday"
>> >> >>balloon hangs deflated on the wall surrounded by pictures from high
>> >> >>school and college. Bridgit, Tera and Jessica smiled in their
>> >> >>red-and-white cheerleading uniforms. Bridgit standing at the grand
>> >> >>piano in the choir room, mouth opened as she belted "On My Own" from
>> >> >>Les Miserables. Bridgit engulfed by Ryan, her boyfriend, the boy
>> >> >>she thought she would marry. Bridgit and Tera, arms clasped around
>> >> >>each other's shoulders, grinning on graduation day. Bridgit sitting
>> >> >>on Joe's knee during a cast party for Cinderella. A letter pokes
>> >> >>out from behind the balloon, a love letter sent by a friend who
>> >> >>never forgot her, but that Bridgit could not muster the necessary
>> >> >>feelings for. The letter is a reminder that some one in the world
>> >> >>thinks she is special. A poster hangs on the opposite wall
>> >> >>displaying Kate and Leo at the bow of a ship, and next to this
>> >> >>stands a tall bookshelf lined with books from Little Women to I Know
>> >> >>Why the Caged Bird Sings. Across the room a butter-colored
>> >> >>dresser-drawer reflects her image in its large mirror framed by
>> >> >>carved flowers. Quickly adverting her eyes, she takes in the glass
>> >> >>bottle of Miracle perfume and the organized assortment of make-up
>> >> >>compacts and brushes. A Shabby-chic-style jewelry box is arranged
>> >> >>on a corner of the dresser top, and necklaces hang on a pink
>> >> >>heart-shape with tiny hooks protruding from the lace-overlay
>> >> >>front. The open closet reveals clothes hanging from shortest sleeve
>> >> >>length to longest as well as being color coordinated. Directly to
>> >> >>the left of the entrance into her room, sits the thirty-two-inch TV
>> >> >>purchased by Ryan, the ex, disguised as a Christmas present, but
>> >> >>intended for the use of video games. Taking in years of memories
>> >> >>and keepsakes, Bridgit finally turns back to the reflection in the
>> >> >>mirror. Her blonde hair is pulled back in a long, wispy ponytail,
>> >> >>an attempt to hide the sections of hair that have fallen out with
>> >> >>portions of scalp still attached. Head settled on boney knees, she
>> >> >>wonders at her compactness. Chest, stomach and waist are hidden
>> >> >>behind skinny legs, and rail-thin arms wrap around just beneath the
>> >> >>pale, gaunt face. Her eyes haunt her as they hold the longing and
>> >> >>sadness grown deeper by another year.
>> >> >>
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>> >> Message: 2
>> >> Date: Mon, 06 Sep 2010 10:21:56 -0400
>> >> From: "Marion Gwizdala, M.S." <marion.gwizdala at verizon.net>
>> >> To: <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: [stylist] Re-Introducing Myself
>> >> Message-ID: <01b901cb4dce$dd073570$0201a8c0 at marion475ae1fe>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="iso-8859-1"
>> >>
>> >> Dear All,
>> >> A couple of months ago I made some changes to my NFBNET subscriptions.
>> >> As
>> >> the result, it seems as if my subscription to this list was dropped.
>> >> Since
>> >> I have not posted here in quite some time, I thought I would send a
>> >> brief
>> >> message to introduce myself to those who may have recently subscribed
>> >> and
>> >> let others know some exciting news relevant to this list.
>> >> I am the President of the National Association of Guide Dog Users
>> >> (NAGDU),
>> >> a strong and proud division of the National Federation of the Blind. I
>> >> am
>> >> also a professional musician who performs a genre of music known as
>> >> "Positive (Posi) Music" and am the Music Director at New Life Unity
>> >> Church
>> >> in Tampa, Fla. I am also in private practice as a Certified
>> >> Hypnotherapist. In addition, I combine my work with NAGDU, my talent as
>> >> an
>> >> entertainer, and my experience as a counselor to offer seminars and
>> >> workshops that combine my music with spoken word.
>> >> I have published several articles on a variety of health and wellness
>> >> topics, such as hypnosis for health & personal enhancement, the
>> >> metaphysics of the body-mind-spirit connection, reincarnation, and
>> >> issues
>> >> related to blindness and the use of guide dogs. I am currently working
>> >> on
>> >> a multimedia quit smoking manual and have been commissioned by a major
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>> >>
>> >> Message: 3
>> >> Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 13:23:53 -0500
>> >> From: Bridgit Pollpeter <bpollpeter at hotmail.com>
>> >> To: writers division <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: [stylist] creative non-fiction "snapshot" no language, no
>> >> adult content
>> >> Message-ID: <SNT136-w567252C1B6E6A83075A964C4700 at phx.gbl>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="iso-8859-1"
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> JC,
>> >>
>> >> You are right, I meant averting. I have gone through the piece about 20
>> >> times, and I can't believe I missed that! *smile* Glad I posted it here
>> >> first. Thanks.
>> >>
>> >> Bridgit
>> >>
>> >> > From: stylist-request at nfbnet.org
>> >> > Subject: stylist Digest, Vol 77, Issue 5
>> >> > To: stylist at nfbnet.org
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>> >> > 1. creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no adult content
>> >> > (Bridgit Pollpeter)
>> >> > 2. Re: creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no adult
>> >> > content (James H. "Jim" Canaday M.A. N6YR)
>> >> >
>> >> >
>> >> > ----------------------------------------------------------------------
>> >> >
>> >> > Message: 1
>> >> > Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 04:21:23 -0500
>> >> > From: Bridgit Pollpeter <bpollpeter at hotmail.com>
>> >> > To: writers division <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> > Subject: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no
>> >> > adult content
>> >> > Message-ID: <SNT136-w646C2D35961CF77A0F5FAC4700 at phx.gbl>
>> >> > Content-Type: text/plain; charset="Windows-1252"
>> >> >
>> >> >
>> >> > Dear List,
>> >> >
>> >> > Happy Labor Day to all. I am posting a piece I just worked on for a
>> >> > class. Before it is workshopped, I thought I would let you lot
>> >> > deconstruct it, and let me know what you think.
>> >> >
>> >> > Bridgit
>> >> >
>> >> > Snapshot
>> >> >
>> >> > Reaching the bottom steps of the basement, an observer would notice
>> >> > the
>> >> > following scene: A naked lightbulb emanates a harsh yellow brilliance
>> >> > stifled by the dark windowless, cinder-block walls and open-rafter
>> >> > ceiling. The grey painted floor resembles hard, cold stone.
>> >> > Separating
>> >> > the basement from the large family-room-sized space, should be a
>> >> > plaster
>> >> > wall, but now just the wall studs remain leaving a clear view into
>> >> > the
>> >> > large room converted into a bedroom. A skinny, blonde, young woman,
>> >> > Bridgit, sits in the middle of the room surrounded by scattered piles
>> >> > of
>> >> > photographs. Leaning against the wrought iron footboard of her bed,
>> >> > she
>> >> > studies a picture. With knees drawn up against her slender body, she
>> >> > stares at the image of a young woman. The small window above the bed
>> >> > shoots sunlight like a spotlight onto the section of floor the young
>> >> > woman sits upon. Bits of light reflect off the pictures littering the
>> >> > beige carpet around the young woman.
>> >> > The pictures relay a moment modern technology has frozen in time. A
>> >> > small-town family wedding snapped for the centuries. Bridgit is
>> >> > twenty-one in the pictures. A single year ago. She remembers the day,
>> >> > she remembers the feelings. Happiness that weddings evoke, but
>> >> > sadness
>> >> > that the occasion is not her own to celebrate. Joy to see relatives
>> >> > gone
>> >> > for too long, but restlessness to explore the world too. It was a
>> >> > third
>> >> > cousin?s wedding, but the whole clan showed up to celebrate the
>> >> > nuptials. A panoramic shot included a large portion of family members
>> >> > gathered at a long table enjoying the home-cooked meal of
>> >> > chicken-fried
>> >> > chicken and gravy with mashed potatoes and green bean casserole
>> >> > topped
>> >> > with real onion-rings. Bridgit smiled demurely, picking at the food
>> >> > before her, while Uncle Lance, to her right, intently shoveled mashed
>> >> > potatoes in his mouth, and Tami, her mother, held a bit of chicken
>> >> > mid-air with her fork, talking, most likely saying how,
>> >> > ?Fried-chicken
>> >> > is not a very elegant choice for a wedding, but I guess that is what
>> >> > you
>> >> > are use to in small towns.? Another picture displays Bridgit in her
>> >> > black dress with a deep V in front exposing a boney, but well tanned
>> >> > chest. Bronzed arms connected with another?s, she stood next to her
>> >> > fourteen-year-old cousin, Colin, already taller than her. Her blue
>> >> > eyes
>> >> > gazed into the camera as she flashed her one-dimpled smile. The focus
>> >> > of
>> >> > the next photo captured the wedding party and guest doing the
>> >> > Bunnyhop.
>> >> > Clustered of to the right, Uncle Doug and Aunt Becky grill her about
>> >> > college. She smiled quietly as, ?What are you studying?? ?Still
>> >> > music??
>> >> > and what are your plans after graduation?? were fired at her. Years
>> >> > of
>> >> > dance training and etiquette school have taught her to stand erect
>> >> > with
>> >> > head held high. With her confident demeanor and three-inch heels, she
>> >> > appeared taller than her average five-foot height. Later in the
>> >> > evening,
>> >> > the camera snapped Bridgit laughing wildly as Uncle Brent whipped her
>> >> > across the dance floor like Ginger Rogers. Another moment captured
>> >> > Bridgit and Uncle Brent posing for the camera as he dipped her low.
>> >> > Another shot has Bridgit kicking her black strappy heels off as she
>> >> > prepared for a new round of dancing. Each photograph is handled with
>> >> > care and placed in a tree creating a timeline beginning with a
>> >> > picture
>> >> > of Bridgit?s immediate family dressed in their wedding attire posing
>> >> > for
>> >> > the first time in years, to a snapshot of straggling dancers waltzing
>> >> > to
>> >> > the final song of the night, ?I Will Always Love You.? Each picture
>> >> > displays a happy, smiling young woman, but one single shot captured
>> >> > the
>> >> > truth. One solitary picture alone shows her with the mask off. It is
>> >> > the
>> >> > photo she now sits and studies intently.
>> >> > Staring at the picture of herself, her expression is quizzical and
>> >> > worn.
>> >> > Her gaze is intent as though she will discover some truth about
>> >> > herself.
>> >> > A rare moment exposed displaying a part never meant for public
>> >> > consumption, yet here it is for all to see. She cradles the picture
>> >> > in
>> >> > her thin hands as if breaking it will destroy some part of her. The
>> >> > camera revealed Bridgit resting her head on a propped arm. Escaped
>> >> > tendrils of hair framed her tanned face, and her blue, almond-shaped
>> >> > eyes looked off into the distance. Her expression contained longing,
>> >> > dreams and hopes unrealized, mingled with restlessness and deep
>> >> > sadness.
>> >> > Sitting alone, tucked away in a corner of the reception hall, she
>> >> > believed herself unnoticed, but the camera caught her. An X-ray
>> >> > imprinting her soul lay bare. Always so careful to wear her mask.
>> >> > Never
>> >> > letting her guard down, only to be trapped by a modern marvel.
>> >> > Placing this final picture in its proper spot in the visual timeline,
>> >> > Bridgit looks around the room. A blue ?Happy-birthday? balloon hangs
>> >> > deflated on the wall surrounded by pictures from high school and
>> >> > college. Bridgit, Tera and Jessica smiled in their red-and-white
>> >> > cheerleading uniforms. Bridgit standing at the grand piano in the
>> >> > choir
>> >> > room, mouth opened as she belted ?On My Own? from Les Miserables.
>> >> > Bridgit engulfed by Ryan, her boyfriend, the boy she thought she
>> >> > would
>> >> > marry. Bridgit and Tera, arms clasped around each other?s shoulders,
>> >> > grinning on graduation day. Bridgit sitting on Joe?s knee during a
>> >> > cast
>> >> > party for Cinderella. A letter pokes out from behind the balloon, a
>> >> > love
>> >> > letter sent by a friend who never forgot her, but that Bridgit could
>> >> > not
>> >> > muster the necessary feelings for. The letter is a reminder that some
>> >> > one in the world thinks she is special. A poster hangs on the
>> >> > opposite
>> >> > wall displaying Kate and Leo at the bow of a ship, and next to this
>> >> > stands a tall bookshelf lined with books from Little Women to I Know
>> >> > Why
>> >> > the Caged Bird Sings. Across the room a butter-colored dresser-drawer
>> >> > reflects her image in its large mirror framed by carved flowers.
>> >> > Quickly
>> >> > adverting her eyes, she takes in the glass bottle of Miracle perfume
>> >> > and
>> >> > the organized assortment of make-up compacts and brushes. A
>> >> > Shabby-chic-style jewelry box is arranged on a corner of the dresser
>> >> > top, and necklaces hang on a pink heart-shape with tiny hooks
>> >> > protruding
>> >> > from the lace-overlay front. The open closet reveals clothes hanging
>> >> > from shortest sleeve length to longest as well as being color
>> >> > coordinated. Directly to the left of the entrance into her room, sits
>> >> > the thirty-two-inch TV purchased by Ryan, the ex, disguised as a
>> >> > Christmas present, but intended for the use of video games. Taking in
>> >> > years of memories and keepsakes, Bridgit finally turns back to the
>> >> > reflection in the mirror. Her blonde hair is pulled back in a long,
>> >> > wispy ponytail, an attempt to hide the sections of hair that have
>> >> > fallen
>> >> > out with portions of scalp still attached. Head settled on boney
>> >> > knees,
>> >> > she wonders at her compactness. Chest, stomach and waist are hidden
>> >> > behind skinny legs, and rail-thin arms wrap around just beneath the
>> >> > pale, gaunt face. Her eyes haunt her as they hold the longing and
>> >> > sadness grown deeper by another year.
>> >> >
>> >> >
>> >> > ------------------------------
>> >> >
>> >> > Message: 2
>> >> > Date: Mon, 06 Sep 2010 09:10:39 -0500
>> >> > From: "James H. \"Jim\" Canaday M.A. N6YR" <n6yr at sunflower.com>
>> >> > To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> > Subject: Re: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language,
>> >> > no
>> >> > adult content
>> >> > Message-ID: <201009061410.o86EAjd3005661 at smtp.sunflower.com>
>> >> > Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii"; format=flowed
>> >> >
>> >> > Hi Bridgit,
>> >> > descriptions are very good in this.
>> >> >
>> >> > I could be wrong but I think "adverting" you meant "averting."
>> >> > jc
>> >> >
>> >> >
>> >> > At 04:21 AM 9/6/2010, you wrote:
>> >> >
>> >> > >Dear List,
>> >> > >
>> >> > >Happy Labor Day to all. I am posting a piece I just worked on for a
>> >> > >class. Before it is workshopped, I thought I would let you lot
>> >> > >deconstruct it, and let me know what you think.
>> >> > >
>> >> > >Bridgit
>> >> > >
>> >> > >Snapshot
>> >> > >
>> >> > >Reaching the bottom steps of the basement, an observer would notice
>> >> > >the following scene: A naked lightbulb emanates a harsh yellow
>> >> > >brilliance stifled by the dark windowless, cinder-block walls and
>> >> > >open-rafter ceiling. The grey painted floor resembles hard, cold
>> >> > >stone. Separating the basement from the large family-room-sized
>> >> > >space, should be a plaster wall, but now just the wall studs remain
>> >> > >leaving a clear view into the large room converted into a
>> >> > >bedroom. A skinny, blonde, young woman, Bridgit, sits in the middle
>> >> > >of the room surrounded by scattered piles of photographs. Leaning
>> >> > >against the wrought iron footboard of her bed, she studies a
>> >> > >picture. With knees drawn up against her slender body, she stares
>> >> > >at the image of a young woman. The small window above the bed
>> >> > >shoots sunlight like a spotlight onto the section of floor the young
>> >> > >woman sits upon. Bits of light reflect off the pictures littering
>> >> > >the beige carpet around the young woman.
>> >> > >The pictures relay a moment modern technology has frozen in time. A
>> >> > >small-town family wedding snapped for the centuries. Bridgit is
>> >> > >twenty-one in the pictures. A single year ago. She remembers the
>> >> > >day, she remembers the feelings. Happiness that weddings evoke, but
>> >> > >sadness that the occasion is not her own to celebrate. Joy to see
>> >> > >relatives gone for too long, but restlessness to explore the world
>> >> > >too. It was a third cousin's wedding, but the whole clan showed up
>> >> > >to celebrate the nuptials. A panoramic shot included a large
>> >> > >portion of family members gathered at a long table enjoying the
>> >> > >home-cooked meal of chicken-fried chicken and gravy with mashed
>> >> > >potatoes and green bean casserole topped with real
>> >> > >onion-rings. Bridgit smiled demurely, picking at the food before
>> >> > >her, while Uncle Lance, to her right, intently shoveled mashed
>> >> > >potatoes in his mouth, and Tami, her mother, held a bit of chicken
>> >> > >mid-air with her fork, talking, most likely saying how,
>> >> > >"Fried-chicken is not a very elegant choice for a wedding, but I
>> >> > >guess that is what you are use to in small towns." Another picture
>> >> > >displays Bridgit in her black dress with a deep V in front exposing
>> >> > >a boney, but well tanned chest. Bronzed arms connected with
>> >> > >another's, she stood next to her fourteen-year-old cousin, Colin,
>> >> > >already taller than her. Her blue eyes gazed into the camera as she
>> >> > >flashed her one-dimpled smile. The focus of the next photo captured
>> >> > >the wedding party and guest doing the Bunnyhop. Clustered of to the
>> >> > >right, Uncle Doug and Aunt Becky grill her about college. She
>> >> > >smiled quietly as, "What are you studying?" "Still music?" and what
>> >> > >are your plans after graduation?" were fired at her. Years of dance
>> >> > >training and etiquette school have taught her to stand erect with
>> >> > >head held high. With her confident demeanor and three-inch heels,
>> >> > >she appeared taller than her average five-foot height. Later in the
>> >> > >evening, the camera snapped Bridgit laughing wildly as Uncle Brent
>> >> > >whipped her across the dance floor like Ginger Rogers. Another
>> >> > >moment captured Bridgit and Uncle Brent posing for the camera as he
>> >> > >dipped her low. Another shot has Bridgit kicking her black strappy
>> >> > >heels off as she prepared for a new round of dancing. Each
>> >> > >photograph is handled with care and placed in a tree creating a
>> >> > >timeline beginning with a picture of Bridgit's immediate family
>> >> > >dressed in their wedding attire posing for the first time in years,
>> >> > >to a snapshot of straggling dancers waltzing to the final song of
>> >> > >the night, "I Will Always Love You." Each picture displays a happy,
>> >> > >smiling young woman, but one single shot captured the truth. One
>> >> > >solitary picture alone shows her with the mask off. It is the photo
>> >> > >she now sits and studies intently.
>> >> > >Staring at the picture of herself, her expression is quizzical and
>> >> > >worn. Her gaze is intent as though she will discover some truth
>> >> > >about herself. A rare moment exposed displaying a part never meant
>> >> > >for public consumption, yet here it is for all to see. She cradles
>> >> > >the picture in her thin hands as if breaking it will destroy some
>> >> > >part of her. The camera revealed Bridgit resting her head on a
>> >> > >propped arm. Escaped tendrils of hair framed her tanned face, and
>> >> > >her blue, almond-shaped eyes looked off into the distance. Her
>> >> > >expression contained longing, dreams and hopes unrealized, mingled
>> >> > >with restlessness and deep sadness. Sitting alone, tucked away in a
>> >> > >corner of the reception hall, she believed herself unnoticed, but
>> >> > >the camera caught her. An X-ray imprinting her soul lay
>> >> > >bare. Always so careful to wear her mask. Never letting her guard
>> >> > >down, only to be trapped by a modern marvel.
>> >> > >Placing this final picture in its proper spot in the visual
>> >> > >timeline, Bridgit looks around the room. A blue "Happy-birthday"
>> >> > >balloon hangs deflated on the wall surrounded by pictures from high
>> >> > >school and college. Bridgit, Tera and Jessica smiled in their
>> >> > >red-and-white cheerleading uniforms. Bridgit standing at the grand
>> >> > >piano in the choir room, mouth opened as she belted "On My Own" from
>> >> > >Les Miserables. Bridgit engulfed by Ryan, her boyfriend, the boy
>> >> > >she thought she would marry. Bridgit and Tera, arms clasped around
>> >> > >each other's shoulders, grinning on graduation day. Bridgit sitting
>> >> > >on Joe's knee during a cast party for Cinderella. A letter pokes
>> >> > >out from behind the balloon, a love letter sent by a friend who
>> >> > >never forgot her, but that Bridgit could not muster the necessary
>> >> > >feelings for. The letter is a reminder that some one in the world
>> >> > >thinks she is special. A poster hangs on the opposite wall
>> >> > >displaying Kate and Leo at the bow of a ship, and next to this
>> >> > >stands a tall bookshelf lined with books from Little Women to I Know
>> >> > >Why the Caged Bird Sings. Across the room a butter-colored
>> >> > >dresser-drawer reflects her image in its large mirror framed by
>> >> > >carved flowers. Quickly adverting her eyes, she takes in the glass
>> >> > >bottle of Miracle perfume and the organized assortment of make-up
>> >> > >compacts and brushes. A Shabby-chic-style jewelry box is arranged
>> >> > >on a corner of the dresser top, and necklaces hang on a pink
>> >> > >heart-shape with tiny hooks protruding from the lace-overlay
>> >> > >front. The open closet reveals clothes hanging from shortest sleeve
>> >> > >length to longest as well as being color coordinated. Directly to
>> >> > >the left of the entrance into her room, sits the thirty-two-inch TV
>> >> > >purchased by Ryan, the ex, disguised as a Christmas present, but
>> >> > >intended for the use of video games. Taking in years of memories
>> >> > >and keepsakes, Bridgit finally turns back to the reflection in the
>> >> > >mirror. Her blonde hair is pulled back in a long, wispy ponytail,
>> >> > >an attempt to hide the sections of hair that have fallen out with
>> >> > >portions of scalp still attached. Head settled on boney knees, she
>> >> > >wonders at her compactness. Chest, stomach and waist are hidden
>> >> > >behind skinny legs, and rail-thin arms wrap around just beneath the
>> >> > >pale, gaunt face. Her eyes haunt her as they hold the longing and
>> >> > >sadness grown deeper by another year.
>> >> > >
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>> >> Message: 4
>> >> Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 10:23:21 -0400
>> >> From: "Chris Kuell" <ckuell at comcast.net>
>> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no
>> >> adult content
>> >> Message-ID: <3CBC991B5976433C88DD7DB5D71D1A95 at ChrisPC>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; format=flowed; charset="Windows-1252";
>> >> reply-type=original
>> >>
>> >> Hi Bridgit,
>> >>
>> >> I enjoyed your piece very much. You do a nice job of conveying emotion
>> >> along
>> >> with your memories invoked by looking over the photographs. You write
>> >> very
>> >>
>> >> visually here, and you may want to put in a few more other-sensory
>> >> details.
>> >> Does the basement smell musty? Like an old tin can? How about sound--is
>> >> there a clock ticking on a bureau? Water in the pipes from someone
>> >> upstairs
>> >> taking a shower? Is she cold, or hot? Next, I would caution about using
>> >> too
>> >> many details, especially at the beginning of the piece. Don't worry--I
>> >> understand exactly what you are doing, painting a picture, so to speak,
>> >> to
>> >>
>> >> put us, the reader, there. But too many details make the reader pay
>> >> attention to your words, to your writing, rather than getting absorbed
>> >> right
>> >> into your piece and then losing track of time as they read.
>> >>
>> >> Now I'm going to put on my editor's hat and insert a few comments into
>> >> your
>> >> text. Use them or dismiss them, as you see fit. Good luck with your
>> >> workshop.
>> >>
>> >> chris
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> Snapshot
>> >>
>> >> Reaching the bottom steps of the basement, (some editors would be put
>> >> off
>> >> by
>> >> starting with Reaching (a present participle?) so perhaps you might
>> >> start
>> >> simply with--At the end of the stairs in the basement...) an observer
>> >> would
>> >> notice the following scene: A naked lightbulb emanates a harsh yellow
>> >> brilliance stifled by the dark(,) windowless, cinder-block walls and
>> >> open-rafter ceiling. The grey painted floor resembles hard, cold stone.
>> >> Separating the basement from the large family-room-sized space, should
>> >> be
>> >> a
>> >> plaster wall, but now just the wall studs remain(,) leaving a clear
>> >> view
>> >> into the large room converted into a bedroom. A skinny, blonde, young
>> >> woman, Bridgit, sits in the middle of the room surrounded by scattered
>> >> piles
>> >> of photographs. Leaning against the wrought iron footboard of her bed,
>> >> she
>> >>
>> >> studies a picture. With knees drawn up against her slender body, she
>> >> stares
>> >> at the image of a young woman. The small window above the bed shoots
>> >> sunlight like a spotlight onto the section of floor the young woman
>> >> sits
>> >> upon. Bits of light reflect off the pictures littering the beige carpet
>> >> around the young woman.(you use 'young' 4 times relatively quickly
>> >> here,
>> >> which needs to be revised. In addition, in your first sentence you told
>> >> us
>> >>
>> >> the basement was windowless, which is inconsistant)
>> >> The pictures relay a moment modern technology has frozen in time.(I'd
>> >> delete
>> >> modern technology. Firstly, photography has been around for 150 years,
>> >> and
>> >>
>> >> although it's changed, everyone knows what it is. Plus, this is one of
>> >> those
>> >> instances where the extra words pull the reader back from the story and
>> >> make
>> >> us pay attention to your words, to your writing, which isn't what you
>> >> want)
>> >> A small-town family wedding snapped for the centuries. Bridgit is
>> >> twenty-one in the pictures. A single year ago. She remembers the day,
>> >> she
>> >> remembers the feelings. Happiness that weddings evoke, but sadness that
>> >> the
>> >> occasion is not her own to celebrate. Joy to see relatives gone for too
>> >> long, but restlessness to explore the world too.(you use forms of 'to'
>> >> 3
>> >> times in this sentence, I'd say the last one is the most out of place.
>> >> Consider something like - Joy to catch-up with little seen
>> >> relatives,accompanied by a restlessness to explore more of the
>> >> world...)
>> >> It was a third cousin?s wedding, but the whole clan showed up to
>> >> celebrate
>> >>
>> >> the nuptials. A panoramic shot included a large portion of family
>> >> members
>> >> gathered at a long table enjoying the home-cooked meal of chicken-fried
>> >> chicken (While I live in New England, and I've had chicken-fried-steak,
>> >> isn't chicken-fried-chicken just fried chicken?) and gravy with mashed
>> >> potatoes and green bean casserole topped with real onion-rings. Bridgit
>> >> smiled demurely, picking at the food before her, while Uncle Lance, to
>> >> her
>> >>
>> >> right, intently shoveled mashed potatoes in his mouth, and Tami, her
>> >> mother,
>> >> held a bit of chicken mid-air with her fork, talking, most likely
>> >> saying
>> >> how, ?Fried-chicken is not a very elegant choice for a wedding, but I
>> >> guess
>> >> that is what you are use to in small towns.? Another picture displays
>> >> Bridgit in her black dress with a deep V in front(,) exposing a boney,
>> >> but
>> >>
>> >> well tanned chest. Bronzed arms connected with another?s, she stood
>> >> next
>> >> to
>> >> her fourteen-year-old cousin, Colin, already taller than her. Her blue
>> >> eyes
>> >> gazed into the camera as she flashed her one-dimpled smile. The focus
>> >> of
>> >> the next photo captured the wedding party and guest doing the Bunnyhop.
>> >> Clustered of to the right, Uncle Doug and Aunt Becky grill her about
>> >> college. She smiled quietly as, ?What are you studying?? ?Still music??
>> >> and what are your plans after graduation?? were fired at her. Years of
>> >> dance training and etiquette school have (had?) taught her to stand
>> >> erect
>> >> with head held high. With her confident demeanor and three-inch heels,
>> >> she
>> >>
>> >> appeared taller than her average five-foot height.(average seems wrong
>> >> here.
>> >> I believe the average American woman is 5 foot 4, so perhaps you mean
>> >> normal?) Later in the evening, the camera snapped Bridgit laughing
>> >> wildly
>> >> as Uncle Brent whipped her across the dance floor like Ginger Rogers.
>> >> Another moment captured Bridgit and Uncle Brent posing for the camera
>> >> as
>> >> he
>> >> dipped her low. Another shot has Bridgit kicking her black strappy
>> >> heels
>> >> off as she prepared for a new round of dancing. Each photograph is
>> >> handled
>> >>
>> >> with care and placed in a tree(,) creating a timeline beginning with a
>> >> picture of Bridgit?s immediate family dressed in their wedding attire
>> >> posing
>> >> for the first time in years, to a snapshot of straggling dancers
>> >> waltzing
>> >> to
>> >> the final song of the night, ?I Will Always Love You.? Each picture
>> >> displays a happy, smiling young woman, but one single shot captured the
>> >> truth. One solitary picture alone shows her with the mask off. It is
>> >> the
>> >> photo she now sits and studies intently.
>> >> Staring at the picture of herself, her expression is quizzical and
>> >> worn.
>> >> Her gaze is intent as though she will discover some truth about
>> >> herself.
>> >> (I
>> >> really like this) A rare moment exposed displaying a part never meant
>> >> for
>> >> public consumption, yet here it is for all to see. She cradles the
>> >> picture
>> >>
>> >> in her thin hands as if breaking it will destroy some part of her. The
>> >> camera revealed Bridgit resting her head on a propped arm. Escaped
>> >> tendrils
>> >> of hair framed her tanned face, and her blue, almond-shaped eyes looked
>> >> off
>> >> into the distance. Her expression contained longing, dreams and hopes
>> >> unrealized, mingled with restlessness and deep sadness. Sitting alone,
>> >> tucked away in a corner of the reception hall, she believed herself
>> >> unnoticed, but the camera caught her. An X-ray imprinting her soul lay
>> >> (laid?) bare.(another great line) Always so careful to wear her
>> >> mask.(You
>> >> have already used the mask simile, and it's kind of cliche, so perhaps
>> >> you
>> >>
>> >> can find something different) Never letting her guard down, only to be
>> >> trapped by a modern marvel(not so modern--perhaps simply camera, or
>> >> digital
>> >> timestopper?) .
>> >> Placing this final picture in its proper spot in the visual timeline,
>> >> Bridgit looks around the room. A blue ?Happy-birthday? balloon hangs
>> >> deflated on the wall surrounded by pictures from high school and
>> >> college.
>> >> Bridgit, Tera and Jessica smiled in their red-and-white cheerleading
>> >> uniforms. Bridgit standing at the grand piano in the choir room, mouth
>> >> opened as she belted ?On My Own? from Les Miserables (I love that song,
>> >> although Empty Chairs and Empty Tables was probably my favorite) .
>> >> Bridgit
>> >>
>> >> engulfed by Ryan, her boyfriend, the boy she thought she would marry.
>> >> Bridgit and Tera, arms clasped around each other?s shoulders, grinning
>> >> on
>> >> graduation day. Bridgit sitting on Joe?s knee during a cast party for
>> >> Cinderella. A letter pokes out from behind the balloon, a love letter
>> >> sent
>> >>
>> >> by a friend who never forgot her, but that Bridgit could not muster the
>> >> necessary feelings for. (The letter is- consider deleting this, as the
>> >> new
>> >>
>> >> sentence will have more impact) a reminder that some one in the world
>> >> thinks she is special. A poster hangs on the opposite wall displaying
>> >> Kate
>> >>
>> >> and Leo at the bow of a ship, and next to this stands a tall bookshelf
>> >> lined
>> >> with books from Little Women to I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings. Across
>> >> the
>> >> room a butter-colored dresser-drawer reflects her image in its large
>> >> mirror
>> >> framed by carved flowers. Quickly adverting her eyes, she takes in the
>> >> glass bottle of Miracle perfume and the organized assortment of make-up
>> >> compacts and brushes. A Shabby-chic-style jewelry box is arranged on a
>> >> corner of the dresser top, and necklaces hang on a pink heart-shape
>> >> with
>> >> tiny hooks protruding from the lace-overlay front. The open closet
>> >> reveals
>> >>
>> >> clothes hanging from shortest sleeve length to longest (as well as
>> >> being-
>> >> consider replaceing with 'all') color coordinated. Directly to the left
>> >> of
>> >>
>> >> the entrance into her room, sits the thirty-two-inch TV purchased by
>> >> Ryan,
>> >>
>> >> the ex, disguised as a Christmas present, (but- consider replacing with
>> >> 'selfishly) intended for the use of video games. Taking in years of
>> >> memories and keepsakes, Bridgit finally turns back to the reflection in
>> >> the
>> >> mirror. Her blonde hair is pulled back in a long, wispy ponytail, an
>> >> attempt to hide the sections of hair that have fallen out with portions
>> >> of
>> >>
>> >> scalp still attached. Head settled on boney knees, she wonders at her
>> >> compactness. Chest, stomach and waist are hidden behind skinny legs,
>> >> and
>> >> rail-thin arms wrap around just beneath the pale, gaunt face. Her eyes
>> >> (haunt her as they- consider deleting) hold (the- if you delete the
>> >> first
>> >> section, you should also delete this) longing and sadness grown deeper
>> >> by
>> >> another year.
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> ------------------------------
>> >>
>> >> Message: 5
>> >> Date: Mon, 06 Sep 2010 15:32:28 -0500
>> >> From: "James H. \"Jim\" Canaday M.A. N6YR" <n6yr at sunflower.com>
>> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] creative non-fiction "snapshot" no language, no
>> >> adult content
>> >> Message-ID: <201009062032.o86KWZch013037 at smtp.sunflower.com>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii"; format=flowed
>> >>
>> >> well you are welcome.
>> >> one of the reasons I hesitated in posting is that "advert" is a verb
>> >> and not just a noun for something put up to advertise something.
>> >> I did wish for a little more plot but I also do not know what your
>> >> assignment was.
>> >> jc
>> >>
>> >> At 01:23 PM 9/6/2010, you wrote:
>> >>
>> >> >JC,
>> >> >
>> >> >You are right, I meant averting. I have gone through the piece
>> >> >about 20 times, and I can't believe I missed that! *smile* Glad I
>> >> >posted it here first. Thanks.
>> >> >
>> >> >Bridgit
>> >> >
>> >> > > From: stylist-request at nfbnet.org
>> >> > > Subject: stylist Digest, Vol 77, Issue 5
>> >> > > To: stylist at nfbnet.org
>> >> > > Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 12:00:08 -0500
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>> >> > > 1. creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no adult content
>> >> > > (Bridgit Pollpeter)
>> >> > > 2. Re: creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no adult
>> >> > > content (James H. "Jim" Canaday M.A. N6YR)
>> >> > >
>> >> > >
>> >> > > ----------------------------------------------------------------------
>> >> > >
>> >> > > Message: 1
>> >> > > Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 04:21:23 -0500
>> >> > > From: Bridgit Pollpeter <bpollpeter at hotmail.com>
>> >> > > To: writers division <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> > > Subject: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no
>> >> > > adult content
>> >> > > Message-ID: <SNT136-w646C2D35961CF77A0F5FAC4700 at phx.gbl>
>> >> > > Content-Type: text/plain; charset="Windows-1252"
>> >> > >
>> >> > >
>> >> > > Dear List,
>> >> > >
>> >> > > Happy Labor Day to all. I am posting a piece I just worked on for
>> >> > a class. Before it is workshopped, I thought I would let you lot
>> >> > deconstruct it, and let me know what you think.
>> >> > >
>> >> > > Bridgit
>> >> > >
>> >> > > Snapshot
>> >> > >
>> >> > > Reaching the bottom steps of the basement, an observer would
>> >> > notice the following scene: A naked lightbulb emanates a harsh
>> >> > yellow brilliance stifled by the dark windowless, cinder-block
>> >> > walls and open-rafter ceiling. The grey painted floor resembles
>> >> > hard, cold stone. Separating the basement from the large
>> >> > family-room-sized space, should be a plaster wall, but now just the
>> >> > wall studs remain leaving a clear view into the large room
>> >> > converted into a bedroom. A skinny, blonde, young woman, Bridgit,
>> >> > sits in the middle of the room surrounded by scattered piles of
>> >> > photographs. Leaning against the wrought iron footboard of her bed,
>> >> > she studies a picture. With knees drawn up against her slender
>> >> > body, she stares at the image of a young woman. The small window
>> >> > above the bed shoots sunlight like a spotlight onto the section of
>> >> > floor the young woman sits upon. Bits of light reflect off the
>> >> > pictures littering the beige carpet around the young woman.
>> >> > > The pictures relay a moment modern technology has frozen in time.
>> >> > A small-town family wedding snapped for the centuries. Bridgit is
>> >> > twenty-one in the pictures. A single year ago. She remembers the
>> >> > day, she remembers the feelings. Happiness that weddings evoke, but
>> >> > sadness that the occasion is not her own to celebrate. Joy to see
>> >> > relatives gone for too long, but restlessness to explore the world
>> >> > too. It was a third cousin?s wedding, but the whole clan showed up
>> >> > to celebrate the nuptials. A panoramic shot included a large
>> >> > portion of family members gathered at a long table enjoying the
>> >> > home-cooked meal of chicken-fried chicken and gravy with mashed
>> >> > potatoes and green bean casserole topped with real onion-rings.
>> >> > Bridgit smiled demurely, picking at the food before her, while
>> >> > Uncle Lance, to her right, intently shoveled mashed potatoes in his
>> >> > mouth, and Tami, her mother, held a bit of chicken mid-air with her
>> >> > fork, talking, most likely saying how, ?Fried-chicken is not a very
>> >> > elegant choice for a wedding, but I guess that is what you are use
>> >> > to in small towns.? Another picture displays Bridgit in her black
>> >> > dress with a deep V in front exposing a boney, but well tanned
>> >> > chest. Bronzed arms connected with another?s, she stood next to her
>> >> > fourteen-year-old cousin, Colin, already taller than her. Her blue
>> >> > eyes gazed into the camera as she flashed her one-dimpled smile.
>> >> > The focus of the next photo captured the wedding party and guest
>> >> > doing the Bunnyhop. Clustered of to the right, Uncle Doug and Aunt
>> >> > Becky grill her about college. She smiled quietly as, ?What are you
>> >> > studying?? ?Still music?? and what are your plans after
>> >> > graduation?? were fired at her. Years of dance training and
>> >> > etiquette school have taught her to stand erect with head held
>> >> > high. With her confident demeanor and three-inch heels, she
>> >> > appeared taller than her average five-foot height. Later in the
>> >> > evening, the camera snapped Bridgit laughing wildly as Uncle Brent
>> >> > whipped her across the dance floor like Ginger Rogers. Another
>> >> > moment captured Bridgit and Unc
>> >> >le Brent posing for the camera as he dipped her low. Another shot
>> >> >has Bridgit kicking her black strappy heels off as she prepared for
>> >> >a new round of dancing. Each photograph is handled with care and
>> >> >placed in a tree creating a timeline beginning with a picture of
>> >> >Bridgit?s immediate family dressed in their wedding attire posing
>> >> >for the first time in years, to a snapshot of straggling dancers
>> >> >waltzing to the final song of the night, ?I Will Always Love You.?
>> >> >Each picture displays a happy, smiling young woman, but one single
>> >> >shot captured the truth. One solitary picture alone shows her with
>> >> >the mask off. It is the photo she now sits and studies intently.
>> >> > > Staring at the picture of herself, her expression is quizzical
>> >> > and worn. Her gaze is intent as though she will discover some truth
>> >> > about herself. A rare moment exposed displaying a part never meant
>> >> > for public consumption, yet here it is for all to see. She cradles
>> >> > the picture in her thin hands as if breaking it will destroy some
>> >> > part of her. The camera revealed Bridgit resting her head on a
>> >> > propped arm. Escaped tendrils of hair framed her tanned face, and
>> >> > her blue, almond-shaped eyes looked off into the distance. Her
>> >> > expression contained longing, dreams and hopes unrealized, mingled
>> >> > with restlessness and deep sadness. Sitting alone, tucked away in a
>> >> > corner of the reception hall, she believed herself unnoticed, but
>> >> > the camera caught her. An X-ray imprinting her soul lay bare.
>> >> > Always so careful to wear her mask. Never letting her guard down,
>> >> > only to be trapped by a modern marvel.
>> >> > > Placing this final picture in its proper spot in the visual
>> >> > timeline, Bridgit looks around the room. A blue ?Happy-birthday?
>> >> > balloon hangs deflated on the wall surrounded by pictures from high
>> >> > school and college. Bridgit, Tera and Jessica smiled in their
>> >> > red-and-white cheerleading uniforms. Bridgit standing at the grand
>> >> > piano in the choir room, mouth opened as she belted ?On My Own?
>> >> > from Les Miserables. Bridgit engulfed by Ryan, her boyfriend, the
>> >> > boy she thought she would marry. Bridgit and Tera, arms clasped
>> >> > around each other?s shoulders, grinning on graduation day. Bridgit
>> >> > sitting on Joe?s knee during a cast party for Cinderella. A letter
>> >> > pokes out from behind the balloon, a love letter sent by a friend
>> >> > who never forgot her, but that Bridgit could not muster the
>> >> > necessary feelings for. The letter is a reminder that some one in
>> >> > the world thinks she is special. A poster hangs on the opposite
>> >> > wall displaying Kate and Leo at the bow of a ship, and next to this
>> >> > stands a tall bookshelf lined with books from Little Women to I
>> >> > Know Why the Caged Bird Sings. Across the room a butter-colored
>> >> > dresser-drawer reflects her image in its large mirror framed by
>> >> > carved flowers. Quickly adverting her eyes, she takes in the glass
>> >> > bottle of Miracle perfume and the organized assortment of make-up
>> >> > compacts and brushes. A Shabby-chic-style jewelry box is arranged
>> >> > on a corner of the dresser top, and necklaces hang on a pink
>> >> > heart-shape with tiny hooks protruding from the lace-overlay front.
>> >> > The open closet reveals clothes hanging from shortest sleeve length
>> >> > to longest as well as being color coordinated. Directly to the left
>> >> > of the entrance into her room, sits the thirty-two-inch TV
>> >> > purchased by Ryan, the ex, disguised as a Christmas present, but
>> >> > intended for the use of video games. Taking in years of memories
>> >> > and keepsakes, Bridgit finally turns back to the reflection in the
>> >> > mirror. Her blonde hair is pulled back in a long, wispy ponytail,
>> >> > an attempt to hide the sections of hair that have fallen out with
>> >> > portions of scalp still att
>> >> >ached. Head settled on boney knees, she wonders at her compactness.
>> >> >Chest, stomach and waist are hidden behind skinny legs, and
>> >> >rail-thin arms wrap around just beneath the pale, gaunt face. Her
>> >> >eyes haunt her as they hold the longing and sadness grown deeper by
>> >> >another year.
>> >> > >
>> >> > >
>> >> > > ------------------------------
>> >> > >
>> >> > > Message: 2
>> >> > > Date: Mon, 06 Sep 2010 09:10:39 -0500
>> >> > > From: "James H. \"Jim\" Canaday M.A. N6YR" <n6yr at sunflower.com>
>> >> > > To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> > > Subject: Re: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language,
>> >> > > no
>> >> > > adult content
>> >> > > Message-ID: <201009061410.o86EAjd3005661 at smtp.sunflower.com>
>> >> > > Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii"; format=flowed
>> >> > >
>> >> > > Hi Bridgit,
>> >> > > descriptions are very good in this.
>> >> > >
>> >> > > I could be wrong but I think "adverting" you meant "averting."
>> >> > > jc
>> >> > >
>> >> > >
>> >> > > At 04:21 AM 9/6/2010, you wrote:
>> >> > >
>> >> > > >Dear List,
>> >> > > >
>> >> > > >Happy Labor Day to all. I am posting a piece I just worked on for
>> >> > > > a
>> >> > > >class. Before it is workshopped, I thought I would let you lot
>> >> > > >deconstruct it, and let me know what you think.
>> >> > > >
>> >> > > >Bridgit
>> >> > > >
>> >> > > >Snapshot
>> >> > > >
>> >> > > >Reaching the bottom steps of the basement, an observer would
>> >> > > > notice
>> >> > > >the following scene: A naked lightbulb emanates a harsh yellow
>> >> > > >brilliance stifled by the dark windowless, cinder-block walls and
>> >> > > >open-rafter ceiling. The grey painted floor resembles hard, cold
>> >> > > >stone. Separating the basement from the large family-room-sized
>> >> > > >space, should be a plaster wall, but now just the wall studs
>> >> > > > remain
>> >> > > >leaving a clear view into the large room converted into a
>> >> > > >bedroom. A skinny, blonde, young woman, Bridgit, sits in the
>> >> > > > middle
>> >> > > >of the room surrounded by scattered piles of photographs. Leaning
>> >> > > >against the wrought iron footboard of her bed, she studies a
>> >> > > >picture. With knees drawn up against her slender body, she stares
>> >> > > >at the image of a young woman. The small window above the bed
>> >> > > >shoots sunlight like a spotlight onto the section of floor the
>> >> > > > young
>> >> > > >woman sits upon. Bits of light reflect off the pictures littering
>> >> > > >the beige carpet around the young woman.
>> >> > > >The pictures relay a moment modern technology has frozen in time.
>> >> > > > A
>> >> > > >small-town family wedding snapped for the centuries. Bridgit is
>> >> > > >twenty-one in the pictures. A single year ago. She remembers the
>> >> > > >day, she remembers the feelings. Happiness that weddings evoke,
>> >> > > > but
>> >> > > >sadness that the occasion is not her own to celebrate. Joy to see
>> >> > > >relatives gone for too long, but restlessness to explore the world
>> >> > > >too. It was a third cousin's wedding, but the whole clan showed up
>> >> > > >to celebrate the nuptials. A panoramic shot included a large
>> >> > > >portion of family members gathered at a long table enjoying the
>> >> > > >home-cooked meal of chicken-fried chicken and gravy with mashed
>> >> > > >potatoes and green bean casserole topped with real
>> >> > > >onion-rings. Bridgit smiled demurely, picking at the food before
>> >> > > >her, while Uncle Lance, to her right, intently shoveled mashed
>> >> > > >potatoes in his mouth, and Tami, her mother, held a bit of chicken
>> >> > > >mid-air with her fork, talking, most likely saying how,
>> >> > > >"Fried-chicken is not a very elegant choice for a wedding, but I
>> >> > > >guess that is what you are use to in small towns." Another picture
>> >> > > >displays Bridgit in her black dress with a deep V in front
>> >> > > > exposing
>> >> > > >a boney, but well tanned chest. Bronzed arms connected with
>> >> > > >another's, she stood next to her fourteen-year-old cousin, Colin,
>> >> > > >already taller than her. Her blue eyes gazed into the camera as
>> >> > > > she
>> >> > > >flashed her one-dimpled smile. The focus of the next photo
>> >> > > > captured
>> >> > > >the wedding party and guest doing the Bunnyhop. Clustered of to
>> >> > > > the
>> >> > > >right, Uncle Doug and Aunt Becky grill her about college. She
>> >> > > >smiled quietly as, "What are you studying?" "Still music?" and
>> >> > > > what
>> >> > > >are your plans after graduation?" were fired at her. Years of
>> >> > > > dance
>> >> > > >training and etiquette school have taught her to stand erect with
>> >> > > >head held high. With her confident demeanor and three-inch heels,
>> >> > > >she appeared taller than her average five-foot height. Later in
>> >> > > > the
>> >> > > >evening, the camera snapped Bridgit laughing wildly as Uncle Brent
>> >> > > >whipped her across the dance floor like Ginger Rogers. Another
>> >> > > >moment captured Bridgit and Uncle Brent posing for the camera as
>> >> > > > he
>> >> > > >dipped her low. Another shot has Bridgit kicking her black strappy
>> >> > > >heels off as she prepared for a new round of dancing. Each
>> >> > > >photograph is handled with care and placed in a tree creating a
>> >> > > >timeline beginning with a picture of Bridgit's immediate family
>> >> > > >dressed in their wedding attire posing for the first time in
>> >> > > > years,
>> >> > > >to a snapshot of straggling dancers waltzing to the final song of
>> >> > > >the night, "I Will Always Love You." Each picture displays a
>> >> > > > happy,
>> >> > > >smiling young woman, but one single shot captured the truth. One
>> >> > > >solitary picture alone shows her with the mask off. It is the
>> >> > > > photo
>> >> > > >she now sits and studies intently.
>> >> > > >Staring at the picture of herself, her expression is quizzical and
>> >> > > >worn. Her gaze is intent as though she will discover some truth
>> >> > > >about herself. A rare moment exposed displaying a part never meant
>> >> > > >for public consumption, yet here it is for all to see. She cradles
>> >> > > >the picture in her thin hands as if breaking it will destroy some
>> >> > > >part of her. The camera revealed Bridgit resting her head on a
>> >> > > >propped arm. Escaped tendrils of hair framed her tanned face, and
>> >> > > >her blue, almond-shaped eyes looked off into the distance. Her
>> >> > > >expression contained longing, dreams and hopes unrealized, mingled
>> >> > > >with restlessness and deep sadness. Sitting alone, tucked away in
>> >> > > > a
>> >> > > >corner of the reception hall, she believed herself unnoticed, but
>> >> > > >the camera caught her. An X-ray imprinting her soul lay
>> >> > > >bare. Always so careful to wear her mask. Never letting her guard
>> >> > > >down, only to be trapped by a modern marvel.
>> >> > > >Placing this final picture in its proper spot in the visual
>> >> > > >timeline, Bridgit looks around the room. A blue "Happy-birthday"
>> >> > > >balloon hangs deflated on the wall surrounded by pictures from
>> >> > > > high
>> >> > > >school and college. Bridgit, Tera and Jessica smiled in their
>> >> > > >red-and-white cheerleading uniforms. Bridgit standing at the grand
>> >> > > >piano in the choir room, mouth opened as she belted "On My Own"
>> >> > > > from
>> >> > > >Les Miserables. Bridgit engulfed by Ryan, her boyfriend, the boy
>> >> > > >she thought she would marry. Bridgit and Tera, arms clasped around
>> >> > > >each other's shoulders, grinning on graduation day. Bridgit
>> >> > > > sitting
>> >> > > >on Joe's knee during a cast party for Cinderella. A letter pokes
>> >> > > >out from behind the balloon, a love letter sent by a friend who
>> >> > > >never forgot her, but that Bridgit could not muster the necessary
>> >> > > >feelings for. The letter is a reminder that some one in the world
>> >> > > >thinks she is special. A poster hangs on the opposite wall
>> >> > > >displaying Kate and Leo at the bow of a ship, and next to this
>> >> > > >stands a tall bookshelf lined with books from Little Women to I
>> >> > > > Know
>> >> > > >Why the Caged Bird Sings. Across the room a butter-colored
>> >> > > >dresser-drawer reflects her image in its large mirror framed by
>> >> > > >carved flowers. Quickly adverting her eyes, she takes in the glass
>> >> > > >bottle of Miracle perfume and the organized assortment of make-up
>> >> > > >compacts and brushes. A Shabby-chic-style jewelry box is arranged
>> >> > > >on a corner of the dresser top, and necklaces hang on a pink
>> >> > > >heart-shape with tiny hooks protruding from the lace-overlay
>> >> > > >front. The open closet reveals clothes hanging from shortest
>> >> > > > sleeve
>> >> > > >length to longest as well as being color coordinated. Directly to
>> >> > > >the left of the entrance into her room, sits the thirty-two-inch
>> >> > > > TV
>> >> > > >purchased by Ryan, the ex, disguised as a Christmas present, but
>> >> > > >intended for the use of video games. Taking in years of memories
>> >> > > >and keepsakes, Bridgit finally turns back to the reflection in the
>> >> > > >mirror. Her blonde hair is pulled back in a long, wispy ponytail,
>> >> > > >an attempt to hide the sections of hair that have fallen out with
>> >> > > >portions of scalp still attached. Head settled on boney knees, she
>> >> > > >wonders at her compactness. Chest, stomach and waist are hidden
>> >> > > >behind skinny legs, and rail-thin arms wrap around just beneath
>> >> > > > the
>> >> > > >pale, gaunt face. Her eyes haunt her as they hold the longing and
>> >> > > >sadness grown deeper by another year.
>> >> > > >
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>> >> Message: 6
>> >> Date: Mon, 06 Sep 2010 17:24:46 -0400
>> >> From: loristay <loristay at aol.com>
>> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no
>> >> adult content
>> >> Message-ID: <85262B0E.AA6C.49EE.9DB6.2EE0AE8295E1 at aol.com>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="iso-8859-13"
>> >>
>> >> i gather from the last line that the person you speak about has cancer?
>> >> ?A
>> >> strange form, one that scalps her?
>> >> I did some proofreading, interspersed with your text, regarding
>> >> punctuation and spelling, etc. ?Nothing really deep. ?The purpose of
>> >> the
>> >> piece is plain. ?One can deduce from it that the speaker is examining
>> >> her
>> >> life, noting fallen dreams, and perhaps looking at the end of it. ?You
>> >> used your own name, so I do wonder if it's based on a real situation.
>> >> Lori
>> >> On Sep 6, 2010, at 5:21:23 AM, "Bridgit Pollpeter"
>> >> <bpollpeter at hotmail.com> wrote:
>> >>
>> >> From: "Bridgit Pollpeter" <bpollpeter at hotmail.com>
>> >> Subject: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no
>> >> adult
>> >> content
>> >> Date: September 6, 2010 5:21:23 AM EDT
>> >> To: "writers division" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >>
>> >> Dear List,
>> >>
>> >> Happy Labor Day to all. I am posting a piece I just worked on for a
>> >> class.
>> >> Before it is workshopped, I thought I would let you lot deconstruct it,
>> >> and let me know what you think.
>> >>
>> >> Bridgit
>> >>
>> >> Snapshot
>> >>
>> >> Reaching the bottom steps of the basement, an observer would notice the
>> >> following scene: A naked lightbulb emanates a harsh yellow brilliance
>> >> stifled by the dark windowless, cinder-block walls and open-rafter
>> >> ceiling. The grey painted floor resembles hard, cold stone. Separating
>> >> the
>> >> basement from the large family-room-sized space,
>> >> (Don't need this comma)
>> >> should be a plaster wall, but now just the wall studs remain leaving a
>> >> clear view into the large room converted into a bedroom. A skinny,
>> >> blonde,
>> >> ?I'd probably have written; ?Bridgit, A young woman, skinny, blonde,
>> >> sits...
>> >> young woman, Bridgit, sits in the middle of the room surrounded by
>> >> scattered piles of photographs. Leaning against the wrought iron
>> >> footboard
>> >> of her bed,?she studies a picture. With knees drawn up against her
>> >> slender
>> >> body, she stares at the image of a young woman. The small window above
>> >> the
>> >> bed shoots sunlight like a spotlight onto the section of floor the
>> >> young
>> >> woman sits upon. Bits of light reflect off the pictures littering the
>> >> beige carpet around the young woman.
>> >> The pictures relay a moment modern technology has frozen in time. A
>> >> small-town family wedding snapped for the centuries. Bridgit is
>> >> twenty-one
>> >> in the pictures. A single year ago.
>> >>
>> >> She remembers the day, she remembers the feelings.
>> >> probably grammatically this period should be a colon.
>> >> Happiness that weddings evoke, but sadness that the occasion is not her
>> >> own to celebrate. Joy to see relatives gone for too long, but
>> >> restlessness
>> >> to explore the world too. It was a third cousin?s wedding, but the
>> >> whole
>> >> clan showed up to celebrate the nuptials. A panoramic shot included a
>> >> large portion of family members gathered at a long table enjoying the
>> >> home-cooked meal of chicken-fried chicken
>> >> why not just say home cooked meal of fried chicken and gravy...etc?
>> >> and gravy with mashed potatoes and green bean casserole topped with
>> >> real
>> >> onion-rings. Bridgit smiled demurely, picking at the food before her,
>> >> while Uncle Lance, to her right, intently shoveled mashed potatoes in
>> >> his
>> >> mouth, and Tami, her mother, held a bit of chicken mid-air with her
>> >> fork,
>> >> talking, most likely saying how, ?Fried-chicken is not a very elegant
>> >> choice for a wedding, but I guess that is what you are use
>> >> used--needs a 'd'
>> >> to in small towns.? Another picture displays Bridgit in her black dress
>> >> with a deep V in front exposing a boney,
>> >> bony is spelled b o n y.
>> >> but well tanned chest. Bronzed arms connected with another?s, she stood
>> >> next to her fourteen-year-old cousin, Colin, already taller than her.
>> >> taller than she--would be a better choice
>> >> Her blue eyes gazed into the camera as she flashed her one-dimpled
>> >> smile.
>> >> The focus of the next photo captured the wedding party and guest
>> >> do you mean guests?
>> >> doing the Bunnyhop. Clustered of
>> >> clustered off (o f f, not o f)
>> >> to the right, Uncle Doug and Aunt Becky grill her about college. She
>> >> smiled quietly as, ?What are you studying?? ?Still music?? and what are
>> >> your plans after graduation?? were fired at her. Years of dance
>> >> training
>> >> and etiquette school have taught her to stand erect with head held
>> >> high.
>> >> With her confident demeanor and three-inch heels, she appeared taller
>> >> than
>> >> her average five-foot height. Later in the evening, the camera snapped
>> >> Bridgit laughing wildly as Uncle Brent whipped her across the dance
>> >> floor
>> >> like Ginger Rogers. Another moment captured Bridgit and Uncle Brent
>> >> posing
>> >> for the camera as he dipped her low. Another shot has Bridgit kicking
>> >> her
>> >> black strappy heels off as she prepared for a new round of dancing.
>> >> Each
>> >> photograph is handled with care and placed in a tree creating a
>> >> timeline
>> >> beginning with a picture of Bridgit?s immediate family dressed in their
>> >> wedding attire posing for the first time in years, to a snapshot of
>> >> straggling dancers waltzing to the final song of the night, ?I Will
>> >> Always
>> >> Love You.? Each picture displays a happy, smiling young woman, but one
>> >> single shot captured the truth. One solitary picture alone shows her
>> >> with
>> >> the mask off. It is the photo she now sits and studies intently.
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> Staring at the picture of herself, her expression is quizzical and
>> >> worn.
>> >> Her gaze is intent as though she will discover some truth about
>> >> herself. A
>> >> rare moment exposed displaying a part never meant for public
>> >> consumption,
>> >> yet here it is for all to see. She cradles the picture in her thin
>> >> hands
>> >> as if breaking it will destroy some part of her. The camera revealed
>> >> Bridgit resting her head on a propped arm. Escaped tendrils of hair
>> >> framed
>> >> her tanned face, and her blue, almond-shaped eyes looked off into the
>> >> distance. Her expression contained longing, dreams and hopes
>> >> unrealized,
>> >> mingled with restlessness and deep sadness. Sitting alone, tucked away
>> >> in
>> >> a corner of the reception hall, she believed herself unnoticed, but the
>> >> camera caught her. An X-ray imprinting her soul lay
>> >> I think you mean laid bare (l a i d)
>> >> bare. Always so careful to wear her mask. Never letting her guard down,
>> >> only to be trapped by a modern marvel.
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> Placing this final picture in its proper spot in the visual timeline,
>> >> Bridgit looks around the room. A blue ?Happy-birthday? balloon hangs
>> >> deflated on the wall surrounded by pictures from high school and
>> >> college.
>> >> Bridgit, Tera and Jessica smiled in their red-and-white cheerleading
>> >> uniforms. Bridgit standing at the grand piano in the choir room, mouth
>> >> opened as she belted ?On My Own? from Les Miserables. Bridgit engulfed
>> >> by
>> >> Ryan, her boyfriend, the boy she thought she would marry. Bridgit and
>> >> Tera, arms clasped around each other?s shoulders, grinning on
>> >> graduation
>> >> day. Bridgit sitting on Joe?s knee during a cast party for Cinderella.
>> >> A
>> >> letter pokes out from behind the balloon, a love letter sent by a
>> >> friend
>> >> who never forgot her, but that Bridgit could not muster the necessary
>> >> feelings for. The letter is a reminder that some one in the world
>> >> thinks
>> >> she is special. A poster hangs on the opposite wall displaying Kate and
>> >> Leo at the bow of a ship, and next to this stands a tall bookshelf
>> >> lined
>> >> with books from Little Women to I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings. Across
>> >> the room a butter-colored dresser-drawer reflects her image in its
>> >> large
>> >> mirror framed by carved flowers.
>> >>
>> >> Quickly adverting
>> >> This should be averting (a v e r t i n g)--no d.
>> >> her eyes, she takes in the glass bottle of Miracle perfume and the
>> >> organized assortment of make-up compacts and brushes. A
>> >> Shabby-chic-style
>> >> jewelry box is arranged on a corner of the dresser top, and necklaces
>> >> hang
>> >> on a pink heart-shape with tiny hooks protruding from the lace-overlay
>> >> front. The open closet reveals clothes hanging from shortest sleeve
>> >> length
>> >> to longest as well as being color coordinated. Directly to the left of
>> >> the
>> >> entrance into her room, sits the thirty-two-inch TV purchased by Ryan,
>> >> the
>> >> ex, disguised as a Christmas present, but intended for the use of video
>> >> games. Taking in years of memories and keepsakes, Bridgit finally turns
>> >> back to the reflection in the mirror. Her blonde hair is pulled back in
>> >> a
>> >> long, wispy ponytail, an attempt to hide the sections of hair that have
>> >> fallen out with portions of scalp still attached. Head settled on boney
>> >> There's that extra e again!
>> >> knees, she wonders at her compactness. Chest, stomach and waist are
>> >> hidden
>> >> behind skinny legs, and rail-thin arms wrap around just beneath the
>> >> pale,
>> >> gaunt face. Her eyes haunt her as they hold the longing and sadness
>> >> grown
>> >> deeper by another year.
>> >>
>> >> _______________________________________________
>> >> Writers Division web site:
>> >> http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
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>> >>
>> >>
>> >> ------------------------------
>> >>
>> >> Message: 7
>> >> Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 18:23:41 -0400
>> >> From: "Joe Orozco" <jsorozco at gmail.com>
>> >> To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: [stylist] Recent Addition
>> >> Message-ID: <D09A56E53D6940629EBF4B364B4F716F at Rufus>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="US-ASCII"
>> >>
>> >> I think people may have been discussing the prequel mentioned in the
>> >> annotation below. If so, you might be interested in this recently added
>> >> title to the BARD collection. It's not my cup of juice, but I know how
>> >> nice
>> >> it is to find other titles by the same author.
>> >>
>> >> ***
>> >>
>> >> Author of Eat, Pray, Love (RC 61789) recounts her relationship with
>> >> Felipe,
>> >> whom she met in Bali. He shares her fear of matrimony--but marry they
>> >> must
>> >> if he is to remain with her in the United States. Chronicles her second
>> >> journey, contemplating love and researching marriage through Southeast
>> >> Asia.
>> >> Bestseller. 2010.
>> >>
>> >> ***
>> >>
>> >> Joe
>> >>
>> >> "Hard work spotlights the character of people: some turn up their
>> >> sleeves,
>> >> some turn up their noses, and some don't turn up at all."--Sam Ewing
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> ------------------------------
>> >>
>> >> Message: 8
>> >> Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 17:47:43 -0500
>> >> From: "Robert Leslie Newman" <newmanrl at cox.net>
>> >> To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no
>> >> adult content
>> >> Message-ID: <A157533B0C55422C9C8A6CF12FC68834 at Newmans>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="iso-8859-1"
>> >>
>> >> I liked the jail simplism --- the wall studs that surrounded the area
>> >> she
>> >> sat in. (I think Chris, lori, Jim and Pricilla all had good
>> >> suggestions/corrections.) that was a bleak picture!
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> -----Original Message-----
>> >> From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
>> >> Behalf Of loristay
>> >> Sent: Monday, September 06, 2010 4:25 PM
>> >> To: Writer's Division Mailing List
>> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no
>> >> adult
>> >> content
>> >>
>> >> i gather from the last line that the person you speak about has cancer?
>> >> ?A
>> >> strange form, one that scalps her?
>> >> I did some proofreading, interspersed with your text, regarding
>> >> punctuation
>> >> and spelling, etc. ?Nothing really deep. ?The purpose of the piece is
>> >> plain.
>> >> ?One can deduce from it that the speaker is examining her life, noting
>> >> fallen dreams, and perhaps looking at the end of it. ?You used your own
>> >> name, so I do wonder if it's based on a real situation.
>> >> Lori
>> >> On Sep 6, 2010, at 5:21:23 AM, "Bridgit Pollpeter"
>> >> <bpollpeter at hotmail.com>
>> >> wrote:
>> >>
>> >> From: "Bridgit Pollpeter" <bpollpeter at hotmail.com>
>> >> Subject: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no
>> >> adult
>> >> content
>> >> Date: September 6, 2010 5:21:23 AM EDT
>> >> To: "writers division" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >>
>> >> Dear List,
>> >>
>> >> Happy Labor Day to all. I am posting a piece I just worked on for a
>> >> class.
>> >> Before it is workshopped, I thought I would let you lot deconstruct it,
>> >> and
>> >> let me know what you think.
>> >>
>> >> Bridgit
>> >>
>> >> Snapshot
>> >>
>> >> Reaching the bottom steps of the basement, an observer would notice the
>> >> following scene: A naked lightbulb emanates a harsh yellow brilliance
>> >> stifled by the dark windowless, cinder-block walls and open-rafter
>> >> ceiling.
>> >> The grey painted floor resembles hard, cold stone. Separating the
>> >> basement
>> >> from the large family-room-sized space,
>> >> (Don't need this comma)
>> >> should be a plaster wall, but now just the wall studs remain leaving a
>> >> clear
>> >> view into the large room converted into a bedroom. A skinny, blonde,
>> >> ?I'd probably have written; ?Bridgit, A young woman, skinny, blonde,
>> >> sits...
>> >> young woman, Bridgit, sits in the middle of the room surrounded by
>> >> scattered
>> >> piles of photographs. Leaning against the wrought iron footboard of her
>> >> bed,?she studies a picture. With knees drawn up against her slender
>> >> body,
>> >> she stares at the image of a young woman. The small window above the
>> >> bed
>> >> shoots sunlight like a spotlight onto the section of floor the young
>> >> woman
>> >> sits upon. Bits of light reflect off the pictures littering the beige
>> >> carpet
>> >> around the young woman.
>> >> The pictures relay a moment modern technology has frozen in time. A
>> >> small-town family wedding snapped for the centuries. Bridgit is
>> >> twenty-one
>> >> in the pictures. A single year ago.
>> >>
>> >> She remembers the day, she remembers the feelings.
>> >> probably grammatically this period should be a colon.
>> >> Happiness that weddings evoke, but sadness that the occasion is not her
>> >> own
>> >> to celebrate. Joy to see relatives gone for too long, but restlessness
>> >> to
>> >> explore the world too. It was a third cousin?s wedding, but the whole
>> >> clan
>> >> showed up to celebrate the nuptials. A panoramic shot included a large
>> >> portion of family members gathered at a long table enjoying the
>> >> home-cooked
>> >> meal of chicken-fried chicken
>> >> why not just say home cooked meal of fried chicken and gravy...etc?
>> >> and gravy with mashed potatoes and green bean casserole topped with
>> >> real
>> >> onion-rings. Bridgit smiled demurely, picking at the food before her,
>> >> while
>> >> Uncle Lance, to her right, intently shoveled mashed potatoes in his
>> >> mouth,
>> >> and Tami, her mother, held a bit of chicken mid-air with her fork,
>> >> talking,
>> >> most likely saying how, ?Fried-chicken is not a very elegant choice for
>> >> a
>> >> wedding, but I guess that is what you are use
>> >> used--needs a 'd'
>> >> to in small towns.? Another picture displays Bridgit in her black dress
>> >> with
>> >> a deep V in front exposing a boney,
>> >> bony is spelled b o n y.
>> >> but well tanned chest. Bronzed arms connected with another?s, she stood
>> >> next
>> >> to her fourteen-year-old cousin, Colin, already taller than her.
>> >> taller than she--would be a better choice
>> >> Her blue eyes gazed into the camera as she flashed her one-dimpled
>> >> smile.
>> >> The focus of the next photo captured the wedding party and guest
>> >> do you mean guests?
>> >> doing the Bunnyhop. Clustered of
>> >> clustered off (o f f, not o f)
>> >> to the right, Uncle Doug and Aunt Becky grill her about college. She
>> >> smiled
>> >> quietly as, ?What are you studying?? ?Still music?? and what are your
>> >> plans
>> >> after graduation?? were fired at her. Years of dance training and
>> >> etiquette
>> >> school have taught her to stand erect with head held high. With her
>> >> confident demeanor and three-inch heels, she appeared taller than her
>> >> average five-foot height. Later in the evening, the camera snapped
>> >> Bridgit
>> >> laughing wildly as Uncle Brent whipped her across the dance floor like
>> >> Ginger Rogers. Another moment captured Bridgit and Uncle Brent posing
>> >> for
>> >> the camera as he dipped her low. Another shot has Bridgit kicking her
>> >> black
>> >> strappy heels off as she prepared for a new round of dancing. Each
>> >> photograph is handled with care and placed in a tree creating a
>> >> timeline
>> >> beginning with a picture of Bridgit?s immediate family dressed in their
>> >> wedding attire posing for the first time in years, to a snapshot of
>> >> straggling dancers waltzing to the final song of the night, ?I Will
>> >> Always
>> >> Love You.? Each picture displays a happy, smiling young woman, but one
>> >> single shot captured the truth. One solitary picture alone shows her
>> >> with
>> >> the mask off. It is the photo she now sits and studies intently.
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> Staring at the picture of herself, her expression is quizzical and
>> >> worn.
>> >> Her
>> >> gaze is intent as though she will discover some truth about herself. A
>> >> rare
>> >> moment exposed displaying a part never meant for public consumption,
>> >> yet
>> >> here it is for all to see. She cradles the picture in her thin hands as
>> >> if
>> >> breaking it will destroy some part of her. The camera revealed Bridgit
>> >> resting her head on a propped arm. Escaped tendrils of hair framed her
>> >> tanned face, and her blue, almond-shaped eyes looked off into the
>> >> distance.
>> >> Her expression contained longing, dreams and hopes unrealized, mingled
>> >> with
>> >> restlessness and deep sadness. Sitting alone, tucked away in a corner
>> >> of
>> >> the
>> >> reception hall, she believed herself unnoticed, but the camera caught
>> >> her.
>> >> An X-ray imprinting her soul lay
>> >> I think you mean laid bare (l a i d)
>> >> bare. Always so careful to wear her mask. Never letting her guard down,
>> >> only
>> >> to be trapped by a modern marvel.
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> Placing this final picture in its proper spot in the visual timeline,
>> >> Bridgit looks around the room. A blue ?Happy-birthday? balloon hangs
>> >> deflated on the wall surrounded by pictures from high school and
>> >> college.
>> >> Bridgit, Tera and Jessica smiled in their red-and-white cheerleading
>> >> uniforms. Bridgit standing at the grand piano in the choir room, mouth
>> >> opened as she belted ?On My Own? from Les Miserables. Bridgit engulfed
>> >> by
>> >> Ryan, her boyfriend, the boy she thought she would marry. Bridgit and
>> >> Tera,
>> >> arms clasped around each other?s shoulders, grinning on graduation day.
>> >> Bridgit sitting on Joe?s knee during a cast party for Cinderella. A
>> >> letter
>> >> pokes out from behind the balloon, a love letter sent by a friend who
>> >> never
>> >> forgot her, but that Bridgit could not muster the necessary feelings
>> >> for.
>> >> The letter is a reminder that some one in the world thinks she is
>> >> special.
>> >> A
>> >> poster hangs on the opposite wall displaying Kate and Leo at the bow of
>> >> a
>> >> ship, and next to this stands a tall bookshelf lined with books from
>> >> Little
>> >> Women to I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings. Across the room a
>> >> butter-colored
>> >> dresser-drawer reflects her image in its large mirror framed by carved
>> >> flowers.
>> >>
>> >> Quickly adverting
>> >> This should be averting (a v e r t i n g)--no d.
>> >> her eyes, she takes in the glass bottle of Miracle perfume and the
>> >> organized
>> >> assortment of make-up compacts and brushes. A Shabby-chic-style jewelry
>> >> box
>> >> is arranged on a corner of the dresser top, and necklaces hang on a
>> >> pink
>> >> heart-shape with tiny hooks protruding from the lace-overlay front. The
>> >> open
>> >> closet reveals clothes hanging from shortest sleeve length to longest
>> >> as
>> >> well as being color coordinated. Directly to the left of the entrance
>> >> into
>> >> her room, sits the thirty-two-inch TV purchased by Ryan, the ex,
>> >> disguised
>> >> as a Christmas present, but intended for the use of video games. Taking
>> >> in
>> >> years of memories and keepsakes, Bridgit finally turns back to the
>> >> reflection in the mirror. Her blonde hair is pulled back in a long,
>> >> wispy
>> >> ponytail, an attempt to hide the sections of hair that have fallen out
>> >> with
>> >> portions of scalp still attached. Head settled on boney
>> >> There's that extra e again!
>> >> knees, she wonders at her compactness. Chest, stomach and waist are
>> >> hidden
>> >> behind skinny legs, and rail-thin arms wrap around just beneath the
>> >> pale,
>> >> gaunt face. Her eyes haunt her as they hold the longing and sadness
>> >> grown
>> >> deeper by another year.
>> >>
>> >> _______________________________________________
>> >> Writers Division web site:
>> >> http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
>> >> <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
>> >>
>> >> stylist mailing list
>> >> stylist at nfbnet.org
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>> >> To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
>> >> stylist:
>> >> http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/loristay%40aol.com
>> >>
>> >> _______________________________________________
>> >> Writers Division web site:
>> >> http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
>> >> <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
>> >>
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>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> ------------------------------
>> >>
>> >> Message: 9
>> >> Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 17:49:45 -0500
>> >> From: Priscilla McKinley <priscilla.mckinley at gmail.com>
>> >> To: jsorozco at gmail.com, "Writer's Division Mailing List"
>> >> <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Recent Addition
>> >> Message-ID:
>> >> <AANLkTikikX8rkL=scqV4JF22fCxuSGFhyr9g5qrur4Yz at mail.gmail.com>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset=ISO-8859-1
>> >>
>> >> Joe,
>> >>
>> >> While I knew she had published a second book, I decided that II wasn't
>> >> going to waste my time, as I didn't care for the style of the first.
>> >> And speaking of books, when are we going to receive another section
>> >> from yours? You intrigued your readers with the last passage, so some
>> >> of us are ready for more. *smile* (How's that for pressure?)
>> >>
>> >> Priscilla
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> On 9/6/10, Joe Orozco <jsorozco at gmail.com> wrote:
>> >> > I think people may have been discussing the prequel mentioned in the
>> >> > annotation below. If so, you might be interested in this recently
>> >> > added
>> >> > title to the BARD collection. It's not my cup of juice, but I know
>> >> > how
>> >> > nice
>> >> > it is to find other titles by the same author.
>> >> >
>> >> > ***
>> >> >
>> >> > Author of Eat, Pray, Love (RC 61789) recounts her relationship with
>> >> > Felipe,
>> >> > whom she met in Bali. He shares her fear of matrimony--but marry they
>> >> > must
>> >> > if he is to remain with her in the United States. Chronicles her
>> >> > second
>> >> > journey, contemplating love and researching marriage through
>> >> > Southeast
>> >> > Asia.
>> >> > Bestseller. 2010.
>> >> >
>> >> > ***
>> >> >
>> >> > Joe
>> >> >
>> >> > "Hard work spotlights the character of people: some turn up their
>> >> > sleeves,
>> >> > some turn up their noses, and some don't turn up at all."--Sam Ewing
>> >> >
>> >> >
>> >> > _______________________________________________
>> >> > Writers Division web site:
>> >> > http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
>> >> > <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
>> >> >
>> >> > stylist mailing list
>> >> > stylist at nfbnet.org
>> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
>> >> > To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
>> >> > stylist:
>> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/priscilla.mckinley%40gmail.com
>> >> >
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> ------------------------------
>> >>
>> >> Message: 10
>> >> Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 18:48:37 -0400
>> >> From: "Jewel S." <herekittykat2 at gmail.com>
>> >> To: stylist at nfbnet.org
>> >> Subject: [stylist] Chapter Newsletters
>> >> Message-ID:
>> >> <AANLkTi=-+iR2UmZMufBRkOC9JTwobT-rfeKqRMiGy9am at mail.gmail.com>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset=ISO-8859-1
>> >>
>> >> Hi all,
>> >>
>> >> My local chapter's president has given the newsletter over into my
>> >> hands. She will still be Editor-in-Chief, but it is my job to either
>> >> outsource reports to toher members or write the reports myself. For
>> >> example, I'll be writing an article for the newsletter giving a brief
>> >> history of White Cane Safety Month, but will be asking our Vice
>> >> President to write the report on last month's Member Drive, since I
>> >> was not present. After I write and/or collect the written articles, I
>> >> send it to the presient/editor-in-chief for review and she passes it
>> >> on for e-mail distribution and printing in large print or Braille for
>> >> those who don't have computers.
>> >>
>> >> So the first point of this e-mail was to share with you all the
>> >> priveledge I have been given in being assigned as editor and
>> >> coordinator of the newsletter. I'm really excited about it. She had me
>> >> do one newsletter as a Guest Editor, because she was super busy with
>> >> legislative work and homeschooling her daughter, and obviously she was
>> >> impressed with my work, since she has permanently assigned me to it!
>> >>
>> >> The second reason I have written on this topic is to ask advice on
>> >> writing a newsletter. Are there any guidelines out there for me to
>> >> consider? What sorts of things should I put in the newsletter to spice
>> >> it up? This month I can put the brief history fo White Cane Safety
>> >> Month in there, and that'll be a nice addition to the otherwise
>> >> report-only newsletter, but I'd like to be able to add this bit of
>> >> spice each month. The Editor-in-Chief has asked that I not put
>> >> detailed reports on legislative issues, as there is a seperate mailing
>> >> list for that information, so writing articles about local legal
>> >> issues is out. The newsletter is for all members from all sorts of
>> >> backgrounds, so I feel it would be inappropriate to write about
>> >> something specific to a sub-grup, such as students or the newly
>> >> blinded. I have done a Member Profile in the past on a member who,
>> >> though a well-educated doctor with a lot to say, was very quiet in
>> >> meetings. I did an interview with him and wrote the report off of my
>> >> notes. The member rprofile was a great success, and I hope to do
>> >> another on another member, but it requires that I interview the
>> >> person, and people aren't always available for interview in time for
>> >> it to be put in the newsletter.
>> >>
>> >> Does anyone have some suggestions about simple but effective additions
>> >> to the newsletter to make it more interesting to the members of our
>> >> chapter?
>> >> --
>> >> Thank you guys for being here to ask! I love this list!
>> >>
>> >> ~Jewel
>> >> Check out my blog about accessibility for the blind!
>> >> Treasure Chest for the Blind: http://blindtreasurechest.blogspot.com
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> ------------------------------
>> >>
>> >> Message: 11
>> >> Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 18:20:19 -0500
>> >> From: "Robert Leslie Newman" <newmanrl at cox.net>
>> >> To: "'Marion Gwizdala, M.S.'" <marion.gwizdala at verizon.net>,
>> >> "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Re-Introducing Myself
>> >> Message-ID: <509C37D8CEFD41578F5DD7015E5DDE24 at Newmans>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii"
>> >>
>> >> Marion
>> >>
>> >> Good to have you with us! NAGDU --- what a great word --- set of
>> >> letters
>> >> that sound --- well interesting. And it sounds like you have a diverse
>> >> set
>> >> of talents; with the writing, the music, (POSI - not sure I've heard of
>> >> it,
>> >> and would like to). Also, an article on service dogs in the health care
>> >> area, that could be a multifaceted piece!
>> >>
>> >> I'll write you off list- put the pitch to you to join the Division!
>> >>
>> >> Welcome and we all will learn from one another. (This is a pretty open
>> >> and
>> >> helpful group.)
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> -----Original Message-----
>> >> From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
>> >> Behalf Of Marion Gwizdala, M.S.
>> >> Sent: Monday, September 06, 2010 9:22 AM
>> >> To: stylist at nfbnet.org
>> >> Subject: [stylist] Re-Introducing Myself
>> >>
>> >> Dear All,
>> >> A couple of months ago I made some changes to my NFBNET subscriptions.
>> >> As the result, it seems as if my subscription to this list was dropped.
>> >> Since I have not posted here in quite some time, I thought I would send
>> >> a
>> >> brief message to introduce myself to those who may have recently
>> >> subscribed
>> >> and let others know some exciting news relevant to this list.
>> >> I am the President of the National Association of Guide Dog Users
>> >> (NAGDU), a strong and proud division of the National Federation of the
>> >> Blind. I am also a professional musician who performs a genre of music
>> >> known
>> >> as "Positive (Posi) Music" and am the Music Director at New Life Unity
>> >> Church in Tampa, Fla. I am also in private practice as a Certified
>> >> Hypnotherapist. In addition, I combine my work with NAGDU, my talent as
>> >> an
>> >> entertainer, and my experience as a counselor to offer seminars and
>> >> workshops that combine my music with spoken word.
>> >> I have published several articles on a variety of health and wellness
>> >> topics, such as hypnosis for health & personal enhancement, the
>> >> metaphysics
>> >> of the body-mind-spirit connection, reincarnation, and issues related
>> >> to
>> >> blindness and the use of guide dogs. I am currently working on a
>> >> multimedia
>> >> quit smoking manual and have been commissioned by a major peer-reviewed
>> >> medical journal to write an article about service dogs in the health
>> >> care
>> >> setting.
>> >> I look forward to getting acquainted with some old friends on this list
>> >> and getting to know some of the new subscribers. The lists of NFBNET
>> >> are
>> >> an
>> >> awesome resource for networking and exchanging ideas and experiences.
>> >> the
>> >> written word is a powerful tool to help us further the goals of the
>> >> National
>> >> Federation of the Blind and its philosophy. I look forward to meeting
>> >> many
>> >> of you in person when you come to the Sunshine State next July! If
>> >> anyone
>> >> wishes to get in touch with me in person, my contact information is
>> >> below
>> >> my
>> >> signature.
>> >>
>> >> Fraternally yours,
>> >> Marion Gwizdala, M.S., C.Ht.
>> >> 813-626-2789
>> >> Marion.Gwizdala at Verizon.net
>> >> _______________________________________________
>> >> Writers Division web site:
>> >> http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
>> >> <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
>> >>
>> >> stylist mailing list
>> >> stylist at nfbnet.org
>> >> http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
>> >> To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
>> >> stylist:
>> >> http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/newmanrl%40cox.net
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> ------------------------------
>> >>
>> >> Message: 12
>> >> Date: Mon, 06 Sep 2010 18:51:50 -0500
>> >> From: "James H. \"Jim\" Canaday M.A. N6YR" <n6yr at sunflower.com>
>> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] creative non-fiction "Snapshot" no language, no
>> >> adult content
>> >> Message-ID: <201009062351.o86Npn1f003973 at smtp.sunflower.com>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="iso-8859-1"; format=flowed
>> >>
>> >> yes Lori,
>> >> I too was puzzled by the hair out in patches. I
>> >> guess because of my training and history and the
>> >> bleak setting I thought it was one of those
>> >> self-destructive personal habbits that she pulled out clumps of her own
>> >> hair.
>> >> jc
>> >>
>> >> At 04:24 PM 9/6/2010, you wrote:
>> >> >i gather from the last line that the person you
>> >> >speak about has cancer? A strange form, one that scalps her?
>> >> >I did some proofreading, interspersed with your
>> >> >text, regarding punctuation and spelling,
>> >> >etc. Nothing really deep. The purpose of the
>> >> >piece is plain. One can deduce from it that the
>> >> >speaker is examining her life, noting fallen
>> >> >dreams, and perhaps looking at the end of
>> >> >it. You used your own name, so I do wonder if it's based on a real
>> >> > situation.
>> >> >Lori
>> >> >On Sep 6, 2010, at 5:21:23 AM, "Bridgit
>> >> >Pollpeter" <bpollpeter at hotmail.com> wrote:
>> >> >
>> >> >From: "Bridgit Pollpeter" <bpollpeter at hotmail.com>
>> >> >Subject: [stylist] creative non-fiction
>> >> >"Snapshot" no language, no adult content
>> >> >Date: September 6, 2010 5:21:23 AM EDT
>> >> >To: "writers division" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> >
>> >> >Dear List,
>> >> >
>> >> >Happy Labor Day to all. I am posting a piece I
>> >> >just worked on for a class. Before it is
>> >> >workshopped, I thought I would let you lot
>> >> >deconstruct it, and let me know what you think.
>> >> >
>> >> >Bridgit
>> >> >
>> >> >Snapshot
>> >> >
>> >> >Reaching the bottom steps of the basement, an
>> >> >observer would notice the following scene: A
>> >> >naked lightbulb emanates a harsh yellow
>> >> >brilliance stifled by the dark windowless,
>> >> >cinder-block walls and open-rafter ceiling. The
>> >> >grey painted floor resembles hard, cold stone.
>> >> >Separating the basement from the large family-room-sized space,
>> >> >(Don't need this comma)
>> >> >should be a plaster wall, but now just the wall
>> >> >studs remain leaving a clear view into the large
>> >> >room converted into a bedroom. A skinny, blonde,
>> >> > I'd probably have written; Bridgit, A young woman, skinny, blonde,
>> >> > sits...
>> >> >young woman, Bridgit, sits in the middle of the
>> >> >room surrounded by scattered piles of
>> >> >photographs. Leaning against the wrought iron
>> >> >footboard of her bed, she studies a picture.
>> >> >With knees drawn up against her slender body,
>> >> >she stares at the image of a young woman. The
>> >> >small window above the bed shoots sunlight like
>> >> >a spotlight onto the section of floor the young
>> >> >woman sits upon. Bits of light reflect off the
>> >> >pictures littering the beige carpet around the young woman.
>> >> >The pictures relay a moment modern technology
>> >> >has frozen in time. A small-town family wedding
>> >> >snapped for the centuries. Bridgit is twenty-one
>> >> >in the pictures. A single year ago.
>> >> >
>> >> >She remembers the day, she remembers the feelings.
>> >> >probably grammatically this period should be a colon.
>> >> >Happiness that weddings evoke, but sadness that
>> >> >the occasion is not her own to celebrate. Joy to
>> >> >see relatives gone for too long, but
>> >> >restlessness to explore the world too. It was a
>> >> >third cousin?s wedding, but the whole clan
>> >> >showed up to celebrate the nuptials. A panoramic
>> >> >shot included a large portion of family members
>> >> >gathered at a long table enjoying the home-cooked meal of
>> >> > chicken-fried
>> >> > chicken
>> >> >why not just say home cooked meal of fried chicken and gravy...etc?
>> >> >and gravy with mashed potatoes and green bean
>> >> >casserole topped with real onion-rings. Bridgit
>> >> >smiled demurely, picking at the food before her,
>> >> >while Uncle Lance, to her right, intently
>> >> >shoveled mashed potatoes in his mouth, and Tami,
>> >> >her mother, held a bit of chicken mid-air with
>> >> >her fork, talking, most likely saying how,
>> >> >?Fried-chicken is not a very elegant choice for
>> >> >a wedding, but I guess that is what you are use
>> >> >used--needs a 'd'
>> >> >to in small towns.? Another picture displays
>> >> >Bridgit in her black dress with a deep V in front exposing a boney,
>> >> >bony is spelled b o n y.
>> >> >but well tanned chest. Bronzed arms connected
>> >> >with another?s, she stood next to her
>> >> >fourteen-year-old cousin, Colin, already taller than her.
>> >> >taller than she--would be a better choice
>> >> >Her blue eyes gazed into the camera as she
>> >> >flashed her one-dimpled smile. The focus of the
>> >> >next photo captured the wedding party and guest
>> >> >do you mean guests?
>> >> >doing the Bunnyhop. Clustered of
>> >> >clustered off (o f f, not o f)
>> >> >to the right, Uncle Doug and Aunt Becky grill
>> >> >her about college. She smiled quietly as, ?What
>> >> >are you studying?? ?Still music?? and what are
>> >> >your plans after graduation?? were fired at her.
>> >> >Years of dance training and etiquette school
>> >> >have taught her to stand erect with head held
>> >> >high. With her confident demeanor and three-inch
>> >> >heels, she appeared taller than her average
>> >> >five-foot height. Later in the evening, the
>> >> >camera snapped Bridgit laughing wildly as Uncle
>> >> >Brent whipped her across the dance floor like
>> >> >Ginger Rogers. Another moment captured Bridgit
>> >> >and Uncle Brent posing for the camera as he
>> >> >dipped her low. Another shot has Bridgit kicking
>> >> >her black strappy heels off as she prepared for
>> >> >a new round of dancing. Each photograph is
>> >> >handled with care and placed in a tree creating
>> >> >a timeline beginning with a picture of Bridgit?s
>> >> >immediate family dressed in their wedding attire
>> >> >posing for the first time in years, to a
>> >> >snapshot of straggling dancers waltzing to the
>> >> >final song of the night, ?I Will Always Love
>> >> >You.? Each picture displays a happy, smiling
>> >> >young woman, but one single shot captured the
>> >> >truth. One solitary picture alone shows her with
>> >> >the mask off. It is the photo she now sits and studies intently.
>> >> >
>> >> >
>> >> >Staring at the picture of herself, her
>> >> >expression is quizzical and worn. Her gaze is
>> >> >intent as though she will discover some truth
>> >> >about herself. A rare moment exposed displaying
>> >> >a part never meant for public consumption, yet
>> >> >here it is for all to see. She cradles the
>> >> >picture in her thin hands as if breaking it will
>> >> >destroy some part of her. The camera revealed
>> >> >Bridgit resting her head on a propped arm.
>> >> >Escaped tendrils of hair framed her tanned face,
>> >> >and her blue, almond-shaped eyes looked off into
>> >> >the distance. Her expression contained longing,
>> >> >dreams and hopes unrealized, mingled with
>> >> >restlessness and deep sadness. Sitting alone,
>> >> >tucked away in a corner of the reception hall,
>> >> >she believed herself unnoticed, but the camera
>> >> >caught her. An X-ray imprinting her soul lay
>> >> >I think you mean laid bare (l a i d)
>> >> >bare. Always so careful to wear her mask. Never
>> >> >letting her guard down, only to be trapped by a modern marvel.
>> >> >
>> >> >
>> >> >Placing this final picture in its proper spot in
>> >> >the visual timeline, Bridgit looks around the
>> >> >room. A blue ?Happy-birthday? balloon hangs
>> >> >deflated on the wall surrounded by pictures from
>> >> >high school and college. Bridgit, Tera and
>> >> >Jessica smiled in their red-and-white
>> >> >cheerleading uniforms. Bridgit standing at the
>> >> >grand piano in the choir room, mouth opened as
>> >> >she belted ?On My Own? from Les Miserables.
>> >> >Bridgit engulfed by Ryan, her boyfriend, the boy
>> >> >she thought she would marry. Bridgit and Tera,
>> >> >arms clasped around each other?s shoulders,
>> >> >grinning on graduation day. Bridgit sitting on
>> >> >Joe?s knee during a cast party for Cinderella. A
>> >> >letter pokes out from behind the balloon, a love
>> >> >letter sent by a friend who never forgot her,
>> >> >but that Bridgit could not muster the necessary
>> >> >feelings for. The letter is a reminder that some
>> >> >one in the world thinks she is special. A poster
>> >> >hangs on the opposite wall displaying Kate and
>> >> >Leo at the bow of a ship, and next to this
>> >> >stands a tall bookshelf lined with books from
>> >> >Little Women to I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings.
>> >> >Across the room a butter-colored dresser-drawer
>> >> >reflects her image in its large mirror framed by carved flowers.
>> >> >
>> >> >Quickly adverting
>> >> >This should be averting (a v e r t i n g)--no d.
>> >> >her eyes, she takes in the glass bottle of
>> >> >Miracle perfume and the organized assortment of
>> >> >make-up compacts and brushes. A
>> >> >Shabby-chic-style jewelry box is arranged on a
>> >> >corner of the dresser top, and necklaces hang on
>> >> >a pink heart-shape with tiny hooks protruding
>> >> >from the lace-overlay front. The open closet
>> >> >reveals clothes hanging from shortest sleeve
>> >> >length to longest as well as being color
>> >> >coordinated. Directly to the left of the
>> >> >entrance into her room, sits the thirty-two-inch
>> >> >TV purchased by Ryan, the ex, disguised as a
>> >> >Christmas present, but intended for the use of
>> >> >video games. Taking in years of memories and
>> >> >keepsakes, Bridgit finally turns back to the
>> >> >reflection in the mirror. Her blonde hair is
>> >> >pulled back in a long, wispy ponytail, an
>> >> >attempt to hide the sections of hair that have
>> >> >fallen out with portions of scalp still attached. Head settled on
>> >> > boney
>> >> >There's that extra e again!
>> >> >knees, she wonders at her compactness. Chest,
>> >> >stomach and waist are hidden behind skinny legs,
>> >> >and rail-thin arms wrap around just beneath the
>> >> >pale, gaunt face. Her eyes haunt her as they
>> >> >hold the longing and sadness grown deeper by another year.
>> >> >
>> >> >_______________________________________________
>> >> >Writers Division web site:
>> >> >http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
>> >> > <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
>> >> >
>> >> >stylist mailing list
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>> >> > stylist:
>> >> >http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/loristay%40aol.com
>> >> >
>> >> >_______________________________________________
>> >> >Writers Division web site:
>> >> >http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
>> >> > <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
>> >> >
>> >> >stylist mailing list
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>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> ------------------------------
>> >>
>> >> Message: 13
>> >> Date: Tue, 7 Sep 2010 01:16:50 +0100
>> >> From: helene ryles <dreamavdb at googlemail.com>
>> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Chapter Newsletters
>> >> Message-ID:
>> >> <AANLkTikZgJ0D3jb=whc_FoOvXU5QPd89udPQ_tdVCTTU at mail.gmail.com>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset=ISO-8859-1
>> >>
>> >> congratulations on getting this job. i wish you the best of luck.
>> >>
>> >> i would advice you to keep your articles varied. it is a good idea to
>> >> interview people especially other blind people for this newspread of
>> >> yours.
>> >> sorry don't have more advice but i wish you luck anyway from helene
>> >>
>> >> On 06/09/2010, Jewel S. <herekittykat2 at gmail.com> wrote:
>> >> > Hi all,
>> >> >
>> >> > My local chapter's president has given the newsletter over into my
>> >> > hands. She will still be Editor-in-Chief, but it is my job to either
>> >> > outsource reports to toher members or write the reports myself. For
>> >> > example, I'll be writing an article for the newsletter giving a brief
>> >> > history of White Cane Safety Month, but will be asking our Vice
>> >> > President to write the report on last month's Member Drive, since I
>> >> > was not present. After I write and/or collect the written articles, I
>> >> > send it to the presient/editor-in-chief for review and she passes it
>> >> > on for e-mail distribution and printing in large print or Braille for
>> >> > those who don't have computers.
>> >> >
>> >> > So the first point of this e-mail was to share with you all the
>> >> > priveledge I have been given in being assigned as editor and
>> >> > coordinator of the newsletter. I'm really excited about it. She had
>> >> > me
>> >> > do one newsletter as a Guest Editor, because she was super busy with
>> >> > legislative work and homeschooling her daughter, and obviously she
>> >> > was
>> >> > impressed with my work, since she has permanently assigned me to it!
>> >> >
>> >> > The second reason I have written on this topic is to ask advice on
>> >> > writing a newsletter. Are there any guidelines out there for me to
>> >> > consider? What sorts of things should I put in the newsletter to
>> >> > spice
>> >> > it up? This month I can put the brief history fo White Cane Safety
>> >> > Month in there, and that'll be a nice addition to the otherwise
>> >> > report-only newsletter, but I'd like to be able to add this bit of
>> >> > spice each month. The Editor-in-Chief has asked that I not put
>> >> > detailed reports on legislative issues, as there is a seperate
>> >> > mailing
>> >> > list for that information, so writing articles about local legal
>> >> > issues is out. The newsletter is for all members from all sorts of
>> >> > backgrounds, so I feel it would be inappropriate to write about
>> >> > something specific to a sub-grup, such as students or the newly
>> >> > blinded. I have done a Member Profile in the past on a member who,
>> >> > though a well-educated doctor with a lot to say, was very quiet in
>> >> > meetings. I did an interview with him and wrote the report off of my
>> >> > notes. The member rprofile was a great success, and I hope to do
>> >> > another on another member, but it requires that I interview the
>> >> > person, and people aren't always available for interview in time for
>> >> > it to be put in the newsletter.
>> >> >
>> >> > Does anyone have some suggestions about simple but effective
>> >> > additions
>> >> > to the newsletter to make it more interesting to the members of our
>> >> > chapter?
>> >> > --
>> >> > Thank you guys for being here to ask! I love this list!
>> >> >
>> >> > ~Jewel
>> >> > Check out my blog about accessibility for the blind!
>> >> > Treasure Chest for the Blind: http://blindtreasurechest.blogspot.com
>> >> >
>> >> > _______________________________________________
>> >> > Writers Division web site:
>> >> > http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
>> >> > <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
>> >> >
>> >> > stylist mailing list
>> >> > stylist at nfbnet.org
>> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
>> >> > To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
>> >> > stylist:
>> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/dreamavdb%40googlemail.com
>> >> >
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> ------------------------------
>> >>
>> >> Message: 14
>> >> Date: Mon, 06 Sep 2010 18:49:28 -0500
>> >> From: "James H. \"Jim\" Canaday M.A. N6YR" <n6yr at sunflower.com>
>> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Chapter Newsletters
>> >> Message-ID: <201009062349.o86NnS8m003675 at smtp.sunflower.com>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii"; format=flowed
>> >>
>> >> Hi Jewel,
>> >> my first advice is to make sure your newsletter isn't just like
>> >> everybody else's!
>> >> our chapter doesn't have a newsletter. we have an e-mail listserv.
>> >> but to make your newsletter different here are some ideas:
>> >> try to make your newsletter local by getting some local history of
>> >> blind people in your community, history of people with disabilities,
>> >> or history of perhaps how the government dealt with blind/disabled
>> >> people there.
>> >> member profile is a great idea.
>> >> sometimes in a newsletter you can do a different twist on member
>> >> profile: you can do "name that member" where you might give some
>> >> little-known information, interests or history of a member and see
>> >> who names your member first.
>> >> again to make your newsletter local, get a story in each issue about
>> >> a blind person's experience walking somewhere, working somewhere,
>> >> eating somewhere, recreating somewhere, etc. it would be a kind of a
>> >> review from blindness perspective.
>> >> you also can include in your newsletter recipes, or jokes,
>> >> especially of local flavor.
>> >> if a blind person visits your community, have a talk with him or her
>> >> and put that in your newsletter.
>> >>
>> >> hope these ideas help.
>> >> jc
>> >>
>> >> At 05:48 PM 9/6/2010, you wrote:
>> >> >Hi all,
>> >> >
>> >> >My local chapter's president has given the newsletter over into my
>> >> >hands. She will still be Editor-in-Chief, but it is my job to either
>> >> >outsource reports to toher members or write the reports myself. For
>> >> >example, I'll be writing an article for the newsletter giving a brief
>> >> >history of White Cane Safety Month, but will be asking our Vice
>> >> >President to write the report on last month's Member Drive, since I
>> >> >was not present. After I write and/or collect the written articles, I
>> >> >send it to the presient/editor-in-chief for review and she passes it
>> >> >on for e-mail distribution and printing in large print or Braille for
>> >> >those who don't have computers.
>> >> >
>> >> >So the first point of this e-mail was to share with you all the
>> >> >priveledge I have been given in being assigned as editor and
>> >> >coordinator of the newsletter. I'm really excited about it. She had me
>> >> >do one newsletter as a Guest Editor, because she was super busy with
>> >> >legislative work and homeschooling her daughter, and obviously she was
>> >> >impressed with my work, since she has permanently assigned me to it!
>> >> >
>> >> >The second reason I have written on this topic is to ask advice on
>> >> >writing a newsletter. Are there any guidelines out there for me to
>> >> >consider? What sorts of things should I put in the newsletter to spice
>> >> >it up? This month I can put the brief history fo White Cane Safety
>> >> >Month in there, and that'll be a nice addition to the otherwise
>> >> >report-only newsletter, but I'd like to be able to add this bit of
>> >> >spice each month. The Editor-in-Chief has asked that I not put
>> >> >detailed reports on legislative issues, as there is a seperate mailing
>> >> >list for that information, so writing articles about local legal
>> >> >issues is out. The newsletter is for all members from all sorts of
>> >> >backgrounds, so I feel it would be inappropriate to write about
>> >> >something specific to a sub-grup, such as students or the newly
>> >> >blinded. I have done a Member Profile in the past on a member who,
>> >> >though a well-educated doctor with a lot to say, was very quiet in
>> >> >meetings. I did an interview with him and wrote the report off of my
>> >> >notes. The member rprofile was a great success, and I hope to do
>> >> >another on another member, but it requires that I interview the
>> >> >person, and people aren't always available for interview in time for
>> >> >it to be put in the newsletter.
>> >> >
>> >> >Does anyone have some suggestions about simple but effective additions
>> >> >to the newsletter to make it more interesting to the members of our
>> >> >chapter?
>> >> >--
>> >> >Thank you guys for being here to ask! I love this list!
>> >> >
>> >> >~Jewel
>> >> >Check out my blog about accessibility for the blind!
>> >> >Treasure Chest for the Blind: http://blindtreasurechest.blogspot.com
>> >> >
>> >> >_______________________________________________
>> >> >Writers Division web site:
>> >> >http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
>> >> > <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
>> >> >
>> >> >stylist mailing list
>> >> >stylist at nfbnet.org
>> >> >http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
>> >> >To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
>> >> > stylist:
>> >> >http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/n6yr%40sunflower.com
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> ------------------------------
>> >>
>> >> Message: 15
>> >> Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2010 21:26:14 -0500
>> >> From: Priscilla McKinley <priscilla.mckinley at gmail.com>
>> >> To: newmanrl at cox.net, "Writer's Division Mailing List"
>> >> <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Re-Introducing Myself
>> >> Message-ID:
>> >> <AANLkTi=4OY=+xaL4j4_X6DZ0LOoT4otd7oOJYT0D3QoA at mail.gmail.com>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset=ISO-8859-1
>> >>
>> >> Marion,
>> >>
>> >> I would love to read your articles on hypnosis, the
>> >> physical/emotional/spiritual connections, and reincarnation. All of
>> >> these topics fascinate me. I've just started reading a little about
>> >> past lives after meeting a man who described a couple of his to me.
>> >> Also, with a mother who was psychic and experienced dream travel that
>> >> no one could ever explain to her, I am open to other things that can't
>> >> be explained. Do you have any links for your articles?
>> >>
>> >> Thanks, and welcome back.
>> >>
>> >> Priscilla
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> On 9/6/10, Robert Leslie Newman <newmanrl at cox.net> wrote:
>> >> > Marion
>> >> >
>> >> > Good to have you with us! NAGDU --- what a great word --- set of
>> >> > letters
>> >> > that sound --- well interesting. And it sounds like you have a
>> >> > diverse
>> >> > set
>> >> > of talents; with the writing, the music, (POSI - not sure I've heard
>> >> > of
>> >> > it,
>> >> > and would like to). Also, an article on service dogs in the health
>> >> > care
>> >> > area, that could be a multifaceted piece!
>> >> >
>> >> > I'll write you off list- put the pitch to you to join the Division!
>> >> >
>> >> > Welcome and we all will learn from one another. (This is a pretty
>> >> > open
>> >> > and
>> >> > helpful group.)
>> >> >
>> >> >
>> >> >
>> >> > -----Original Message-----
>> >> > From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org]
>> >> > On
>> >> > Behalf Of Marion Gwizdala, M.S.
>> >> > Sent: Monday, September 06, 2010 9:22 AM
>> >> > To: stylist at nfbnet.org
>> >> > Subject: [stylist] Re-Introducing Myself
>> >> >
>> >> > Dear All,
>> >> > A couple of months ago I made some changes to my NFBNET
>> >> > subscriptions.
>> >> > As the result, it seems as if my subscription to this list was
>> >> > dropped.
>> >> > Since I have not posted here in quite some time, I thought I would
>> >> > send
>> >> > a
>> >> > brief message to introduce myself to those who may have recently
>> >> > subscribed
>> >> > and let others know some exciting news relevant to this list.
>> >> > I am the President of the National Association of Guide Dog Users
>> >> > (NAGDU), a strong and proud division of the National Federation of
>> >> > the
>> >> > Blind. I am also a professional musician who performs a genre of
>> >> > music
>> >> > known
>> >> > as "Positive (Posi) Music" and am the Music Director at New Life
>> >> > Unity
>> >> > Church in Tampa, Fla. I am also in private practice as a Certified
>> >> > Hypnotherapist. In addition, I combine my work with NAGDU, my talent
>> >> > as
>> >> > an
>> >> > entertainer, and my experience as a counselor to offer seminars and
>> >> > workshops that combine my music with spoken word.
>> >> > I have published several articles on a variety of health and wellness
>> >> > topics, such as hypnosis for health & personal enhancement, the
>> >> > metaphysics
>> >> > of the body-mind-spirit connection, reincarnation, and issues related
>> >> > to
>> >> > blindness and the use of guide dogs. I am currently working on a
>> >> > multimedia
>> >> > quit smoking manual and have been commissioned by a major
>> >> > peer-reviewed
>> >> > medical journal to write an article about service dogs in the health
>> >> > care
>> >> > setting.
>> >> > I look forward to getting acquainted with some old friends on this
>> >> > list
>> >> > and getting to know some of the new subscribers. The lists of NFBNET
>> >> > are
>> >> > an
>> >> > awesome resource for networking and exchanging ideas and experiences.
>> >> > the
>> >> > written word is a powerful tool to help us further the goals of the
>> >> > National
>> >> > Federation of the Blind and its philosophy. I look forward to meeting
>> >> > many
>> >> > of you in person when you come to the Sunshine State next July! If
>> >> > anyone
>> >> > wishes to get in touch with me in person, my contact information is
>> >> > below my
>> >> > signature.
>> >> >
>> >> > Fraternally yours,
>> >> > Marion Gwizdala, M.S., C.Ht.
>> >> > 813-626-2789
>> >> > Marion.Gwizdala at Verizon.net
>> >> > _______________________________________________
>> >> > Writers Division web site:
>> >> > http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
>> >> > <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
>> >> >
>> >> > stylist mailing list
>> >> > stylist at nfbnet.org
>> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
>> >> > To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
>> >> > stylist:
>> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/newmanrl%40cox.net
>> >> >
>> >> >
>> >> >
>> >> > _______________________________________________
>> >> > Writers Division web site:
>> >> > http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
>> >> > <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
>> >> >
>> >> > stylist mailing list
>> >> > stylist at nfbnet.org
>> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
>> >> > To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
>> >> > stylist:
>> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/priscilla.mckinley%40gmail.com
>> >> >
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> ------------------------------
>> >>
>> >> Message: 16
>> >> Date: Tue, 7 Sep 2010 00:20:33 -0400
>> >> From: "Jewel S." <herekittykat2 at gmail.com>
>> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Chapter Newsletters
>> >> Message-ID:
>> >> <AANLkTinEq=9TeVjQb+M2qmSLJ2pjf4pGtJK_yzMJfDO2 at mail.gmail.com>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset=ISO-8859-1
>> >>
>> >> Thank you for the wonderful ideas! I am hoping to give the newsletter
>> >> a new spin. Because our chapter president is so busy with legislative
>> >> issues and chapter issues, she never had the time to do extras for the
>> >> newsletter. Then she made a call for assistance with it, and I and the
>> >> Vice President both volunteered. He often writes community concern
>> >> articles, as he is a minister, and his additions to the newsletter are
>> >> wonderful. I was asked to do member profiles and interviews of people
>> >> in our city, then I was Guest Editor, and now I have been given this
>> >> position, which I am so very proud of.
>> >>
>> >> I love the idea of "Name That member." That will be fun. And recipe of
>> >> the month sounds good...not just food recipes, perhaps, but also
>> >> recipes for making crafts, Braille drawings, and homemade products
>> >> like soap and lotion...I have some wonderful recipes for these things,
>> >> as do some other members and people around the city.
>> >>
>> >> Again, thank you for the ideas. I'm sure this newsletter will grow
>> >> into a great read!
>> >>
>> >> On 9/6/10, James H. "Jim" Canaday M.A. N6YR <n6yr at sunflower.com> wrote:
>> >> > Hi Jewel,
>> >> > my first advice is to make sure your newsletter isn't just like
>> >> > everybody else's!
>> >> > our chapter doesn't have a newsletter. we have an e-mail listserv.
>> >> > but to make your newsletter different here are some ideas:
>> >> > try to make your newsletter local by getting some local history of
>> >> > blind people in your community, history of people with disabilities,
>> >> > or history of perhaps how the government dealt with blind/disabled
>> >> > people there.
>> >> > member profile is a great idea.
>> >> > sometimes in a newsletter you can do a different twist on member
>> >> > profile: you can do "name that member" where you might give some
>> >> > little-known information, interests or history of a member and see
>> >> > who names your member first.
>> >> > again to make your newsletter local, get a story in each issue about
>> >> > a blind person's experience walking somewhere, working somewhere,
>> >> > eating somewhere, recreating somewhere, etc. it would be a kind of a
>> >> > review from blindness perspective.
>> >> > you also can include in your newsletter recipes, or jokes,
>> >> > especially of local flavor.
>> >> > if a blind person visits your community, have a talk with him or her
>> >> > and put that in your newsletter.
>> >> >
>> >> > hope these ideas help.
>> >> > jc
>> >> >
>> >> > At 05:48 PM 9/6/2010, you wrote:
>> >> >>Hi all,
>> >> >>
>> >> >>My local chapter's president has given the newsletter over into my
>> >> >>hands. She will still be Editor-in-Chief, but it is my job to either
>> >> >>outsource reports to toher members or write the reports myself. For
>> >> >>example, I'll be writing an article for the newsletter giving a brief
>> >> >>history of White Cane Safety Month, but will be asking our Vice
>> >> >>President to write the report on last month's Member Drive, since I
>> >> >>was not present. After I write and/or collect the written articles, I
>> >> >>send it to the presient/editor-in-chief for review and she passes it
>> >> >>on for e-mail distribution and printing in large print or Braille for
>> >> >>those who don't have computers.
>> >> >>
>> >> >>So the first point of this e-mail was to share with you all the
>> >> >>priveledge I have been given in being assigned as editor and
>> >> >>coordinator of the newsletter. I'm really excited about it. She had
>> >> >> me
>> >> >>do one newsletter as a Guest Editor, because she was super busy with
>> >> >>legislative work and homeschooling her daughter, and obviously she
>> >> >> was
>> >> >>impressed with my work, since she has permanently assigned me to it!
>> >> >>
>> >> >>The second reason I have written on this topic is to ask advice on
>> >> >>writing a newsletter. Are there any guidelines out there for me to
>> >> >>consider? What sorts of things should I put in the newsletter to
>> >> >> spice
>> >> >>it up? This month I can put the brief history fo White Cane Safety
>> >> >>Month in there, and that'll be a nice addition to the otherwise
>> >> >>report-only newsletter, but I'd like to be able to add this bit of
>> >> >>spice each month. The Editor-in-Chief has asked that I not put
>> >> >>detailed reports on legislative issues, as there is a seperate
>> >> >> mailing
>> >> >>list for that information, so writing articles about local legal
>> >> >>issues is out. The newsletter is for all members from all sorts of
>> >> >>backgrounds, so I feel it would be inappropriate to write about
>> >> >>something specific to a sub-grup, such as students or the newly
>> >> >>blinded. I have done a Member Profile in the past on a member who,
>> >> >>though a well-educated doctor with a lot to say, was very quiet in
>> >> >>meetings. I did an interview with him and wrote the report off of my
>> >> >>notes. The member rprofile was a great success, and I hope to do
>> >> >>another on another member, but it requires that I interview the
>> >> >>person, and people aren't always available for interview in time for
>> >> >>it to be put in the newsletter.
>> >> >>
>> >> >>Does anyone have some suggestions about simple but effective
>> >> >> additions
>> >> >>to the newsletter to make it more interesting to the members of our
>> >> >>chapter?
>> >> >>--
>> >> >>Thank you guys for being here to ask! I love this list!
>> >> >>
>> >> >>~Jewel
>> >> >>Check out my blog about accessibility for the blind!
>> >> >>Treasure Chest for the Blind: http://blindtreasurechest.blogspot.com
>> >> >>
>> >> >>_______________________________________________
>> >> >>Writers Division web site:
>> >> >>http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
>> >> >> <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
>> >> >>
>> >> >>stylist mailing list
>> >> >>stylist at nfbnet.org
>> >> >>http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
>> >> >>To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
>> >> >> stylist:
>> >> >>http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/n6yr%40sunflower.com
>> >> >
>> >> > _______________________________________________
>> >> > Writers Division web site:
>> >> > http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
>> >> > <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
>> >> >
>> >> > stylist mailing list
>> >> > stylist at nfbnet.org
>> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
>> >> > To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
>> >> > stylist:
>> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/herekittykat2%40gmail.com
>> >> >
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> --
>> >> ~Jewel
>> >> Check out my blog about accessibility for the blind!
>> >> Treasure Chest for the Blind: http://blindtreasurechest.blogspot.com
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> ------------------------------
>> >>
>> >> Message: 17
>> >> Date: Tue, 7 Sep 2010 09:32:04 -0400
>> >> From: "Joe Orozco" <jsorozco at gmail.com>
>> >> To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: [stylist] Songwriting
>> >> Message-ID: <C10402EA1A7F493BB07AD2E7772CD397 at Rufus>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="US-ASCII"
>> >>
>> >> Dear all,
>> >>
>> >> I'm glad Marion came out of the woodwork when he did. I have a question
>> >> he,
>> >> and hopefully others, will be able to answer. How does one get started
>> >> with
>> >> songwriting? I play piano by ear as a hobby but have no idea how I
>> >> could
>> >> translate my own invented melodies to paper, nor how to make others
>> >> hear
>> >> my
>> >> poetry in the melodies I've arranged in my head. Does one need to know
>> >> music notation to succeed at this? Thanks for any help, and Priscilla,
>> >> oh
>> >> dear peer pressure that you are, I am working out some kinks in my
>> >> novel
>> >> before it is worthy of your reading.
>> >>
>> >> Best,
>> >>
>> >> Joe
>> >>
>> >> "Hard work spotlights the character of people: some turn up their
>> >> sleeves,
>> >> some turn up their noses, and some don't turn up at all."--Sam Ewing
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> ------------------------------
>> >>
>> >> Message: 18
>> >> Date: Tue, 07 Sep 2010 08:56:41 -0500
>> >> From: BDM <lists at braddunsemusic.com>
>> >> To: jsorozco at gmail.com,Writer's Division Mailing List
>> >> <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Songwriting
>> >> Message-ID: <6.2.3.4.2.20100907083938.02e65c18 at www.braddunsemusic.com>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii"; format=flowed
>> >>
>> >> Joe,
>> >>
>> >> I am a performing songwriter, as are at least one other person on
>> >> list there. As far as lyrics go for songwriting, poetry while
>> >> similar, isn't a lyric for a number of reasons. Often times they can
>> >> be altered to be a lyric. So yes you can take your poems and put them
>> >> to music but very likely not as they are now. As for melody and
>> >> muisic. You don't have to put it on paper as it were. I have none of
>> >> my music on paper as it were. I will put a chord chart together which
>> >> is basically chords over the tops of the lyrics which is pretty
>> >> standard in the indie world and even professionals in Nashville. Not
>> >> however if you are scoring out a piano piece for a recital or
>> >> orchestral type thing to be played note for note. I couldn't tell
>> >> you how to do that as I don't know Braile Music Notation. One can, if
>> >> knowledgeable in theory, can score out chords to match a melody like
>> >> Beethoven did, or one can, like most do, apply chords by "feel" to
>> >> the melody. I write 90% of the time with an instrument starting with
>> >> chords and melody and then go for words based off the feel of the
>> >> music. I'll say on the other side of the coin, that nearly all my
>> >> co-writing has been done by applying music and melody to words
>> >> already written which sometimes requier slight altering to flush out
>> >> consistency and etc. Words as well, if you listen carefully when
>> >> spoken in natural voice, have a certain melody to them which can be
>> >> used as well. It is both fun and exploritory to just match a melody
>> >> to certain chords and you'll find it can generate different types of
>> >> feeling or harmonies within it. Just experiment some with it if you
>> >> have a melody in your head. If you can't sing and play at the same
>> >> time, record your melody and try to put chords to it when you play it
>> >> back. There is no right or wrong way, it is what works for you.
>> >>
>> >> There are many books and resources out there on songwriting. If you
>> >> go to my website at
>> >>
>> >> http://www.braddunsemusic.com
>> >>
>> >> Then click on the songwriting link, there's an html file with various
>> >> resources about songwriting.
>> >>
>> >> If you have any other questions just let me know. Glad to help anyway I
>> >> can.
>> >>
>> >> Brad
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> At 08:32 AM 9/7/2010, you wrote:
>> >> >Dear all,
>> >> >
>> >> >I'm glad Marion came out of the woodwork when he did. I have a
>> >> > question
>> >> > he,
>> >> >and hopefully others, will be able to answer. How does one get started
>> >> > with
>> >> >songwriting? I play piano by ear as a hobby but have no idea how I
>> >> > could
>> >> >translate my own invented melodies to paper, nor how to make others
>> >> > hear
>> >> > my
>> >> >poetry in the melodies I've arranged in my head. Does one need to know
>> >> >music notation to succeed at this? Thanks for any help, and Priscilla,
>> >> > oh
>> >> >dear peer pressure that you are, I am working out some kinks in my
>> >> > novel
>> >> >before it is worthy of your reading.
>> >> >
>> >> >Best,
>> >> >
>> >> >Joe
>> >> >
>> >> >"Hard work spotlights the character of people: some turn up their
>> >> > sleeves,
>> >> >some turn up their noses, and some don't turn up at all."--Sam Ewing
>> >> >
>> >> >
>> >> >_______________________________________________
>> >> >Writers Division web site:
>> >> >http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
>> >> > <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
>> >> >
>> >> >stylist mailing list
>> >> >stylist at nfbnet.org
>> >> >http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
>> >> >To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
>> >> > stylist:
>> >> >http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/lists%40braddunsemusic.com
>> >> >
>> >> >
>> >> >__________ Information from ESET Smart Security, version of virus
>> >> >signature database 5431 (20100907) __________
>> >> >
>> >> >The message was checked by ESET Smart Security.
>> >> >
>> >> >http://www.eset.com
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> Brad Dunse
>> >>
>> >> Instead of waiting out the storm, learn to dance in the rain
>> >>
>> >> E Mail: brad at braddunsemusic.com
>> >>
>> >> Website: http://www.braddunsemusic.com
>> >>
>> >> Facebook: http://www.facebook.com/#!/profile.php?id=1464323555
>> >>
>> >> Twitter: http://www.twitter.com/braddunse
>> >>
>> >> MySpace: http://www.myspace.com/braddunse
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> ------------------------------
>> >>
>> >> Message: 19
>> >> Date: Tue, 07 Sep 2010 10:01:39 -0400
>> >> From: loristay <loristay at aol.com>
>> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Chapter Newsletters
>> >> Message-ID: <BEB18EB2.D527.4B18.84CD.D5E6EA172825 at aol.com>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="iso-8859-1"
>> >>
>> >> Some simple suggestions:
>> >> Take a look at other state or chapter newsletters.
>> >> Personal tidbits interest people (marriages, births, deaths)
>> >> Reporting on current and future projects.
>> >> Resource columns. ?These don't have to be long. ?Just, what you and
>> >> others
>> >> found useful; one or two items would do.
>> >> Reminders of upcoming events.
>> >> interviews are fine, but it would be a good idea to prepare ahead to
>> >> have
>> >> some in the pipeline, as sometimes getting together for an intervew,
>> >> even
>> >> by phone, can prove frustrating.
>> >> Hope any of this helps.
>> >>
>> >> Lori Stayer
>> >>
>> >> On Sep 6, 2010, at 6:48:37 PM, "Jewel S." <herekittykat2 at gmail.com>
>> >> wrote:
>> >>
>> >> From: "Jewel S." <herekittykat2 at gmail.com>
>> >> Subject: [stylist] Chapter Newsletters
>> >> Date: September 6, 2010 6:48:37 PM EDT
>> >> To: stylist at nfbnet.org
>> >> Hi all,
>> >>
>> >> My local chapter's president has given the newsletter over into my
>> >> hands. She will still be Editor-in-Chief, but it is my job to either
>> >> outsource reports to toher members or write the reports myself. For
>> >> example, I'll be writing an article for the newsletter giving a brief
>> >> history of White Cane Safety Month, but will be asking our Vice
>> >> President to write the report on last month's Member Drive, since I
>> >> was not present. After I write and/or collect the written articles, I
>> >> send it to the presient/editor-in-chief for review and she passes it
>> >> on for e-mail distribution and printing in large print or Braille for
>> >> those who don't have computers.
>> >>
>> >> So the first point of this e-mail was to share with you all the
>> >> priveledge I have been given in being assigned as editor and
>> >> coordinator of the newsletter. I'm really excited about it. She had me
>> >> do one newsletter as a Guest Editor, because she was super busy with
>> >> legislative work and homeschooling her daughter, and obviously she was
>> >> impressed with my work, since she has permanently assigned me to it!
>> >>
>> >> The second reason I have written on this topic is to ask advice on
>> >> writing a newsletter. Are there any guidelines out there for me to
>> >> consider? What sorts of things should I put in the newsletter to spice
>> >> it up? This month I can put the brief history fo White Cane Safety
>> >> Month in there, and that'll be a nice addition to the otherwise
>> >> report-only newsletter, but I'd like to be able to add this bit of
>> >> spice each month. The Editor-in-Chief has asked that I not put
>> >> detailed reports on legislative issues, as there is a seperate mailing
>> >> list for that information, so writing articles about local legal
>> >> issues is out. The newsletter is for all members from all sorts of
>> >> backgrounds, so I feel it would be inappropriate to write about
>> >> something specific to a sub-grup, such as students or the newly
>> >> blinded. I have done a Member Profile in the past on a member who,
>> >> though a well-educated doctor with a lot to say, was very quiet in
>> >> meetings. I did an interview with him and wrote the report off of my
>> >> notes. The member rprofile was a great success, and I hope to do
>> >> another on another member, but it requires that I interview the
>> >> person, and people aren't always available for interview in time for
>> >> it to be put in the newsletter.
>> >>
>> >> Does anyone have some suggestions about simple but effective additions
>> >> to the newsletter to make it more interesting to the members of our
>> >> chapter?
>> >> --?
>> >> Thank you guys for being here to ask! I love this list!
>> >>
>> >> ~Jewel
>> >> Check out my blog about accessibility for the blind!
>> >> Treasure Chest for the Blind: http://blindtreasurechest.blogspot.com
>> >>
>> >> _______________________________________________
>> >> Writers Division web site:
>> >> http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
>> >> <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
>> >>
>> >> stylist mailing list
>> >> stylist at nfbnet.org
>> >> http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
>> >> To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
>> >> stylist:
>> >> http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/loristay%40aol.com
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> ------------------------------
>> >>
>> >> Message: 20
>> >> Date: Tue, 07 Sep 2010 10:10:25 -0400
>> >> From: loristay <loristay at aol.com>
>> >> To: "jsorozco at gmail.com, Writer's Division Mailing List"
>> >> <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Songwriting
>> >> Message-ID: <DB9CD38F.7374.4558.80B7.E6E8FEFEB627 at aol.com>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii"; format="flowed"
>> >>
>> >> Irving Berlin worked melodies out on the black keys of his piano, and
>> >> had a secretary transcribe them into musical notation, and shift the
>> >> key so both white and black keys were used.
>> >> If you don't have a secretary, I'd advise learning Braille musical
>> >> notation or print, if you have enough sight to read it back.
>> >> Otherwise, I suppose you could sing the melodies into a recorder.
>> >> Lori
>> >>
>> >> On Sep 7, 2010, at 9:32:04 AM, "Joe Orozco" <jsorozco at gmail.com> wrote:
>> >>
>> >> From: "Joe Orozco" <jsorozco at gmail.com>
>> >> Subject: [stylist] Songwriting
>> >> Date: September 7, 2010 9:32:04 AM EDT
>> >> To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Dear all,
>> >>
>> >> I'm glad Marion came out of the woodwork when he did. I have a
>> >> question he,
>> >> and hopefully others, will be able to answer. How does one get started
>> >> with
>> >> songwriting? I play piano by ear as a hobby but have no idea how I
>> >> could
>> >> translate my own invented melodies to paper, nor how to make others
>> >> hear my
>> >> poetry in the melodies I've arranged in my head. Does one need to know
>> >> music notation to succeed at this? Thanks for any help, and Priscilla,
>> >> oh
>> >> dear peer pressure that you are, I am working out some kinks in my
>> >> novel
>> >> before it is worthy of your reading.
>> >>
>> >> Best,
>> >>
>> >> Joe
>> >>
>> >> "Hard work spotlights the character of people: some turn up their
>> >> sleeves,
>> >> some turn up their noses, and some don't turn up at all."--Sam Ewing
>> >>
>> >>
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>> >> ------------------------------
>> >>
>> >> Message: 21
>> >> Date: Tue, 07 Sep 2010 09:58:37 -0500
>> >> From: "James H. \"Jim\" Canaday M.A. N6YR" <n6yr at sunflower.com>
>> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Chapter Newsletters
>> >> Message-ID: <201009071458.o87EwbNH026179 at smtp.sunflower.com>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii"; format=flowed
>> >>
>> >> you're welcome Jewel.
>> >> jc
>> >>
>> >> At 11:20 PM 9/6/2010, you wrote:
>> >> >Thank you for the wonderful ideas! I am hoping to give the newsletter
>> >> >a new spin. Because our chapter president is so busy with legislative
>> >> >issues and chapter issues, she never had the time to do extras for the
>> >> >newsletter. Then she made a call for assistance with it, and I and the
>> >> >Vice President both volunteered. He often writes community concern
>> >> >articles, as he is a minister, and his additions to the newsletter are
>> >> >wonderful. I was asked to do member profiles and interviews of people
>> >> >in our city, then I was Guest Editor, and now I have been given this
>> >> >position, which I am so very proud of.
>> >> >
>> >> >I love the idea of "Name That member." That will be fun. And recipe of
>> >> >the month sounds good...not just food recipes, perhaps, but also
>> >> >recipes for making crafts, Braille drawings, and homemade products
>> >> >like soap and lotion...I have some wonderful recipes for these things,
>> >> >as do some other members and people around the city.
>> >> >
>> >> >Again, thank you for the ideas. I'm sure this newsletter will grow
>> >> >into a great read!
>> >> >
>> >> >On 9/6/10, James H. "Jim" Canaday M.A. N6YR <n6yr at sunflower.com>
>> >> > wrote:
>> >> > > Hi Jewel,
>> >> > > my first advice is to make sure your newsletter isn't just like
>> >> > > everybody else's!
>> >> > > our chapter doesn't have a newsletter. we have an e-mail listserv.
>> >> > > but to make your newsletter different here are some ideas:
>> >> > > try to make your newsletter local by getting some local history of
>> >> > > blind people in your community, history of people with
>> >> > > disabilities,
>> >> > > or history of perhaps how the government dealt with blind/disabled
>> >> > > people there.
>> >> > > member profile is a great idea.
>> >> > > sometimes in a newsletter you can do a different twist on member
>> >> > > profile: you can do "name that member" where you might give some
>> >> > > little-known information, interests or history of a member and see
>> >> > > who names your member first.
>> >> > > again to make your newsletter local, get a story in each issue
>> >> > > about
>> >> > > a blind person's experience walking somewhere, working somewhere,
>> >> > > eating somewhere, recreating somewhere, etc. it would be a kind of
>> >> > > a
>> >> > > review from blindness perspective.
>> >> > > you also can include in your newsletter recipes, or jokes,
>> >> > > especially of local flavor.
>> >> > > if a blind person visits your community, have a talk with him or
>> >> > > her
>> >> > > and put that in your newsletter.
>> >> > >
>> >> > > hope these ideas help.
>> >> > > jc
>> >> > >
>> >> > > At 05:48 PM 9/6/2010, you wrote:
>> >> > >>Hi all,
>> >> > >>
>> >> > >>My local chapter's president has given the newsletter over into my
>> >> > >>hands. She will still be Editor-in-Chief, but it is my job to
>> >> > >> either
>> >> > >>outsource reports to toher members or write the reports myself. For
>> >> > >>example, I'll be writing an article for the newsletter giving a
>> >> > >> brief
>> >> > >>history of White Cane Safety Month, but will be asking our Vice
>> >> > >>President to write the report on last month's Member Drive, since I
>> >> > >>was not present. After I write and/or collect the written articles,
>> >> > >> I
>> >> > >>send it to the presient/editor-in-chief for review and she passes
>> >> > >> it
>> >> > >>on for e-mail distribution and printing in large print or Braille
>> >> > >> for
>> >> > >>those who don't have computers.
>> >> > >>
>> >> > >>So the first point of this e-mail was to share with you all the
>> >> > >>priveledge I have been given in being assigned as editor and
>> >> > >>coordinator of the newsletter. I'm really excited about it. She had
>> >> > >> me
>> >> > >>do one newsletter as a Guest Editor, because she was super busy
>> >> > >> with
>> >> > >>legislative work and homeschooling her daughter, and obviously she
>> >> > >> was
>> >> > >>impressed with my work, since she has permanently assigned me to
>> >> > >> it!
>> >> > >>
>> >> > >>The second reason I have written on this topic is to ask advice on
>> >> > >>writing a newsletter. Are there any guidelines out there for me to
>> >> > >>consider? What sorts of things should I put in the newsletter to
>> >> > >> spice
>> >> > >>it up? This month I can put the brief history fo White Cane Safety
>> >> > >>Month in there, and that'll be a nice addition to the otherwise
>> >> > >>report-only newsletter, but I'd like to be able to add this bit of
>> >> > >>spice each month. The Editor-in-Chief has asked that I not put
>> >> > >>detailed reports on legislative issues, as there is a seperate
>> >> > >> mailing
>> >> > >>list for that information, so writing articles about local legal
>> >> > >>issues is out. The newsletter is for all members from all sorts of
>> >> > >>backgrounds, so I feel it would be inappropriate to write about
>> >> > >>something specific to a sub-grup, such as students or the newly
>> >> > >>blinded. I have done a Member Profile in the past on a member who,
>> >> > >>though a well-educated doctor with a lot to say, was very quiet in
>> >> > >>meetings. I did an interview with him and wrote the report off of
>> >> > >> my
>> >> > >>notes. The member rprofile was a great success, and I hope to do
>> >> > >>another on another member, but it requires that I interview the
>> >> > >>person, and people aren't always available for interview in time
>> >> > >> for
>> >> > >>it to be put in the newsletter.
>> >> > >>
>> >> > >>Does anyone have some suggestions about simple but effective
>> >> > >> additions
>> >> > >>to the newsletter to make it more interesting to the members of our
>> >> > >>chapter?
>> >> > >>--
>> >> > >>Thank you guys for being here to ask! I love this list!
>> >> > >>
>> >> > >>~Jewel
>> >> > >>Check out my blog about accessibility for the blind!
>> >> > >>Treasure Chest for the Blind:
>> >> > >> http://blindtreasurechest.blogspot.com
>> >> > >>
>> >> > >>_______________________________________________
>> >> > >>Writers Division web site:
>> >> > >>http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
>> >> > >> <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
>> >> > >>
>> >> > >>stylist mailing list
>> >> > >>stylist at nfbnet.org
>> >> > >>http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
>> >> > >>To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info
>> >> > >> for
>> >> > >> stylist:
>> >> > >>http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/n6yr%40su
>> >> > nflower.com
>> >> > >
>> >> > > _______________________________________________
>> >> > > Writers Division web site:
>> >> > > http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
>> >> > > <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
>> >> > >
>> >> > > stylist mailing list
>> >> > > stylist at nfbnet.org
>> >> > > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
>> >> > > To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info
>> >> > > for
>> >> > > stylist:
>> >> > >
>> >> > http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/herekittykat2%40gmail.com
>> >> > >
>> >> >
>> >> >
>> >> >--
>> >> >~Jewel
>> >> >Check out my blog about accessibility for the blind!
>> >> >Treasure Chest for the Blind: http://blindtreasurechest.blogspot.com
>> >> >
>> >> >_______________________________________________
>> >> >Writers Division web site:
>> >> >http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
>> >> > <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
>> >> >
>> >> >stylist mailing list
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>> >> > stylist:
>> >> >http://www.nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/n6yr%40sunflower.com
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> ------------------------------
>> >>
>> >> Message: 22
>> >> Date: Tue, 7 Sep 2010 09:49:03 -0500
>> >> From: "Robert Leslie Newman" <newmanrl at cox.net>
>> >> To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Chapter Newsletters
>> >> Message-ID: <4A3C9854299B4DB38D959DE42BAEAD39 at Newmans>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii"
>> >>
>> >> Jewel
>> >>
>> >> There also is a mailing list just for editors of newsletters (chapter
>> >> or
>> >> affiliate or whatever). You can join it on nfbnet.org and the list is
>> >> called
>> >> nfb-editors
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> ------------------------------
>> >>
>> >> Message: 23
>> >> Date: Tue, 07 Sep 2010 12:22:10 -0400
>> >> From: "Marion Gwizdala, M.S." <marion.gwizdala at verizon.net>
>> >> To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Songwriting
>> >> Message-ID: <009c01cb4ea8$d2d3a8b0$0201a8c0 at marion475ae1fe>
>> >> Content-Type: text/plain; format=flowed; charset=iso-8859-1;
>> >> reply-type=response
>> >>
>> >> Brad,
>> >> Thanks a bunch for saving me all of this thought and writing! (smile)
>> >> This is pretty much the same advice I would have offered. the only
>> >> exception
>> >> is that I don't write my chords above the lyrics; rather, I write them
>> >> within them using braces "{}" where the chord changes appear. I believe
>> >> there are MIDI instruments and software that will actually make printed
>> >> music from the instrument. Perhaps that's a question to be asked on the
>> >> Performing Arts list. I am sure Kevin Reeves or Cameron Strife can
>> >> answer
>> >> that for us!
>> >>
>> >> Fraternally yours,
>> >> Marion
>> >>
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> ----- Original Message -----
>> >> From: "BDM" <lists at braddunsemusic.com>
>> >> To: <jsorozco at gmail.com>; "Writer's Division Mailing List"
>> >> <stylist at nfbnet.org>
>> >> Sent: Tuesday, September 07, 2010 9:56 AM
>> >> Subject: Re: [stylist] Songwriting
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> > Joe,
>> >> >
>> >> > I am a performing songwriter, as are at least one other person on
>> >> > list
>> >> > there. As far as lyrics go for songwriting, poetry while similar,
>> >> > isn't
>> >> > a
>> >> > lyric for a number of reasons. Often times they can be altered to be
>> >> > a
>> >> > lyric. So yes you can take your poems and put them to music but very
>> >> > likely not as they are now. As for melody and muisic. You don't have
>> >> > to
>> >> > put it on paper as it were. I have none of my music on paper as it
>> >> > were.
>> >> > I
>> >> > will put a chord chart together which is basically chords over the
>> >> > tops
>> >> > of
>> >> > the lyrics which is pretty standard in the indie world and even
>> >> > professionals in Nashville. Not however if you are scoring out a
>> >> > piano
>> >> > piece for a recital or orchestral type thing to be played note for
>> >> > note.
>> >> >
>> >> > I couldn't tell you how to do that as I don't know Braile Music
>> >> > Notation.
>> >> > One can, if knowledgeable in theory, can score out chords to match a
>> >> > melody like Beethoven did, or one can, like most do, apply chords by
>> >> > "feel" to the melody. I write 90% of the time with an instrument
>> >> > starting
>> >> > with chords and melody and then go for words based off the feel of
>> >> > the
>> >> > music. I'll say on the other side of the coin, that nearly all my
>> >> > co-writing has been done by applying music and melody to words
>> >> > already
>> >> > written which sometimes requier slight altering to flush out
>> >> > consistency
>> >> >
>> >> > and etc. Words as well, if you listen carefully when spoken in
>> >> > natural
>> >> > voice, have a certain melody to them which can be used as well. It is
>> >> > both
>> >> > fun and exploritory to just match a melody to certain chords and
>> >> > you'll
>> >> > find it can generate different types of feeling or harmonies within
>> >> > it.
>> >> > Just experiment some with it if you have a melody in your head. If
>> >> > you
>> >> > can't sing and play at the same time, record your melody and try to
>> >> > put
>> >> > chords to it when you play it back. There is no right or wrong way,
>> >> > it
>> >> > is
>> >> > what works for you.
>> >> >
>> >> > There are many books and resources out there on songwriting. If you
>> >> > go
>> >> > to
>> >> > my website at
>> >> >
>> >> > http://www.braddunsemusic.com
>> >> >
>> >> > Then click on the songwriting link, there's an html file with various
>> >> > resources about songwriting.
>> >> >
>> >> > If you have any other questions just let me know. Glad to help anyway
>> >> > I
>> >> > can.
>> >> >
>> >> > Brad
>> >> >
>> >> >
>> >> > At 08:32 AM 9/7/2010, you wrote:
>> >> >>Dear all,
>> >> >>
>> >> >>I'm glad Marion came out of the woodwork when he did. I have a
>> >> >> question
>> >> >>he,
>> >> >>and hopefully others, will be able to answer. How does one get
>> >> >> started
>> >> >>with
>> >> >>songwriting? I play piano by ear as a hobby but have no idea how I
>> >> >> could
>> >> >>translate my own invented melodies to paper, nor how to make others
>> >> >> hear
>> >> >>
>> >> >>my
>> >> >>poetry in the melodies I've arranged in my head. Does one need to
>> >> >> know
>> >> >>music notation to succeed at this? Thanks for any help, and
>> >> >> Priscilla,
>> >> >> oh
>> >> >>dear peer pressure that you are, I am working out some kinks in my
>> >> >> novel
>> >> >>before it is worthy of your reading.
>> >> >>
>> >> >>Best,
>> >> >>
>> >> >>Joe
>> >> >>
>> >> >>"Hard work spotlights the character of people: some turn up their
>> >> >> sleeves,
>> >> >>some turn up their noses, and some don't turn up at all."--Sam Ewing
>> >> >>
>> >> >>
>> >> >>_______________________________________________
>> >> >>Writers Division web site:
>> >> >>http://www.nfb-writers-division.org
>> >> >> <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>
>> >> >>
>> >> >>stylist mailing list
>> >> >>stylist at nfbnet.org
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>> >> >>
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>> >> >
>> >> > Brad Dunse
>> >> >
>> >> > Instead of waiting out the storm, learn to dance in the rain
>> >> >
>> >> > E Mail: brad at braddunsemusic.com
>> >> >
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>> >> >
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>> >> >
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>> >> >
>> >> >
>> >> > _______________________________________________
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>> --
>> ~Jewel
>> Check out my blog about accessibility for the blind!
>> Treasure Chest for the Blind: http://blindtreasurechest.blogspot.com
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