[stylist] Haiku song lyrics

Fri Jun 17 17:19:20 UTC 2011

Hey nothing wrong with acapella, Donna.. you should my  youngest son and I 
sing in the car.. our favorite is You Raise Me Up by Josh  Groban... we have 
gotten odd looks before...
I love the form.. and the arrangement will get there  in its own time.. I 
say that about writing when people ask why I hadn't written  in a while.. my 
answer is always 'because the words aren't ready to be written..  they'll 
let me know'

In a message dated 6/17/2011 12:15:34 P.M. Central Daylight Time,  
penatwork at epix.net writes:

Hi  Myrna,
Thanks, I'm glad you like it. It came to me with the melody in tact,  which
is normally true for my songs. Not that I got all of the words, but I  got
the basic structure and melody as I was walking one gray November day.  Now,
if only the arrangement would get here! Maybe it's supposed to be  acapella,
like I sing it on the road.  Hmm.
Donna

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Donna...  I had no idea what you would call it and that  seemed to fit 
so....  they are really nicely done and I may have to try a few of   
those...

That's the great thing about literature of any genre... we  read  and we 
interpret.. we sometimes know exactly where the writer  is coming from but
sometimes 
it hits close to home and we become the  character and experience the  
words 
in our own way!  At any  rate.. so well done and I too would love to  hear 
it put to music...  
Myrna

In a message dated 6/16/2011 1:17:35 P.M. Central  Daylight Time,  
penatwork at epix.net writes:

Hi   Myrna,
I love your term "interlocking Haiku." Rhyming Haiku just didn't  say  it. 

I guess for me the flying thing is about rising above  the worst of  our
experiences -- going on despite them. . I like the  idea of the  absolution 
we
think we need, though from the  subject's perspective, there  doesn't seem 
to
be an understanding of  the difference between what we  "think" we need and
what we  desperately need. The subject is seeking  forgiveness from the  
place
of someone who doesn't even feel recognized by  the one from  which they 
seek
forgiveness. I think this is about as low a  place as  you can come from and
still have the recognition that you know  that  how ever bad you feel, 
you're
going to try again, and it's a detached   understanding of one's own
character, not a feeling of determination.  Just  my thoughts. As you know,
poetry's power is to awaken in the  reader things  that the poet had not
specifically foreseen.  
Donna

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I love  the 'interlocking' haiku for lack of a  better  word for it... I've 

done this with haiku before myself...  I  love  this!  As  far as what it's 
about.... my  interpretation may be different  from  your reality but when  
reading it I felt it was about the need to   fly... to shed the  tethers of
cold 
(life, sadness, whatever) and  finding the   strength to spread the wings 
and 
seek the absolution we  think we  need... I  probably am not close but 
poetry
is 
like  that...  we put ourselves into the words  and make it our story... In 

any case.. this is wonderful  stuff!

In a message  dated  6/13/2011 12:50:57 P.M. Central Daylight Time,   
penatwork at epix.net  writes:

Hi  Friends,

I  probably should have waited till  November to pull this one  out,  but 
since
we've been discussing Haiku  and who knows where any of  us  will be in
November, I thought I'd  share it now. There are  three verses of  2 Haiku
each. Each verse is  followed by a  bridge which is one Haiku and a 5  
syllable
refrain.  You'll  notice that I have employed a rhyme structure that  ties  

the
verse Haiku to each other and the bridges to each other,  though   the
individual Haiku don't rhyme  internally.

I don't   consider it perfect or done, so  if you have any thoughts,    
please
share.

Donna

Under These Gray   Skies

By  Donna W. Hill

1

Under these  gray  skies

I bow down  to November

Holding out  my  wings

Even though I  try

I can't seem  to  remember

Why the caged bird  sings

O,  Lord, forgive  me

I was once your  beloved

Don't you  still know  me?

Under these gray   skies.

2

Under  these gray skies

I've been  waiting  forever

For the seas to   part

Promises and  lies

Thwarting every   endeavor

Of this weary  heart

Stung by the  salt  spray,

I pour over my  failures

Who could  pardon  me?

Under these gray   skies.

3

Under  these gray skies

Nighttime  closes  around me

As the winds   subside

Feeble  alibis

Serving just to  confound  me

and my starless  guide

Morning  will find  me

Reaching to the  horizon

Where the wild  birds  fly

Under these gray    skies

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