[stylist] synopsis assistance please

Tue Jan 18 18:38:51 UTC 2011

Thanks. I am pasting another version below. Is this too much detail about 
what happens? Also, does this make anyone want to read the story because, if 
not, I must rewrite the synopsis altogether?

It's more than just brotherly love that motivates Cody Dallas to protect and 
defend his twin brother. In Cody's mind, the accident that left Joey blind 
wouldn't have occurred if it weren't for Cody's selfish actions. His duty is 
to suffer any consequences this horrible situation presents, and most of 
all, to do whatever it takes to keep his brother safe. As a result, Cody 
must devise a plan that will keep the blind stranger, who shows up at their 
house demanding Joey go to a special camp for blind kids, from dragging Joey 
away. The adults in Cody's life keep telling him that the camp is just what 
Joey needs to live a happy and healthy life. But, Cody's fears and 
misconceptions about the abilities of the blind combined with his guilt are 
too strong for him to ignore.
When telling the adults that going to camp is not the right thing for Joey 
fails to work, Cody decides the two brothers must run away. After this 
attempt is thwarted, Cody feels he must follow through with the only option 
he sees left, to give his twin brother a laxative he has witnessed his Dad 
take on occasion. He only agrees to visit the camp after this incident also 
turns out different from what he predicts, and it is this visit that finally 
convinces him that going to camp is the best thing for his twin brother. On 
the way home from camp, Cody's parents tell him of their decision to send 
him to a counselor to help him come to terms with the fact that Joey's 
blindness is not his fault. Though he hates the idea, Cody goes and realizes 
he is not guilty for making his brother blind.

Again, thanks in advance for any assistance. Anita
----- Original Message ----- 
From: "Donna Hill" <penatwork at epix.net>
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Sent: Tuesday, January 18, 2011 12:23 PM
Subject: Re: [stylist] synopsis assistance please

> Hi Anita,
> I like this. You might want to add a little more detail about the end of 
> the story. I read somewhere that you're not supposed to withhold that from 
> your publisher. As far as making it in the tone you write in for children 
> ... I think that's a delicate balance, since the reader of your query is 
> an adult. This seems to be the right tone to me.
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> On 1/18/2011 11:33 AM, Anita Adkins wrote:
>> Hello everyone,
>>
>> I have written a short story, and one of the publisher's I am interested 
>> in submitting too requires a cover letter. Upon some basic research, I 
>> have learned that a cover letter should contain a synopsis of the story. 
>> My question is should this synopsis sound the same as it would if I were 
>> giving it to children? For ex., in the one I am pasting below, you will 
>> see the words wrong belief. At first, I had written misconception here, 
>> but young children may not know what that word means. Any ideas and 
>> suggestions are appreciated. Thanks in advance for any assistance. Sorry 
>> about it sounded as if it is a link. I am not sure why it chose to do 
>> this.
>>
>> It's more than just brotherly love that motivates Cody Dallas to protect 
>> and defend his twin brother. In Cody's mind, the accident that left Joey 
>> blind wouldn't have occurred if it weren't for Cody's selfish actions. 
>> His duty is to suffer any consequences this horrible situation presents, 
>> and most of all, to do whatever it takes to keep his brother safe. As a 
>> result, Cody must devise a plan that will keep the blind stranger who 
>> shows up at their house demanding Joey go to a special camp for blind 
>> kids from dragging Joey away. The adults in Cody's life keep telling him 
>> that the camp is just what Joey needs to live a happy and healthy life. 
>> But, Cody's fears and wrong beliefs about the abilities of the blind 
>> combined with his guilt are too strong for him to ignore.
>>
>>
>>
>> Anita
>>
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