[stylist] The Dark rewrite 1
Brad Dunse'
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Mon Oct 24 01:57:23 UTC 2011
Ashley,.
Not sure with your examples as there were some
odd characters that came through on nmy end.
Basically with punctuationand quotes you'd have such examples as:
"Hey wait a minute," George said, "how do you do that?"
"Hey, wait a minute. How do you do that?" George said.
"I'm not sure," said Diane.
Did you hear George say, "That's just the way its done"?
Diane replied, "Oh, thanks for letting me know."
If you are at all questionable on punctuation
with quotations, I'd recommend the course, it is
a great reminder of how it's written. There's
only 8 assignments and the teacher is very nice :).
Brad
On 10/23/2011 08:23 PM Ashley Bramlett said...
>Good example Brad. Maybe I'll take that course.
>Here is what I said to Eve. Eve, Can you read
>braille? If not, you can get jaws to speak all
>punctuation or any screen reader. I wonder the
>same thing. I am not always sure when to place
>punctuation within a quote. You usually do
>though. As Brad said Hadley school for the
>blind, a distance ed service, has a course on
>punctuation. I usually put the person’s name
>first and then the quote to end the sentence. In
>this case, I think the punctuation goes in the
>quote. But if you say she/he said at the end,
>you put a comma and then closed quote. Hope its
>right. So examples: “I’m so hungry for
>dinner. I can’t wait until we have my favorit
>dish of lasagna and garlic bread tonight. I
>smell the aroma,†said Amy who was peering in
>the kitchen at her mother. Her mother said,
>“It won’t be long, darling. We’re waiting
>for it to finish cooking and your father to
>arrive. But you will have it within fifteen
>minutes.†I haven’t read in a while either.
>I’m actually waiting on a book from the
>library now. I usually read by talking book or
>other audio form and you do not get the
>punctuation that way. Ashley -----Original
>Message----- From: Brad Dunse' Sent: Sunday,
>October 23, 2011 8:50 PM To: Writer's Division
>Mailing List Subject: Re: [stylist] The Dark
>rewrite 1 Hadley School has a course on
>punctuation which oddly enough, the assignment
>I'm on deals with it :). For instance... "How
>do you do quotes?" asked Eve. Or Brad said, "Eve
>from the Stylist discussion group had asked,
>'How do you do quotes?'" Anyway it is a very
>good basic course. Brad On 10/23/2011 05:43 PM
>Eve Sanchez said... >Hi, you said something
>about quotes that is making me ask a question
>that >will probably make me look like a total
>fool. How do you do quotes? I have >read them
>for many years and now that I cannot look at the
>written page >dang >if I can remember what they
>look like. What I am thinking is
>quotation, >text, quotation, comma, she/he said.
>Is there a good source for learning >the >proper
>way to punctuate these things that is
>accessable? Would love your >input here. Thanks,
>Eve > >On Wed, Oct 12, 2011 at 4:36 PM, Brenda
><bjnite at windstream.net> wrote: > > >
>HiAshley > > > > Thank you for the quick
>response. I like it better too and I imagine
>by > > the time it is done it will be even
>better. > > > > Still can't figure out why there
>are no spaces after periods. I do acut > > and
>paste and all looks fine before I send
>it. There's got to be a > > setting > >
>somewhere but I have no idea what it might
>be. > > > > Brenda > > > > > > > > On 10/12/2011
>4:52 PM, Ashley Bramlett wrote: > > > >>
>Brenda, > >> Nice descriptions. I like this
>version better. It captures the seen of > >>
>the > >> room better. > >> Ashley > >> > >>
>-----Original Message----- From: Brenda > >>
>Sent: Wednesday, October 12, 2011 4:22 PM > >>
>To: Writer's Division Mailing List > >> Subject:
>[stylist] The Dark rewrite 1 > >> > >> Thanks to
>everyone who gave me input on my project. I
>reworked the > >> piece based on your comments.
>I probably missed a few of your > >>
>suggestions, but I wasn't deliberately ignoring
>them, there was just a > >> lot of flipping
>between emails and documents. I probably did not
>do > >> quotes correctly yet, but I can focus on
>that more in the future. > >> Hopefully this
>time the spaces after periods will show
>up. > >> > >> The Dark > >> > >> The recipe
>almost blew out of my hand as I ran into the
>house to show > >> off my very first cooking
>project for Home Economics.My mother took
>the > >> wrinkled paper, studied it and remarked
>"you probably won't like Rosy > >>
>apples."Snatching the recipe I stomped to my
>bedroom and slammed the > >> door.At thirteen I
>could not remember a time when my mother had
>not > >> decided how I felt or what I liked.It
>all started when I was a toddler > >> and my
>mother decided I was not afraid of the
>dark. > >> > >> As a baby I could barely see the
>sunlight.Several surgeries brought > >> lights,
>colors and shapes into view by age two, but my
>world was still > >> a > >> collage of sights
>and sounds.During the day I played with my
>older > >> brother outside in the bright
>sunlight.On rainy days we stayed indoors > >>
>where the sound of my mother cleaning the house
>or my baby brother > >> crying filled the
>air.When I heard "Time for lunch" or the honk of
>a > >> car > >> horn I knew the shadowy figures
>in the room were my parents.My waking > >> world
>was filled with sights and sounds that guided me
>through the > >> fog.No monster would dare lurk
>in this bustling household. > >> > >> At night
>my world was a dark, dreary place.My two
>brothers and I were > >> crammed into one small
>bedroom in our two-bedroom home.The silence
>was > >> only broken by the noise of the monster
>lurking somewhere.My brothers > >> were asleep
>in their beds, and I didn't know where my
>parents > >> were.Something had to be done
>before the monster came and got > >> me.Creeping
>to the bedroom door, I saw the glowing lamplight
>but only > >> heard a muffled hum."Oh no, the
>monster is here" I concluded. > >> > >> Slamming
>the door shut I ran back to my bed and pulled
>the covers over > >> my head."Hey, open the
>door" shrieked my older brother when he awoke
>to > >> a dark room with no beam of light to
>comfort him. "Quiet down in there" > >> yelled
>my dad without moving from his chair.Thump,
>thump, thump sounded > >> on the basement stairs
>as mom came to see what the commotion was > >>
>about.Instead of yelling at me for upsetting my
>brother and not going > >> to > >> sleep, my
>mother opened our bedroom door and remarked to
>my father > >> "She's not afraid of the dark
>because she can't see." > >> > >> "The monster
>can't get me with my mom and dad so close" I
>decided and > >> fell asleep before my fear
>returned. > >> > >> This story was told all
>through my childhood as proof that I was
>not > >> afraid of the dark.It would do no good
>to explain the terror I felt > >> inside.Just
>once, I wish my mother had been
>right. > >> > >> > >>
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