[stylist] Song Lyric: You Are the Air

[Kerry Thompson]

Barbara, you're right about using the singular of both sunset and 
moonrise. That plural is a leftover from a previous attempt.

As to "beside me," there's a sort of rhyme between "confuse me" and "to 
me." On the other hand, I'm not crazy about "confuse me." So, maybe 
"beside me" will help- me work out a better second line.

Kerry

On 5/20/2011 10:26 AM, Barbara Hammel wrote:
> How about instead of clinging to me, you use right beside me?
> Since you only use the singular of moonrise, maybe just put sunset?
> Barbara
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> -----Original Message----- From: Kerry Thompson
> Sent: Wednesday, May 18, 2011 5:33 PM
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> Subject: [stylist] Song Lyric: You Are the Air
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> Hi friends,
>
> This lyric is giving me trouble. The refrain is good and the bridge is
> OK. But the verses don't seem up to the level of the refrain. Any
> suggestions would be welcome.
>
> You Are the Air
>
> I'm not much for talk,
> Words always confuse me.
> I'd much rather walk
> With you clinging to me
> And muse over sunsets and moonrise
> And how they compare to your eyes.
>
> You are the air that I breathe,
> The sunshine that warms my face,
> The starlight that guides my way.
> Without you I'm nothing, I'm nowhere,
> 'Cause you, you are the air I breathe.
>
> Whenever you're near
> I can't be romantic.
> But if you aren't here
> I just seem to panic
> Until you come back and I hold you
> And even though I've never told you,
>
> You are the air that I breathe,
> The sunshine that warms my face,
> The starlight that guides my way.
> Without you I'm nothing, I'm nowhere,
> 'Cause you, you are the air I breathe.
>
> And living with you, life's a song.
> Yes, days can be hard, nights are long.
> But looking at you, I recall
> My reasons to think life's a ball
> You are them all.
>
> You are the air that I breathe,
> The sunshine that warms my face,
> The starlight that guides my way.
> Without you I'm nothing, I'm nowhere,
> 'Cause you, you are the air I breathe.
>
> You are the air that I breathe,
> You are the miracle of love to me.
>
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