[stylist] critique this story please if you have time
Barbara Hammel
poetlori8 at msn.com
Tue Nov 29 03:01:09 UTC 2011
I don't know what was meant by saying the parents were wooden but do be
careful that you don't portray parents as stupid and knowing nothing. Sure,
they can be over protective and they can also not get a clue about the
mind's workings of a child. But you'll hopefully be a parent one day and
all this portraying of parents as oafs and such in movies and TV--and some
books--will come back and bite us. Children really don't know best. That's
why they have parents to guide and care for them.
Barbara
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-----Original Message-----
From: vejas
Sent: Monday, November 28, 2011 7:49 PM
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Subject: Re: [stylist] critique this story please if you have time
You mean the parents were wooden like robotic in a way?
Vejas
----- Original Message -----
From: "Jacobson, Shawn D" <Shawn.D.Jacobson at hud.gov
To: 'Writer's Division Mailing List' <stylist at nfbnet.org
Date sent: Mon, 28 Nov 2011 14:46:32 -0500
Subject: Re: [stylist] critique this story please if you have
time
Vejas
Fun story, I love how you imagined the whole Santa Clause story
and extended it. I never thought of the Grand Hotel being
100,000 feet underground or of Santa's sleigh going to Mars.
It's cool to have the decendants of Scrooge hanging out with
Santa's children.
I think my only problem was that the story bogged down for me
with the repetition of names. Also, I thought the Pontus parents
were a bit wooden at time.
Never the less, a good job.
Shawn
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[mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of vejas
Sent: Sunday, November 27, 2011 12:31 AM
To: stylist at nfbnet.org; writers-chat at nfbnet.org
Subject: [stylist] critique this story please if you have time
Hi,
For all you writers-chat folks, I think I said I liked writing
for teens, but this story is an acception. It's supposed to be
somewhat based on the "It's Beginning to Look a Lot like
Christmas" song (meaning you'll find a lot of reference to it in
this story.) Enjoy.
Thanks anybody who is willing to look this through real quick.
Vejas
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